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Favorite Genres
Romance.
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Sexual writings. EVEN if yall married, its alien to write about yalls sex life. I as a Christian, appreciate a girls curves, how they walk, and making out- ONLY if theyre my girlfriend. Sexual attraction shouldnt be what attracts yall to somebody...
I will not review...
Sexual writings, but onery will be accepted...Some Christians are so uptight with things...Like its wrong to be ATTRACTED to the opposite sex. We DO promote, support, and follow no sex before marriage on our forum. Also, no religious works- Im gone lean toward Christians and Im trying to give everybody an even playing field. Keep it WISE with requests, as some can be politely rejected: Im a Christian, conservative, as well as Republican...We dont get bullied here- yall gone regret it...
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Review of Waffle House  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

This here was a hoot to read. The writers strong suit is the gift of story telling...

Yall put yalls sitting britches on, I'll learn yall:

In order to tell a story good, it got to be able to be seen in the thinker. Folks aint ever realize, but yall use imaginations more times than folks can shake a stick at...Without it, aint nothing in day to day life gone get done.

The imagination is able to hold a complete walk-through a dang house yall ain't been in since being a youngin.

The story itself is interesting, giving a summary that done happened to a heap of folks, which makes it relateable. I like how the little things stand out: "and I had to swerve to make the exit in time," stands out due to the placement of the description. I'm thinking on this is the authors style, cause it repeats throughout the story...But it aint troublesome, if anything, it's cuter than a dang little girls Easter dress. That's ANOTHER good point: Not making something small OBVIOUS. It's great for set ups, good old fashioned entertainment, and it keeps folks focused. Twist and turns are by the handful, with a comedic ending. Good writing, hon.
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Review of Who is that girl  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

Well, yall ain't see THIS everyday...

Intro:
Now, call me ALIEN- but I'm one of the few with the nerve to take a gander at folks' profile before fixing to review. Yall be shocked to high HEAVEN at the number of folk who ain't do that. At looking, I saw the reason for this piece. First off hon, whatever done happened, I'd hoped it aint. Condolences for your boat after the storms of life done hit it. What I knows, and I may ain't know A LOT, but what I know can be built on and keeps me open for more wisdom-

Everything got a view, whether it be a world view, or on self, it's a view. Thing is, views can be changed. Now hon, we done learned of how you view yourself, now let's see how BRIDE views you. This is a special review. As I'm gone review the works, I'm gone review the writer at the same time:

Please send all hate mail to:..

Naw, I'm just joshing yall...
I fired the entire complaint department and just ran continuous loops of cartoons in their office...

Let's begin:

Review:
"I am the mysterious, never quite too serious, fashionable in every which way especially late, alter ego of Natasha"...

I'm loving that opening. I like the rhyme flow of it too. It rhymes well and there's a heap of info in this. The writing goes on to mention being on the shoulders of an emotionally damaged human. What gets me is, everything mentioned in the opening makes for a very interesting girl. Who the h*ll wants a SERIOUS girl? I get, there go times to be as serious as the business end of a .45, but to be ALL the time is as unwelcome as a dang outhouse breeze. One out of ALL the things that makes girls appealing is that little spark in them. As go for the "fashionable" line, I'm hoping that's a retro reference in style of dress. I could be wrong, but dang it if that aint hot when girls dress throw back style...
The writing continues to get darker than the inside of a pocket:
"Now just an empty shell whose brain has been washed and programmed, with her only thought continuously stuck on repeat"...
I need a bigger gun to shoot this statement out- the mind got all kinds of functions to it. Thoughts got a way of painting pictures inside of folks, good or bad. That be reason a beautiful girl would think she's ugly on grounds of were ever those thoughts come from. Another angle is happy thoughts make good moods.
Here go something a psyche doctor ain't gone tell yall: The only method they use is to basically lower property values on humans. From their point, we ain't nothing but evolved animals. Band aiding problems by finding somewhere to place blame such as enviroment, upbringing, etc. It's a victim mentality agenda they push. If this were gospel, two kids of alcoholic parents would have the same outcome. One most of the time, follows...The other won't touch alcohol with a ten foot pole. A chemical imbalance is caused by negative thinking. It's the THINKING that throws off the chemicals in the brain...

Yall like:"WHAT did he SAY?!"

Yea, think about it.

Not bad for a guy raised by hicks, aint it?

So, by constantly running those thoughts through the mind like a marathon, it keeps folks at a constant state...

Depression.

If this aint so, it's impossible to think of a joyful memory and be sad. It's IMPOSSIBLE unless you FORCE yourself and deny, and continue on the same base thought pattern...

But what do I know...

One thing that stands out like a salad at a barbeque is the COURAGE the author got writing this. It's hard opening up. It's hard letting folks in, ESPECIALLY after trauma. More times than ain't, trauma done happened by lack of trust SOMEWERE. I like how the writer uses writing as a therapy device and not a coping mechanism. This aint hard to see here. This is easily noted by the talent the writer got. A coping mechanism ain't look this polished in complete thoughts. The writing would be every dang were...

I'm gone skip by the "cat" line...
I once live in a bottom level apartment building. If yall ain't know, some got concrete walls around them. There was ALSO a stray cat infestation around the building. Cats ain't like dogs. Dogs gone "do the thing" in the middle of the street, they ain't care...Cats like privacy. So besides the fact I saw a concrete view EVERY time I looked out side, there was a cat o*gy outside my window at the same time...

The SOUNDS, yall...
This went on for a solid year. I guess they were "keeping warm" even in the winter, cause it aint stop...

MOVING ON...

What's interesting about this piece is, the description of the "shell" is actually the beauty in the person. "Energetic," and "a woman who would fight when it's right and in the right way" is another example. We gone skip past the, umm, "always ready to" line...

This a family review forum, lol-

The writing ends with more description of the alter ego "Natsby," who the writer prefers to be.

Ending:
I enjoyed the third person view. The writer gives depth to thoughts on self and this is a creative piece. The writer needs to keep writing, cause she's obviously good at it and I'm getting ready for more.

FINAL THOUGHT:
I like Natasha better.






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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

Well,now...
This gone be a hoot...

Intro:
I support this. Why? It seems guys ain't care nomore. I mean, did yalls b*lls drop off? YALL. Ain't me...I support testosterone, and the fact once you done got under my skin, you gone know it. I like you. Thats all I care about...

And I am jealous. But aint in the creepy way, in the way that; you're mine- and he aint nothing but competition to me...Im a traditional guy...

Im from when guys did stupid stuff for a girls attention...

Nobody remembers them times.

