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Review of Your Eyes  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Wondercat

It's me, Ken, and I saw this languishing in your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "Your Eyes"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I enjoyed this but I thought it was a bit ambiguous. I'm assuming that this was written as a psalm-like praise to God but I could also see it written to loved one.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think your approach to this testament was creative. Nice use of descriptions to create imagery in the reader's mind and bring them into the emotions you're expressing.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Your Eyes." I thought your title was a perfect fit and heralded the poetic content without giving away the store. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem. I think you need to be consistent - for clarity's sake - about capitalizing "you" if this was meant to refer to God. I think that inconsistency is what is confusing me.

🔹 Form/Flow - I believe you intent was to construct a rhyming poem but you gave up midway through *Laugh*. This was written in free verse. Its popularity stems from the belief that free verse is poetry without rules; after all, it doesn't rhyme, and it doesn't have a meter. However, what separates poetry from prose is the arrangement of carefully chosen words into verses. There's more to free verse than a sudden thought recorded on paper. It's not that no rules apply to free verse; rather, the poet makes up the rules for each poem! Free verse done well will have rhythm, though it may not have a regular beat. A variety of poetic devices may be woven throughout the piece. There may be patterns of sound and repetition. Free verse can be compared to a song that doesn't rhyme. There is still a lyric quality to it.

As Robert Frost said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see poetry in this. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today. Just as a thought, you may want to check out "The Christian Writing Contest"  and "The Lighthouse Poetry Contest" .

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
This is terrible! 😂 🤣 Well done, Neva.


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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hey Susan *BigSmile*

Haven't seen you around much! I've missed you. Maybe I'm just hanging around the wrong circles. *BigSmile*

Now, about your poem: how do I rate this one-star? You don't allow ratings *Laugh* I would if I could. It really is terrible poetry *Rolling*.

Loved the internal rhyme!

*Hug* Ken


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "January 24, 2019" 
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in "I Write in 2019"  as your Week 5 entry. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "January 24, 2019" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I love reading your work. You always challenge me to think. As painful as that is, 🤣 this time you made me do some research. "Ultima Thule a region believed by ancient geographers to be the northernmost land in the inhabited world." Never heard of it but I can see where Bob's picture would stir that image in your mind. Wonderful take on the prompt!

The poem itself is wonderfully done and reflects the ancient beauty of this world. Great emotions, great images.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enlightening and positive read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "January 7, 2019" 
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier

It's me, Ken, and you were next up in "I Write in 2019" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "January 7, 2019" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
As always, I enjoy reading your poems. I always learn something new. I wasn't aware of the tradition of "inviting the Three Kings to your life on Epiphany." Now, mind you, I could use the gold but I'm not sure what I'd do with Frankensence or Myhrr. 😄

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very interesting and enlightening read. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Wishing you strength and mystery in the New Year!

Ken


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Review of Dear Bob 2019  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton

Yes, it's just me, Ken, and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Dear Bob 2019"  on behalf of the "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

*Starb* First Impression/Thoughts:
Bobby, Bobby, Bobby... *FacePalm* What can I say? You know I'm a fan of your poetry and this, in a word, is brilliant. I won't include any representative gifs since you're probably reading this on your outdated iPad. 😂 🤣

*Starv* Creativity/Impact:
This was imaginative and creative. You managed to outline your goals in a humorous, captivating way.

*Staro* Message/Theme:
A bit simplistic but perfectly appropriate. You've set your 2019 goals in a realistic way and, with patience, I'm sure you'll achieve them.

*Starg* Technique/Technical Notes:
Written in quatrains with an abab rhyme (mostly 😂) I didn't notice any SPAGs (spelling, punctuation, and grammar). This was a joyful, humorous write and more than that, you can't ask. The use of emoticons as commentary and punctuation adds to the fun.

*Starr* Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* What a fun read. Your enthusiasm comes through clearly and I found myself smiling. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Jellyfish-on holiday

It's just me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Whatever Happened to Great Britain?"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The November challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." As I read this, I felt you rose to the challenge brilliantly! 😂 I'm only peripherally aware of all that goes in the U.K. (BBC on NPR) but I see the parallels and understand your frustrations.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you captured the essence of the current political climate, not only in the U.K. but around the world. I love that, after reading your poem, I have a clearer understanding of what's going on. Very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Whatever Happened to Great Britain?." I thought your title was a great fit for the poem and set the stage for the poetic content. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very strong, emotionally charged words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Your choice of this form was perfect for this kind of poetry, allowing you to focus on the meaning and emotion of the poem. I'm happy to see that you added some rhyme which I think helped the flow. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very entertaining, emotional and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. I appreciate that you made it multilingual 🤣. Thank you for sharing your journey of creativity, emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review of Same Old Same Old  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi ♥Hooves♥

