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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi KΓ₯re ΰΉ€ΰΈ₯ΰΈ΅ΰΈ’ΰΈ‘ Enga

It's me, Ken, again! I wandered into the Way Back Machine (aka Read & Review)... and found myself in 2016! *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Never out of season (cinquain)" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
I like the Cinquain form for its simplicity and brevity. Cinquain poetry used to follow a strict rhyme scheme. With modernity comes new innovations in form, so there are several types of cinquain poems to choose from when writing one. The American version is free verse based. I thought you did a great job with this by adding in a bit of Haiku; adding the twist of perspective that opens the mind.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* An excellent poem. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Let morning come  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi KΓ₯re ΰΉ€ΰΈ₯ΰΈ΅ΰΈ’ΰΈ‘ Enga

It's me, Ken, just wandering through the Read & Review forum. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Let morning come" Open in new Window.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A day in the life...

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words you've woven together that this encapsulates a day in its most perfect form. Although idealized, these images come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Let Morning Come." You left little doubt about what this poem was about. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a few bread crumbs about it's meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. I did notice the structure you added which was subtle yet provided a link between verses.I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very good read. I personally found it imaginative and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of My Choices  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Naomi

It's me, Ken, and today's journey into the Read & Review forum brought me to you!. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "My Choices " Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testament of your beliefs and love for yourself. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that! Clear, concise, and to the point. Well done!

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very positive and uplifting read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim Chiu

It's me, Ken, again. I wandered into the Way Back Machine (aka Read & Review)... and found myself in 2015! *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "The New Balance Now Paid" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Sage advice, indeed! I suspect, for most, it's only gotten worse and instead of luxury items, folks are maxing out their cards on food and healthcare. *Shock2* Solid rhymes, a consistent meter, and a great message. You nailed it, my friend.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Mountain High  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sue *BigSmile*

It's me, Ken, and I hung my sock on the Read & Review mantel... and this is what Santa left. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Mountain High " Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
And they say size doesn't matter... Evidently, that only applies to Earth. *Laugh* You nailed the prompt; this was interesting and informative. The mix of rhyme patterns threw me off for a second but on rereading, it flowed well. Good job!

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very clever approach and a good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hi John

It's me, Ken, and I spun the cylinder of the Read & Review revolver... and this popped up. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "When there are more than one" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
OK. I read your poem and I understood the heart of it... and then, you started playing with my head. *Laugh* Capitalizing the last letter made me stop. Is this an acrostic? A hidden message? What the hell am I missing? I give up. Which is unfortunate since I enjoyed the poem but the formatting took over and detracted from your message.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A very good read if you can ignore the distractions. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi J.S.Matlock

My name is Ken, and I spun the wheel on the Read & Review Wheel of Fortune... and this is my prize. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Song to a Minstrel" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Though
Lost love. The mana of poets! Great word choice! Your descriptive words build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem. Free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A moment in time shared. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of A Mother's love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Koyel~writing again

*Shock2* You're back! I'm so happy to see you. It's me, Ken, and I stepped into the time machine (aka Read & Review forum)... it took me back to 2009. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "A Mother's love" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
A moving tribute to mothers and a strong statement of devotion to the values they stand for. Your descriptive words build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem. My only hiccup is with the word "pelf" in the final verse. Yes, it means money but usually obtained in a dishonest way,

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A great tribute and good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi I Resolve to Wear My Sox

It's me, Ken, and I spun the cylinder of the Read & Review revolver... and this popped into the chamber. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Erasure and Blackout Poems" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:x
Okay *Shock2* You certainly found a unique form to try out. *Laugh* I love experimenting with new forms but I think I'll pass on this one. Still, I have to give you high marks for seeing the "beauty within." I get the gist of your poem but it feels ragged as if some words are missing and that ruins the flow.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star* A very clever approach but the final result was less than satisfying. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Cross Love

My name is Ken, and I spun the cylinder of the Read & Review revolver... and this popped into the chamber. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "The Succubus Next Door" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Obviously, you didn't get very far with your story... or did you? *Rolling* True, you can leave a lot to the reader's imagination but this might be a bit too much. As you will learn, if you post a story and you don't want it sucked up in the Read & Review hoover, mark it as restricted. That way you can continue to work out on it without pesky folks like me pointing out what you already know.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star* Let me know when you finish it and I'll come back and give you a serious review *BigSmile*. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Acts of Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kenzie

It's me, Ken, and I wandered into the Way Back Machine (aka Read & Review)... and found myself in 2007. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Acts of Love" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Part poetry and part prose and 100% on point. To love others is to love ourselves, and we cannot love those closest to us without loving ourselves. (1) Your poem was touching and well done. (2) Your memories of your Mom were inspirational. (3) Your Mom was right! *Laugh*

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very thought provoking and good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Cupid's Aim  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi John

My name is Ken, and I spun the cylinder of the Read & Review revolver... and this popped into the chamber. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Cupid's Aim" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
A mishmash of styles with a consistent theme. I'm going to take a wild guess and say you're not a fan of VD. I noticed that you used a rhyme pattern but you have this listed as prose. Overall, the themes you used are a bit well-worn. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your feelings and that makes it unique to you.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* Entertaining and smile worthy. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of The Wall  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Adherennium

