|I am in awe. You clearly display your passion for this issue in this piece.
However, it is the finer technical points that degrade my opinion of this piece.
The puppy is only six months old, so in dog years he would be about 3.5 years old. The monolog from him is from someone of at least of the maturity of the average eighteen year old. In other words, please simplify! Second, I do not understand how a little puppy would know the kittens were too young to be away from their mother. Did you know this when you were three and a half? There is so much that seems exaggerated to make your point (which is still an excellent one) but if you take a piece of fiction, which quite bluntly is a lie trying to make itself appear as truth, and take it too far? A reader will have a lesser degree of interest in what you are trying to say.
Please keep writing!
Harriet The Spy