Review:
This opens with "Youre jealous...I like it"...
It used to always be this way. Before guys took backseat to WHAT was determined to be a guy...Before guys got watered down. Yall remember Emo music and certain bands like 3 Days Grace? When guys wrote whole dang albums about girls...When it was okay in rap to have a track on yalls album with a R&B singer about yalls girl? Back when if a guy showed interest in a girl it was fine...Before folks got h*lla "woke." Yall know what Im saying, I ain't hollering down no well.

Girls like a certain amount of jealousy, cause it shows them guys care. Girls like attention from their guy. They like to feel attractive and wanted.

The "I'm sorry, but then again, I'm not" line is just plain onery...

I allow this. The whole beginning of this is so honest-

if I tell yall a hen dips snuff, yall go look under its wing...

The writer does a h*ll of a job expressing what girls be thinking. See, everything's funny guys until yalls girl is fishing for attention yall ain't give. Yall need to keep the same energy yall had when yall FIRST wanted them...

But we ain't fixing to talk about that, huh?

Thought so.

Let's clear the chamber-
Some guys get possessive. That ain't the good kind. When a guy says a girl is "his" it should be in light of they ain't want you with nobody else...Not OWNING a girl. OWNING a girl ends up "letting the green monster come out whenever another guy makes her laugh"...

Do yalls job. If yall was, YALL be making her laugh. This is so simple I got to explain how to miss it...

This writing is straight forward with lines like "Are you planning on embracing your feelings about me. Confess to me that you care. You won't be disappointed and you won't regret it"...

Beautiful line.
It's the truth mixed with a plea, at the same time making it safe. After hearing that, it should come about. Some guys like to act gussied, when the TRUE definition of masculinity is standing for what he believes in and ain't ashamed to admit hes wrong, and if need be ask for help...

Girls LOVE when guys let the shields down and let them in. Girls like to feel involved with their guy.

Ending:
Yall can shoot dice over the phone with this girl, and she seem like a GOOD one. Ain't nobody write nothing like this in lies. I like how the author covered complete ground with the subject. At the same time, simple use of words painted the whole picture, and I ain't talking no paint by numbers.


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Review of March 1st, 2056  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

Opening:

WOW. I ain't know WHO you are, but you are IMPRESSIVE. It aint just the writing, which is fantastic-

Hon, its that mind of yours...

This gone be one of my more versatile reviews. I got a lot to say. That mind of yours: Im a guy that appreciates ONE thing the most in women- Now, if yall swimming through the SHALLOW void of the world system, yall soon to drown without hopes or the sense to come up for air. I cant pick at yall enough that things are being fed to yall. A "model" is at the forefront of desired picks- Telling yall what is attractive, when the most attractive thing on a woman is her mind.

Only weak men fear strong women.

This writer is smarter than a whip. This whole thing is a side eye at the virus, or in sorts, thats what I was getting.

But it touches on SO much stuff...

Before I begin, I'm sure as sunshine hoping...

CNN ain't in the future...

They the only folks that can cover a petting zoo, and make the thing look like a food processing plant...
All mainstream media is on the chopping block to be right hand honest, anyhow...

Intro:
Let's begin:

Yall know the pandemic, right? Of course. The news ain't gone let yall forget if yall did. Yall know, the pandemic: The virus that was creat- SHOWED up from ONE place that got one of the biggest agendas against the world- conveniently around a certain time, which seemed to be aimed primarily at ONE nation standing in between its communists domination?..The pandemic: Which was smart enough to close Churches but ain't spread in riots by marxists groups that hate men- Funny how it's supposed to support a race that suffers with a staggering 70% lack of fathers in the home...Violence amongst this race are in the McDonald's numbers, while this SAME race leads in abortions. So, while NON of those issues are addressed, folks fall victim to a narrative in which, aint nobody heard from a certain hate group since the early 2000s...A billion dollars of donations were filtered through "act blue," a certain platform- Theres TWO of this kind: "Act blue" and "Winred"...

Guess which is which...

If anybody fixing to get "woke" about what I done said, I'm from that same race, part of that sad statistic, and I'm from that community...

By the way, "the right to worship uninterrupted" and "the right to peacefully protests" are BOTH in the first Amendment...

As the nation pedestals the highest paid man in government blatantly aint answer the difference in choice...

Doctor knows best...

It aint the denial of it, it's the manipulation of it. Used in political warfare at the cost of folks welfare. The elderly and those with pre existing conditions are the true ones at risk...

Review:
I like the writing style of this author, I mean, yall can tell she real booklearned. Her vocabulary ain't ever disappoint, and she's as fluent as a spring stream. Now, there go a reason I said all that stuff. I said all that to contrast the piece. All of this is mentioned. The creativity is off the charts, here. It's like a dang movie. The author even got news footage- Things are cleverly mentioned here. One of the things that stands out the most is the main character. It's hard as teflon to make a character believable. While all this stuff that's crazier than a road lizard goes down, the author done figured out a way to get YALL to believe her. That ain't as easy as yall think. How the thing opens up with her running barefoot and the constant confusion captures poetically how the character ain't believe what's happening.

She can't believe the outright insanity...That reverse description thing is KILLER...

The news inserts compliment it well, touching on how folks get indoctrinated through it, and its constant fan of flames. I LOVE how the author pokes at it's OVERBLOWN. Good news ain't get ratings. At some point in time the news was something to be trusted, anchored by journalists. Now, they ain't nothing but activists...The author is bright as a new penny: I LOVE how she writes folks changing narratives like Kansas weather...From politicians to the media...It might go over some heads, but I caught it. The effect on people is shown here, as folks is just shoved any which way to satisfy a dang agenda...

Yall ain't want me to go there...

My FAVORITE part is the emotion. Some of this was sad enough to bring a tear to a glass eye. The crowning point was the view of the dad.

(Read February 10 2056, which is my favorite part.)

Another BRILLIANT point was made about the delete of history, and how the youth gone learn with no records...

If yall think the statues being torn down was for the agenda being pushed, it aint...Its marxism/communism. It attacks religion, tradition, (while some of yall REALLY cancelled the holidays,) and a reprogram of history. There's a mention of emotions being fed on in this writing, and that's the gospel truth.

By keeping the wound open of past evils, folks can be reared any direction. The youth is the prime target, as they are more to give in to fueled emotions.

This writing held my attention like a dang microwave. Why do we stare at our food being microwaved?

Moving on...

The journal entries were AWESOME. It showed the importance of evidence needing to be preserved, cause folks are covering up and rewriting things. What Im fixing to REALLY say about this here is this:

I think this writer got the goods. No, I mean the GOODS to be a published writer. How she connects ideas and sequences is CRAZY. The amount of detail in this is unreal. Though this was short, its amazing how a novels worth of info fit. I been around like a ceiling fan before reviewing on this site, came back again this time- But this is possibly my favorite thing I done read to date. No, really...I cant believe this. Hon, you are incredibly talented.



