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Encouragement and chatting yall up.
Favorite Genres
Romance.
Least Favorite Item Types
Overly sexual writings.
I will not review...
Sexual writings, but onery will be accepted...Some Christians are so uptight with things...Like its wrong to be ATTRACTED to the opposite sex. We DO promote, support, and follow no sex before marriage on our forum. Also, no religious works- Im gone lean toward Christians and Im trying to give everybody an even playing field. Keep it WISE with requests, as some can be politely rejected: Im a Christian, conservative, as well as Republican...We dont get bullied here.
Public Reviews
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Review of Carolina's Curls  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustnt be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
Views. Views determine a lot, and everything is how yall see it. What one hates, another would wish to have- whats trash to one, is a treasure to another. Life aint bad cause bad stuff happens in it. Dont ever let nobody steal all yall got inside...


Review:
Lets Begin-
The day Carolina’s Hair came off, she yelled “FINE!”
This is about as adorable as a little girls Easter dress. I got to admit this was a fun read. The imagination on the writer alone is something to gossip about. What I liked the most was the spirit of the main character- the defiant attitude, and refusal to be licked even when down. The author does a bang up job of catching the essence of a kid, which makes this even better. My favorite part was the characters ability to sell the idea. The story is hopeful, and showing the encouragement of the teacher seals the deal.

In closing:

This needs to get published if it aint already. A lot of kids dealing with this same issue could use this. I really think with the thinker the author got, kids books could be a good field to jump in to.

Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Review of In Times Past  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
Aint yall hate it when this comes around again like a side show carnival...A bad breakup, and a dang awful end. Whats worse than that is a repeated mistake. When we let our hearts decide whats good for us, we aint doing nothing but gambling and signing important papers by neon signs. We gone and ignore red flags, or we think this time around its gone be different...Its rare as hens teeth for this to play out like we hoped.


Review:
Lets Begin-
"once again I tell you everything
crying on your shoulder
and crumbling at your feet
craving your answers to my asks,
and for questions to my pleas"...
The start hurts worst than the truth. The thing that hurts is when it all gets put on the line and aint nothing matter. Theres SO much in this writing that makes it all too painfully real. This line is my favorite: "and the low notes in my voice stir no feeling in you"...Thats written from truly knowing somebody. When mannerisms and quirks aint covered up. It takes time to know unsaid things from folks. This PROVES this was a relationship. "Self blame" and "burning before eyes," gives yall the lead on going down this road one too many times. The author is in a critical state in this- That state when its impossible to accept an outcome, to were anything can be fixed with sacrificing more...Critical. There go an upside, though- The writing is strung along with grace, that painful grace, that makes something with so much pain beautiful: "That no call will ever wake you no bind will ever bind your heart to mine"...

Geez...


In closing:
The writer aint got no problem exposing self- This is difficult, and dangerous at times. The heart wretching lines dont do justice to what apparently done happened. This writing was all too real.


Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Review of Irregular Holes  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
We as folks, aint ever pay mind to ALL things that done happened to us in life. We go about praising all the good stuff, but turn eye to the bad. But what aint seen, is the learning from mistakes we done made, and seeing as what aint killed us done made us stronger. Its acceptable to say, not only good things done shaped us, but trials and mistakes we made shaped us at the same time. Characters gets built. Personalities forged. Decisions made. If everything was easy in life, folks aint ever get strong enough to sustain the storms of life.


Review:
Lets Begin-
"You have irregular holes"...
The inspiration and meaning of this writing is impressive enough, but folks need to gone and give some credit to the title. The opener of this sits fittingly, cause it talks to everybody. EVERYBODY is different. Dont ever get led astray: No matter WHAT is coming around the corner, putting folks in a box steals the beauty of folks. We aint gone discuss how folks get on board with identity teachings- if they were as smart as they think, theyd know the basis aint got no individuality...Yall just considered a "group"...
But I digress-
Its fine writing, here- We also tend to notice the weather references on these holes. It depends on the looking glass, but I connected it to circumstances in life. Weres that line at...Oh, HERE: "Some of you is made thin Almost dust Will you crumble? It's so terrifying You cry, cry, cry"...
Gives yall the know about hard times. I also appreciate how when its something of this degree it aint too wordy. Keeping this simple as syrup does just the right amount of good.

In closing:
I liked it. I always like different approaches and angles to different situations. When folks get learned on this formula, it gives a broader range to other folks. I full blown encourage the author to continue writing, cause she got a good thing going.


Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Review of Valentine's day  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustnt be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
Even if a girl raise her right hand and say this day aint mean nothing, NEVER believe her. It does. Girls are just this way. We run into problems thinking stuff is one way across the board. Guys and girls think differently, cause...

WE'RE DIFFERENT.

To all the guys out there, Im fixing to give yall a heads up, and I live by this: Even if a girl just wants a valentine, its a bad idea if yall aint an item. Its too many feelings to get involved in this day on a girls end. Its about the same as buying a girl a ring of any sort, unless its a SERIOUS one...Bad idea.


Review:
Lets Begin-
"I feel the absence Of embrace Of touch"...
This here is a good point. Girls get more of a kick getting touched non s*xually, than s*xually- Its a fact. Its the feeling of being appreciated- if you a guy and aint know that fact, it aint no whisper why yall might aint had a good run in dating. "There is no connection Pulling me home," gives yall glimpse this aint just a fly by night feeling. This aint no basic valentine longing, this is a relationship type heart cry. Here go another freebie for yall guys and I done learned this by basic wisdom: I aint one of those Armani guys or nothing, and I done learned girls are "turned on" differently. Character, communication, and non s*xual touch gets them hotter than a stolen tamale. I say that cause as the poem continues, it toggles back and forth from emotional feelings to s*xual feelings. Look: "I miss the feel When lips impress Upon mine tips of tongues Parting through In electric chemistry"...

Wait for it...

"I ache ache for the feeling Of being needed"...

Its emotional contact that turns her on.

And Im fixing to leave this review right there-

I may aint know the writer good enough, but what I know about her should make her wonder how I know it. I listen to everything she says to me, and what she aint say, I hear the most.

The writer is a friend of mine.


In closing:

Being this is an illegal review cause if I do review a friend, I'll only do it one time to be square with everybody else. Outside of that, Ive always thought the writer is incredibly talented and her uniqueness shines bright in everything she writes.

Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Review of Longing.  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustnt be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
When someone gets under yalls skin, its harder than nails to get them out. Its letting somebody in- letting them into yalls thoughts, being an influence, and getting intertwined in ones life, that is beautiful and dangerous at the same time. Once they mess yall up real good, one finds a shocking reversal of real life, were: The road getting back was longer than the road getting there...


