Interesting misdirect. Although it was easier to understand once all the pieces were revealed. Small criticism, I find it better (at least personally[just starting out]) when writing in first person to introduce names in a short introduction. (I like to get to know characters I am reading.) Other than that great work. You have a very refined tallent.
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