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

Let's begin:

"Excited for changes. New doors opening and old ones closing"...

This a good view to have. It's good to be optimistic. I particularly like the part about the doors closing...

Some done found out the hard way there go doors that NEED to be closed...

The writer goes on to credit folks who done impacted her life in a positive way. Lord knows, aint many nowdays out there to do that- and its as scarce as grass around a feeding trough finding it.

"Faced any and every obstacle that's been thrown my way" is a great line. Running ain't do no good, and its HOW we react to obstacles that gets the best results.
As an overall, the whole thing is a h*lluva pick me up. Life is LIFE, yall-
And the view yall got of it determines the results. Negative folk get negative results, it aint NASA science. I like how the author puts forth the point of learning, cause if things good and bad happen and yall ain't learn no nothing, yall in for a base time. I get the feeling a lot done happened in this persons life, but by this here writing I know they gone be fine.
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Review of What Love is  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

One good turn, deserves another. Figure Id review this writer, cause they done reviewed me.
Whats alien about this is, it proves ONE thing to me...

I DO exist.
Aint had mind on it before- folks usually go to my poetry like its been marked down 50% off, so Im obliged, one of my stories got reviewed.

Lets begin:

Ah, yes- Dark poetry. When I hate to love you, hate I loved you, and hate I done wrote about it at the same dang time.

Dark poetry is my bread and butter.

"What have you done to me?
and what have I let you do?
You took my innocence and trust,
and held them gently in your hands and heart,
and made promises that I thought you'd keep for better or worse"...

Aint yall hate this? Like the desert hates rain. Some folks are slicker than a boiled onion with their words, and it goes over on us. Whats the left over is, is feeling like we done allowed it. Of course. When we get hurt how come we aint know no better?

The heart lies all the time, but we praise the thing when theres traces of truth...

"The day before yesterday I was your sweetheart
The next, your eyes glittered with disgust and I was a hurtful bitch"...

Am I as wrong as left handed scissors for adoring this line?
I mean, things escalated faster than a scalded cat.
Thats that thin line folks is referring to...

I look at left field things when I review. Sometimes when yall reading somebodies work, yall can just TELL whether they male or female...

This "I can't kick myself enough
for believing in you, yet it was worth it.
Yes, you were worth it"...SCREAMS female.

Wash of yalls war paint, and spare me the identity politics-
What I MEAN to say is, its HOW its worded. I done mentioned more times than times itself,
that when a woman loves a man, she LOVES a man. Yall cant tell them nothing about him.
Theyll spend their last bailing out a well deserved inmate in h*ll.
Theres good reason for this, but Ill take the short route. Its his WORDS.
Humans were created to have power with words, but mens words in GENERAL hold weight with women.
When they used right, they are nurturing. A boy could talk a cavity into the tooth of a girl...But the same power can be corrupt. A mans words can float a girl in Heaven, or make them feel lower than a gopher hole. Another example is low life pimps. Im sure yall wonder HOW they talking these girls into misery...

Its more WORD power, than physical.
He knows JUST what to say, and WHEN to say it to clean up a heap of mess.
And she BELIEVES him...

Relationships aint for the faint. As if they aint harder than Chinese arithmetic, adding other folks to the equation is a failing grade. Never, I mean NEVER involve folks in the sanctity. Theres circumstances that are allowed, but yall be shocked to h*ll who aint want yall happy...

"Yet now I understand even more, but it's too late
but maybe it was always too late with you,
because you never gave us a chance to live our dream together,
and then let others butt in"...

Its funny how everybody got two cents, but the involved end up paying through the nose...

Oh, the writer is badger mad.

"It's so easy for someone to be cruel and brave when they
get whatever they want just for the asking"...

Let that sink in.

The writer continues to POUR her heart out. Each line is d*mning and personal. Its easy to see by how each line shows impact, theres alot to get out...

And...

He really hurt her.

I usually end my reviews with a "My take" ending comment, but not this time.
While I was reading this, I just saw her heart, and it aint fair. Im sorry this done happened to you, hon. Thing about folks who hurt the ones that REALLY care about them is...

They aint know what they missing, and they never do better than the one that was there for them.









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Review of The Dreamer  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Let's begin:

Ah, yes...
When folks think everybody got to be the same, otherwise they get exiled...

Hold my non alcoholic beer...

"I try my best to fit in But that's just not my style"...

Good. Let me learn yall: Fitting in ain't what it's cracked up to be, and besides the fact, other factors got to get weighed in:
•What scale are yall basing this on
•Is it even worth it to try
•Whats this gone cost me?

What yall compromise to keep, as sure as sunshine, yall fixing to lose. That's why folks selling them selves out ain't no big thing. What takes a pair, is this line: "But I'm content to stand alone"... Cause of a herd mentality of thinking done got folks to do anything for acceptance. Here go the thing:

Start with accepting yourself.

Yea, my grammar ain't that good...Folks poke fun at me being upright as 6:00, this that and the third- But I like me. The only things I would EVER consider changing would have to be something critical.

Like, if I don't change, I'm fast out of here gone. Otherwise, take a number...
And customer service ain't gone do nothing different...

"As I go my own way" stands out at the same time. Somebody else's path ain't gone fit yall, and YOUR path ALWAYS does. Here go something that folks aint do nomore: "I listen to my mother She gave me this advice Stand fast and firm with your beliefs no matter what the price"...
Yall want to know how I feel about my beliefs?

We'll die here sooner than a change.

What yall beliefs are, make up who yall ARE. It's yalls core. When yall fall for anything, yall stand for NOTHING. It aint hard to find out if yall ain't stand for something:

Cause everybody likes you.

Remember I said that.

I'll say "no" quicker than a bullet if it goes against what I believe.
Leaders stand. The righteous stand. Heroes stand. Ain't nobody remember the yellow belly, but everybody gone remember the one who challenged something.

This thing got a gaggle of pointers:
"Don't let them overwhelm you Don't let them quell your voice"...
There's always gone be an opposite majority. What I done learned is, they ain't ever solo. Cowards got to form into some kind of Voltron, Power Rangers, Avengers type form to come up against something. Why?

THEY ain't so sure themselves. If so, like the writer said, they'll "be content to stand alone."

I done read a lot of inspirational poems, but this one here takes the peach cobbler. Ain't only that it speaks volumes, it touches on foundations to build on. I appreciate there are writers who write things that matter, things that better things around them.
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Review of Veiled existence  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

Let's begin:

"Veiled existence, yearning for liberation"...