Review:
Lets Begin-
"The way your words destroy the walls around my heart"...

Lets be 9:15 about this- when it comes to broken hearts, folks lean to think it comes from women. Well, we guys go through it too. I caught myself who done been here before, refreshed by the honesty. Its like us guys aint got to say it, and the writer done spoke for us all who done been shattered. This writing comes from someplace dark...Dark before the storm. Lines like: "I long for the sweet and tender softness of your lips," and "the stormy and dark beauty of your eyes as they pierce my soul" aint just hollering down no well- this is REAL time guy thoughts pointing at things we appreciate and admire in women. Each line keeps on digging to were these emotions come from: "longing to be released from a cage being held captive by his choices." The best line is this here: "A prisoner in my head because Im too weak to fight. Too scared to make the attempt," shows the crippling of the emotions. It ends poetically, expressing wanting healing, but knows as good as sunshine, aint none...


In closing:

Wonderful. Some aint give guys no credit when they DO open up. The effect on the author is damaging. The emotions were kept raw, with a beautifully dark twist- And if yall dont know no nothing about me, dark poetry is my bread and butter.

Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
I done been around more times than a ceiling fan about how men should be. About as sad as an egg sucking dog, is whats been accepted as, and what is being projected as, what men should be. The longer the world gone dictate to yall whats what, the longer folks gone get carbon copies of the real thing. It all comes down to basic elements: Two cant walk together unless they be agreed, meaning, heading the same way...Acceptance, flaws and all...Trust, and the willingness to work at it. It blows up in folks faces trying to either change or control somebody else, cause aint nobody got that much power unless one folds- And that aint ever good...


Review:
Lets Begin-
I want a man who isn't afraid to let me fly
But still gives me a safe place to land\

Whew, hang yalls hat on that one. Men are suppose to be supportive, not dictators. At the end of the day, if something aint go down the way its supposed, that SAME support should be present. Its always hard reviewing a want, cause its dang to impossible- meaning, determining if a desire is healthy or aint. In the glass of love, folks all got a favorite flavor of koolaid, so ain't no harm done. As reading, I got mind the author is seeking a certain type that goes with her outgoing personality- Opposites aint attract all the time, but whats lacking in the other should be made up in each. Me personally, I would require a girl that aint as bold as me, cause I need somebody to talk me out of stuff sometimes. Another plus to this writing is the nature references, were love can be seen as beauty or a storm. The personality of the author is the REAL standout point. The writing is as outgoing as her.

In closing:

Its a light hearted writing which is always refreshing as a mason of iced tea. Writing is supposed to be creative and this aint no short of it.

Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Review of I fall...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustnt be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
There aint nothing comparable to putting folks before self, Jesus Himself said it-
Its an un equaled form of love. But aint it get drowned out in a world were self promoting is encouraged? Its acceptable to strut while sitting down, yall got to get all yall can get, and aint even leave nothing for the vultures...THEY even got to starve cause of folks arrogance...


Review:
Lets Begin-
This is breathtaking. The shape of the writing is something to gawk at, and compliments the poem. The opener tugs at heart strings: "I fall so you can stand"...
I cant, with this one, yall-

What is SO good is its written from the females version of love. Females love is DEEP and passionate. Aint saying us guys are hog killing weather cold, but girls are wired more intimately. If they love yall, no, they LOVE yall. This poem says A LOT. With lines like, "I cleanse you from within and clear out your cluttered thoughts so you can see your real self with clarity," had me floored. The sacrifice in this writing is what makes it powerful, and sacrifice IS love. This is beautiful, and is a true work of art. The emotion is so strong in this, it makes folks see the true beauty that is within the writer...

In closing:

I aint know what to say. One would wonder what COULD be said if this were aimed at somebody- how do yall respond to something like this? Im at a loss of words.

Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Review of Blending In  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

"You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger darling."
-Eames, Inception

Intro:
Folks are different. We're created that way for a reason. Thats what makes us interesting. How we raised, were we from, cultures, appearances, color of skin. When this aint appreciated and starts to get weaponized, something so beautiful becomes bland and boring- roses are beautiful mainly cause of the variety, it aint so much cause of meanings. What is aimed to be a learning experience for love of each other, becomes a closed minded act of control...And THATS were mankind missed the mark...


Review:
Lets Begin-
"You know your hair is green." The woman said it so matter-of-factly, like everyone she knew had green hair"...

I like how this was written. It aint take the normal route of setting up characters like most do- it starts with the situation. This also goes good on grounds of it causes the reader to get focused...It raises questions, and that keeps attention. The main character is genuine as a dang serial number. The pain in this persons hide is understandable. Its communicated in a way that proves this happens every dang time this person goes somewere, hence, the book reference. The writing also got a comedic angle with a bit of snarky. Youd avoid the character pestering the main one, like a porcupine at a nudist colony.

In closing:

We got some talent here tonight, yall. The author got a style all their own. What got me the most was how this story was so short, yet read like it had bigger britches...Thats impressive. Theres an underline meaning to the whole story, which, I hope readers aint miss-it carries a good message, and we as folks need substance in writings nowdays like this here.

Review Tip #4: Well-rounded reviews include both positive and negative comments.

Thank God I aint ever aim to be one of these "well-rounded" folks any d*mn way...


Bride, Editor-in-chief
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum/Firebrand Times Newspaper
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

Intro:
Women by design of creation are s*xy. Everything about them is attractive. Problem with most guys is, they see them as objects and aint creations. When that goes on, the worth and appreciation drops. All women are attractive in their ways, and if thats up for arguing, that means the scope of view is narrow as a clothes line. Once the intelligence, strength, and flow of a woman is appreciated, only THEN can the curves, lips, touch, and voice be arousing...

But, what do I know...
Im just a guy...

Review:
Folks know I keep things on the up & up. I keep my dealings with girls and reviews honorable- but onery is allowed. I ran into this writer on the "read & review."

Let's begin:
"You dont feel it when laying next to me? Eyes wide open, muscles quiver. Not quite an org*smic shiver, maybe close. Spasms under my skin Shock to my nervous system More so resemble the shakes you get, when you need another dose"...

WOW. That was about as hot as a h**ker with a stolen $2 pistol...

Um...

First off, the writer got a lot of passion in her. Its one thing to write something passionate, but it's a h*lluva dang lot different to write something that makes the reader look around the room. It says to me, that I cant no short even be NEAR you without burning up like a 4 alarm. This writing may got other meanings than the intentional read, but one things certain:

I aint EVER in all my days read, or done heard a girl say something like that...

Hon, youre trouble.
There go a saying:
"Dont go looking for trouble, its more than capable of finding its own way"...

