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Review of The Magic Needle  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What quick thinking, and an excellent use of the prompt. It was clever making the security blanket literally just that, for the child afraid of the dark. I liked how the fraying was portrayed as being able to let what threatened inside, but best of all was the needle and the repair that it made.

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Review of One Blow  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
So much anger coiled within these words, which the red font color strengthens. A really good description of the expression being rigid like that caused by rigor mortis. The slit-eyed look and the viper's tongue speak volumes along with the fists. There's a definite feel of an approaching storm of anger.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What fantastic descriptions in this poem, especially of the oak tree with its branches that 'hang heavy' and the leaves which 'dutifully crumbles' and nourishes the earth as it does. I love the descriptions at the start of the third verse, and how small and insignificant humanity sounds.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I've got to admit I've never heard of this movie but you do a great job of describing it, especially the setting, and Alita herself. I love a movie with lots of visual effects and from what you say, this is one of those films. I wonder why it is that so many of these seem to suffer from disappointing endings.

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Review of A Secret Life  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This paints a picture of a quite intriguing character. Clearly the woman is disciplined by day, at least as far as writing goes. The hours of darkness seem to turn her into someone far more flashy and noticeable. A thorough picture from a short poem.

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Review of The strange man  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
You did a good job of showing how something harmless can turn scary very quickly. Good descriptions of the hazelnuts and how they were presented for sale, but it was the man and the apartment that quickly pushed everything else aside. A wise move, staying outside.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Not just one garden, but two, both described so thoroughly that I had a real picture of them. The woman seemed to be friendly enough - perhaps she had deliberately let the cat lead the narrator to the garden with the swing, the fish and the mechanical man.
A very imaginative piece of poetry.

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Review of First story thing  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Sounds like a cool idea. I'm not familiar with the Transformers cartoons but I have seen the movies. I have read a lot about the Unseelie Court though, and about changelings too. I do like the idea of the Autobots falling victim to the fairies. I hope you go on to develop this.

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Review of Hands  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Definitely a bit on the morbid side, but very well told. Hands that seem to be begging for help but instead are just ignored. I liked how you wrote the laughter in, without giving any indication of who it was that was doing it. An almost brutal end to a very well composed poem.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow, well that was some creepy story you had here. Excellent descriptions of the fear, of the apparent lack of control as something else seems to take her over. There is an almost poetic feel to this in a lot of places. I loved the sentence: 'A spade for the earth that has not been unearthed.'
One tiny typo towards the end: 'She tries to let go but the...'
A short piece that contained a lot of atmosphere.

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Review of Family Memories  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Photographs are always such a great way of remembering days in the past, or people you know or have met. I think it's a shame that they are no longer displayed like they used to be.
There is a kind of wistful feeling to this piece, really appropriate for the theme.
And thanks for introducing a new form so clearly.

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Review of Spinal Teddy Bear  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
That sure sounds like one really creepy teddy. I couldn't help wondering if it was created from a real spine, and if so, who it belonged to. The 'stained my hands with blood' certainly makes me think it is. Concealed evidence, perhaps, of a murder committed?
Definitely a chilling piece of poetry.

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Review of Makes Sense  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ha! What a brilliant way to end this, and so very true too. I have to admit that I was really surprised to find that all of the characters until near the end were lemmings, but then reading back over it made a lot of sense.
No spelling or grammar issues, and the pacing was very nicely done.

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Review of Practice  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Some nice descriptions of the setting and a good introduction to two characters. A few corrections that you might want to consider making: in the second line you have 'couldint' instead of 'couldn't'; 'How you get around in those heels I'll...', you missed the apostrophe in 'didn't and in the line before last forgot to capitalize 'I'.
All of these are mistakes that are so easy to make, so don't feel at all discouraged. It was a well-rounded scene.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Sometimes I think people hide behind how busy they are as an excuse not to make commitments to each other. It can be so relaxing to just stop, take in the night sky. Those final two lines say it so well - it takes courage to stop putting things off and speak those words.
Very nice work!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is one of those poems that you can't really appreciate to the full extent until you get to the end - very clever with that last line! I had been thinking along the lines of a botched drugs raid with the salt... How wrong I was.
Thanks for the much needed smile!

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Review of Stampede  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! This was an excellent example of how people can get together and stop money from taking over everything. Loved the way you combined the horse type words like 'charge' and 'stampede'; also the descriptions of the carousel horses were spot on.
Nice use of the pictures too.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I really enjoyed reading this. You gave us quite a lot of back-story which was written really well, and I loved getting to know Elizabeth and James.
Very effective how you broke this down into different sections making the story much easier to take in.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have seen some pictures of some seriously impressive sand castles, and I guess that these are the kind of things this poem refers to. Serious business for the competitive spirit!
Thanks for the introduction to another poetry form too. You give very clear instructions.

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Review of Thinking Fast  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This has a lot of story for its length. A good capture of Jimmy's nervousness as he saw Reese and his friends approaching. It's not easy to hold your ground in those situations but Jimmy proved himself to be excellent at problem solving, and in such a way that Reese didn't really have much choice but to back down.
A good amount of character reveal and well-paced.

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Review of Soldier  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A well-written moment in time that tells us quite a bit about your three characters. I think I'd have been a bit worried about Mike showing up in that state, but Tony seemed to make his decision.
One tiny thing I noticed right near the beginning: 'Only if his mother...' Should it be: 'If only his mother'?
Anyway, an enjoyable read.

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Review of Other Ways  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh, this is a poem that is so true. Being a parent is something that brings with it so many challenges, most of which you'd never have given a thought to before. So much responsibility and there certainly is no manual that tells you how to get it right.
Excellent work!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (3.0)
This seems to be a pretty interesting concept for a horror/sci fi/apocalyptic type of thing. A good description of the outside world with the charring and smog, and also of the character's fear when they find themselves surrounded by strange beings.
Some work is needed on the grammar and presentation, but it definitely has promise.

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Review of Hiding Place  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
That direwolf sounded like it was a formidable enemy to have giving chase. Nicely written with lots of short sentences that conveyed the urgency of the situation Bronn found himself in. When he fell and there was blood, I couldn't see a way he was going to escape, but you made an excellent job of finding one.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow, well this was one brilliant chapter! So much character revealed, and not just of one individual. Midhir I did not like at all; from the moment he appeared it was clear that he had one super-sized ego. Boroden was much more likeable, although perhaps a bit hot-headed. I was surprised that he made an escape on his own; hopefully he has some rescue plan in mind.

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