Lord, I don't know WHY these folks fixing to get me started...

This go the problem: The result of yalls life, is directed through yalls view OF life. Ain't no such thing as being an island. A philosophy, or system of thought, is on EVERYBODY. It's an amount of influence...Ain't nothing new under the sun, and aint NO system of thought NEW. If it is, it's an indoctrination...Which, stems from SOME kind of system of thought, its just repackaged.

Here go an example: There go a view of life the world filters to yall- Just turn on TV...

And yall LIVE what yall see. There gone come a time to question these things. Can't nobody force folks to believe something, thats why God gave us free will. But don't complain about the results. Either continue on, or change yalls thinking. I like how the writer uses hope as a method of being liberated from the mighty dark forces- Contributing to hope as the "light."

Another problem today is folks lack in hope. Theres some views that discourage hope to keep folks under its power. HOPE is the first step to change.

Don't ever, EVER- let folks, situations, media, or nothing put yalls hope out. Like I said, a lot of folks would be out of jobs if things got better. They NEED yall under their power. This author is on point, look: "strong, determined, lessons learnt, wisdom gained, waits for the clouds to drift away and the dawn of a new day"...

That's gospel. Yall aint hearing too good...

ANY change, for the most part, gone cost. Dig Deep. Yall gone face opposition "going against the grain." Stay focused and don't lean. Only some can hear and apply wisdom, while ANYBODY can buy intelligence...

My take? Good enough for government work. LOVED it. I like anything that challenges the "norm." While this writer done said a mouthful, I know in my heart they gone go far, cause EVERYBODY don't think like this. Great work.
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Review of Lonely Times  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

I'm a BOLD Christian and I'm strong enough for folks to hang their wash on. I ain't the passive Christian/conservative type. I carry it like it's something folks want. I'm an example. Im move in Christ authority. None of my steps slide.
Ask anybody that know me, and they'll tell you:

He aint letting this go...

I've burned all bridges long times ago. There aint no return. I say that open up this review. Normally, I steer from "religious" works (Christianity is a relationship with God, religion is an attempt to get to God) for two reasons: Reviewing Christian writings is like reviewing family, and we'll, I ain't got mind on other religions.
Be it, I KNOW how to act with the Body of Christ. I'm against denominations (I attend a non denominational church) cause it brings division. I'll pray for another Christian and they'll be like: Well, I'm a...And I interrupt like: You want to be healed or not? I don't play...

The righteous are as bold as a lion.

If we would UNITE, and show the world we support each other, folks might sign on easier-

But I digress...

But I saw this and found it intriguing so I'll give this a whirl...

Let's begin:

The author got a good grip on what folks is missing in life. I'm gone plainly say it...

Jesus.

Folks feel orphaned trying to fill that hole in their hearts, so they'll stick in there stuff that ain't fit- PEOPLE, money, drugs, alcohol- ANYTHING to feel accepted...

Hate to break it to yall, but that HOLE is Jesus sized...ALL that other stuff ain't love yall unconditionally.

Look what the writer says: "When you are in times of dismay And noone by your side lay"...For the sake of time we ain't gone run through scriptures, but feeling alone is the root problem in folks life that ain't know God. EVERY OTHER problem is a bi product. The author builds real good on this fact, telling folks to "Just look above and above the horizon"...

Yall see that?

"Is there anyone who loves me only"...Sums it up. God ain't mad or disappointed in yall...He's waiting for yall. "Your expectations are nothing but just a myth"...Is my favorite line. WHAT a way to prove the point I made earlier. The WORLD tells yall what's gone MAKE yall happy. How, when the Lord IS happiness? This writing is powerful and sweet at the same dang time, with lines like: "We can all have love, that's true" and "Just believe in Him...Its up to you"...
My take? I DO read profiles. EVERYBODY I review. Im happier than a dead pig in the sunshine the youth are witnessing. It captures the Gospel well, and I salute you.

Bride- (short for Bride of Christ- as from Christ's relationship with the Church)
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

I did a review of "My Pleasure" by this author, and I just had a time, yall know what- I was all about this persons writing, and I wanted to do another review one more time. I was also gussied that this author requested me to review the work. I ain't know folks even knew I was alive, let alone. So, before I continue to shoot my mouth off like I ate a bucket of .45s, let's get on to it.

It aint my fault I'm wordy...

Let's begin:

I LOVE broken heart poetry. These them times when things come up ain't nobody digging for- Yea, the "unicorn vomit" stuff is sentimental till we get to how I feel at this moment...

And...

How DARE you...

I like how the writer keeps mentioning things he hates, but loves:
"I hate the feeling that you are the best girl I ever met"...
That stings.
Cause I ain't been there often, but often ENOUGH. Problem is, when the nose is all open, the view turns to a comparison.
Thems dangerous times.
One of the greatest lines were pen got put to paper, is: "I hate my heart for falling in love with you"...
BEEN THERE. The heart ain't all that smart, if it WAS folks wouldn't fall for the wrong people. What your heart wants, aint necessarily what it NEEDS. But can't nobody tell nobody nothing, I'm just howling at the wind...
What GOT me as I done read on was, the writer is REALLY in love... No, REALLY. Ain't noway in h*ll an infatuation notices THIS much about somebody:
"I hate the way you blink your eyes" and mentioning how she adjusts her glasses-
Yep, this kid got it BAD, yall...
There's a PAINFUL line here:
I hate the possibility that God created you with the same interests as mine"...
Geez. How you live THAT down? If I was convinced of THAT, that a girls interests were created by God similar to mine-
I...I would have to have her...
That's what makes this hurt so good. It aint hard putting yourself in the authors shoes. If love done struck yall, these lines hit uncomfortably close to home...
This squeezes the heart. I was reading this saying "Aww" the whole time...
The mention of ain't being able to watch movies, and listen to music cause it reminds him of her-
And here's the money shot:
"I hate the moment when I said I love you"...
*Ooh, ouch*
There's forms of wisdom throughout. The author speaks of a notion that guys fall for the wrong girls, while the right girl is somewere praying her future husband learns his lessons. Reason I brought that up is aint NOWAY I could be, or would be, a benefit to ANYBODY- Let alone a girlfriend or my future wife, had I NOT humbled myself to the teachings of Christ. Theres NOWAY I would succeed.
In ending yall, this was a lot to take in...
My take? The writer says what EVERY broken-hearted guy has said in his life. It's common as cornbread to blame ourselves for opening up and it aint working out. We look to blame for following emotions, when it's our duty to check the ones we let out. Afterall, sometimes meeting somebody as awesome as the subject mightve been worth it, but we ain't gone ever know...

