Dear Jinks
You have done a great job. The language is too good, the descripion of the elements in relation to Two characters is spellbounding.The words almost grow within you till you can feel exactly what the poet felt while writing it. Truly a very moving piece.
A new side to a tale as old as the earth itself.You stay close to the original story, but have improvised at places which makes it fresh.It is a perfect example of old wine in new bottle.The language is flowing ,keeping pace with the action,and the description is very apt. A good story to read.
Unloved deals with rejection in a very hard hitting way.The way you have written only the emotions one after another makes it more dramatic.However I feel it is more prose and less of poetry.Keep writing ,best of luck.
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This is a great piece from a cat lover.The words flow effortlessly to describe the various actions of the pet, giving it human emotions at times. I love the way the pet s described as a nuciance in some places but one can feel the love the author feels for it.
good piece, keep it up
It is really good to read the words expressing dilemma,coflict within.One can almost feel the churning taking place in the mind.It is a realistic situation where the victim often ends up sympathizing with the oppressor.The words are full of expression and the pace is ideal to make the reader sit back and think .
The description of the scene is intense and dynamic ,but it is too short a piece to comment.One is not clear in what context the shot was fired.If a little more was shared things would be clearer.
The writing is crisp ,fast paced and the reader is made to sit at the edge waiting for the next move.However,I think a little too much sexual overtones are in the piece.It is my personal opinion,maybe I am old-fashioned.The rest of work is good and dialogues are enciting.
Fluent style of writing,the words giving a sense of movement as he runs.The frustration of being bound is also depicted well.The suspense is also palpable as one waits for what happens next
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