Lol.

I cant stand how this is written (in a good way.) It's written in a commanding way, that makes the reader (in a guys case,) powerless. Look at this:
"You dont feel it when looking at me? A blanket of iridescent and chilling comfort billowing just above me before gently embracing my body"...

This is uncalled for...

This is the best line, in a twisted way:
"But not quite. More like after I powder my nose and feel everything is worth a fight"...

This writing toys with the reader. It spins folks round like a carousel, and drops were it dang pleases. The title, "powering of the nose, another dose," and other references might got ther meanings if folks read this in context....
But I digress-
If its what Im thinking, these descriptions went over heads like vultures nearing a mans end. It then goes on to: "How about when you touch me, do you feel it then?"
Whats great is the contrasts the author uses describing somethings sensual with romantic things. Dark things, with light- it aint hard to see this aint the authors first rodeo in writing. The writing is incredibly detailed, emotional, and impressive. This was, um...

Interesting...




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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

Intro:
There go some that leave it all on the field. But yall ain't know it, due to the lack of love nowdays. What ain't right, is those folks who put forth a h*lluva effort to be so honest yall can take their word to the bank. But walls go up after a trampling, and the fight gets harder to fight...Then, those who stood out in their compassion, blend into the bland, dark, and cold world of everybody else...Ain't no matter what happens, don't EVER be like everybody else...

Review:
This always a touchy subject. It's one more spin around the sun with the age old question of giving more, when the whole thing was given:

"How do I always manage To care More To Love more To wait more"...

It's cause between yall two, YOU the one that understands love:

"Love is patient, love is kind, it does not envy, it is not proud"
-1 Cor 13

...It aint proud enough to aint subject itself to somebody time and time again.

The author writes this in short expressions. I like how the author uses this in an angst tone. Yall aint probably see that-

I did.

The repeating question fits real good. Why? Well, at the tone of this subject, this aint the first time. Repeating this just proves they done been down this road before, giving life to the poem.

Stay with me, yall...

The best line here is:
"How do I always manage to be the one left in the dark"...

Gospel fact.

The broken hearted are always the last to know. Whats squirely is, either theyre blind to the fact cause OF love, or doomed to see it after the wreckage. Been there.

The poem goes on with other sad lines that make a funeral look like a circus:

"To be left behind To be unwanted," as well as: "To be putting forth all the effort When you are putting forth none"...

Ending:
Theres reasons I made MYSELF a bonafied reviewer. I ain't join no group, cause I got a style and view my own. I got appreciation for folks being honest, cause h*ll, even if folks hate yall, ATLEAST they can be honest in that case. I felt what the author was plain as day saying:

Everytime I open up, I get hurt.

Ain't no spell checking, grammar poking review is able to see what writings are, and what they're WORTH. They're priceless to the authors, and nobody can determine how much for. The writer is expressing themselves openly, and willing to wear their hearts on their sleeves AGAIN in dealing through something. Good job.


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Review of Who is that girl  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride
The irrepressible, Bride

Well, yall ain't see THIS everyday...

Intro:
Now, call me ALIEN- but I'm one of the few with the nerve to take a gander at folks' profile before fixing to review. Yall be shocked to high HEAVEN at the number of folk who ain't do that. At looking, I saw the reason for this piece. First off hon, whatever done happened, I'd hoped it aint. Condolences for your boat after the storms of life done hit it. What I knows, and I may ain't know A LOT, but what I know can be built on and keeps me open for more wisdom-

Everything got a view, whether it be a world view, or on self, it's a view. Thing is, views can be changed. Now hon, we done learned of how you view yourself, now let's see how BRIDE views you. This is a special review. As I'm gone review the works, I'm gone review the writer at the same time:

Please send all hate mail to:..

Naw, I'm just joshing yall...
I fired the entire complaint department and just ran continuous loops of cartoons in their office...

Let's begin:

Review:
"I am the mysterious, never quite too serious, fashionable in every which way especially late, alter ego of Natasha"...

I'm loving that opening. I like the rhyme flow of it too. It rhymes well and there's a heap of info in this. The writing goes on to mention being on the shoulders of an emotionally damaged human. What gets me is, everything mentioned in the opening makes for a very interesting girl. Who the h*ll wants a SERIOUS girl? I get, there go times to be as serious as the business end of a .45, but to be ALL the time is as unwelcome as a dang outhouse breeze. One out of ALL the things that makes girls appealing is that little spark in them. As go for the "fashionable" line, I'm hoping that's a retro reference in style of dress. I could be wrong, but dang it if that aint hot when girls dress throw back style...
The writing continues to get darker than the inside of a pocket:
"Now just an empty shell whose brain has been washed and programmed, with her only thought continuously stuck on repeat"...
I need a bigger gun to shoot this statement out- the mind got all kinds of functions to it. Thoughts got a way of painting pictures inside of folks, good or bad. That be reason a beautiful girl would think she's ugly on grounds of were ever those thoughts come from. Another angle is happy thoughts make good moods.
Here go something a psyche doctor ain't gone tell yall: The only method they use is to basically lower property values on humans. From their point, we ain't nothing but evolved animals. Band aiding problems by finding somewhere to place blame such as enviroment, upbringing, etc. It's a victim mentality agenda they push. If this were gospel, two kids of alcoholic parents would have the same outcome. One most of the time, follows...The other won't touch alcohol with a ten foot pole. A chemical imbalance is caused by negative thinking. It's the THINKING that throws off the chemicals in the brain...

Yall like:"WHAT did he SAY?!"

Yea, think about it.

Not bad for a guy raised by hicks, aint it?

So, by constantly running those thoughts through the mind like a marathon, it keeps folks at a constant state...

Depression.

If this aint so, it's impossible to think of a joyful memory and be sad. It's IMPOSSIBLE unless you FORCE yourself and deny, and continue on the same base thought pattern...

But what do I know...

One thing that stands out like a salad at a barbeque is the COURAGE the author got writing this. It's hard opening up. It's hard letting folks in, ESPECIALLY after trauma. More times than ain't, trauma done happened by lack of trust SOMEWERE. I like how the writer uses writing as a therapy device and not a coping mechanism. This aint hard to see here. This is easily noted by the talent the writer got. A coping mechanism ain't look this polished in complete thoughts. The writing would be every dang were...

I'm gone skip by the "cat" line...
I once live in a bottom level apartment building. If yall ain't know, some got concrete walls around them. There was ALSO a stray cat infestation around the building. Cats ain't like dogs. Dogs gone "do the thing" in the middle of the street, they ain't care...Cats like privacy. So besides the fact I saw a concrete view EVERY time I looked out side, there was a cat o*gy outside my window at the same time...