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Review of "My pleasure."  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Well, I was paid good money for this here review, and folks gone get their money's worth. Before I get to getting, I got to explain my style of reviewing. Wasn't able to stick it on my profile, cause I got a dang good quote on it. I aint one of those reviewers that dig all up in grammar (I mean, LOOK at how I talk) punctuation, this, that, and the third- It don't tickle my fancy- as a matter of fact, its as useless as a snake with no slither...If yall one of those kind of reviewers, don't take this to heart. Theres a lane for EVERYTHING. H*ll, if there's something about you that ain't to somebodies liking, just wait it out.

Somebody else as sure as sunshine, will come yalls way...

I say that, to say this: I review WORKS. I'm a writer myself, and I'm supportive. Yall aint got to do no nothing to please me...Im already pleased by yall.

I love yall.

Let's begin:

What's IMPRESSIVE about this writer is how WELL this guy writes.

I mean, HONESTLY. I read this and felt insecure. It lead me on the way that either the author has been writing a while, or IS a WRITER. This thing is so fluent, yall can drink it. Great writing paints a picture in the mind. Yall SEE it. Folks aint got mind, yall think in pictures, not WORDS. If I say: Duck, yall ain't see the letters d.u.c.k, yall see a picture of a duck. It can also be manipulated like: YELLOW duck...

See? Now yall see a YELLOW duck...

This author uses description good enough for government work. Able to use descriptions good, brings the story to life. "The reflection of the moon was in the water and Leia, not understanding how to start, threw a tiny rock into the reflection- causing the water to ripple in such a way as the face of an older man appeared in it, though too far away to notice"...

Beautiful.

And just to prove I DO got horse sense when it comes to grammar, of "AN" older man, is proper talk- Most would've said "a"...I had a number of writing classes I excelled in, but it was like p*ssing up a rope to get me to NOT write like I REALLY talk.

I ALWAYS felt it was dishonest to write a way that ain't ME.

I do clean things up from time to time like poetry, but it's just so writings flow better.

There go GREAT moments when the author got the suspense all up in it. Its an art to drive a certain thought, and steer it at will. An example was the ashes and the bucket containing the eye. I was wondering: "What?" But it gets explained. I'm being vague, cause this is something I want YALL to read to full blown appreciate. I was at awe at the skill, and the passion for writing jumps off the screen with each thought. The key to a GOOD story is a good back drop- they need history, but ain't offensive or overbearing. The mention of the villages deeming her "unlucky and ominous" as bad luck struck her husband, gives GREAT insight to why the h*ll she would go through great lengths such as this trip in the first place. How the "voices" are on a standout- instead of constantly saying: "a voice says," makes it a bit creepier, making this fantasy as much as a thriller. The plot itself was complete, showing the writer got an INCREDIBLE imagination. A lot of detail was in this thing for it to be so short, and in sorts, compliments it. For the skill set yall would expect this to be a novel. This was short enough for me to read at the laundromat waiting on my clothes to dry. I was all out floored by this, and this author delivered a masterpiece.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum

Good to know you, I'm Bride-

I onced this over, and I LOVE this.
Yall look- I'm a wordy guy, like when I write poetry I like to rhyme words, and at times, string out heart wretching lines-

I'm a guy of passion.

But what Im gone ALWAYS love is the simple, unapologetic, flustered, crush writings...

I'm a guy of romance.

Let's begin:

"My head it aches For you my heart breaks"..Simple, but that line is strong enough to hang the wash on. How those feelings play with the mind, and how fragile it makes the heart. These is dangerous times, but I could stay in this time forever. In other words:

If you only know what you DO to me...

There go SO many too perfect lines, like: "I can't think right"...That make me go back to certain girls who had me dumber than a post. But I liked it.

The motions of crushes make folks sea sick, but it's the RIDE that's worth it.

"Why can't you see What you're doing to me I really want you bad," is one of my favorites. "I do anything to be with you" spoke straight to my heart, as "I see nothing but you," is TOO relatable. This writing leaves the reader "dumbfounded" as it reminds folks of matters of the heart- crushing HARD over someone, just to feel...Well...DUMBFOUNDED. My take? The purity, yall. It look like water in a glass. SO much can be said so good when it aint complicated. This done took me there...Were? Were I WANT to be when I done fallen for somebody.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum

Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This gone be a hoot. Yall see, I done pulled this stunt my dang self. I wrote a story, (Naw I ain't gone plug my story here) were I wrote from the view of a girl.
Don't let the name fool you, hon-
I'm a guy. Name is short for "Bride of Christ."

So, you gone go and tell us guys how the cow ate the cabbage, huh? You know what we thinking? Let's find out...

Let's begin:

"Her sensual velvet voice, a mystical flute solo, soothes and caresses desires to make mellow the anxious beast only she can see in me"...
Well, dang...Thats...Accurate.
Ain't NOTHING like a woman's voice-
The tone of it, I'm telling yall...
The Lord made women attractive to men. Women are His best creation if yall ask me. Curves and all, drive us plain up the wall. There go a trick to it, though... In order for man to FULLY appreciate women, man got to see woman as God created them. The WORLD sees women as sexual objects. Once yall gone and get hitched, things get hotter than a stolen tamale. Here go something for free:
The sexual imagination of man in concerns of woman, was created for the wife. There go a bucket full of reasons why to ain't watch p*rn, but one is, it takes the space in THAT AREA of the mind for mans wife- That's why when yall see those images, they ain't go away. That sexual image of the woman is suppose to play on repeat in the mind of the husband for his wife. Keeps the motor running, if yall get the gist... Yall want another reason?

Yall gone and compare yall wife to that girl yall saw in that filthy flick...

I wrote all that, to drive home a DECENT point to men:

It's always better to own, then to rent.
Just...Mind that over, from now on...

I like how the writer writes, "she astonishes" and mentions "graceful moves." Thats plain gospel about the graceful moves. I LOVE how women walk. Here go a test ALL men fail- the sound of high heels makes us turn quicker than a rattler getting grabbed by its tail...
Its like a reflex or something.

"She enters my world" is a great line, cause that's what happens, and ain't no fighting it- We'll stop traffic...
The eyes of a woman do something squirrely to a man, so when the author says "stunning violet blue-eyes," I just agreed and moved on.
THIS is interesting:
"Could this beauty be a partner in life for us"...
I hate like the desert hates rain, I think like this at times. Men in sorts, are drawn to supportive women. We tend to think like this all the dang time. Ain't nothing like a woman who is interested in something we're passionate about. It's EXTREMELY attractive.
The writer here is fullblown on target.
A LOT of TRUE points are made in this poem. It's scary, kind of:
"She doesn't know. I'm a caged tiger, fierce and majestic. I need softness"...

