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for entry "A Life Lived Well
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jay O'Toole

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in "Invalid Item in response to the prompt "Ripple." 😁 Congratulations on the daily win! It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you feedback on your work "A Life Lived Well.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Well done, Jay! It's so true. We think of life as a series of choices but fail to see the ripples that our actions cause or the impacts that our choices may have on those we love. You've captured that with this thought-provoking piece.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very sobering read. Thank you for sharing your journey of insight, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming and I'll keep reading!

Ken


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for entry "The Urge to Write
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Dave

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in "Invalid Item in response to the prompt "chafe." 😁 Congratulations on the win! It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you feedback on your work "The Urge to Write.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
It's funny how one's own experiences color how we view poetry. I've had the same itch many times *Laugh* so I completely identify with your poetic vision. You've captured that moment, oft repeated, that drives us to the computer or to pick up a pen and scribble a thought on the back of whatever paper we can find! Well done, sir.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very familiar read that will bring a smile of recognition from most readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of insight, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming and I'll keep reading! *BigSmile*

Ken


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton

It's me, Ken, and you shared this with me as your entry in the "Invalid Item. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you feedback on your work "Our World Is Smaller Now.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Wow. You nailed it, Chris. This is not only a great example of a Pantoum but it has a wonderfully powerful message. Darn you! 🀣 You're going to make me work hard to even be in the same league with you, let alone challenge you. I think Marvin should just "drop the mic" and give you first place now.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very thought-provoking and emotionally powerful read. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming and I'll keep reading!

Ken


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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi G. B. Williams

It's me, Ken, and I appreciated our short conversation the other day. Since I said I'd vote for you 🀣 I thought I'd be remiss if I didn't "get to know my candidate." It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you with feedback on your work "I Am A Selfish Person as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I see your point. Perhaps, as you point out, we've spent our lives asking God for favors so it's a natural instinct to continue on. I like your perspective and found it hit... *Blush* too darn close to home! 😁

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I don't read a lot of spiritual work but I found this practical and pointed. Excellent.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "I Am A Selfish Person." I thought your title was perfect and I even "got it" as I read your article. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it to amplify and set up the scenario for your essay. Well done.

πŸ”Ή Mechanics - No obvious punctuation or writing errors were seen but I'd have been surprised if there had been. You, my friend, seem to be a perfectionist and it shows here.

πŸ”Ή Narrative/Dialogue - The narrative of your journey was purposeful and helped the reader "fill in the blanks" for their own enlightenment.

πŸ”Ή Presentation - Your essay was very enlightening and will tap most readers on the shoulder saying "think about it this way." One suggestion - consider making the font large since it will open the page up and makes for easier reading - especially for us geezers πŸ˜…. Simple add {size:4} at the top. The journey of your personal discovery looks great on the page.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very uplifting and entertaining read. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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for entry "On the Lake
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tinker

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted at "I Write in 2018 and I'm happy to say, I get to review you! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and to provide feedback on your work "On the Lake as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
You are one of my favorite poets Judi so I was happy to see you joining in the "24 Syllables" contest. I love the way you blend multiple sensory images to give us a complete poem in such a short space. True, it's overkill compared to a haiku 🀣 but a challenge nonetheless. Very nicely done.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
There are so many different aspects to the term billow. I think you went with a traditional interpretation and still managed to bring out something creative and beautiful.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "On the lake." I thought your title was obvious but compelling and heralded the poetic content. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I know this is part of a book so there's not much you can do with it other than let folks know they'll not be suffering from eye strain after reading.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. The wind, the sparkles, the ripples all contribute to the movement of your words and images.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in free verse with a focus on the imagery and not any preconceived form or structure. Such poems are without rhythm and rhyme schemes, do not follow regular rhyme scheme rules, yet still provide artistic expression. Beautifully crafted.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and soothing read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Prosperous Snow Valentine

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted at "I Write in 2018 as your weekly entry. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Nightingale Wake Up Call as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Nicely done, Neva. This is not the easiest form to tackle. The repetitive rhyme makes it a real challenge to make it flow without a certain amount of awkwardness. You've managed to keep it moving and feeling natural. The subject - the Nightingale - makes it sing. (OK - maybe a small pun there πŸ˜„).