It's just me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Same Old Same Old"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The November challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." As I read this, I felt you rose to the challenge mooo-rvelously! 😂 Sorry, had to slip one bovine reference in.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you captured the essence of the current political climate, not only in the U.S. but around the world. Very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Same Old Same Old." I thought your title was a good fit for the poem and set the stage for the poetic content. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very humor and pointed words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. While humorous, there was a sting in your words that amplified the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written "limerickish." 😂 Your choice of this form was perfect for this kind of poetry, allowing you to focus on the sarcasm and intent of the poem. Well done. As you know, I happen to love this particular form myself. *Rolling*

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very engaging and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of humor, creativity, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dave

It's just me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Rabid Rhetoric"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The November challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." As I read this, I felt you rose to the challenge alliterativly brilliantly! 😂

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you captured the essence of the current political climate, not only in the U.S. but around the world. Your approach shows clearly that length and content are not mutually exclusive. Very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "The Rabid Rhetoric." I thought your title was a perfect fit for the poem and set the stage for the poetic content. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very emotional words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in Alternating Quatrains. I enjoyed that kept the "b" rhymes consistent throughout which, to me, really made it flow beautifully. Your choice of this form was perfect for this kind of poetry, allowing you to focus on the meaning and emotion of the poem. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very emotional, entertaining, and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Sorji

It's just me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "A Politician's Grocery List"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The November challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." As I read this, I felt you rose to the challenge in a clever and unique way. What a fun idea! 😂

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you captured the essence of the current political climate, not only in the U.S. but around the world. Exceptionally creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "A Politician's Grocery List." I thought your title was a fun fit for the poem and set the stage for the poetic content. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem (potentially 😂). Well done.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very emotional words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. I didn't really see this as poetry, more along the lines of prose, but your choice of this form was perfect for your message, allowing you to focus on the meaning and emotion. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very strong message and a thought provoking and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of humor, emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review of Burnt Orange  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier

It's just me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Burnt Orange"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The November challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." I felt you rose to the challenge quite well although your opening and closing lines reminded me of the opening lines of the song Tubthumping by Chumbawumba. 😂 I personally felt this strayed more into social than political commentary (other than your sleeping habits). Today, both seem so very closely aligned that I doubt there's much difference.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you captured the essence of the current political climate (no pun intended), not only in the U.S. but around the world. Very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Burnt Orange." I thought your title was a bit confusing. I never made the connection to the poem and kept looking for it in the poetic content. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem although the reference to "p45" left me scratching my head. It would be helpful if you added a note at the bottom to enlighten the ignorant. 😂

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very emotional words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in free verse. Your choice of this form was perfect for this kind of poetry, allowing you to focus on the meaning and emotion of the poem. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very emotional but enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Your advocacy on behalf of the planet is clear and commendable. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review of Politics  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Fivesixer

It's me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Politics"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The December challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." As I've come to expect from you, you rose to the challenge... a bit esoteric but brilliantly. 😂

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you captured the essence of the frustration and even anger many feel about politics and yet causes the reader to stop and think. Very creative and probably painful for many. 😂 Your reading, by the way, was an excellent addition to the piece!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "Politics." I thought your title was a perfect fit and set the stage for the poetic content. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written in Free Verse which I was happy to see included rhyme. Free verse doesn't preclude rhyme. This particular form was perfect for this kind of poetry, allowing you to focus on the meaning and emotion of the poem. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review of The New Truth  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Author Ed Anderson

It's me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The New Truth "  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The December challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." I think you're spot on with your observations on the state of our society.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you did a wonderful job in capturing the frustration and fears that we all have about the current political climate, not only in the U.S. but around the world. Very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "The New Truth." I thought your title was a perfect fit and set the stage for the poetic content. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I think this was an opportunity missed.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written as a simple 4-line, 3-stanza poem with a closing couplet. This particular form was perfect for this kind of poetry, allowing you to bring the reader to the closing couplet which was the heart of your poem. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review of On Capitol Hill  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton

It's me, Ken, and I'm one of the judges for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "On Capitol Hill"  as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
The December challenge was Political Poetry defined in the broadest possible definition: "relating to government or public affairs." It can be related to any city, state, country, or region. Subject matter does not need to be strictly related to political parties or the United States." As I've come to expect from you, you rose to the challenge brilliantly! 😂

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think you captured the essence of the ineptitude and moral decay of Congress using sarcastic humor in a way that drives home the point and yet leaves the reader informed and smiling. Very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

🔹 Title - "On Capitol Hill." I thought your title was a perfect fit and set the stage for the poetic content. 😄 The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

🔹 Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the message of your poem.

