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Review of The night before  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review of The Night Before

The poem is written in six stanzas of iambic pentamer with end rhyme. The pattern of one stressed foot followed by two unstressed ones suggests the frantic movement of throngs of shoppers scurrying about in haste. Purchasing is also described as a staccato atmosphere, where short words capture the sense of movement.

The last two stanzas make a dramatic change to a slower pace while focusing on the peaceful nature of the spirit of the season in contrast to the feverish of the first three stanzas. By means of the switch. the reader falls softly into the meaning of the holiday's peace on earth.

Excellent work.



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Review of Earth  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Review of Earth

The poem is a deeply philosophical homage to the eternal life giving power of the earth. I particularly like the seminal images such as:

"Basis of all growths"
"incessant fountain of eternity"
"master of equilibrium"
" mother of us all"

The serious, high meditative tone is suitable with the focus of the poem.


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Review of THE NEW AMERICA  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review of The New America

I share your tone of joy. To add to your list of firsts, starting in 1976, when the Voting Rights Act was barely a decade old, all-white-candidate fields were the norm. African American voters were just a slender fraction of the Democratic Party kept at arm’s length by presidential candidates. But today, Black voters have emerged as a political force and one of the most intensely courted constituencies in Democratic politics.


In 2020, they accounted for at least one out of every four ballots cast in the party's presidential primaries, more than tripling — and perhaps even quadrupling — the share they accounted for just a few decades ago. This s a political and demographic revolution over the course of 40 years. Until now, much of this data has been hard to come by, unavailable online, walled off in academic archives, even discarded by the news media outlets that sponsored it. Thanks to the assistance of William Mayer, a political scientist at Northeastern University and an expert on presidential campaigns, NBC News has assembled for the first time a publicly available state-by-state record of the black vote for each of the nine competitive national Democratic campaigns since the inception of widespread exit polling. Black politicians were winning office in larger numbers — a handful in Congress, some in big city mayoralties and more in state legislatures, particularly in the South.

The decade since that landmark Obama campaign has brought further changes to each party’s demographic makeup. The divide between white voters with college degrees and those without, a phenomenon that had long been building, has in the Trump-era turned into a gaping rupture.

If the trend of increasing Black voter participation continues its assent in the democratic Party, we should expect to see increasing numbers of African American voter causes rise to a compelling status as well as increased representation in the election process.


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Review of Sitting here  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Review of Sitting Here

The poet meditates on the gradual change in behavior since the prior year. Although there has been some improvement in perhaps the avoidance an excessive use of alcohol, the desire to connect with family may compete with relapsing with friends. Yet the primary source of motivation seems to be the skillful use of luck to prevent capture.

I like the sense of tension that attends the situation soon at hand. From there, the outcome remains a mystery.


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Review of Fortune  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Review of Fortune

The poem offers a sober admonishment in the pursuit of fortune. Through history several have sought fortune at the expense of moral integrity. Finding gain in a manner that preserves moral behavior is the important consequence of the effort.

The tone of the poem is didactical and supplicating. The use of symbols is well interwoven with meaning.


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Review of Mysterious Garden  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review of, Mysterious Garden


Truly outstanding in every poetic detail.

An aged person (through time or possibly harkening a return to the past experiences of love) seeks in sorrow and a barren sense of lost that rivals Shakespeare's King Lear to recapture and experience the "fairy" like essence of love long ago enjoyed before it evaporated.

The circumstances that resulted in the abandonment of love are not explained. The reader enters after a passage of time. So we defer to the words and symbols used in order to derive meaning.

The garden is a separate make believe world with its own set of natural laws. Through the eyes and feelings of regret and longings of the poet, the reader senses a barren environment, "a place where memories once lived" no longer flourish. Fairies, perhaps including Cupid, tended the growth of love.

The tender returns to the garden or, engages in a symbolic revisiting of the past where, "lived mysterious little beings." In a mode of sorrowful reflection, the gardener finds instead, "a place where sadness has overtaken, And love, doesn't live any more." The the essential produce no longer grows through time. Untended gardens, akin to extended separations from those we loved in youth lay barren over time. The nurturance of love no longer has roots to sustain belief in it. The barren garden symbolizes the empty nest wherein the grower of love has ceased to enjoy the past rewards of nurturing of being nurtured, "For those who once believed." The sorrow is palpable in the isolation of the tenderer.



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Review of Love Needed  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
Rated: E | (2.5)
Review of, "Love Needed"

The poem exudes a sense of quiet inner desire to share perhaps the greatest gift that humans are capable of achieving. The adage that love is the substance of things hoped for and the evidence of things not seen attests to its molding influences. When honestly received and given, love creates a strong sense of bonding. The ego (the immature, selfish desires) changes to a higher level of natural attraction that matures by voluntary will to offer and receive honesty, sincere caring, truthfulness, devotion, loyalty, long suffering and other positive behaviors that become a matured bond.

