This is so awesome! I love all the colors you used, the time and effort that went into the tags, and the wonderful message it displays! Write on, and right on! Always, Inner-Peace
Your folder of nature related poetry is so very awesome! I will definately come back and look for new additions to this folder! I am putting you in my favorites! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
This is a folder with very promising poems in it. I'd like to come by every so often and read more of the poetry you have added. But, I do strongly urge you to type them without the caps. Your work looks neater that way, and is easier on the reader's eyes. Keep on writing and creating! Always, Inner-Peace
WOW! AWESOME! I loved this couplet. You done a good job with it. It will be better without the caps. Caps are seen as screaming, not to mention it is hard on the eyes. But, on the poem itself, you done a wonderful job on it. I have listed a word below that puzzeled me some though
ANGES
Were you intending the word to be anger instead of anges?
This one is better because it was done without the caps. That allowed me to see the wording and form. Both were great! It's always hard to say goodbye to someone you love, and you captured that emotion here in this poem. Again, you had no grammatical errors, and the wording you used allowed the poem to flow smoothly! Great job! Keep on with the great job on writing! Inner-Peace
This is a very good poem, filled with emotion, and loneliness. Again though, I'd lose the caps. The poem will be neater, and easier on the reader's eyes. I like the way you worded your feelings in this poem. You didn't have any grammatical errors, or misspelled words. Let me know when you have redone it without the caps on, and I'll review it again. Keep up the great job you're doing with your writing! Always, Inner-Peace
Hello Gypsy, first, the biggest suggestion I have is to write this in small letters except where capitalization is needed. It's hard on the reader's eyes.
WHEN I SHALL DIE,
WHEN MY BODY SHALL DIE,
THEN .....
THEN...
Here I would use only one of the words then as you done with the rest of the poem.
The poem itself carries alot of impact by expressing dispair. The form is good also. This poem has alot of emotion, and once you redo it without the caps on, it'll be even better. Thank you for stopping by "Invalid Item" . Come back anytime you want. Keep on writing and creating! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
This story has a lot of potiental to be a great story. As it stands at this moment, it left me wondering what's going to happen next? So, the suspense level is great. But the ending fizziled for me. I'd like to see you add onto this, or change up the ending a little bit. Below I have listed mistakes I seen. Most of them could have been a typo. One other thing I'd like to say is to proof read your story, and look for missing commas. I seen a few places. Other than that, the story is good! Keep up the great job, and welcome to writing.com! We're glad to have you. Sincerely, Inner-Peace
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I love this story! I applaud you for having the strength and courage it took to write about this very painful and traumatic event in your life. But, most of all, I give you a standing ovation for turning a tragedy into a triumph! I'd like to thank you for sharing this with me, and showing me that anybody can turn a negative into a positive as long as they set their mind to do it. I'm glad I've had the chance to met you. Keep up the wonderful job you are doing! Always, Joy
LOL! Very funny and amuzing story! I so totally loved it. I have three sons of my own, and I remember all to well how my husband "played" with them! Most of the time I wondered how they didn't kill each other! I didn't see any grammatical error, and the story is well written! Great job! Keep up the creative and enjoyable writing you are doing! Always, Inner-Peace
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Hello, I loved this story! Yes, although your story is fictional, I have had days like that! I laughed so hard I had moose tears running down my cheeks! I could see you laying on that ground all curled up like a beetle bug! LOL! Great story and good luck in the contest! Thanks for entering! Inner-Peace
*giving a standing ovation* GREAT job! You've done an AWESOME job with the form, and the flow! I love the improvements because, although I had FELT it the way it was before, the impact is even greater now! I know that others who critique this poem will have small suggestions, but, hunny, there's not too much they can change about this beautiful poem! CONGRATS!!! Inner-Peace
Hiya, I have got to laugh! This story brought some much needed laughter to my day! Thanks for the wonderful story! And, man, what a mean kitty! OUCH! That's for the victims. LOL! Well, I seen a few things and wanted to let you know where they are, so I copied and pasted them below. One was a stutter of the word across and the other was an absence of a comma. You may want to look over this story for commas that are missing. Ok? Once again, thanks for a wonderful story! Inner-Peace
This is in the fifth paragraph.
looked like somebody had taken a charcoal pencil and drawn a line across across
This is in the 9th paragraph.