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think your approach to the arrival of dawn and the gleeful greeting by nature was excellent and I think many will find that your words resonate. Very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Nightingale Wake Up Call." I thought your title was a perfect fit and heralded the poetic content that followed. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. Each word seemed well chosen to paint the beauty of your poem.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in the Pantoum form and it worked wonderfully under your deft hand. As with all poetry, the key is found in emotional content. As Robert Frost said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see poetry in this lovely work. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and soothing read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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for entry "His Diet
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Dave

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in "Invalid Item in response to the prompt "Diatribe." 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you feedback on your work "His Diet.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Ok - you didn't name him but darned if the description doesn't ring a bell. 🀣 I even enjoyed the homophonic pun in the title. πŸ˜‹ Very well done although, the missing "a" (lives on a diet) did act as a speed bump in the rhyming gem.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very humorous but sobering read. Thank you for sharing your journey of sarcastic humor, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton

It's me, Ken - your hero. 🀣 It is my pleasure to both read and to provide you with feedback on your work "Ken Reaches For The Heights as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
🀣 Too damn funny! You just never know what rewards await you if you push yourself outside the boundaries of your comfort zone or, better yet, overcome your fears.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
This is sooo creative and a situation that a lot of readers can imagine. I liked that you used others disabilities to anchor the act of bravery. Well rounded characters. Excellent.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Ken Reaches For The Heights" I thought your title was perfect for the story - even the foreshadowing of the story woven into the title. πŸ˜‹

πŸ”Ή Mechanics - As always, no punctuation or writing errors were seen but I'd have been surprised if there had been. You, my friend, seem to be a perfectionist and it shows here.

πŸ”Ή Narrative/Dialogue - I thought there was a great balance between narrative and dialogue. The dialogue was natural and flowed seamlessly. The narrative portions were purposeful and helped the reader "fill in the blanks." I think the ratings you've gotten so far may be more that you integrated other members which made this feel a bit less of a story and more as if written for fun. 🀣 Personally, I don't mind but others may view it that way.

πŸ”Ή Effective Story Telling - I think your wording and the familiar realism supported the story arc - until the end. Not sure about hitting on the woman you just saved. πŸ˜„

πŸ”Ή Presentation - Your story is very entertaining and I followed it with growing interest. You build to the climax well and your descriptions of the barriers and overcoming them were really well don. Thank you for making the font large since it will open the page up and makes for easier reading - especially for us geezers πŸ˜…. The story looks great on the page.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very exciting, humorous, and entertaining read. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today. Now, excuse me while I go iron my cape. πŸ˜…

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Bob ...

My apologies. I've read it three times now and don't see anything to recommend/correct/or advise on. I think the punchline is a bit esoteric for some but that's in the eye of the beholder. I personally enjoyed the language banter having lived through something similar with my late wife. She, mistakenly, thought that adding an "o" to an English word made it Spanish. πŸ˜† We had some workers who did a great job in helping build a fence. When she saw it, she gave them the "OK" sign and said "Very cool-o."

Culo in Spanish means "ass" and the American OK sign in Brazil, Germany, Russia, and many other countries around the world, is a very offensive gesture because it is used to depict a private bodily orifice. Luckily, they just laughed at her!

Good luck!

Ken


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Review of 24 Syllable Poems  
for entry "Prompt #30 - Winsome
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in "Invalid Item in response to the prompt "Winsome." 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Prompt #30 - Winsome.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
This started off so tender, so loving... and then, Groan smiley! Really, I can't believe you went there! 🀣 OK - I had the same thought, in passing so I won't fault you.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very humorous but pun-ishing read. Thank you for sharing your journey of off-kilter humor, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

πŸ€— Keep 'em coming!