The SOUNDS, yall...
This went on for a solid year. I guess they were "keeping warm" even in the winter, cause it aint stop...

MOVING ON...

What's interesting about this piece is, the description of the "shell" is actually the beauty in the person. "Energetic," and "a woman who would fight when it's right and in the right way" is another example. We gone skip past the, umm, "always ready to" line...

This a family review forum, lol-

The writing ends with more description of the alter ego "Natsby," who the writer prefers to be.

Ending:
I enjoyed the third person view. The writer gives depth to thoughts on self and this is a creative piece. The writer needs to keep writing, cause she's obviously good at it and I'm getting ready for more.

FINAL THOUGHT:
I like Natasha better.
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Review of Jealous?  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

Well,now...
This gone be a hoot...

Intro:
I support this. Why? It seems guys ain't care nomore. I mean, did yalls b*lls drop off? YALL. Ain't me...I support testosterone, and the fact once you done got under my skin, you gone know it. I like you. Thats all I care about...

And I am jealous. But aint in the creepy way, in the way that; you're mine- and he aint nothing but competition to me...Im a traditional guy...

Im from when guys did stupid stuff for a girls attention...

Nobody remembers them times.

Review:
This opens with "Youre jealous...I like it"...
It used to always be this way. Before guys took backseat to WHAT was determined to be a guy...Before guys got watered down. Yall remember Emo music and certain bands like 3 Days Grace? When guys wrote whole dang albums about girls...When it was okay in rap to have a track on yalls album with a R&B singer about yalls girl? Back when if a guy showed interest in a girl it was fine...Before folks got h*lla "woke." Yall know what Im saying, I ain't hollering down no well.

Girls like a certain amount of jealousy, cause it shows them guys care. Girls like attention from their guy. They like to feel attractive and wanted.

The "I'm sorry, but then again, I'm not" line is just plain onery...

I allow this. The whole beginning of this is so honest-

if I tell yall a hen dips snuff, yall go look under its wing...

The writer does a h*ll of a job expressing what girls be thinking. See, everything's funny guys until yalls girl is fishing for attention yall ain't give. Yall need to keep the same energy yall had when yall FIRST wanted them...

But we ain't fixing to talk about that, huh?

Thought so.

Let's clear the chamber-
Some guys get possessive. That ain't the good kind. When a guy says a girl is "his" it should be in light of they ain't want you with nobody else...Not OWNING a girl. OWNING a girl ends up "letting the green monster come out whenever another guy makes her laugh"...

Do yalls job. If yall was, YALL be making her laugh. This is so simple I got to explain how to miss it...

This writing is straight forward with lines like "Are you planning on embracing your feelings about me. Confess to me that you care. You won't be disappointed and you won't regret it"...

Beautiful line.
It's the truth mixed with a plea, at the same time making it safe. After hearing that, it should come about. Some guys like to act gussied, when the TRUE definition of masculinity is standing for what he believes in and ain't ashamed to admit hes wrong, and if need be ask for help...

Girls LOVE when guys let the shields down and let them in. Girls like to feel involved with their guy.

Ending:
Yall can shoot dice over the phone with this girl, and she seem like a GOOD one. Ain't nobody write nothing like this in lies. I like how the author covered complete ground with the subject. At the same time, simple use of words painted the whole picture, and I ain't talking no paint by numbers.
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Review of March 1st, 2056  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

Opening:

WOW. I ain't know WHO you are, but you are IMPRESSIVE. It aint just the writing, which is fantastic-

Hon, its that mind of yours...

This gone be one of my more versatile reviews. I got a lot to say. That mind of yours: Im a guy that appreciates ONE thing the most in women- Now, if yall swimming through the SHALLOW void of the world system, yall soon to drown without hopes or the sense to come up for air. I cant pick at yall enough that things are being fed to yall. A "model" is at the forefront of desired picks- Telling yall what is attractive, when the most attractive thing on a woman is her mind.

Only weak men fear strong women.

This writer is smarter than a whip. This whole thing is a side eye at the virus, or in sorts, thats what I was getting.

But it touches on SO much stuff...

Before I begin, I'm sure as sunshine hoping...

CNN ain't in the future...

They the only folks that can cover a petting zoo, and make the thing look like a food processing plant...
All mainstream media is on the chopping block to be right hand honest, anyhow...

Intro:
Let's begin:

Yall know the pandemic, right? Of course. The news ain't gone let yall forget if yall did. Yall know, the pandemic: The virus that was creat- SHOWED up from ONE place that got one of the biggest agendas against the world- conveniently around a certain time, which seemed to be aimed primarily at ONE nation standing in between its communists domination?..The pandemic: Which was smart enough to close Churches but ain't spread in riots by marxists groups that hate men- Funny how it's supposed to support a race that suffers with a staggering 70% lack of fathers in the home...Violence amongst this race are in the McDonald's numbers, while this SAME race leads in abortions. So, while NON of those issues are addressed, folks fall victim to a narrative in which, aint nobody heard from a certain hate group since the early 2000s...A billion dollars of donations were filtered through "act blue," a certain platform- Theres TWO of this kind: "Act blue" and "Winred"...

Guess which is which...

If anybody fixing to get "woke" about what I done said, I'm from that same race, part of that sad statistic, and I'm from that community...

By the way, "the right to worship uninterrupted" and "the right to peacefully protests" are BOTH in the first Amendment...

As the nation pedestals the highest paid man in government blatantly aint answer the difference in choice...

Doctor knows best...

It aint the denial of it, it's the manipulation of it. Used in political warfare at the cost of folks welfare. The elderly and those with pre existing conditions are the true ones at risk...

Review:
I like the writing style of this author, I mean, yall can tell she real booklearned. Her vocabulary ain't ever disappoint, and she's as fluent as a spring stream. Now, there go a reason I said all that stuff. I said all that to contrast the piece. All of this is mentioned. The creativity is off the charts, here. It's like a dang movie. The author even got news footage- Things are cleverly mentioned here. One of the things that stands out the most is the main character. It's hard as teflon to make a character believable. While all this stuff that's crazier than a road lizard goes down, the author done figured out a way to get YALL to believe her. That ain't as easy as yall think. How the thing opens up with her running barefoot and the constant confusion captures poetically how the character ain't believe what's happening.

She can't believe the outright insanity...That reverse description thing is KILLER...