I'm just gone go and say it:
I'm a man that believes men are supposed to be masculine, and ain't nothing wrong with that. Folks always got something smart to say...Here go a point: If there aint no masculine men left, who fights wars and protects women from perv violent men? Just saying. What's good about this line is the softness of women. Im pretty much the standard issue guy, but just cause I like girls I can hang out with, aint mean I want to hang with a girl like my boys. Yall laugh, but it happens...
The ending is wonderful, as how the writer sums it all up:
I am hers.
My take? I'm bothered by how you know too much.
Stop it, lol. This pieces words facts in an imaginary, creative way. I enjoyed this.

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Review of My Blessing  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This go one of those thngs written in admiration. I always tend to like theses, cause they seem to be as scarce as grass around a feeding trough.

Let's begin:

The fact that " the day you came into my life will be cherished always"...Is a line prettier than a field of pregnant hogs...

It's a saying, yall...

That just leads on to show the importance of meeting somebody. It's says, "THIS day holds dominance in my heart.
"Your kiss on my lips is something I long for each day," says a heaps full. It's also interesting reviewing girls love poems- Cause from a guys perspective, its different. You appreciate them more..Its just interesting at times, pay me no mind...

"Or your habit of laughing over small things to emphasize a point," stands out like a guilty man in a line up. It's DANG precise. Only somebody "taking somebody in" pays something like that any mind. It's the, little- filler lines that get my attention too. Why? It's when folks SAY something, without SAYING something-
"It is beyond belief," is one of those lines. As it continues, the writer continues to place high value on the subject. My take? The length of the poem says the MOST. It's the gospel fact the writer can't say enough about the person. I like how it's written in admiration, and the simplicity of the descriptions- Love aint all that complicated at all...
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Review of Our Stains  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, Im Bride-

"You, the battle of which I never weary"...Is possibly the best description of a relationship my ears done heard. Look, yall-
Its time to come clean, like the wash: Anything in sorts, or in this case- that matters,
yall gone have to fight for. A SERIOUS relationship aint for folks who hide in they mamas apron. Folks dont calculate so good. We all want this "type" of person, but are yall willing to FIGHT for this person? Are yall willing to fight...

Yourselves?

Yall willing to BECOME who yall want? Next, with the up and downs like at sea, if yall get sea sick real quick, this aint for yall. Being with somebody requires sacrifice...

And if yall faint in the day of adversity, yall strength is small- Prov 24:10

Dont mind the context, just go with it...

Moving on-

"I win, I lose
But it doesn’t really matter
Because you’re here"...Is ALL that matters. If yall mind it over, the writer WON...You win in a relationship if the other stays for the fight...

You only LOSE if aint nobody show.

This is interesting: "It’s not whitewashed, what we have
It is bold and stained vivid with our shared understanding"...
Love the play on words, at the same time with the message.

Pretty much anything with guns, Im gone rate high-
Im a "God, Family, Guns" guy- But there go alot in this here:
One more 'gin, I like the play on words, and the message of how "this here
love thing is only for us," just clears the chamber...

Yall see what I did there? "Just clears the chamber?"
Cause a chamber is...
Pay it no mind.
All in all, I enjoyed this.
My take? I like how personal it is. How these here folk got they own special thing, and its
theirs ONLY. Yall want to know a way faster than a NY minute to end a relationship? Open yalls doors to strangers... I like how they fought to stay together, and came to one mind. Great job.






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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

It's tough as nickel steak finding romance to review here at times...

Let's begin:

I like the "sometime it's the way," that runs through this. It shows innocence and purity, which lacks nowdays. There go the essence of "the crush," in here which a good majority of yall let the world kill-
The world got its way of projecting stuff to folks, and yall ain't notice...

Yall just keep feeding on Hollywood folk, media, and social media to tell yall what's real...

But I digress-

My point is, when yall take TIME to learn of somebody, good things come.

"Sometimes it's the way you smile when you talk And I can here it in your voice"...
That's from studying somebody. From a guys perspective, one thing I LOVE is the sound of a girls voice I'm sweet on.

That's why I ain't really respond to texts...Its an onery game I'll play just to get her to call me later like: "Why ain't you respond? Ain't you get my text?!"

Lol...

Yea hon, I got it. I just want to hear you talk...

...Then, they get quieter than a whisper in a library...

What's great about this writing is the awkwardness. When yall got yalls nose open over somebody, its the most alien thing ever...But I LOVE IT- I love aint knowing what to say. I love getting nervous. I love feeling dumber than a dang watermelon everytime I'm around them...Lines like: "Sometimes it's the way you look into my eyes Then smile and look away"...
USUALLY, I'm at the tail end of," its the way you get mad at me When I'm saying something stupid"...Cause being onery again, I just LOVE to stir girls up- Jokingly, of course. Theres a gaggle of heart string lines such as, "Sometimes it's the way you softly touch my cheek when I cant stop staring at you," and Sometimes it's the way we finish each others sentences Because you always know what Im thinking."
But it aint all just unicorns and bubbles. Theres some lines as serious as th business end of a .45, like: "Sometimes its the way you never dismiss my thoughts Reminding me of my importance to you," and "Sometimes its the way you confide in me Trusting me with your deepest thoughts." The ending seals the thing with its how the writer is loved-
My take? I liked the examples of the things the author wrote about. They are genuine, and heartfelt. It looks as if the writer is head over heels, and yall know what? Dealing with how "dating" is now, aint nothing wrong with that...

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Well, this is DEEP...

Been at this portfolio before, yall know how I'm fixing to do-

"I just want to feel Something other than than dread. I just want to feel whole and loved In the end"...

Interesting point here the writer is about to open up-

In romantic relationships, there's different forms of what love is, and how its projected. Problem is, folks sign things by a neon light, and get washed away. Is physical attraction important? Yes, AND no. As beauty is in the eye of the beholder, its what's IN creation that makes them attractive.
An upright man of strong moral conscience is ALWAYS gone be attractive to women-
An upright woman, who carries herself as a lady, will ALWAYS be attractive to men. Those who aint agree are those who rely COMPLETELY on physical attraction- And those type of folk drown in shallow waters...When yall love SOMEBODY, as to were the writer says, "Whole and loved," its more than physical-

Put yalls sitting britches on, I'll explain with the author:

"A connection On some level Not related to skin"...