I like the philosophical presentation at the beginning of the poem. You have presented an ageless human challenge. However, I would play a bit more with the subject before staking a claim on it, for it is by nature quite deep and not always so cut and dry. Hence divorces and falling outs from what is intended to last forever. We humans are not always honest as to feelings or loyalty. The molding power of true love gently prods on the mutual hearts of suitors. Over time, we come to give and receive the essence of love. Beware of Cupid's arrows. That tale is an ageless farce.


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Review of Innocence  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A Review of, "Innocence"


The poem is an outstanding piece of symbolic meditation. The speaker may be a person of any age reflecting inner impressions drawn from the outside world by which to obtain personal enlightenment. The act of achieving inner balance is set free by the innocent impressions that result from a childlike response to the natural world seen initially through adult experience.

The images of nature are soft and personally appealing to an innocent imagination as an opposing alternative to the rational perception. The purity of the visual acts of nature adds a deeper meaning that resonates in innocent perception.

The act of transformation introduced in the opening lines offers an interesting entre the emotional freedom that follows.

Beautifully written. Hans Christian Anderson would bow to you capture of youthful impressions.


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Review of Ceremony  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Review of, "Ceremony"

Excellent tight usage of effective word images that superbly suggest an erotic theme, but excel at creating a mood rather than telling a story.

A superior wordsmith has fashioned yet another opus.


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Review of Haiku-rain  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Review of, Haiku-Rain {Item 2026056}

Paying tribute to the season of rain, the poet captures not only the episode of impending rain through palpable description, but also creates an emotional impact as well.

The last lime seems to support the development in the first two lines. Whether light or heavy rain, the reader resonates with the experience.


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Review of Forgotten Forever  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
Rated: E | (4.0)
Review of, "Forgotten Forever" "Forgotten Forever

The brevity of the poem seems to be its strength. It's meaning beams from the image of a physically recognizable lighthouse highlighted in red. It suggests that this symbolic image is an ageless warning concerning, "the old subjects" of the past. It prompts deep philosophical possibilities.

A lighthouse can symbolize various things, such as overcoming challenges and adversity or established ideas. It is most commonly used to symbolize a way forward to help in navigating through the world. The lighthouse symbol can be broken down into two concepts. The first is of the lighthouse itself, which can symbolize salvation and safety, especially in the face of adversity. The second concept is the lighthouse keeper, the person who tends the lighthouse. Common symbols associated with that concept include a figure living alone but always remaining vigilant. The symbol can also mean someone keeping alert under the most dire of circumstances. It is the second symbolic meaning that seems to resonate from the poem.

The speaker seeks to realize meaning in the continuity and efficacy of the collectivity "old subjects" that permeate the human existence of wisdom through time. The use of metaphor is introduced on a grand scale of concentrated imagery. Morals, human aspirations, alternative values, historical interpretations live through ages of human experience that preserve, curate of redefine meaning.

Then comes a sense of doubt. Human impact is not infinite through time, for which there can be no permanent vision. Knowledge and perception dim by new interpretations and beliefs. The light of the lighthouse may not reach far enough from the past to retain impact into the future.

This brief poem is a flawless in every detail of its composition.
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Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review of, "The Gift of Endurance"

Here is an insightful telling of childhood molding and the consequences that accrue through time. The sternness of the parental cultural imperatives during the sensitive formative years as "the cause" actually inhibit "the effect" of the forced goals in the long rum as a zero sum game buried in doubt and insecurity.

The choice of brief imagery is deeply evocative beyond the keenly targeted word choices commanded by the poet. The reader is promptly drawn into the vortex of childhood insecurity that eventually isolates the heart, symbolizing inspiration, at later age. Forced discipline inhibits natural passion.

The last stanza leaves the reader with as existential choice, which neatly expands the possible choices that spring from foundational influences that advance parental ego over skill development in youth.

The harsh tone that the poet creates is well developed, and its ultimate influence remains passive, yet transcending the theme that lingers in the heart and mind of the reader.

Every aspect of the brief poem contributes precisely to its intended effect.



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Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Review of, "Kingdom of Quietude

I fairly know not where to begin. The lofty meditative tone so subtle, yet rich with exquisite spiritual imagery and a celebratory sense of triumphal unity as it enters that ethereal, timeless kingdom. I particularly like the "rewards" that accompany the release into the eternal realm of eternity where there is love, peace, faith and quietude. You have easily excelled John Dunn and his metaphysical adherents.


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Review by Floyd Bellinger
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Review by Floyd Bellinger
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Your draft is quite creative. It presents a double, inverse pattern of irony in the character flaws of Kaelin and Lain. The subtle and opposing tension created by their respective lifetime experiences spawn inverse perspectives that are strongly entrenched, but not tested by life's impersonal teachings. However, the opposing views and experiences seem to confusingly blend somewhere, somehow in the middle range of wisdom and perception yet to ripen. Does this situation create a fledging bond, or a yawning void? The tenuous base of philosophical/cultural/theological possibilities raises far more questions than answers in the Garden of Eden that the characters enter into in innocence. How artistically it must be to attempt to "shackle off this mortal coil" that Hamlet complained of.