The news inserts compliment it well, touching on how folks get indoctrinated through it, and its constant fan of flames. I LOVE how the author pokes at it's OVERBLOWN. Good news ain't get ratings. At some point in time the news was something to be trusted, anchored by journalists. Now, they ain't nothing but activists...The author is bright as a new penny: I LOVE how she writes folks changing narratives like Kansas weather...From politicians to the media...It might go over some heads, but I caught it. The effect on people is shown here, as folks is just shoved any which way to satisfy a dang agenda...

Yall ain't want me to go there...

My FAVORITE part is the emotion. Some of this was sad enough to bring a tear to a glass eye. The crowning point was the view of the dad.

(Read February 10 2056, which is my favorite part.)

Another BRILLIANT point was made about the delete of history, and how the youth gone learn with no records...

If yall think the statues being torn down was for the agenda being pushed, it aint...Its marxism/communism. It attacks religion, tradition, (while some of yall REALLY cancelled the holidays,) and a reprogram of history. There's a mention of emotions being fed on in this writing, and that's the gospel truth.

By keeping the wound open of past evils, folks can be reared any direction. The youth is the prime target, as they are more to give in to fueled emotions.

This writing held my attention like a dang microwave. Why do we stare at our food being microwaved?

Moving on...

The journal entries were AWESOME. It showed the importance of evidence needing to be preserved, cause folks are covering up and rewriting things. What Im fixing to REALLY say about this here is this:

I think this writer got the goods. No, I mean the GOODS to be a published writer. How she connects ideas and sequences is CRAZY. The amount of detail in this is unreal. Though this was short, its amazing how a novels worth of info fit. I been around like a ceiling fan before reviewing on this site, came back again this time- But this is possibly my favorite thing I done read to date. No, really...I cant believe this. Hon, you are incredibly talented.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

Let's begin:

"Excited for changes. New doors opening and old ones closing"...

This a good view to have. It's good to be optimistic. I particularly like the part about the doors closing...

Some done found out the hard way there go doors that NEED to be closed...

The writer goes on to credit folks who done impacted her life in a positive way. Lord knows, aint many nowdays out there to do that- and its as scarce as grass around a feeding trough finding it.

"Faced any and every obstacle that's been thrown my way" is a great line. Running ain't do no good, and its HOW we react to obstacles that gets the best results.
As an overall, the whole thing is a h*lluva pick me up. Life is LIFE, yall-
And the view yall got of it determines the results. Negative folk get negative results, it aint NASA science. I like how the author puts forth the point of learning, cause if things good and bad happen and yall ain't learn no nothing, yall in for a base time. I get the feeling a lot done happened in this persons life, but by this here writing I know they gone be fine.
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Review of What Love is  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, Im Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

One good turn, deserves another. Figure Id review this writer, cause they done reviewed me.
Whats alien about this is, it proves ONE thing to me...

I DO exist.
Aint had mind on it before- folks usually go to my poetry like its been marked down 50% off, so Im obliged, one of my stories got reviewed.

Lets begin:

Ah, yes- Dark poetry. When I hate to love you, hate I loved you, and hate I done wrote about it at the same dang time.

Dark poetry is my bread and butter.

"What have you done to me?
and what have I let you do?
You took my innocence and trust,
and held them gently in your hands and heart,
and made promises that I thought you'd keep for better or worse"...

Aint yall hate this? Like the desert hates rain. Some folks are slicker than a boiled onion with their words, and it goes over on us. Whats the left over is, is feeling like we done allowed it. Of course. When we get hurt how come we aint know no better?

The heart lies all the time, but we praise the thing when theres traces of truth...

"The day before yesterday I was your sweetheart
The next, your eyes glittered with disgust and I was a hurtful bitch"...

Am I as wrong as left handed scissors for adoring this line?
I mean, things escalated faster than a scalded cat.
Thats that thin line folks is referring to...

I look at left field things when I review. Sometimes when yall reading somebodies work, yall can just TELL whether they male or female...

This "I can't kick myself enough
for believing in you, yet it was worth it.
Yes, you were worth it"...SCREAMS female.

Wash of yalls war paint, and spare me the identity politics-
What I MEAN to say is, its HOW its worded. I done mentioned more times than times itself,
that when a woman loves a man, she LOVES a man. Yall cant tell them nothing about him.
Theyll spend their last bailing out a well deserved inmate in h*ll.
Theres good reason for this, but Ill take the short route. Its his WORDS.
Humans were created to have power with words, but mens words in GENERAL hold weight with women.
When they used right, they are nurturing. A boy could talk a cavity into the tooth of a girl...But the same power can be corrupt. A mans words can float a girl in Heaven, or make them feel lower than a gopher hole. Another example is low life pimps. Im sure yall wonder HOW they talking these girls into misery...

Its more WORD power, than physical.
He knows JUST what to say, and WHEN to say it to clean up a heap of mess.
And she BELIEVES him...

Relationships aint for the faint. As if they aint harder than Chinese arithmetic, adding other folks to the equation is a failing grade. Never, I mean NEVER involve folks in the sanctity. Theres circumstances that are allowed, but yall be shocked to h*ll who aint want yall happy...

"Yet now I understand even more, but it's too late
but maybe it was always too late with you,
because you never gave us a chance to live our dream together,
and then let others butt in"...

Its funny how everybody got two cents, but the involved end up paying through the nose...

Oh, the writer is badger mad.

"It's so easy for someone to be cruel and brave when they
get whatever they want just for the asking"...

Let that sink in.

The writer continues to POUR her heart out. Each line is d*mning and personal. Its easy to see by how each line shows impact, theres alot to get out...

And...

He really hurt her.

I usually end my reviews with a "My take" ending comment, but not this time.
While I was reading this, I just saw her heart, and it aint fair. Im sorry this done happened to you, hon. Thing about folks who hurt the ones that REALLY care about them is...

They aint know what they missing, and they never do better than the one that was there for them.
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Review of The Dreamer  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Let's begin:

Ah, yes...
When folks think everybody got to be the same, otherwise they get exiled...

Hold my non alcoholic beer...

"I try my best to fit in But that's just not my style"...

Good. Let me learn yall: Fitting in ain't what it's cracked up to be, and besides the fact, other factors got to get weighed in:
•What scale are yall basing this on
•Is it even worth it to try
•Whats this gone cost me?

What yall compromise to keep, as sure as sunshine, yall fixing to lose. That's why folks selling them selves out ain't no big thing. What takes a pair, is this line: "But I'm content to stand alone"... Cause of a herd mentality of thinking done got folks to do anything for acceptance. Here go the thing:

Start with accepting yourself.

Yea, my grammar ain't that good...Folks poke fun at me being upright as 6:00, this that and the third- But I like me. The only things I would EVER consider changing would have to be something critical.

Like, if I don't change, I'm fast out of here gone. Otherwise, take a number...
And customer service ain't gone do nothing different...

