Take everything I say with a grain of salt. I'm no expert. I only mean to be helpful, but may really miss the mark.
I can't tell if you're serious or making this up. It is listed as comedy. It makes me sad to read it. No one should call himself a school bus; that's just cruel.
As far as format is concerned, you might try spaces between paragraphs, especially since you don't indent. Your spelling and punctuation are perfect, no problems.
I know what you mean about other people giving advice. If they're not in your shoes, they think it's easy. I don't like that you put yourself down so often. I think you cut it off so soon and made a joke of it, because you don't want to face your feelings. No where in here, do I see any true feelings or see that this could be motivation. It sounds like a cry for help. You aroused empathy in me.
Again, your writing is fine. You express yourself well. Keep writing about other issues in your life and you will develop a really good voice. It looks like you're fairly new to WDC. I hope you enjoy it. Most folks are very kind and accepting.