Ken


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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Edward Driach

My name is Ken, and I saw this posted in the "The Humorous Poetry Contest 😁 Being a closet political humorist, it is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "OVER TO YOU MR PRESIDENT as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Spare no party nor its leader. πŸ˜‚ You've managed to encapsulate the worst (and, sadly, most memorable) parts of the recent presidents. Well done!

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think your approach to this was brilliant. Very creative. Using the limerick form was the perfect foil.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "OVER TO YOU MR. PRESIDENT." I thought your title was a perfect fit and heralded the poetic content without giving away the store. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in (loosely) a limerick form. πŸ˜‚ It's probably the best creative form I've seen for political sarcasm and it worked wonderfully under your deft hand.

"The limerick packs laughs anatomical
Into space that is quite economical.
But the good ones I've seen
So seldom are clean
And the clean ones so seldom are comical."
Author Unknown

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of humor, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi β™₯Hoovesβ™₯

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in "I Write in 2018. No, this isn't your official review - just me being nosey! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "Honey Crisp Kisses (33 Lines).

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
What a great memory sharing. Boo looks almost guilty in the photo. πŸ˜„ Are you sure it's only apples she's been getting?

I'm not a big free verse fan but there are exceptions. This is one of them. Obviously, I had forgotten the golden rule of poetry: It's not the form but the content! What a wonderful surprise when I opened your poem and saw the warm memories in it. As Robert Frost said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see poetry in this loving work. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and relatable read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken


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Review of 24 Syllable Poems  
for entry "Prompt #23 - Knave
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
No comment Nope, won't go there. 🀣


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Review of 24 Syllable Poems  
for entry "Prompt #16 - Rustic
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
RE: Your 26 syllable entry "Prompt #16 - Rustic ...

I think we both can say, "Thank God for the visually impaired." πŸ˜‚ 🀣

Well done, Bobby!

Ken


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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi πŸ’™ Carly

It's me, Ken, and this is your "I Write in 2018 review. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "Into The Arms Of Love as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
A very strong statement of your belief, of your faith, and of your assurance. It struck me as serendipitous that I read this tonight. My wife was telling me about a story she had read about a cabin in the woods and how God resided there. Your line "into the rustic cottage" brought that back to me and it made such sense.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think your approach to this was very creative. Using the repetitive phrase "Into ..." much like the Monchielle form really brings out the rhythms in this.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Into the Arms of Love." I thought your title was a perfect fit and heralded the poetic message. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used very directed words to build up the emotions in this. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the passion of your poem.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written a form (but the name escapes me πŸ˜„) even if you didn't realize it. As with all poetry, the key is found in emotional content. As Robert Frost said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see poetry in this lovely work. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely set up page. Rules are easy to understand.
Ephesians 5:4 - Let there be no filthiness nor foolish talk nor crude joking, which are out of place, but instead let there be thanksgiving.

Your generosity is evident. πŸ˜€
2 Corinthians 9:7 - Each of you should give what you have decided in your heart to give, not reluctantly or under compulsion, for God loves a cheerful giver.

Best of luck in the contest!

Ken
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Review of What's Genny For?  
for entry "A Matter of Racism
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Genipher

It's me, Ken, and I'm responding to your "I Write in 2018 entry. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "A Matter of Racism, within your blog "What's Genny For? as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers. Wow, what a mouthful! 🀣

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Right on! 😳 Whoops, my prejudices are showing. I'm definitely a member of the dog camp and personally think cats are God's way of saying "Not everything has a purpose." πŸ˜†

✨ Creativity/Impact:
Cat’s have their own opinion of human beings. They don’t say much, but you can tell enough to make you anxious not to hear the whole of it. I think you captured that beautifully.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "A Matter of Racism." I thought your title was an interesting choice. I'm not sure it was accurate but it was thought-provoking to be sure. It will draw readership and I think that's the purpose of a good title. Since this is part of your blog, the info area really can't be used for any entry in particular. "Gettin' to know me" works well. 😁

πŸ”Ή Mechanics - No obvious punctuation or writing errors were seen. The inclusion of an image does help cement the subject which I really like.