I'll level with yall...I ain't that bright. Not cause simple upbringing, but cause I ain't EVER see the point of human vain intelligence, when I can learn godly wisdom. Intelligence is for the proud-
"Look what I KNOW," when godly wisdom is-
"Look what I've humbled myself to LEARN"...
Women were created certain ways, and to debate particulars, man would have to challenge God. Man would have to say he knows more, and remove God to open the door to do and believe what he wants. Woman was created for man, but not as property. She was created to be equal, assist, and COMPLETE man. Woman was created from man. Both need each other, but as for the line the author wrote, women need to be touched- In a non sexual way to feel appreciated and needed, and in a physical to feel attractive at times-

But men just can't get mind the balance.

That's why holding a girls hand, hugging them for NO REASON, and communication jump starts women. It's the fact you're treaty them EQUALLY...
That's on the house, guys...Us guys ain't learn too good sometimes, trust me-
I got female friends, and they give me the squirrely look sometimes, and I stop them...

Easy, hon...All you got to do is learn that boyfriend of yours...

"A comingling of minds"...

Yall wait- I reckon that word, but I may be wrong... I got to open up another window and see the meaning. Sit tight-

Okay, I was right...Means to "mix."
What? At least I'm honest...

The writer goes on to prove the point made. She wants to be appreciated deeply on a different level- To be understood, and to feel secure. This type of LOVE is deeper than physical. Physical is LUST and incomplete, and without THIS form, physical means nothing...

Sorry if yall believe otherwise, but it's TRUE...
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Review of Untitled  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

I'm back like taxes...

I review romantic works, cause well...Im a romantic. It's all I even write about...Its all I think about at times...I think a lot in sorts- nobody give a dang about romance nomore. Yall think about it: Even when yall see couples, yall can't even TELL they're couples...

Looks more like an arrangement.

Guys ain't sweet talking girls, and h*ll, I'm wondering were the sweet went IN girls...

Nevermind, nobody EVER know what Im talking about.

"I stand in the doorway I watch from afar I await your kiss"...Nice opener. How it's penned yall can see it. I like classic words, "await" is much more fluent than "wait." As it goes on, it mentions certain stuff I'm gone leave alone. Reason being, I'm a thorough reviewer, and I can go on and on, shooting my mouth off like I ate a bucket of.45s for breakfast about "The way you bite my lip"...

I'm just gone respectively say, thats a go to move of mine...A wrapping of the hair around the fingers, and a gentle, slight...Pull...

Now, a kiss only means something, and is meant for someone who means something to YOU...Otherwise, I'm a gentleman...I don't kiss around.

Moving on.

Here's the INTERESTING part:

"Even before you begin It's heat radiates And warms me to the core Despite the ice My fingers give off"...

The mood changes quicker than midwestern weather. While the kiss is anticipated and passionate, it seems to not excite the writer...At least...

ANYMORE.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Well, if this aint something I got a two cents about. The writer catches ACCURATELY the stages folks go through on the hooch. The Lord and I straightened me out...
Thing about me was: I appeared to be straight as a gun barrel, but twice as empty...
Folks aint ever want to discuss "backsliding," which is basically just living in the flesh, but I DO...Makes a good testimony...

Shivering awake What is this place Think death came last night Again." The opening is hog killing weather- cold, and THATS what it's like. Now in between us chickens, it might be a reference to waking up some place yall ain't supposed...Which, HAPPENS...

"What happened last night," is the constant with this problem. I was a guy that drank at times till my mind wiped clean, which was one thing I was aiming for...When that goes round, in the morning is that haunting question: "Somebody was probably hurt"...

Ugh...These are the bad times. I ain't ever PHYSICALLY hurt nobody, but the emotional hurt I caused to others was catastrophic. It goes on to "Drink beckons"...Squirrely way it got about itself ain't it?
Like dogs returning to their own v*mit...
It ends with what most folks is searching for on the surface: "Maybe tonight Death will come," when the gist of the thing is, folks try to fill that God sized hole in they heart with ANYTHING...
My take? Powerful. Bullseye. The writer catches real good the decline with the steps of. As simple as it's written, it covers a lot of ground- And last, but ain't least, there are a gaggle of warnings to not bump yalls head... Here go another one.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This here, will knock yall off yalls horse...

"If you were only perfect. No mistakes would blot out your record, And critics would be at a total loss"...

Well, shoot then...

Wise words. What done knocked the cheese off folks crackers, is the world's display of the rule of perfection. Oh, don't act like yall ain't know it...

Or DONT yall?..

The world got a way of projected things to folks. It tries it's dangest to set it's OWN standards..."THIS is what beauty is," "THIS is the way to success," THIS is the next big thing"...

THAT, gone also be yalls downfall. It aint no strength to bow at everything, but it takes PLENTY to stand against something...Mistakes can be learning exercises, it just when yall repeat them, it gets to costing...And BTW, who AINT a critic?..I read this whole thing and got mind of the subject, I'm just chewing the fat with yall. I'll hog tie this all in the end.

The second block takes a different turn. "If you were only perfect. Your voice would inspire composers"...

Way to show off them righting skills...
You gone show us all up...
BEAUTIFULLY articulated. Here go something to mind over: If the voice WAS perfect, there aint be no need for composers TO compose...Hence, ending the beauty there of...

Let's tie it all in:

I'm getting this is about the writers wife, which, I LOVE when MEN put their wives at the forefront. ONLY MEN know the value of their wives...I ain't hitched yet, but I know what the Lord says about marriage...

And I dont need no second opinion...
MEN HONOR YOUR WIVES.

What's the point of this writing?
Watch this, yall...

His wife is perfect to HIM...

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Me, again...
I said that like folks KNOW who I am...(Shaking head)

*Ahem*
Its good to know you, Im Bride-

Okay, so I done been around this writers page gone like a prairie fire. But THIS...
I dont know how I feel about THIS...

Its good, but aint, when yall go and read something and relate.
Good, cause thats what yall want...
Bad, cause its like: Yall gone and talking to me? Like, did I write this, or?..
WHy you up and say what IM thinking? I done said this to myself at times. It bothers folks when somebody go walking around in they heads...

Oh, honey...

DONT do that...
Might aint like what door you gone and open. Aint nothing scary, but...
Howd YOU get in HERE?
Its too late for me to turn tail and run...
I done already started writing...
Sh*t...
Mighty Christian of you, Bride...
Quiet...
I edited it...

"Dont let me fall in love If you have no intentions to nourish and care"...
Can I leave NOW?! No? Ugh, FIIINE...
This concerns me cause in personals, feel like this go too often. It goes as such:
In unbalanced relationships, theres ALWAYS ONE. One person who puts diligence due in. Me, being a
romantic, I KEEP finding girls that aint. Dont get me wrong, I like to be treated like a cactus at times, cause Im bout as straight forward as 9:15, but...
WHAT happened to girls?
"Dont let me Allow you over the wall"...Is Something we ALL can relate to.
Im fixing to believe we ALL got a wall in sorts, but the problem there go is HOW it gets built...
It gets built by a broken heart.

