In the caption under the title, you admit being somewhat unsure about what the subject matter of this poem really is. With "In the Trenches" for a title, I might suggest that this could be about World War I combat, albeit disguised under a lot of symbolism throughout its content. In any case, its quite a decent work.
This is a very good piece. For one thing, I congratulate you managing something that I could probably never manage, by which I mean writing a story of one hundred words without ever repeating a word. As for the concept, it does fascinate me that there are some species in which girls get to eat boys. Let me say, from experience, that it takes a certain humbleness to be a male biology major.
Writing a* story of 100 words without repeating a* (see, I already repeated a word with the composition of this Review) word is no easy task, and I commend you all for pulling it off, especially considering I do not think that I could do it. I have no particular suggestions, so just keep up the good work!
Yes, you do have the physics right. My only suggestion is merely to think of Superman as a fictional character, which is what he is, and not as a fraud. At any rate, you can not run under water, so it only makes sense that you also can not throw a punch or kick there. In any case, it is good that you openly stated your observations.
I understand the premise, and it's actually a pretty good poem. (Watch your capitalization, with all due respect.) Anyway, I kind of wish it would account for the afterlife, and more specifically Paradise. Paradise is more than mercy. It is victory.
More power to everyone who entered this contest, for I can not really give any advice. I can not even memorize the form of a haiku, let alone write one at all, let alone write one for a contest. I wonder what the winning entry was. I would like to review it, or any of these entries for that matter, at some point.
The rhyme scheme is certainly doing it for me, and so is the concept. You have a valid message. There's no second way about that. My only suggestion is to continue to write.
This is a little too long, to be perfectly honest, but I like the concept. I am somewhat, and perhaps even more than somewhat, of a science fiction fan. This story vaguely reminds me of a few outlaw characters from the official books of the Star Trek series, as well as the Huts from the Star Wars Series. Like I said, the concept is quite good.
I like the AABBCC... rhyme scheme. Although I'm a guy, I too have kept secrets for my sister. As an even better example, the theme reminds me of 1 of my best friends, and both her sisters, although none of them have children yet, as described at the end of the poem. I usually find spelling mistakes on this site, but I see none here.
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