"As I go my own way" stands out at the same time. Somebody else's path ain't gone fit yall, and YOUR path ALWAYS does. Here go something that folks aint do nomore: "I listen to my mother She gave me this advice Stand fast and firm with your beliefs no matter what the price"...
Yall want to know how I feel about my beliefs?

We'll die here sooner than a change.

What yall beliefs are, make up who yall ARE. It's yalls core. When yall fall for anything, yall stand for NOTHING. It aint hard to find out if yall ain't stand for something:

Cause everybody likes you.

Remember I said that.

I'll say "no" quicker than a bullet if it goes against what I believe.
Leaders stand. The righteous stand. Heroes stand. Ain't nobody remember the yellow belly, but everybody gone remember the one who challenged something.

This thing got a gaggle of pointers:
"Don't let them overwhelm you Don't let them quell your voice"...
There's always gone be an opposite majority. What I done learned is, they ain't ever solo. Cowards got to form into some kind of Voltron, Power Rangers, Avengers type form to come up against something. Why?

THEY ain't so sure themselves. If so, like the writer said, they'll "be content to stand alone."

I done read a lot of inspirational poems, but this one here takes the peach cobbler. Ain't only that it speaks volumes, it touches on foundations to build on. I appreciate there are writers who write things that matter, things that better things around them.
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Review of Lonely Times  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum
Good to know you, I'm Bride-
The irrepressible, Bride

I'm a BOLD Christian and I'm strong enough for folks to hang their wash on. I ain't the passive Christian/conservative type. I carry it like it's something folks want. I'm an example. Im move in Christ authority. None of my steps slide.
Ask anybody that know me, and they'll tell you:

He aint letting this go...

I've burned all bridges long times ago. There aint no return. I say that open up this review. Normally, I steer from "religious" works (Christianity is a relationship with God, religion is an attempt to get to God) for two reasons: Reviewing Christian writings is like reviewing family, and we'll, I ain't got mind on other religions.
Be it, I KNOW how to act with the Body of Christ. I'm against denominations (I attend a non denominational church) cause it brings division. I'll pray for another Christian and they'll be like: Well, I'm a...And I interrupt like: You want to be healed or not? I don't play...

The righteous are as bold as a lion.

If we would UNITE, and show the world we support each other, folks might sign on easier-

But I digress...

But I saw this and found it intriguing so I'll give this a whirl...

Let's begin:

The author got a good grip on what folks is missing in life. I'm gone plainly say it...

Jesus.

Folks feel orphaned trying to fill that hole in their hearts, so they'll stick in there stuff that ain't fit- PEOPLE, money, drugs, alcohol- ANYTHING to feel accepted...

Hate to break it to yall, but that HOLE is Jesus sized...ALL that other stuff ain't love yall unconditionally.

Look what the writer says: "When you are in times of dismay And noone by your side lay"...For the sake of time we ain't gone run through scriptures, but feeling alone is the root problem in folks life that ain't know God. EVERY OTHER problem is a bi product. The author builds real good on this fact, telling folks to "Just look above and above the horizon"...

Yall see that?

"Is there anyone who loves me only"...Sums it up. God ain't mad or disappointed in yall...He's waiting for yall. "Your expectations are nothing but just a myth"...Is my favorite line. WHAT a way to prove the point I made earlier. The WORLD tells yall what's gone MAKE yall happy. How, when the Lord IS happiness? This writing is powerful and sweet at the same dang time, with lines like: "We can all have love, that's true" and "Just believe in Him...Its up to you"...
My take? I DO read profiles. EVERYBODY I review. Im happier than a dead pig in the sunshine the youth are witnessing. It captures the Gospel well, and I salute you.

Bride- (short for Bride of Christ- as from Christ's relationship with the Church)
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

I did a review of "My Pleasure" by this author, and I just had a time, yall know what- I was all about this persons writing, and I wanted to do another review one more time. I was also gussied that this author requested me to review the work. I ain't know folks even knew I was alive, let alone. So, before I continue to shoot my mouth off like I ate a bucket of .45s, let's get on to it.

It aint my fault I'm wordy...

Let's begin:

I LOVE broken heart poetry. These them times when things come up ain't nobody digging for- Yea, the "unicorn vomit" stuff is sentimental till we get to how I feel at this moment...

And...

How DARE you...

I like how the writer keeps mentioning things he hates, but loves:
"I hate the feeling that you are the best girl I ever met"...
That stings.
Cause I ain't been there often, but often ENOUGH. Problem is, when the nose is all open, the view turns to a comparison.
Thems dangerous times.
One of the greatest lines were pen got put to paper, is: "I hate my heart for falling in love with you"...
BEEN THERE. The heart ain't all that smart, if it WAS folks wouldn't fall for the wrong people. What your heart wants, aint necessarily what it NEEDS. But can't nobody tell nobody nothing, I'm just howling at the wind...
What GOT me as I done read on was, the writer is REALLY in love... No, REALLY. Ain't noway in h*ll an infatuation notices THIS much about somebody:
"I hate the way you blink your eyes" and mentioning how she adjusts her glasses-
Yep, this kid got it BAD, yall...
There's a PAINFUL line here:
I hate the possibility that God created you with the same interests as mine"...
Geez. How you live THAT down? If I was convinced of THAT, that a girls interests were created by God similar to mine-
I...I would have to have her...
That's what makes this hurt so good. It aint hard putting yourself in the authors shoes. If love done struck yall, these lines hit uncomfortably close to home...
This squeezes the heart. I was reading this saying "Aww" the whole time...
The mention of ain't being able to watch movies, and listen to music cause it reminds him of her-
And here's the money shot:
"I hate the moment when I said I love you"...
*Ooh, ouch*
There's forms of wisdom throughout. The author speaks of a notion that guys fall for the wrong girls, while the right girl is somewere praying her future husband learns his lessons. Reason I brought that up is aint NOWAY I could be, or would be, a benefit to ANYBODY- Let alone a girlfriend or my future wife, had I NOT humbled myself to the teachings of Christ. Theres NOWAY I would succeed.
In ending yall, this was a lot to take in...
My take? The writer says what EVERY broken-hearted guy has said in his life. It's common as cornbread to blame ourselves for opening up and it aint working out. We look to blame for following emotions, when it's our duty to check the ones we let out. Afterall, sometimes meeting somebody as awesome as the subject mightve been worth it, but we ain't gone ever know...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum

Good to know you, I'm Bride-

I onced this over, and I LOVE this.
Yall look- I'm a wordy guy, like when I write poetry I like to rhyme words, and at times, string out heart wretching lines-

I'm a guy of passion.

