I was very moved by your experience. While I was reading it, I was expecting something to change and or there to be something positive at the end. I am so sorry that it was not so.
I have just returned from visiting my own dear mum in a care home. She has advanced Dementia and it is difficult and sad to be with her now. We will continue to be with her, and to love her, and to let her believe whatever her mind is telling her. And we know that there will come a day when we will have to let go, just as you have.
But, please let me leave you with genuine comfort that I have learned. Take comfort that Jesus has promised a physical resurrection of those we have lost. They will be made alive again, and healthy, and young. It is a guarantee from the Bible.
I love your writing style, and your choice of obscure words. You definitely have a talent for writing. My favourite line - "Yet still, I spinelessly obey, in fashion with my slow decay." - great stuff, full of humility!
I only gave you four and a half stars because I felt that you could have revealed more thoughts within your poem.
What you feel has been caused, by someone. They have scarred your mind, as they have scarred mine. Yet, through all this, we endure, we survive. I know the depths of despair, as you do. Yet, I have also tasted the heights of joy and ecstasy, allbeit briefly and too soon gone.
This is not what our maker wants for us. I take refuge in his promise of relief and hope. Please let me share some of those promises, they sustain me when I don't want to go on;
"A heart broken and crushed, oh God, you will not despise."
"Whatever our hearts may condemn us in, God is greater than our hearts, and knows all things."
"Come to me, all who are weary and loaded down, and I will refresh you."
"Those hoping in God will rise up, they will soar on the wings of eagles."
"Thy kingdom come, thy will be done ON EARTH, as it is in heaven."
"He will wipe out every tear from their eyes, and death will be no more, neither will mourning nor suffering, nor pain be anymore."
Great article! You have realized something that eludes most people.
Your words may awaken yearnings in other readers to reconnect with the simplicity and beauty of life. This is a bold article.
I have always been a person connected with nature, who resists change and technology (yep, I know the irony of me being here online!). I have found that, when we have powercuts and shortages, once we get over the shock, we are better for it. We talk more, we play more and we definitely think more.
I really enjoyed your article.
If I may, I would like to offer some feedback on the structure of your work?
You write with such zeal and passion that your paragraphs are as breathless and joined as your thinking process. I recommend spacing between paragraphs and subjects. I also recommend using the "Justify" tool for your articles. It tidies writing and presents it in neat blocks.
Just some thoughts, hope you don't mind. I cannot fault your content though.
I like to read new items on here. In all honesty, much is not great. However, every now and again, I come across an article on WDC that I am very glad that I stumbled upon. Your work is great. I was very moved by it. You have the ability to invite the reader into your sphere. You capture so many of all of our thoughts and regrets, in such honest and simple words. I offer you a very warm welcome to this site because your work is outstanding and will infuse this writing site. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I was very moved by these words. I have rarely come upon such an honest and agonized plea in writing. It reminded me of the words of Asaph in the Bible's Psalms.
This is so raw, and real and powerful. Your words reach out and echo so many cries. I hope that you find the answers to your questions and I applaud you for not giving up on our heavenly Father.
I read your experiences with great interest because I have only just posted a new article on here about that very subject.
You must be braver than you think. I would not have handled such events so well. You are obviously disturbed and perplexed by these things. I can understand you wanting answers. I have some, if you are interested.
Two of my own sisters have had many similar experiences like the ones you describe. They too were frightened and puzzled. It wasn't until I came across some very revealing information in my own life that I could finally make sense of their predicament. I happened to read the Bible and I was shocked by what it told me about supernatural experiences. One thing that was clear is that such events as "Hauntings" only tend to happen to people with an interest in the occult in some form (astrology, spirit mediums, ouigi boards etc). This could be a direct involvement or even an inherited one. My sisters have always been fascinated with the occult and they have dabbled regularly. You say that you are interested in witchcraft. I wonder, did either of your parents dabble in some form? You see, the Bible says that such dabbling is like a magnet to unseen forces, it attracts them. Fortunately thee are ways to be rid of these influences. I would be happy to share what I have learned.
This is powerful and sad. The reader is given hope that this woman can find solace somewhere, despite the evils inflicted upon her. I did wonder if the author was reflecting on her own experience.
I found this moving on a personal level because my own little sister died prematurely, after suffering a string of abusive relationships. I hope she had such a place as you describe.
This is really well told. You captured my imagination from the start. The sheer frustration of life seeps from your words. Your perspective is unique and sad.
I'm glad that you finally found some joy in life. Care to name the book that changed things for you? Don't get me wrong, I don't need such "wisdom", I already found it. I am simply curious.
I was fascinated by this. It echoed many thoughts that I have had.
Your words are honest and raw, and beautiful.
I had to comment, I hope you don't mind.
You don't hold back (which may be or may not be, a good thing). I have to agree with your sentiments. The world is full of exhibishionism, people advertizing themselves as something they are not.
I do disagree with one of your statements though. You say that "Masculinity is gained by winning everything with honour."
For me, the superlative example of masculinity is the man Jesus. He is courageous, yet compassionate, outspoken, yet sympathetic, bold, yet gentle. I have never met any man that measures up to his stature. Yet, he never competed for, or won, anything. Perhaps you might reconsider your definition?
This is lovely, and so familiar to me. My kids are all grown up now, yet I still recall those moments, in the middle of the night, when I had to be up for work in a couple of hours, when I would feed my child the milk. I felt so close to them and so at peace. You capture that feeling with your beautiful poem.
Don't be sad, there is so much more to come - believe me!
So short, yet so powerful! This is very profound and haunting. Best line - "Tears will dry, smiles disappear" - so very true!
I hope this is not born from personal despair.
I suffer from severe Clinical Depression and my thoughts often drift toward such thoughts. Yet I have come to appreciate life and love, as gifts. I now see death as, not a friend or a release, but, as the Bible describes it, "The last enemy."
This is very nice and positive. I like the way you change from a question to a statement of faith in the last line. You obviously have a strong faith in God and Jesus, as do I.
You might be interested to know that I also consider myself to be a Christian but, I don't expect to go to Heaven. I have written an article, based on the Bible, which explains my faith and my hope for the future. It's called "Heaven, Hell, or the earth." Feel free to have a look.
I wish you the "Peace of God that excels all thought."
I was intrigued by your work. You write with power and insight. I can't pretend to agree with the sentiments within it but I see it's depth. I thought it was a special piece, so profound. Your words about pain touched me deeply. I know so many in my life who suffer, and I see the truth in your words. This is special. I appreciate your work.
I hope you are not personally in pain and, I wish you peace.
Moomin
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