Im fine, everythings FINE...I can keep writing. Dang...

Through the bricks,
If later
Its your plan
To add the mortar
For the one next
Layer...

Nope, cant do it...Im leaving. Dont want to read nomore...

This means:

Youre going to make it worst. I like you, and I REALLY want to, but I aint trust you. It aint you, its me- But Im going down a road I done been down before, and this is looking all too familiar.

Dont let me love you
If you cant stay.
Don't pretend
To be the knight
In this girls fairy-tales
I am my own hero,
i dont need you...

The 1st line is self explanatory, and it goes on to just leave me to get mind that this girl is...
A ROMANTIC.
Aint know girls still came in this model...

It goes on to reaching out, eyeing for change, but still holding back...
My take?

I REALLY SHOULDNT have read this...

I had a hard time reading this, doll. It kind of touched me and that dont go often when I read folks writings. It was so sweet, its just gone lead to cavities.
I just...You are SO...
Ugh! NEVERMIND.
You made my heart feel weird, and Im just gone leave this alone.
Dont get me wrong, its dang good, but Im gone stop here.
I cant read this nomore.



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Review of Waiting on paper  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride...
And I'm back around like a ceiling fan...

I done reviewed this writer before and dang it, I'm a fan. The author does a bang up job with some of the most intense lines I done seen. As intense as her eyes...
Wish we had eyes like that here in Kansas...

Let's begin:
"I'm sitting here in the absence of your presence, You're not here but your manipulation Reaches through the distances"...
This girl can write...
Loving the darker than the inside a pocket angle. Ain't it funny what the heart string can do? Folks done walked off cliffs... In sorts, once somebody done got under yalls skin, its hard to get them out...I hate that, but love it at the same dang time...Then again, I'm a romantic...
"Places I've no desire to go," is about as gospel as it gets. What folksll do to be near someone, or be with someone. "Of your tornados wreckage," is a bigger than a boarding house cat line, cause we ain't EVER see it coming...Probably, cause when it's matters of the heart, we spend the whole time in the eye of the storm- denying the damage it's inflicting...

I just said a mouthful...

"Of a little girl and her fairy-tales," is a line as cute as an Easter dress...Us guys MISS girls like this...When it was about them truly latching on to us, for US. Getting caught up in they daydreams...
I remember when it was okay for girls to be like this...Now, everything is microwaved, and we celebrate the death of "crushes"...
"Waiting on a knight to let me down," is painful to read also, cause this was when MEN were actually MEN, and folks aint DICTATE what it means to be such...
I'll leave that there...
My take? Loved the thing. I liked the soft heart angle. The writing closes off emotions, but is shockingly open to the reader. It got a good balance. Great job.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
Ain't like nobody noticed, but I done took a hia...Hiat...

I been gone, dang it...
Moving on.
I normally find things to review from the feed, and done come by YOU, who done left a longwinded post...It was kind, I'm just joshing you. So, I clicked on your profile, and here we are...

Honey, your profile pic is to die for...

You like: What?
Lol, I'm a guy...My name got a meaning to it..

I like the opening. It sets the tone real good: "I'm staring into the night"...A lot happens doing that. It be them times more than ain't the mind wonders...
I in particulars, prevent mine from doing so. I don't need no nothing kind of advice from my head...
Lessons learned...
I like how the author gives insight to "past the distance," with "past the spinning, past whirling noise of electric wires"...
GREAT description.
Um...
At a point quicker than small town gossip, I done got mind of the "adult" tag... I'm bout as simple as biscuits, so I figured it just had cussing in it...
Lol...
I was wrong...
"I'm looking into the darkness I'm waiting for the touch of calloused fingers To trace my spine"...
Now, I may ain't be the sharpest knife in the drawer, but I can cut vegetables...
Were. Is. This...Going?
It got about hotter than a stolen tamale, but I may be just reading wrong. "I'm remembering soft lips."
Okay.
Maybe it aint matter if Im booklearned or not...That settles it...
"That graze my neck"...
Oh...
Oh,my...
"And melts my resolve"...
I'm looking around the room at work while I'm reviewing this, like folks know I'm reading something kind of...

"I'm missing the pressure of the sculptors hands," now HERE could mean a lot of things, so I'll let yall do configuring. "I miss his words in my ear Whispering my name calling me to life."
Okay, um...
My take?
The writing in this is impressive enough to tell the town. There go DEEP descriptive words in this, and it do good at painting images. This thing is passionate, and the emotions are higher than eagle beaks. Well written.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This was really good.
Dang.
A heap can be said when ain't a lot of time. What I want yall to pay mind to is WHAT is being said, and the creative expression.
It's impressive.
Good enough for government work, is the opener:
I saw myself today as a compulsive giver in someone's mirror...
I'm a rhymer, myself. I love to twist words, so I appreciate "giver" and "mirror." I also like the view from somebody else that's going on, which runs through this poem. The opinion of self is in contrast to another...
That's slicker than a boiled onion...
If yall a learned student, one can compare the "angry" WOMAN, to the GIRL "curled up" GIRL...Yall aint see that, aint it?
It ends with asking the beloved Divine who she REALLY is...Which is the only opinion that matters...I like how that was tied in. My take? Wonderful. Contrast, deep emotional content, and seeking guidance is all in here like a pot of hopping john (black-eyed peas, if yall ain't familiar.) Strong writing talent is on display, able to change views of author to reader, as well as subject. Well done.
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Review of A Friend Mean  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Friends.

The thing I liked the most was the outline of what a friend IS. The author gives yall a heap of examples such as "friends are like painkillers." They are. And that's a dang interesting way of putting it. Can't say enough about the importance of choosing friends wisely. Sad as h*ll, folks aint know a FRIEND from a frenemy, nowdays...That's friend + enemy, FRENEMY. Yalls friends are suppose to "seal life's leak," not SINK yall. "Friends give good decisions," not push a selfish agenda. I'm telling yall, folks for some reason ain't got mind on this. It's possible to have a "friend" that appears to be straight as a gun barrel, and twice as empty- In otherwords, they go through the motions of, and even looking like a friend, but AINT. They help "cross entire life's obstacles," not lead yall down dangerous paths...All in all, I enjoyed this on grounds of the common senseness to it. These are things yall friends should come by standard issue. If yall friends ain't none of this, yall might got frenemies. My take?
Thanks for keeping it simple. The hardest things in life, really ain't. I also enjoyed the examples such as "painkiller," and "seals life's leaks," which were a diffent type of angle.
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