But what Im gone ALWAYS love is the simple, unapologetic, flustered, crush writings...

I'm a guy of romance.

Let's begin:

"My head it aches For you my heart breaks"..Simple, but that line is strong enough to hang the wash on. How those feelings play with the mind, and how fragile it makes the heart. These is dangerous times, but I could stay in this time forever. In other words:

If you only know what you DO to me...

There go SO many too perfect lines, like: "I can't think right"...That make me go back to certain girls who had me dumber than a post. But I liked it.

The motions of crushes make folks sea sick, but it's the RIDE that's worth it.

"Why can't you see What you're doing to me I really want you bad," is one of my favorites. "I do anything to be with you" spoke straight to my heart, as "I see nothing but you," is TOO relatable. This writing leaves the reader "dumbfounded" as it reminds folks of matters of the heart- crushing HARD over someone, just to feel...Well...DUMBFOUNDED. My take? The purity, yall. It look like water in a glass. SO much can be said so good when it aint complicated. This done took me there...Were? Were I WANT to be when I done fallen for somebody.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Shotgun Wedding Review Forum

Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This gone be a hoot. Yall see, I done pulled this stunt my dang self. I wrote a story, (Naw I ain't gone plug my story here) were I wrote from the view of a girl.
Don't let the name fool you, hon-
I'm a guy. Name is short for "Bride of Christ."

So, you gone go and tell us guys how the cow ate the cabbage, huh? You know what we thinking? Let's find out...

Let's begin:

"Her sensual velvet voice, a mystical flute solo, soothes and caresses desires to make mellow the anxious beast only she can see in me"...
Well, dang...Thats...Accurate.
Ain't NOTHING like a woman's voice-
The tone of it, I'm telling yall...
The Lord made women attractive to men. Women are His best creation if yall ask me. Curves and all, drive us plain up the wall. There go a trick to it, though... In order for man to FULLY appreciate women, man got to see woman as God created them. The WORLD sees women as sexual objects. Once yall gone and get hitched, things get hotter than a stolen tamale. Here go something for free:
The sexual imagination of man in concerns of woman, was created for the wife. There go a bucket full of reasons why to ain't watch p*rn, but one is, it takes the space in THAT AREA of the mind for mans wife- That's why when yall see those images, they ain't go away. That sexual image of the woman is suppose to play on repeat in the mind of the husband for his wife. Keeps the motor running, if yall get the gist... Yall want another reason?

Yall gone and compare yall wife to that girl yall saw in that filthy flick...

I wrote all that, to drive home a DECENT point to men:

It's always better to own, then to rent.
Just...Mind that over, from now on...

I like how the writer writes, "she astonishes" and mentions "graceful moves." Thats plain gospel about the graceful moves. I LOVE how women walk. Here go a test ALL men fail- the sound of high heels makes us turn quicker than a rattler getting grabbed by its tail...
Its like a reflex or something.

"She enters my world" is a great line, cause that's what happens, and ain't no fighting it- We'll stop traffic...
The eyes of a woman do something squirrely to a man, so when the author says "stunning violet blue-eyes," I just agreed and moved on.
THIS is interesting:
"Could this beauty be a partner in life for us"...
I hate like the desert hates rain, I think like this at times. Men in sorts, are drawn to supportive women. We tend to think like this all the dang time. Ain't nothing like a woman who is interested in something we're passionate about. It's EXTREMELY attractive.
The writer here is fullblown on target.
A LOT of TRUE points are made in this poem. It's scary, kind of:
"She doesn't know. I'm a caged tiger, fierce and majestic. I need softness"...

I'm just gone go and say it:
I'm a man that believes men are supposed to be masculine, and ain't nothing wrong with that. Folks always got something smart to say...Here go a point: If there aint no masculine men left, who fights wars and protects women from perv violent men? Just saying. What's good about this line is the softness of women. Im pretty much the standard issue guy, but just cause I like girls I can hang out with, aint mean I want to hang with a girl like my boys. Yall laugh, but it happens...
The ending is wonderful, as how the writer sums it all up:
I am hers.
My take? I'm bothered by how you know too much.
Stop it, lol. This pieces words facts in an imaginary, creative way. I enjoyed this.
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Review of My Blessing  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This go one of those thngs written in admiration. I always tend to like theses, cause they seem to be as scarce as grass around a feeding trough.

Let's begin:

The fact that " the day you came into my life will be cherished always"...Is a line prettier than a field of pregnant hogs...

It's a saying, yall...

That just leads on to show the importance of meeting somebody. It's says, "THIS day holds dominance in my heart.
"Your kiss on my lips is something I long for each day," says a heaps full. It's also interesting reviewing girls love poems- Cause from a guys perspective, its different. You appreciate them more..Its just interesting at times, pay me no mind...

"Or your habit of laughing over small things to emphasize a point," stands out like a guilty man in a line up. It's DANG precise. Only somebody "taking somebody in" pays something like that any mind. It's the, little- filler lines that get my attention too. Why? It's when folks SAY something, without SAYING something-
"It is beyond belief," is one of those lines. As it continues, the writer continues to place high value on the subject. My take? The length of the poem says the MOST. It's the gospel fact the writer can't say enough about the person. I like how it's written in admiration, and the simplicity of the descriptions- Love aint all that complicated at all...
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Review of Our Stains  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, Im Bride-

"You, the battle of which I never weary"...Is possibly the best description of a relationship my ears done heard. Look, yall-
Its time to come clean, like the wash: Anything in sorts, or in this case- that matters,
yall gone have to fight for. A SERIOUS relationship aint for folks who hide in they mamas apron. Folks dont calculate so good. We all want this "type" of person, but are yall willing to FIGHT for this person? Are yall willing to fight...

Yourselves?

Yall willing to BECOME who yall want? Next, with the up and downs like at sea, if yall get sea sick real quick, this aint for yall. Being with somebody requires sacrifice...

And if yall faint in the day of adversity, yall strength is small- Prov 24:10

Dont mind the context, just go with it...

Moving on-

"I win, I lose
But it doesn’t really matter
Because you’re here"...Is ALL that matters. If yall mind it over, the writer WON...You win in a relationship if the other stays for the fight...

You only LOSE if aint nobody show.

This is interesting: "It’s not whitewashed, what we have
It is bold and stained vivid with our shared understanding"...
Love the play on words, at the same time with the message.

Pretty much anything with guns, Im gone rate high-
Im a "God, Family, Guns" guy- But there go alot in this here:
One more 'gin, I like the play on words, and the message of how "this here
love thing is only for us," just clears the chamber...