πŸ”Ή Narrative/Dialogue - There really wasn't any dialogue - or, you could say it was all your dialogue. πŸ˜… The narrative was written in natural language with you speaking just as you would to a neighbor. Colloquialisms such as "cigars" dot your prose and make this feel like we're sitting on the porch having a chat. Personally, I love it! I found it very relaxed and informal which made your thoughts and meanings very accessible to me.

πŸ”Ή Effective communication - I think your wording and emotional realism supported your entry.

πŸ”Ή Presentation - Your observations are very entertaining and will resonate with many readers. Just as a thought, try increasing the font size by adding {size:4} at the top. It will open the page up and make for easier reading - especially for us geezers πŸ˜…. The entry looks great on the page.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very entertaining read. Thank you for sharing your journey of imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review of Disney Dilemma  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It's good to see you back writing your clever and inspired poetry again. Who'd of thunk the "Little" Mermaid was a misnomer? πŸ˜‚ 🀣 Obviously, there's something fishy about not having large scallops available for the poor lass.

Great fun and perfect form (yours and probably hers as well πŸ˜‚)!

Ken


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Review of "The War!"  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Jaiam

My name is Ken and this popped up on the Read and Review forum. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work ""The War!" as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
Okay - I almost feel bad giving you a review that's definitely going to be longer than your poem! 🀣 I see you wrote this back in 2009. I'm sure you're going to curse me for reminding you! I know when I get reviews on my old poems I often cringe. πŸ˜… I actually enjoyed even if I didn't get a clear understanding of what was going on. More on that later.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
Compact but there's lots of meaning packed into this. It speaks to me of inner turmoil but with a positive outlook. These are (or at least were) your feelings. You can't get more creative than that.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "The War." I thought your title enticing and heralded the poetic content. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it to amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Unfortunately, it didn't clarify what the struggle or war was.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used very select but descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error other than it left me wondering about what the war was about. There is a hint in "this spiritual war" but whether you're talking about an internal struggle about your own faith or a broader struggle pitting religion against religion is never made clear.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in what's generally accepted as vers libre - free verse even though you rhymed the final two lines in each verse. Free verse is not totally free; "it's only freedom is from the tyrant demands of the metered line." Still, free verse displays some elements of form which you did with the rhymed lines. It's self-evident that you continued to observe the conventions of the poetic line in some sense through enjambment and the use of verses. Remember, free verse isn't prose with funny line breaks. The key is capturing emotions and sharing them with your reader. You kept the poetic feel of this and that's the key to good free-verse.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very interesting read and I would love to know more detail about the struggle you were in at the time. With clarification, this would be a much higher rating. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton

It's me, Ken, and I saw this posted in the "Invalid Item forum - as well as your postings trying to wash your hands of any responsibility. We'll see about that! 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "The Imperial Color as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
When I first saw this posted as "Free Verse" I was in shock! 😜 Obviously, I had forgotten the golden rule of poetry: It's not the form but the content! The expected humor and thoughtful purpose was present. I really enjoyed seeing the dichotomy of colored luggage blended into reality. πŸ˜‚ 🀣

✨ Creativity/Impact:
As always, your view of the world is slightly askew and I always find your writing interesting and creative. You have a wonderful way of twisting the world. You should consider applying for a speechwriting position with your favorite American President.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "The Imperial Color." Shouldn't that be plural? πŸ˜„ If you're going to set up a conflict, you shouldn't take sides in the title. πŸ˜‹ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I loved the sly but playful shot at WDC. My answer: Blue of course.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - Great word choice built the story of each case in the reader's mind. Of course, the reality check of the baggage handler brought it all into perspective. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette (no pun intended) and each word seemed well chosen to paint images within your poem.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in vers libre - free verse - so there really is no right or wrong other than the moral outrage of calling free verse "poetry." πŸ˜‚ 🀣 That said, your poem did display some elements of form. It's self-evident that you continued to observe the conventions of the poetic line in some sense through enjambment and a continuing consistent theme. You kept the poetic feel of this and that's the key to good free-verse.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and entertaining read. Thank you for sharing your journey of humor, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "June 17, 2018
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier

