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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi VictoriaMcCullough

It's me, Ken, and I decided to click on Read & Review today. Guess what was resurrected from some long-forgotten corner of your port? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Taken From Haiku In The Wilderness 1" Open in new Window..
✨ Impressions/Thoughts:
Rose thorns. OK, I get the images and the meanings. 😀 I think your Haiku does justice to the form. Syllable counts, lines, nature focus. I thought the "insight" was a bit weak but nonetheless, it highlighted your aha moment. In total, you let the story unfold with any awkward moments or breaks. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* Congratulations on the win! A very good read that will cause reader's to contemplate this moment. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim Chiu

It's me, Ken, and I decided to click on Read & Review today. Look what was resurrected from some lost corner of your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "My Vegas Vacation - Surprisingly Cheap" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
They (whoever they are 😀) say that poets expose a part of their soul with each write. You seem bound by logic. *Laugh* You've taken a small section of your life and made it interesting and engaging. The rhymes were clean and really let the story unfold without any awkward moments or breaks. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A fun read with a lesson for risk takers. Unfortunately, I'm probably not going to learn. *Rolling* Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Charity Marie - <3

It's me, Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review and look what popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Charity Marie's WDC Will" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I've never done a review of a last will and testament! 😀 It actually makes a lot of sense although since I'm at the age you project for your demise it's a bit depressing. 🤣 I think you covered all the bases and, from your rationale, appeared "of sound mind" anyway. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A thought provoking read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Homeward Bound  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lou-Here By His Grace

It's me, Ken. I clicked on Read & Review, and look what was resurrected from some long-forgotten corner of your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Homeward Bound" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
They (whoever that may be 😀) say you can't go back. They are wrong. I have a true affinity for this type of writing. 🤣 There's a melancholy that touches most readers and will spark instant recognition. Really well done.

This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A touching read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Photo Op  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Don Two

It's just me, Ken, and I clicked on Read & Review. Look what was resurrected from some lost corner of your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Photo Op" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
OK, I'm a sucker for "everyday poetry." 😀 It's with the mundane that poets turn coal into diamonds. This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt this was very prose-like... until you relaxed and brought in the poetry magic. As Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this. It upgraded the read and really let the story unfold without any awkward moments or breaks. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very satisfying read that many will immediately shake their heads in unison with. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Alchemy  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ra M

My name is Ken. I dropped by Read & Review and guess what popped up? *Laugh* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Alchemy" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A tale (or memory) of physical bliss that words have captured in a soaring saga of intimacy.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your love. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Alchemy." A bit open-ended, with many meanings about what this poem could be about. 😄 It will attract many readers' attention. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem but I feel you shortchanged yourself. Like your night of passion, more is better than less.
While I am no prude, due to the subject matter, I would encourage you to up the rating to at least ASR.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words were used to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this included the flow that poetry has and kept it from being too prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very enjoyable read. I really liked some of the imagery and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi C. Evil

My name is Ken and I decided to check out the Read & Review. Look what popped up! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "One Day We'll Meet at the Cabin" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
What a sad tale. Having gone through loss, I could feel the regret and sadness of your vignette and could immediately identify with your character. Nice descriptive words set the stage and emphasized the feeling of loneliness. Really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A moving read. I felt this wasn't quite complete, however. Consider extending the story to include scattering the ashes and tie into the leaves floating on the water. Both are endings of a season. With the father's ending, Arlo begins. Just some random thoughts. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Naomi

It's me, Ken, and I decided to click on Read & Review. Guess what popped up? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Beauty Of Laughter" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I'll be honest. Poetry? No problem. Short Story? No problem. Biographical? Now you're going to make me think. *Rolling* How do you critique a part of someone's life? Still, I will try.

I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs and the love you feel for life. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

I totally agree with you.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enlightening read with a lesson that most will immediately shake their heads in unison with. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jeffrey Meyer

It's me, Ken, and I decided to check out the Read & Review. Look what popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Forest for the Trees" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Two sides of the same coin. 😀 I loved the banter and could immediately identify with your characters. You let the ambiguity of the speakers hide who was actually talking which set up the ending nicely. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very fun read although the brevity of the tale made it feel less story and more vignette. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Love is not  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Mouser

My name is Ken. I dropped by the Read & Review and this popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Love is not" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
My first thought was: "When you have eliminated the impossible, whatever remains, however improbable, must be the truth." Sherlock Holmes Your truth seems to be that love is a game token.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs about the nature of love. It is unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Love is not." You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 If this doesn't get the reader's attention, then I don't know what will. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line, but a few more words would add meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Your descriptive words are used to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel your emotions in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
It's probably just me but I personally found it somewhat empty of revelations. I really think that should you choose to revisit this (it's been a while since you wrote it) that there's real insights you could add to make this more satisfying to the reader. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Beck Firing back up!

