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Review of Walking the Dog  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this short story. This piece made me smile. As I too have worked in the school administration building for the past 8 years. And I too, live in a small town. So, I have this happen all the time. And, it's usually the parent or even the kids years later, that will call out to me when I am in the middle of the store or out running a quick errand.

I love how you wrote about why it's important to walk Maysie. And why it is that you endure the chances of running into people. But, I also loved that you expressed your almost panic feelings when they recognize you. And what it is that you do to handle it. The reader is right there with you, routing for you to run!

Thank you for sharing this.
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Review of Paved paradise  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is just my humble opinion, so take from it what you will.

Although this was a short piece, I enjoyed the imagery that it created in my mind. The colors and textures that it conjured up, left me awestruck and the complete gore of it all. I completely agree, that the massacre of God's creation for the "betterment" of industrialization can be over done. Especially when these "improvements" are either built and left empty - or will be empty and run down eventually anyway. It's all sad.

But, your written piece is not sad. It was brilliant writing.

Thank you for sharing it!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I can feel the anguish in this piece. And how much it applies to today's day and age with the "re-opening" of states currently happening around our country.

Well done! Well done!!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
When I was in school, and learning to write poetry, I had a wonderful teacher. This teacher was one of those that looked like an old professor. She was short, stout, and wore those wire rimmed glasses, on top of a pointy little nose. But, she was the best when it came to writing and literature. But my point is - she would take time every day to read us a little poetry. And after every piece, she would have use clap out the "beat of the song" of that poem.

Yours had a great "beat of the song" at the beginning, but then got muddled in the middle, and then ended again with that same beat. Somewhere in the second and fifth stanza.

But, it was still incredible in the imagery, and the storyline was very relatable. I know that I have been in that situation before myself.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can't wait to see some of your writing on this topic! Keep it coming.

I think that this is a subject that can be expounded on. And something that I think, even in today's view of tolerance, continues to be quieted. I would love to see your writings on this topic. I think that there needs to be a good writer on a genre of this for young adults especially.

I would definitely pick it up to read!
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Review of The Town Of Souls  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
It sounds like a very captivating and engaging story line. I would definitely pick it up and give it read. Although it is a little confusing about how or why this society is like this, and how they can morph from whole to another group. But, I really enjoyed seeing where you where going with the storyline! I would love to see how Amira and her council are taken down.
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