It's me, Ken, and this is you weekly "I Write in 2018 review... by me, it seems. 🀣 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "June 17, 2018 as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I thought you were a closet rebel... but it seems I misjudged you. You're an out and out rebel! 🀣 Stirring up families like that! Shame, shame. πŸ˜‹ A great sentiment, to be sure.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
Tanka's are tough but I thought you did a great job in stretching this outside the bounds of nature and love which is typical of the Tanka form. Very creative use of this form!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Father's Day" πŸ€” Perhaps just a bit misleading since most will expect one of those syrupy sayings about how great (or just as likely not-so-great) Dad was. Still, I thought it was great, pushing Dad's to be honest with their families. I know when my Dad passed, I still had lots of questions that he never seemed inclined to answer.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - With such a small palette to play with, I think you used your words to well to take our message to the reader. I saw nothing in error.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - The Tanka is related to the haiku but without all the nature and seasonal references. Lovers would often, after an evening spent together (often clandestinely), dash off a tanka to give to the other the next morning as a gift of gratitude. In many ways, the tanka resembles the sonnet, certainly in terms of treatment of the subject. Like the sonnet, the tanka employs a turn, known as a pivotal image, which marks the transition from the examination of an image to the examination of the personal response. Though subtle, I think you executed the form well.

You may want to revisit line 2 which has only 6 syllables. πŸ˜€

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very enjoyable and surprising read - and I do enjoy surprises. πŸ˜ƒ Thank you for sharing your journey of imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review of Toys... HELP!  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Amay

My name is Ken, and this is a review celebrating *CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP* 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "Toys... HELP! as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I see this was written a while ago. You may curse me or thank me for reminding you of it. 🀣 I found this delightful to read. It made me recall my kids and getting them to clean their rooms lo those many years ago. It still brings a smile to me and a warmth to my thoughts.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think this was very complete and covered all the bases in your portrayal of kids scurrying around trying to get the room done before Mom returns. What fun and very creative in your approach.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Toys - HELP." I thought your title was a good fit and heralded the poetic content to prepare the reader. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it amplify and set up the scenario for your poem. Well done.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used the language of panicky kids very effectively.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in quintains with an aabbR rhyme scheme. I love using the "hanging" line myself since it really helps carry the message of the verse.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very enjoyable and fun read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review of Plushie Nation  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi ridinghood

It's me, Ken, and and this is your official "I Write in 2018 review. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "Plushie Nation as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I agree - "We believe in make-believe!" This is such a gentle poem and sure to raise a smile on any reader. Well, maybe a grimace on the "grateful dead" but it's the spirit that counts. 🀣

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think your approach to creating a world of gentleness and celebration of imperfection was very creative.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Plushie Nation." I thought your title was endearing and definitely would attract readers. πŸ˜„ The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I think it was a bit confusing - "plushies are people that like stuffed animals." While this may be true, I didn't see it in the poem and it felt like you left something out.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used great images to build this fantasy world in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. Your word choice kept building the story, layer upon layer.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - I'm not a big fan of free verse but I think this poem worked well with a great balance of humor and images that conveyed your purpose. I've always thought that the key to vers libre was to develop an emotional bond with the reader. You've done that beautifully.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* A very enjoyable and fun read, one that will resonate with many readers. I think the only disconnect for me was between your preview lines and the poem itself. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi LegendaryMask❀️

It's me, Ken, and this is an "OPEN HOUSE review. 😁 It is my pleasure to both read and provide feedback on your work "Never Forgotten as a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I've read several of your poems and the one consistent thing I find is that you commit your heart to whatever it is that you create. This one was no exception.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
I think your approach to the gratitude for the military was very well done. By starting with the vignette about your sister and her son only brought the true cost of a free nation into sharp focus.