My name is Ken and I decided to click on Read & Review today. Guess what popped up? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "St. Patrick's Day Shenanigans" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I thought your extra info fell short unless you're getting paid to advertise for the Bard's Hall Contest. *Rolling* Great contest but I'd rather see you focus on your work.

I see you took the Acrostic challenge to the next level by adding rhyme... mostly. It worked although the final line did seem to come out of nowhere. I was also a bit confused about the Scots and Dutchmen sneaking into an Irish-focused poem.

Just for presentation purposes, I have two suggestions: Add {size:4} at the beginning to increase the font size and make it easier to read. Try bolding the first letter of each line which will make the Acrostic more self-evident especially when you're using such a faint color.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star*A fun read that captures the spirit of the day. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Why Do I Write  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran

It's me, Ken, and I decided to check out the Read & Review forum; guess what popped up? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Why Do I Write" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A little disappointing. 😀 I read this hoping to understand why you write. You still haven't told me. You said you do. (That's the what.) You said you "write from your heart." (That's the how.) Nothing about why. Is it just to put words on paper and collect them into a book?

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star* An interesting read but, in the end, disappointing. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Universal Laws  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi PATRICIA A. MANIACI

My name is Ken. This popped up on Read and Review. Maybe it was karmic. *BigSmile* It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Universal Laws" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
And here I was, looking for a treatise involving advanced mathematics explaining the fundamental workings of the universe, when instead I found a presentation on hermetic principles.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Universal Laws." I found this a little ambiguous since many have differing views on what is Universal and what is Law. That ambiguity may be enough to attract a few readers but primarily it will get eyes from those already familiar with the topic and I doubt that it's the target audience you were looking for. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I would certainly encourage you to add a few words other than it was an entry. Perhaps something like "The laws about mastering your life with love and joy."

🔹 Grammar/Wording - I think your word choice is limited since the concepts are prescribed. Your transition words are primarily to connect one law to another in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to paint the story of your poem. A few tiny errors jumped out. The opening line "wont" should be won't. The line, "Masculine & feminine, yin and yang, the balance were always needing." I think you meant "we're."

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in a loose free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel your emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very enlightening read. (No pun intended *Laugh*) I personally found it educational which I appreciate. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of So Glued!  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim Chiu,

My name is Ken. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "So Glued!" Open in new Window. which I came across in Read and Review.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A bit of fun. We all have those half-used bottles and tubes lying around. I guess, for you, their image stuck in your mind. *FacePalm*

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I love writing about the mundane and I'm happy to see that you do to. Finding inspiration in the ordinary is a gift and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "So Glued!" You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Aimed at children, your word choice was simple without abandoning descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to build pictures and each word seemed well-chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - You used standard quatrains in aabb patterns of rhyme. The meter was a bit inconsistent but it flowed well. I recognized Crazy Glue and Elmers but since this was geared for kids, I thought that glue sticks - a schoolhouse standard - were a glaring omission.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A fun read. I personally found it memory-filled and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Weirdone-Back in the games

My name is Ken and I decided to check out the Read and Review link. Evidently, it's set to "way back when." 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "Kiss Me One More Time" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I don't think I ever went through that phase. 🤣 OK - I saw it in my kids... maybe... a little. I have seen other forms of teen angst so I could identify with your characters. The rhymes were clean and really let the story unfold with any awkward moments or breaks. Well done.

✨ Suggestions:
As you've probably discovered in the intervening years since you wrote this, a lot of here are old. I recommend you add {size:4} at the start so readers won't have to squint. *Laugh*

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:.
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A fun read that I'm sure many will blushingly identify with. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of WHEREVER YOU GO  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ri_leigh

My name is Ken. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "WHEREVER YOU GO" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Lingering memories, lingering doubts. The human condition.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Wherever You Go" A bit ambiguous about what this poem was about. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Good word choice! Your descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very good read. I personally found it identifiable, and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of The King  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi John Sharp

My name is Ken, and I decided to check out the Read and Review and this popped up. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The King" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A microcosm of life. 😀 OK - I'm retired so I have a longer view of this type of writing having fallen many more times than you. 🤣 This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A good read with a lesson that many will immediately shake their heads in unison with. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of You're Trouble  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi CHAN

It's me, Ken, and you popped up on Read and Review. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you with feedback on your work "You're Trouble" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
It's been so long since I was a teenage boy... *Rolling* but even old folks can relate to this. I'm sure I met her when I was young. 🤣 I loved the descriptive flow and could immediately identify with your character. The rhymes were clean and really let the story unfold without any awkward moments or breaks. The ending I thought fell flat since I didn't really see you in conflict (war) with the subject. Other than that, really well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Half-star* A very memory-filled read, reminding us old farts of the one bright flame in our past. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi WriterRick

It's me, Ken, and I was wandering through Read and Review and came across this. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Invalid Entry" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
What a clever take on a classic. 😀 OK - I'm old and grew up listening to this song ad nauseam. 🤣 I appreciate the summer flavors you've captured. My hesitation in rating you higher is that it seemed too long. 30. Summer is longer than 30 days. The original was 12. At some point, it lost its impact on me and it started feeling like a stream of consciousness listing of summer icons.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A very fun and clever read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days!

