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Diamonds are for Forever- or are they?
My Favorite Parts
Was quick and short but good
Questions or Confusions
I didn't see any
There weren't any grammatical errors, spelling, sentence structure, etc like that that I saw so that's a plus. I also liked the names of your characters; it was unique and cute. The story line was one that is often done--girl marries controling, self-absorbed guy and meets new guy she's really into, so she has an affair. Classic, but you added some uniqe touches and made it your own.
You have a good beginning to your story and it was enjoyable, I'll give you that. However, I felt like the story was missing parts.
One thing, where are the descripitions? What do your characters look like, especially the man she's having an affair with. You don't have to, but you could go into detail abit in their love affair to show how or why he's so great in her mind.
Next, the missing parts. Towards the ending, you have your MC go home from the affair then she's suddenly leaving her friend's house. What happened there? It happened sooo fast that I was like woah-how did that happen? I thought I missed something. I reccomend adding detail there.
But by the way, the strategy the girls use is very good--that's very uniqe and very clever =)
Lastly, so did Tina tell the husband about the affair? Why did Tina keep the necklace?