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Review of Into you  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow.


Thats powerful yet sad. Being into someone and then suddenly they are gone and you're left back outside the hedges with the thorns on the wrong side of the terricata brick wall. It cuts deep..

Great job
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Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oooo. That ladt line... nothing more true.

I dont know when the last time i saw cars stop for the passing of a hearse. And that makes me sad.

The overall tone of this fits so well with the entirety of the last year and a half.

Beautifully written. Looking forward to reading more of your work.


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Review of Pedals and ink  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That first stanza. I think anyone who has loved and lost said love can relate.

I cant help but wonder if calling yourself a simple thing, is an insult or a compliment or an easy observation.

And the ink that bleeds through the letters. Makes my heart drip sanguine drops upon parchment left blank in hopes someone can come along and write their song.


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Review by n.lea
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is the cutest twist on an old grim fairy tale. I love the use of the nursery rhymes kneaded into the plot.

It reads very easily and is 100% enjoyable and suited for all ages


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Review of Silverbolt 2  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I know this is only chapter 2 and ive got 14 more to go. And ill get there, but im eager tonread the development between them.
The tension of attraction is most palpable.
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Review of Tea Time  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is adorable! The child like enjoymentis outstanding. And i agree tea parties are for everyone
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Review of Last Night  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love that twist at the end after all that honey tipped bit of seduction.
You produce very vivid images with your words. It flows nicely in rhythm.

Great job
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Review of Bride to be  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"You're one with me, how do you not resemble me
resenting me, I hold you like a perfect fit to me
the altercations, your alterations don't fit me
it's fitting, I alter myself to fit you so you'll believe in me"


This resonates in my soul on levels only one whos been mentally been dug into the ground would know.

The always hoping heart is excellent imagry and story telling
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Review of Wrong  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Woooeee. This feels all to familiar

"what does it cost to be free again, so I can be me again,
you take a piece of me when you leave with him
sometimes I wish that I could win, but its worth it to lose you again,
just so youre reminded Im not him"
This spoke volumes as to the last 22 years of my life.
And then again when you say
" when did love change, when did i change for love"
It bit a little at the honesty of self questioning.

Im a fan!
Please keep writing!
~N


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Review of Silverbolt #1  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this. It was engaging from the first paragraph.
I work with foster care kids that need medical attention, so to see the hero is a product of this rough system really pulled me in.
The part where SILVERBOLT points to the sky as a redirect, made me laugh aloud at the Princess Bride reminder.

I also realy enjoyed the description of the statue of the woman and his conversation with it. Reminded me of an awkward teenage boy mustering the courage to ask his crush on a date.

Im looking forward to reading the rest.

So far I can see why you won your award.
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Review of Sincerely, yours  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (4.0)
Oooo. Im liking the flow if this.
It blends quickly from desperation to be seen, (quite possibly to be love) to. I realize im better than you think.
I like the use of the word pretentious here. It shows the author is sophisticated.

The ending makes me wonder why they felt they owed someone themself when thst wasnt being given.

Great job. Keep writing.
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Review of All jokes aside  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is deep. Very self aware to know you're being used and choosingn to stay and feud despite wanting and needing to be done. Wanting to be but everything knowing you were their nothing.
Brovo. Very well written
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Review of Darker Than Black  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow. Very real, with raw emotion And so many people relate.

The 2nd stanza stands out to me the most because i now how real grief thieves joy.

Keep writing !!


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Review of Aloneness  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
im left wondering what mark he eventually made. Did he find enjoyment once surrendering?

Thought provoking piece.
Id love to read a sequel

N.
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Review of The Fury  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
ooo. I love how commanding this poem is. A serman, a native song and dance to bring the tempest!!
The power. I can hear the the thunder and see the lightning streak the sky and like the dark storm.

I cannot tell you how much i love this!!
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Review by n.lea
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Reminds me of high school. Always wanting to fit it, but never quite right.
The tag along; the accepted 3rd or 5th wheel in a room full of couples.


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Review of Storm Colors  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ooooo yes.. its so romantic. Is it ok that driving to work on an about to storm day is romantic?
I love the description of the greens against the grey.
And how orange turns to rust.

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Review by n.lea
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The first part reminds me of the song “ you picked me” by the band a fine frenzy.
I like the lulling flow this has. The imagery is a beautifully painted canvas of words.


Keep writing.
N.


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Review of Write Stuff  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
I feel this in my core! Great job


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Review of spineless  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
How crushing. It’s starts so light and lovely like the first flicker of youthful love. Then crashes like waves of a hurricane. So beautifully tragically written


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Review of Darkness  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is raw! So honest. I know so many can relate. Great imagery
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Review of Dancing Babies  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Wow. Very vivid.
My favorite...
"Terrorized under violent palms which squeeze too tight."

Such an interesting image.

Great job
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Review of Dawn  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the imagery that you use to describe the cycle of life as a war.
The only suggestion I have for you is that if you are going to use the ellipses in the second stanza, take out the fourth period. The fourth in grammar means you aren't going to finish the thought. Continuing after makes the piece look jumbled. At the end of the piece if you want to leave it so the reader is guessing, just leave it at the fourth, the fifth period just seems excessive.

I do love the ending. It is so very encouraging and leaves the reader on a positive note.

Great Job.
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Review of Highway Miles  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
this gave me shivers. makes me wonder at the loss of a partner for a lifetime. It sings of pain and loneliness
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