It's me, Ken. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Tale of Two Nice Mommies" Open in new Window.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Ran across this on Read and Review. It's not normally anything I'd select but seeing as how it's you... *Laugh*

✨ Creativity/Impact:
A gentle story of discovering imagination and sharing.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "The Tale of Two Nice Mommies." You left little doubt about what this story was about. 😄 If this doesn't get the reader's attention, then I don't know what will. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! You kept it simple but clear, perfect for your target audience. I saw nothing in error. You used language to convey feelings, and each word seemed well-chosen to paint the story and keep it moving.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written for very young children as a teaching tool about using imagination to overcome problems. You developed the story in logical, small steps that young readers could follow and understand.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very gentle read and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Crissy~Baby!

It's me, Ken. . It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Sweet Dedication " Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A moving remembrance of one who has passed and a strong statement of devotion to to their memory.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testimonial of your beliefs and love. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Sweet Dedication." You left little doubt about what this poem was about. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about its meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Free verse is a type of poetry that does not contain patterns of rhyme or meter. Free verse is considered an open form of poetry, as opposed to poetry written in structure or form, and tends to follow natural speech patterns and rhythms. However, free verse generally contains poetic lines and poetic imagery that distinguish it from prose. I felt that this was missing the flow that poetry has and felt it was very prose-like. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very moving read. I personally found it touching and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Triple-L

It's me, Ken. . It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Old Man and the Ocean of Love" Open in new Window..

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
As poetic as it was a story, there is a longing to your words that makes this both wistful and wishful.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I can tell by the words and emotions you've woven together that this is more than just an entry. It is a testament of your inner beliefs and love for the fantasy realms of your imagination. While similar words have been spoken, these come from your heart and that makes it unique to you. You can't be more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as a criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "The Old Man and the Ocean of Love." Very appropriate. It's what first captured my attention. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I appreciate that you added a personal line about it's meaning to amplify and set up the scenario for your tale.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - Great word choice! Your descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language to show your feelings and each word seemed well chosen to paint the story of your poem.

On a separate note, PLEASE don't use the default font size. Simply add {size:4} to the start. Some of us have trouble reading fine print. *Laugh*

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in a third-person point of view. As such, it keeps the reader outside looking in. It is through your words that the reader connects. I felt the flow that poetry has and felt it was helped bring the emotions to life. That said, Robert Frost once said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see the poetry and - more importantly - feel the emotion in this.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
A very moving read. I personally found it touching and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
OK, I know you don't own a guitar but I appreciate the imagery. *Laugh* Just for you, I'll give it a shot. I would hate for our relationship to end over something so trivial.

As for the poem, well, I'm sure it's heartfelt.

Ken *Heart*


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Review of Hunter  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh Fyn, you clever creature.

Reading Hunter is like realizing too late that your brunch date is also a philosopher — there you are, sipping mimosa, when suddenly you're contemplating the nature of desire, mortality, and whether wolves wear metaphorical cologne. It's sly. It's sharp. And yes, it has claws.

You didn't just write a poem. You set poetic traps. Hunter opens with a deceptively gentle step — rhythmic, smooth — luring you into the underbrush of language. And just when you’re admiring the foliage, snap! A line hits you with a truth so lean and wild, you feel like prey. Deliciously so.

Take this gem:

“Dawn breathes on the horizon, In perfect stance...”

Excuse me? That’s not a line, that’s a moonlit ambush. And I am here for it.

The poem plays predator and prey with the reader — a dance of tension and release, all delivered with Fyn’s signature mix of elegance and bite. The pacing prowls. The imagery glows like eyes in the dark. And the metaphors? Sharp enough to leave poetic puncture wounds.

But don’t get me wrong — Hunter isn’t all shadow and teeth. There’s humor in the precision, a wink tucked into the syntax. Like the poet knows exactly how dramatic they're being, and is enjoying it immensely. As are we.

So if you’re in the mood for something that reads like a forest at midnight — beautiful, strange, slightly dangerous — Hunter is your next obsession. Just don’t read it before bed unless you’re okay with dreaming in teeth and metaphors.

Fyn, wherever you're hiding — thank you for this chase.

Ken


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Review of Ode to Cupid  Open in new Window.
Review by 🌖 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (1.0)
Truly horrible! *Laugh* It brought back painful memories; I dated his sister in my youth. *Rolling*


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