I remember writing for exactly 81 words and that was challenging enough for me. You seem to have done a great job here with just 55 words to use. Two characters and an interaction; a definite beginning, middle and end. Altogether a very impressive piece.
This certainly seems to be written in a pretty challenging poetic form. I liked the way you described the necessary elements and added the information at the end of each line. Reading it again and ignoring the 'a's and 'b's, you really did manage to write something full of atmospheric description.
This is one of those poems that conjures up a real mental image in the mind of the reader. For some reason I found myself thinking of Romeo and Juliet, or some other pair of doomed lovers who prefer to drink the poison rather than go through parting.
This is not a form of poetry that I've ever come across, but you make it seem like it is a very effective one. As for the poem itself, isn't it true how tempting those lies can be, especially when believing them offers such comfort. I found this to be very impressive.
This is a very atmospheric piece of poetry. So many Gothic elements incorporated into such a short piece, with the raven, the moon and those scented shadows. I especially liked the last line of the first verse. This really is a feast for the senses. Well done.
You certainly seem to have put a lot of thought into this chapter, and also have a good scientific knowledge. I got a real picture of the scientists dismay as they found out more and more about Sophie and Moses, and realized how little influence they would have other them.
Some great characters and excellent writing to go with them.
What a brilliant antagonist profile. Gary sounds like a really despicable person, interested in nothing more than himself and his own interests and is not above abusing and manipulating if it benefits him. His Aunt Betty, blind to his faults has made herself a perfect victim.
I really enjoyed reading about Gretchen and Aira, and their very special relationship with the other creatures of the forest. The redcaps certainly sounded like a nasty bunch.
One thing I noticed; in the final sentence of the first paragraph you have 'spent' twice.
Other than that, faultless writing.
What a really unique crime story this is. Right from the first section you made this into an intriguing tale with the interaction between Bernie and the policeman. I've got to admit that I felt quite sorry for the rat, but there's no denying that Bernie was very resourceful.
This is a poem that makes for a pleasant read. As much as you make the place itself sound so special with all those descriptions, I think it is those that are about the community that make this really special. There are not many places left where you don't need to lock your doors.
What a lot of words beginning with the letter 'p', which made this a really perfect alliterative read. I loved the humor, especially with the clver prodding to get up and get eating. The dialogue flowed brilliantly to make a very complete tale that was really enjoyable to read.
This was a lovely essay to read, and very well-presented too. I've seen pictures of those horses and they are absolutely gorgeous. Even in pictures you can see that they really do have strong personalities. What an excellent way to stop the spread of disease too.
You certainly seem to have done a good job in capturing the voice of a child. A bit of a spoiled one, from the sound of it, but maybe that's just the child's imagination taking over. There were a few grammar issues, but in this case they worked quite well; a young child would not be expected to get everything right, after all.
Oh, I really enjoyed reading this. There is something quite special about reading a story that has characters with familiar names from the site. It's certainly not an easy thing to do to get the balance of positive and negative feelings just right, but you made an entertaining read from the problem.
This is such a perfectly written piece of poetry, from the very first line to the last. Living in rural Ireland, there are still quite a few of such buildings around, some remaining as not much more than walls. I loved the way you brought all of the sense into play - altogether a poem to be proud of.
Having read some of the actual book, I was quite interested to see how you would 'sell it' to the reader. Very clear and concise, with just the right amount of details to entice someone to take more of a look. The Seelie Court is always something that I find attracts my interest.
Excellent descriptions in this piece, especially at the start of the story. Not only that but you created some very convincing characters. I could imagine how that feeling of having been cheated would make one really wary - I loved the way you explained what happened.
Haha! This was a really appropriate poem for me to stumble across, given that I seem to be having a really forgetful week. I might have been tempted to buy one of your devices if you had not given such an excellent description of the resulting overload.
A very enjoyable read!
This is very descriptive poetry, especially the first verse with the moon no longer there and the river running red. From the second verse I am thinking this is about a friendship where perhaps one wanted it to become something more than that. With the dawn there was less temptation.
I might be totally wrong on this but that was how I read this poem. Well done.
First of all, great song writing. The verses seem well composed, and the chorus works very well. As far as the words of the song themselves go - well, there are some things that cannot be forgiven or forgotten, but there still seems to be a bit of respect and affection, shown in the lines about leaving the happy memories.
Anyway, I was pretty impressed.
I think that this is a poem about pretenses and secrets; masks and acting that is backing up some kind of fallacy. Written words that are put aside and kept safely expose a truth that makes the life a lie. Maybe I'm interpreting it through my own eyes, and life and am reading it wrong, but regardless it is a very well written piece of poetry.
Such a feel-good piece of writing this is. Stress and confinement often lead to these disagreements growing more pronounced, and it really can take such simple things like rain to bring about a moment of piece. This story was written in a thoroughly convincing way.
Beautifully and powerfully stated. It's hard when your self-confidence has already taken a hammering and is rock bottom to go and trust someone else. The more you care about them the greater their power to cause devastation; or, as in your poem, the fear of losing them grows.
A well-presented poem.
This was very nicely done, I really liked how you picked out the prompt words in blood red. You did a great job of showing how much girl and vampire meant to each other, even though the relationship must have been a challenging one. An extra nice touch with the pictures too!
Well this is a very cautionary and entertaining read for anyone, but especially for those that write. One best seller is out of most people's reach let alone twenty-nine. Really clever with the laptop towards the end that just kept typing away, and there's nothing quite like keeping up the family success.