Hello, I think this is a cute story. I do see a few places that a word was misspelled, but just remember to use your spell check when you create an item. I use it even though I look the word up if I'm not sure because typos happen easily. I also see a few places where a word was left out that was needed. For example, the first sentence reads..I still have vivid memories what my mom told me. The sentence should read I still have vivid memories of what my mom told me. There are a couple of other places like that also. I know that sometimes I can go to writing so fast, I myself have left out such a word. Just take your time when your writing, or go back over the item and proof read it for these omissions. I really liked the item and think your doing well with it! Keep up the great job your doing with your writing! Always, Inner-Peace
WOW! That is an awesome poem! I have started one simuliar today. It's about someone betraying their friends friendship. Keep up the great writing! Inner-Peace
I just read your short story "The Naughty Gift" . It's so cute of a story! At first I thought a man was in the box but got surprised when it turned out to be a puppy! *smiles*. Two questions...where's the rest of it? Did they keep the pup? Always Inner-Peace
Truely awesome poem. I love roses and its beauty! I loved this poem because it not only talks about the beauty of the wild rose, but it's about how it was god that created all the beauty in his world! Beautiful job! Always Inner-Peace.
This a beautiful poem. If your dreams haven't already came true, I will keep on believing that God will bless you with a child you yearn so badly for! God bless you Shayne! Always Inner-Peace
This poem is one awesome poem! My heart aches for you. There are so many people in this world who have children and not want them. I will be praying for you! Always Inner_peace
Just TOTALLY SUPERB! Yes I cried as I'm sure many people are going to especially the ones who have been there. Beautiful job relaying the pain and agony this person felt! 5 Star piece of work!
WOW! This poem is deep. I myself have experienced the agony of being an introvert. I fought for many years to overcome this affliction. So, my hats off to you! Great job of relating this affliction to other people! Keep up the good work!
Dude I really love reading sentences others have added and added and added! LOL! So, I wanted to make a small donation towards your kitty so you can keep on thinking up more great exercises for all of us to spring into/off of, which ever. I'll also come by soon (tomorrow)and check out your port! Thanks bunches for posting this exercise! Inner-Peace
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Innerpeace
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