The man met my eyes and smiled which was very pleasant, but I had seen Spider's move and knew the warning signs.
I feel for our veterans, and the people who have lived the horrible life of war! My brother in law was a vietnam veteran, and had been affected by Agent Orange. He suffered horribly the rest of his life, and died way to young. I pray for peace in all people's lives. Thank you for sharing this story. Keep on writing and creating! Inner-Peace
This is a very sweet and powerful poem. I like reading about a love like yours and your husband's. I know that you have been through so very much this year, and I hope things get better for you. We are all here for you whenever you just want to talk. Inner-Peace
As I said, you need to give yourself credit. I too, question my ability in writing poetry, but I think you're correct about there being a different meaning for each poet. I like prose as much as I do sonnets. As long as the poem holds beauty, and impacts my feelings with that beauty, I consider it to be the perfect poem. Keep up the great job my friend! Inner-Peace
Ahhh! I love this poem. I too, like how you used the prompts for this poem. My interest to read your poem came from a review I seen on the review page. The rythum and ryhming scheme are great! I have one question though. Did you follow the prompt completely with the word moonlight instead of "moon"? Great job none the less. Inner-Peace
LOL! I love this! Wonderful surprise ending! I was expecting the main focus to be a human, and didn't think about a CAT! Great job here Bill! Inner-Peace
Countrymom, this is so beautiful and touching! I love your poems, and this one is just as GREAT! Thank you for sharing you thoughts and feelings with me trough your poems. Inner-Peace
WOW! This is one mighty poem! It's deep and, unfortunately, true. There are to MANY people in our world who are very much two-faced. I had a lot of problems with trusting others for this very reason. I am sorry for the pain, and possible distrust, this "friend" caused you to go through. In you description of this poem I know what you are referring to when you said "a female puppy". However, I feel that part should just simply say "a double-crossing person". Before I read this poem, I was expecting to see a poem about a real puppy that had turned its attention to another family member or something like that. LOL! Anyway, you have done a good job on writing your feelings about this subject! Keep on creating and writing! Always, Inner-Peace
This is a sweet poem! I think you can keep working with this piece in order to make it evolve and become a bigger, more defined piece of poetry. Keep working on the indepth feelings I see in this poem. It does have a wonderful potential to be WONDERFUL! Keep on writing and creating! Inner-Peace
You have done a beautiful job with this poem. I really like how you described the approach of Autumn! Since I have read yours, and a few other's, poems about Autumn, I never really seen Autumn in the same way as y'all, but you have opened my eyes to the poetic side of this season. I give you a round of applause for the beautiful job you've done with this poem. Pleasantly amazed, Inner-Peace
I love this poem! You have done a terrific job writing about the season changes and Mother Nature as well. It's amazing to me at times how the inner thoughts come out in a person's writings. I haven't thought about the beauty of the seasons until I read your's and other's poetry on the subject. Keep up the GREAT job your doing with your writing! Stay as creative as you are now. Always, Inner-Peace
Oh Terrie, this is such a beautifully written poem for your daughter! I love it very much! I bet your daughter was very touched by it also. I know how hard it is to have to let go of our children in order for them to have a life of adulthood and make their own way in life. I have three sons of my own, and I have had a bout with empty nest syndrome too! OUCH! I cried all the time. I commend you for writing this beautiful poem. However, I seen a few words that are spelled wrong and I don't want others to use that against you on your reviews. In your title, I know you intended Gown to be Grown. I also know you intended addored to be adored.And, the other word I seen was readly which should be readily.Please don't think I am picking on you because I'm not meaning to do so. Your my best friend and I love you, but I just wanted to let you know about these three words. Which, I would hope you would do the same for me. Especially sense I am the worlds worst at grammar when I get to writing so intently! Please keep up the terrific job your doing with your writing! Love from my heart to yours always, Joy
Hello, you done a good job on this short story. I can imagine how the character in your story feels. Through your words my own shy existance is brought back to memory. It's amazing how a person can relate to certain writings and be transported back to a time that he/she experienced the same feelings. Great job and keep writing and creating.Good luck in the poll! Inner-Peace
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Were you intending the word to be anger instead of anges? 
Other than that, the story is good! Keep up the great job, and welcome to writing.com! We're glad to have you. Sincerely, Inner-Peace
Always, Inner-Peace
Ok? Once again, thanks for a wonderful story! Inner-Peace