Yall see what I did there? "Just clears the chamber?"
Cause a chamber is...
Pay it no mind.
All in all, I enjoyed this.
My take? I like how personal it is. How these here folk got they own special thing, and its
theirs ONLY. Yall want to know a way faster than a NY minute to end a relationship? Open yalls doors to strangers... I like how they fought to stay together, and came to one mind. Great job.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Well, this is DEEP...

Been at this portfolio before, yall know how I'm fixing to do-

"I just want to feel Something other than than dread. I just want to feel whole and loved In the end"...

Interesting point here the writer is about to open up-

In romantic relationships, there's different forms of what love is, and how its projected. Problem is, folks sign things by a neon light, and get washed away. Is physical attraction important? Yes, AND no. As beauty is in the eye of the beholder, its what's IN creation that makes them attractive.
An upright man of strong moral conscience is ALWAYS gone be attractive to women-
An upright woman, who carries herself as a lady, will ALWAYS be attractive to men. Those who aint agree are those who rely COMPLETELY on physical attraction- And those type of folk drown in shallow waters...When yall love SOMEBODY, as to were the writer says, "Whole and loved," its more than physical-

Put yalls sitting britches on, I'll explain with the author:

"A connection On some level Not related to skin"...

I'll level with yall...I ain't that bright. Not cause simple upbringing, but cause I ain't EVER see the point of human vain intelligence, when I can learn godly wisdom. Intelligence is for the proud-
"Look what I KNOW," when godly wisdom is-
"Look what I've humbled myself to LEARN"...
Women were created certain ways, and to debate particulars, man would have to challenge God. Man would have to say he knows more, and remove God to open the door to do and believe what he wants. Woman was created for man, but not as property. She was created to be equal, assist, and COMPLETE man. Woman was created from man. Both need each other, but as for the line the author wrote, women need to be touched- In a non sexual way to feel appreciated and needed, and in a physical to feel attractive at times-

But men just can't get mind the balance.

That's why holding a girls hand, hugging them for NO REASON, and communication jump starts women. It's the fact you're treaty them EQUALLY...
That's on the house, guys...Us guys ain't learn too good sometimes, trust me-
I got female friends, and they give me the squirrely look sometimes, and I stop them...

Easy, hon...All you got to do is learn that boyfriend of yours...

"A comingling of minds"...

Yall wait- I reckon that word, but I may be wrong... I got to open up another window and see the meaning. Sit tight-

Okay, I was right...Means to "mix."
What? At least I'm honest...

The writer goes on to prove the point made. She wants to be appreciated deeply on a different level- To be understood, and to feel secure. This type of LOVE is deeper than physical. Physical is LUST and incomplete, and without THIS form, physical means nothing...

Sorry if yall believe otherwise, but it's TRUE...
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Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This here, will knock yall off yalls horse...

"If you were only perfect. No mistakes would blot out your record, And critics would be at a total loss"...

Well, shoot then...

Wise words. What done knocked the cheese off folks crackers, is the world's display of the rule of perfection. Oh, don't act like yall ain't know it...

Or DONT yall?..

The world got a way of projected things to folks. It tries it's dangest to set it's OWN standards..."THIS is what beauty is," "THIS is the way to success," THIS is the next big thing"...

THAT, gone also be yalls downfall. It aint no strength to bow at everything, but it takes PLENTY to stand against something...Mistakes can be learning exercises, it just when yall repeat them, it gets to costing...And BTW, who AINT a critic?..I read this whole thing and got mind of the subject, I'm just chewing the fat with yall. I'll hog tie this all in the end.

The second block takes a different turn. "If you were only perfect. Your voice would inspire composers"...

Way to show off them righting skills...
You gone show us all up...
BEAUTIFULLY articulated. Here go something to mind over: If the voice WAS perfect, there aint be no need for composers TO compose...Hence, ending the beauty there of...

Let's tie it all in:

I'm getting this is about the writers wife, which, I LOVE when MEN put their wives at the forefront. ONLY MEN know the value of their wives...I ain't hitched yet, but I know what the Lord says about marriage...

And I dont need no second opinion...
MEN HONOR YOUR WIVES.

What's the point of this writing?
Watch this, yall...

His wife is perfect to HIM...
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Me, again...
I said that like folks KNOW who I am...(Shaking head)

*Ahem*
Its good to know you, Im Bride-

Okay, so I done been around this writers page gone like a prairie fire. But THIS...
I dont know how I feel about THIS...

Its good, but aint, when yall go and read something and relate.
Good, cause thats what yall want...
Bad, cause its like: Yall gone and talking to me? Like, did I write this, or?..
WHy you up and say what IM thinking? I done said this to myself at times. It bothers folks when somebody go walking around in they heads...

Oh, honey...

DONT do that...
Might aint like what door you gone and open. Aint nothing scary, but...
Howd YOU get in HERE?
Its too late for me to turn tail and run...
I done already started writing...
Sh*t...
Mighty Christian of you, Bride...
Quiet...
I edited it...

"Dont let me fall in love If you have no intentions to nourish and care"...
Can I leave NOW?! No? Ugh, FIIINE...
This concerns me cause in personals, feel like this go too often. It goes as such:
In unbalanced relationships, theres ALWAYS ONE. One person who puts diligence due in. Me, being a
romantic, I KEEP finding girls that aint. Dont get me wrong, I like to be treated like a cactus at times, cause Im bout as straight forward as 9:15, but...
WHAT happened to girls?
"Dont let me Allow you over the wall"...Is Something we ALL can relate to.
Im fixing to believe we ALL got a wall in sorts, but the problem there go is HOW it gets built...
It gets built by a broken heart.

Im fine, everythings FINE...I can keep writing. Dang...

Through the bricks,
If later
Its your plan
To add the mortar
For the one next
Layer...

Nope, cant do it...Im leaving. Dont want to read nomore...

This means:

Youre going to make it worst. I like you, and I REALLY want to, but I aint trust you. It aint you, its me- But Im going down a road I done been down before, and this is looking all too familiar.

Dont let me love you
If you cant stay.
Don't pretend
To be the knight
In this girls fairy-tales
I am my own hero,
i dont need you...

The 1st line is self explanatory, and it goes on to just leave me to get mind that this girl is...
A ROMANTIC.
Aint know girls still came in this model...

It goes on to reaching out, eyeing for change, but still holding back...
My take?

I REALLY SHOULDNT have read this...

I had a hard time reading this, doll. It kind of touched me and that dont go often when I read folks writings. It was so sweet, its just gone lead to cavities.
I just...You are SO...
Ugh! NEVERMIND.
You made my heart feel weird, and Im just gone leave this alone.
Dont get me wrong, its dang good, but Im gone stop here.
I cant read this nomore.



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