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "Greatest Gift to a Soldier is Gratitude." I thought your title was perfect and heralded the poetic content. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I was pleased to see that you used it not so much to amplify but to set expectations for your poem. Well done.

πŸ”Ή Grammar/Wording - You used very descriptive words to build images in the reader's mind. I saw nothing in error. You used language as your palette and each word seemed well chosen to paint the beauty of your poem.

πŸ”Ή Form/Flow - This was written in free verse form. I'm not a fan because so many do it so badly but it worked wonderfully under your deft hand. As with all poetry, the key is found in emotional content. As Robert Frost said, "Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words." I could see poetry in this emotional work. Well done.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very touching and enlightening read, one that will resonate with many readers. Thank you for sharing your journey of emotion, imagination, and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review of Samantha's Pet  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton }

It's me, Ken, and I saw your post in the Newsfeed. It is my pleasure to both read and provide you feedback on your work "Samantha's Petas a member of and on behalf of "The Rockin' Reviewers.

✨ First Impression/Thoughts:
I thought I recognized a "Journey through Genres" entry. I'd say this definitely fits the animal/pet category on many levels. Your protagonist fills the bill as well. 🀣 As usual, this is quite the inventive story and won't disappoint any of your fans.

✨ Creativity/Impact:
This was a great combination of fantasy and horror combining bits of classical stories (Lillith, Adam, Eve) with the more nuanced "Fifty Shades of Grey." πŸ˜… That, my friend, is uniquely you and you can't get more creative than that!

✨ Technique/Technical Notes:
I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. You are the writer and this is your work, not mine. The most I can do is tell you what I saw and felt as I wandered through your words 😁.

πŸ”Ή Title - "A Pet for Samantha." I thought your title was well chosen and even appreciate the subtle pun woven into it. Bob comes across as fulfilling that role. The "teaser" line (a.k.a. description) offers you an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. You've used it to both foreshadow the story and to sneakily misdirect the reader. Nicely played.

πŸ”Ή Mechanics - OK. Here are a few suggestions.

~ There's nothing wrong with what you've written but I notice that you tend to rely on narrative instead of using internal dialogue. Example (opening paragraph): Bob rubbed his stubbly chin as he examined the tiny puppies cowering on the sawdust in one corner of their cramped cage. They must feel terrified, torn away from their mom. The second sentence - to me - is internal dialogue and should be shown in italics. Just do a quick read through - there's only a few places like this.

~ In paragraph 2: He'd come to Pet Paradise because Samantha celebrated [past tense] her twenty-fifth next week.[future] Also, I know you ran up against the word limit but ... twenty-fifth what? Birthday? Anniversary? Lover? πŸ˜‹

πŸ”Ή Narrative/Dialogue - The dialogue was written in natural language and flowed well. The narrative added the details that brought the story to life. I quite enjoyed the detail of the Aston Martin Vanquish, I also appreciate that you brought this detail into the reach of the uninformed reader - "the James Bond car." Clever.

πŸ”Ή Effective Story Telling - I think your wording and realism supported the story arc. For me, there were two gaps in the story:

~ When Bob first sees the kennel and the animals. You mention your signature unicorn πŸ˜„ which implies Lillith has been collecting some rare species. I think you could have added few others such as Griffiths and dragons. He could then ask why him? "You're a trainable male." A rare creature indeed. πŸ˜‚

~ The second place was the "reveal." The black wings and the "something like that" left me wondering "What's like that?" You just left us there, hanging.

~ Word Limit! Okay, I know you and you're up against the wall but there's some trimming that you can do. Places where you could lose a bit: The discussion about the value of the dog could be compacted. A sweet as Bob is, there's a lot of foreplay and some of that could be shortened to allow for expanding the key bits. Just a few ideas off the top of my head.

πŸ”Ή Presentation - Your story is very entertaining and will resonate with many readers. It looks good, flows smoothly, presents the story in a very easy to understand and follow way.

✨ Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* A very entertaining read but I think there's more to come. I know this is your first public appearance of this and you'll play with it a bit before the closing date. Thank you for sharing your journey of imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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