I am fascinated by the number of potential options hinted at in the plot sequences and character development through conflict between Kaelin and Lain, both of whom symbolize our inbred plethora of perceptions that invade the psyche by the invisible hand of fate, or perhaps by untested, but affirming reality that is by nature elusive.

The theme of your work is episodic. It reminds me of Captain Ahab in Melville's Moby Dick. The implication of your excursion is a daunting effort that is well worth the effort.



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Review of St. Patrick's Day  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (3.0)
"St. Patrick's Day

The composition consists of five anapestic lines with the rhyme scheme aabba, in which the first, second, and fifth lines are in trimeter, and the third and fourth lines are in dimeter. The language is clear and balanced.

The ending is a bit prompt and seems divorced from the poem.


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Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
"" Whirl - eee - Gig "

Writing this poem must have been a lot of fun. The subject is treated with ribald humor and expressed in a smooth, galloping iambic pentameter. The word sounds are full of energy and are coordinated exquisitely. The sense of movement is palpable. The overall humor is both witty and entertaining.


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Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
"Life Gives, and Life Takes.

This tightly written short story is an artistic gem. I love the morose, troubled thinking displayed by a woman who has no past nor future. Her life experiences disappear, leaving emotional disengagement.

The tightly woven plot action rises quickly and is sustained down to the anticipated choice to commit suicide.

The quietly desperate tone hangs as a masterful backdrop of Poe like horror, which culminates as foreshadowed.


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Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (3.0)
"I WOULD IF I COULD

The poem, "I Would if I Could"

The poem takes a look backward from the present and uses a chorus. The chorus lines are longer than the lines in the poem, resulting in emphasis and rhythm. The technique also adds a variation of detail as a refrain.


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Review of Childhood  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (3.0)
"Childhood

The power of hope through experiencing trying circumstances seems to be the theme of the poem. Through the rendition of a near mystical experience with, "A friend...From the deep ocean and, "An angel," the speaker in the poem realizes deep understanding and takes on angelic powers of flight.

The tone and atmosphere seem mystical and incoherent, and the connection between the poetic elements rather lose.

I like the energy that exuded from the lines.


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Review of Heartbreak  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
"Heartbreak

The poem expresses a profound feeling of disappointment subsequent to the termination of a relationship through time. It occurs in three stages. The sense of love dies and is replaced by loneliness, which mars memory through time.

Good condensation;


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Review of Flipping Liam  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
"Flipping Liam

The author of this creative piece of flash fiction creates a stunning bit of adventure with intense irony.

The rising action highlighted by the conversation between Liam and Andrea at an unexpected meeting imparts a sense of intrigue and tension. The tension lifts the action to an apex as Andrea covers her callous presence as excusable by an earlier tryst between them.

The falling action abruptly introduces the death of Liam by one shot, and the agents by shots. Agents with Andres kill the thee other agents and Andrea, a double agent, shoots and kills Liam as an assignment.

Hitchcock would marvel at this


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Review of Winter haiku  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
"Winter haiku


The Haiku structure as composed commands the compression of meaning within the 5/7/5 format. The placement of each word is a marvel piece of positioning.

Interestingly, a not so subtle surprise begins in the first line. The externally cold atmosphere against the outer window pane and its internal side where the warm room temperature causes condensation down the pain is suggested by the poet as a possible sign of questionable behavior. Where does the water vapor come from? Windows can condense either internally or externally. Though the poet is not clear as to which side of the pain is condensing, the unstated inference is that it is occurring internally, with the heat suggesting fowl play.

Simply amazing how the poet uses suggestive innuendo. It perfectly compliments the poem's form and meaning.


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Review of Cheesy.  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: E | (4.0)
"Cheesy.

The poem deals with the mutuality of interactivity of what appears at first blush to be completely independent and diametrically opposing aspects of nature. Written in an exploratory referee and metaphysical tone, reminiscent of John Keats' "Ode to a Grecian Urn," we see that the invisible hand of nature, which rises and falls in a revolutionary pattern of yen and yang, the appearance of separate states and identities is but an illusion that is superimposed by human limitations of perception and wisdom. Rather, there is an ageless progression that flows inexorably between life and death, seasonal changes and growth and decay, with no actual beginning of end.

Challenging piece of work.


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Review of First time  
Review by Floyd Bellinger
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
"First time

This brief single stanza metaphysical poem with an infrequent rhyme scheme is expressed in a tone of emotional distance and isolated sadness. Using the state of the weather as a metaphor to creatively describe the helpless state of the speaker, a hero is introduced as a "thunderbird." One senses a change of outlook that does not appear. The ending is an existential sense of sameness as to character and situation.

The overall tone is hollow, even shallow and the words are bland and generally single syllables, all of which effectively enhance an attitude of helpless passivity.

The poem is a developing marvel of arrested expression. After reading one feels numb and slightly confused as to the theme of the effort.


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