It's just me, Ken, and I traveled down the Read & Review road this morning... and this came into view. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "The Wall" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
A
poem
written as
a first attempt
to push boundaries
of creativity
reveals a poets inner
soul. Walls of choice held together
with the mortar of obstinacy
separate you from the things you desire.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A bit obtuse but a good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kay Carter

My name is Ken, and I spun the cylinder of the Read & Review revolver... and this ended up in the chamber. I usually just hit the button again when it lands on blogs, but yours captured my attention. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Journal 2 - 12/10/2025" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
A childhood vignette that recounts a time in your life that no child should ever have to go through. The only positive is that you're here and survived that time. Perhaps, on some level, recounting those times will unburden you and allow you some healing.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* Assuming this is real - and I have no reason to doubt - this was a very disturbing read. I hope that with time and other experiences, you will find peace. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Nights On Repeat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Amare Jane

My name is Ken. As I wandered through the Read and Review forum, I stumbled upon this. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Nights On Repeat" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A moving homage to the too many forgotten that live in the shadows.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testament of your love and caring for your fellow human beings. That makes it unique to you, and you can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Nights On Repeat." A tantalizing title. πŸ˜„ If this doesn't get the reader's attention, then I don't know what will. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a few words, but I think it needs more about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms, but not at the expense of poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very moving read. I personally found it touching and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication, and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of Relativity  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mouser

My name is Ken, and I spun the cylinder of the Read & Review revolver... and this popped into the chamber (relatively speaking). *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Relativity" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you.

This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A clear testament of your beliefs and a good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Night Drive  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Emberly Gray

My name is Ken, and I rolled the windows down on the Read & Review roadster... and this blew in. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Night Drive" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Been there, done that. I used to drive the California coast in my youth. Of course, the "oldies" were new then. *Laugh* You've used descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem. Your rhymes were good and the meter pretty consistent until the end. Since it was the closing verse, it didn't interfere with the reading. Overall, great job!

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A fun read that will register with most readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Footprints  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jo Paynter, Creator

My name is Ken, and I walked down the Read & Review path this morning and found these footprints. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Footprints" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Nicely written detail. Great word choice! You used descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

My one suggestion is to resolve the apparent conflict between verse 2, which appears to suggest that your footprints are concealed/removed, and the final verse which tells us to leave our mark. I think if verse 2 was expanded to say the footprints are hidden but remain you will have achieved your goal.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A deceptively simple approach with a strong message. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Free  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sumojo

It's me, Ken, and I took the free offer to Read & Review... and this was my prize. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Free" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Short, sweet, and rhymed! My kind of poetry. *Laugh* They say nothing in life is free. The enjoyment of reading this was. Not much more I can say.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very clever write and good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Seaweed  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Adherennium

It's me, Ken, and as I undulated through the Read & Review kelp bed, this popped up. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Seaweed" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Your luminous, lilting poem weaves a serene, dreamlike music that moves the soul. Yeah, I liked it. *Laugh* Your radiant cadence shapes a graceful, wavering wave of language that stays and sways in the mind. You done good. *Rolling*

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very clever approach and good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim Chiu

It's me, Ken. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "God’s Love: Sweet Serenity" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A strong statement of your belief and the promises they stand for.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs and love for your chosen God. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "God’s Love: Sweet Serenity." You left little doubt about what this poem was about. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very passionate read. While I do not share your beliefs, I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Charlie

My name is Ken, and the Read & Review forum suggested I join you for dinner. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "An Extraordinary Dinner" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
OK. Not too bad. A small hiccup in the meter but easily overlooked. What's missing is context. The who, what, where kind of detail that would allow the reader to see or feel the humor in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A clever approach but a bit too generic to find the humor. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Whispering Cipher  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lonewolf

It's me, Ken, and I tempted fate and hit the Read & Review link... and this mysteriously popped up. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Whispering Cipher" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Now, to be fair, I did Google your opening phrase to see there was something out there I was ignorant of... and your poem showed up. *Laugh* I suspect the answer resides in you and will remain a mystery to the rest of us. Nice illustrative phrases set the mood for this enigmatic tale. It plays at the edges of understanding. It flows well and is generally an easy read. I think your poem was a success in creating "a thing that sounds most like a secret code but isn’t."

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* Mysterious and tantalizing. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Page Turner  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi January Critic

It's me, Ken, and I spun the cylinder of the Read & Review revolver... and this went pop. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Page Turner" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
You made me dizzy. 🀣 I appreciate formatting but couldn't quite link it to the words or theme of your creation. For me, it kind of threw the poem off balance. I suspect knowing the contest and its requirements would have provided some context. What I got was reading a book, most likely a war story, and your reactions to it.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very clever, confusing approach but I love a challenge *Laugh*. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of The 22nd Hour  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi AmyJo-me, myself, and I

It's me, Ken, and I sampled the WDC smorgasbord (aka Read & Review)... and this tasty treat popped up. *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "The 22nd Hour" Open in new Window..

✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Based on the prompt, this was a success. Based on a relationship, not so much. *Laugh* I think most readers will identify with this. No one likes to be taken for granted and yet we experience this every day. I appreciate that this was a rhymed poem. It kept an even pace and led me through your thoughts and emotions. I think the meter of the closing lines could be tightened. I understand the need to highlight the 22nd hour, but it felt like almost an afterthought. Nicely done overall.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A good read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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