🔹 Form/Flow - This was written as a Rondeau. This particular form was perfect for this kind of poetry, allowing you to bring the reader back to the subject/focus of the poem. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of humor, emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best in 2019,

Ken

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Review of Lucky to be Fired  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


Well done! Now you sleep without any strange dreams. LOL

*Hug* Ken


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for entry "Blood Moon" 
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi IceSkatingSugarCube

My name is, Ken, and by virtue of your having posted ahead of me in "I Write in 2019"  you're about to find out why folks shudder when they see my handle in a review.😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Blood Moon" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
How apropos! The Blood Moon prophecy claims the world’s fiery demise will be preceded by a menacing omen in the skies. Doom-mongers and online conspiracists believe this will happen of January 21, 2019. 😱 Personally, I wouldn't max out my credit cards just yet... 🤣 I think you captured the essence of this prediction succinctly and with probably more seriousness than it deserves. Still, well done!

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very timely read. Thank you for sharing your journey of imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Princesses are such fickle ladies! If I were a Prince, I'd tell her where to plant that kiss 😂 🤣


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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Jaeff | KBtW of the Free Folk

It's me, Ken, and this is your official unofficial review for "I Write in 2018"  😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Santa's Dirty Little Secret" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
This started off so familiar, recollecting those gentle Christmases of past years... and then, Groan smiley! Really, I can't believe you went there! 🤣 Santa as a litterbug? I guess it's better than being cascaded with reindeer doo. *Laugh*

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very humorous take on the prompt and written as a quatrain poem as well! Thank you for sharing your journey of off-kilter humor, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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for entry "Christmas Colours" 
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nicely done, Carly... You've taken the prompts and woven a prism of words that shine brightly. *BigSmile*

Keep up the great work...

Ken


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Review of Fairy-Tale Ending  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Ben Langhinrichs

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in the Newsfeed as a "Ya Du" form. What the hell is a "Ya Du" form? 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Fairy-Tale Ending" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
This started off so tender, so loving... and then, Groan smiley! Really, I can't believe you went there! 🤣 What fun! Who knew the princesses were part of #METOO?

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very humorous but enlightening read. Thank you for sharing your journey of off-kilter humor, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming, Ben, and I'll keep reading!

Ken


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Review of SYMBOLISM  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Monty

It's me, Ken, and I appreciate your sharing this with me. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "SYMBOLISM" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
What a wonderful Terza Rima, Monty. I love the imagery of the eagle and your line "It is the eagle that flies high and free" is such a powerful statement that has deep meaning to you and me. Really well done my friend. One of your best!

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very powerful and moving read. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming and I'll keep reading!

Ken


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Review of I Write In 2018  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi 💙 Carly

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted as your entry in "I Write in 2018"  as a "catch up" entry. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "The Mystery of The Rare Book" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Bravo. Flash fiction is so difficult since you have to squeeze a story into 300 words. You've done this very well with this tale of a rare book and it's potential for chasing the lost dreams of youth... literally. *Laugh*. I liked the story; my only suggestion is toward the end where you have the protagonist ask "How old?" The professor's response didn't make sense. I suspect you meant "18" - not the year. Other than that, I think you have a great tale and the seed for a bigger story in the future.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very intriguing read. Thank you for sharing your journey of imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming and I'll keep reading!

Ken


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Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Paul

It's me, Ken, and I took you up on your offer to check out your port. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you with feedback on your work "I Did What She Wanted" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Wow. Beautifully said, Paul. I went through this in 2009 with my wife so, perhaps, the shared experience makes this more poignant for me. I could hear each utterance, feel each emotion, as I read your words. Well done.

My own experiences are captured in "Feathers" .

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very honest and touching read. Thank you for sharing your emotional journey, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming and I'll keep reading!

Ken


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Review of How Could You?  
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi LegendaryMask❤️

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in Newsfeed. 😁 You wanted some thoughts and I have a few to spare. It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you feedback on your work "How Could You?" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
OK Teresa - this seemed a bit more cathartic than poetic to me. I feel that the explanation at the end takes this from a poem to more of a post. If I took your words, removed all the line breaks, and made this into a paragraph, it would read like one. Poetry should stand on its own. As I read this I understand - you were betrayed, you were hurt, you got divorced. I think the poetry lies in discovering how strong you are and how you go on from here. Just my thoughts, my friend...

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* A very dark and painful read. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotions and talent with me today. This is a chrysalis - I look forward to seeing the butterfly!

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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for entry "A Life Lived Well" 
Review by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jay O'Toole

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in "Invalid Item"  in response to the prompt "Ripple." 😁 Congratulations on the daily win! It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you feedback on your work "A Life Lived Well" .

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Well done, Jay! It's so true. We think of life as a series of choices but fail to see the ripples that our actions cause or the impacts that our choices may have on those we love. You've captured that with this thought-provoking piece.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very sobering read. Thank you for sharing your journey of insight, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

🤗 Keep 'em coming and I'll keep reading!

Ken


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