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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Whoo... It was the subtitle that grabbed my attention. "All he wanted was some coffee and a piece of pie. Now he sits with a gun pointed at him."

Nice job building the tension throughout the story. I should give it a deeper study, because I want to be able to write short stories and be able to build up tension that fast, instead of letting the thing drag on and on for umpteen-and-odd pages.

The reader - me, at least - expects it to end differently; say the man changes his mind, or someone calls the cops, something. But you have the man actually kill the lawyer. Makes a person sit back and realize that it could actually happen.
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Review of God, Who Are You?  
Rated: E | (4.5)
That was a beautiful poem. I was just wondering in church today how to explain to someone my knowledge and belief about our Father and the Savior. This lovely poem is one of the best ways I've read to share that knowledge with others. You must keep up the good work!
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