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for entry "~ Missing Mommy ~" 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Heart* I know writing about death is not an easy thing. *Hug* Kudos to you for stepping out of your comfort zone by not only writing about an emotionally challenging subject but also by trying a form of writing you're not used to! *Delight*

*Quill* Your second line is 8 syllables instead of 7

After I(1) whispered(2) in(1) her(1) ear,(1) = 8

Fixing that will help the flow.

*Quill* One more thing I noticed is that you have the word, 'Year' twice in such a short piece -- which isn't always too bad. But I think if you can find a way to reword either the first sentence or the second-to-the-last sentence to eliminate one of them, it will help the flow.

*Heart* I read this over a few times. The first thing that pops out to me is your love for your mom and the fear it was to face something so horrific. Those emotions come through quite strong. Well done!

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I pray for you and your heartache *Heartv*

*Poseyp* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Poseyp*

*Heart* Tracey


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Heartg* Theme/Subject Matter: The thoughts, emotions, and scenarios that run through your mind when someone asks the question which entitles this piece: What's wrong with you now? They may not come right out and ask this exact question but it's more than implied. Not only in their words but in their actions/reactions and expressions. It's a demeaning, harsh and belittling remark. The person asking this sounds like they really don't care anyway, and probably don't believe you.

It has been a question I've asked myself several times. Are you can even say it is a question I have punished myself with. We know the way we are feeling and what we're going through is very real. Sometimes, it's reality is so much more real than what we present to others.

*Heartt* Originality/Creativity: I like the way you took this question from an outsider and within a few lines you turned it around and used it to point at your own self. This is so true to what we do to ourselves. It's a harmful thought process that we need to learn to turn around,

*Heartg* Emotion/Impact: To me, this piece is very impactful. It stirs up conversations I have had with others and myself. It shines a spotlight on this line of negative thoughts and makes one realize the chaotic turmoil going on within their psyche.

*Heartt* My Favorite Part:

Emotions, like winds
over a raging sea.
This is my normal.
What's wrong with me?

I like this last stanza because it shows the ever-changing emotions that we go through. The way you ended the piece with the very question you've been tossing around your mind, to me takes some power back. You can almost take this as saying, this is my normal, so what's wrong with me? Nothing I can't take ownership over. I admit. I accept the truth. Do you?

I know you can go another way with this line completely--but for me, this reader chooses to see the light and the hope. Our emotions may be all over the place but as long as I'm aware I can work on bettering myself. Not everyone can say that. *Smile*

*Heartt* Summary: A nice piece which takes the reader along on scattered thoughts, causing inner thoughts and reflections. Nicely done! *Thumbsup*

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Intuey

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Review of invincible?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Heartg* Theme/Subject Matter: Being in a manic phase and how it can make you feel invincible. How should one react to being manic? Should they embrace the feeling or truly fear it? This writing takes the reader on a ride within a manic's episode.

*Heartt* Originality/Creativity: I enjoyed how the writer showed the different stages and uncertainties associated with being manic. It leaves the experiencer often confused and exhausted with a big mess to clean up when it's all over.

*Heartg* Emotion/Impact: Excellent job getting across the intense impact of different emotions one feels. Being manic may make you feel like a queen and someone who cannot be stopped but at the same time it brings up the emotions of not being quite sure of how to handle the situation. They're confused -- feeling fear vs. bravery, subject vs. royalty, fight vs. flight. All of these emotions can happen immediately after each other and all tumbled together. *Headbang*

*Heartt* My Favorite Part:

always driven to go against the norm.
this Empress needs her Crown.

it's such a thin line, insanity.

You are sooo right! There is definitely a very thin line between "normal" and "insanity"

*Heartt* Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us! I enjoyed it. *Smile*

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Intuey

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In affiliation with Under Construction: MHWA  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Heartg* Theme/Subject Matter: Be careful of judging others, for it doesn't take much for the unexpected to put your psyche into a tail-spin shifting your reality and opening your eyes to ways of life that use to remain hidden. It's easy to ignore what's going on around you and within other's lives if you have never experienced it. But be careful judging others. There's only a thin wall which separates the two.

*Heartt* Originality/Creativity: A raw writing of how it feels to be in a state of sadness, turmoil and depression. The title is excellent and adds to the body of work: how it feels to have, "The Demons In My Head" How the voices just never seem to stop trying to get you to sink deeper and deeper instead of renewing your mind and helping you to get better. Your definition shares that others going through the same are not alone! And a lot of times that truly helps one just to know they're truly not alone.

*Heartg* Emotion/Impact: The emotional impact of your writing shines through. The descriptive words and lines bring the reader into your world, sharing the pain of just trying to get through each day. One which feels like you're in the pits of hell. It's a tough fight just to keep going every day.

*Heartt* Summary:A sad, vivid writing which takes the reader on the torturous thoughts going through the mind of one in the depths and despair of depression and anxiety. Of how their mind is over-run with deceptive images and voices of flat-out lies. The sufferer can not get away because it's all internal. Causing their hell and demons to seem inescapable. *Sad*

*Penr* I only found one typo: I can't breath,

I can't breathe,

Thanks so much for sharing!

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Intuey



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Review of Mother  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Heartg* Theme/Subject Matter: The damage caused to children who are abused. The physical pain hurts but the mental/emotional pain is carved into their psyche and soul for life. The scars that can not be seen are always the deadliest. *Cry*

*Heartt* Originality/Creativity: The writing starts out as third person -- showing the reader the harm that is being done to the child and painting us a picture with strong descriptive words. By the end, the poem finishes in the first person, showing the reader that all defenses are torn down by hateful words caused by the very adult who is supposed to love them and aid in their spiritual growth, instead of causing their spiritual decline.

*Heartg* Emotion/Impact: This piece leads the reader throughout the horrid abuse caused to an innocent child. The impact of those words is even stronger for one who knows how this feels first hand. There is NO excuse to ever degrade another human being like this, especially one so innocent.

*Heartt* Summary: An emotional and strong piece of writing which shows how damaging words can be. Very sad. *Sad*

If you doubt words have so much power, try a scientific test that can not lie: Try filling cups with water, for each positive action toward a cup of water, use another cup to do a negative action to: i.e: Pray over one cup of water, while cursing the other cup of water. Play soothing music or positive meditations to one cup of water and degrading rap or negative hard rock to the other. Make sure you mark each one. Do this every day to the same cup for a week, afterward, look at the crystals of water under a magnifying glass -- the positive action water will have gorgeous, clean crystals, while the negative action water will be gloomy, dirty and scattered. We are mostly made up of water, so it makes sense that the same would happen within our bodies/mind/spirit. You can look at these experiences up on the internet if you do not have a magnifying scope.

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Review of Loneliness  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Heartg* Theme/Subject Matter: One in such depths of despair they're ready to take that ultimate plunge into death. One where you may not ever get another chance at happier times and growing stronger, as each battle is fought and overcome during life, the shield of inner strength grows as well. It's so important to never give up!

*Heartt* Originality/Creativity: A lot of meaning came across in a very few lines. The reader is taken into the turmoil mind of the sufferer.

*Heartg* Emotion/Impact: Strong emotion came through each line written. You did a wonderful job getting the pain and finality across in such a short piece. *Thumbsup*

*Heartt* Summary: This piece can also double for an analogy of how quickly depression can turn into deep despair where one feels like there is no return and they take that ultimate trip of no return. But just as quickly as this can happen, if you just hang on and keep fighting, the severity of your sadness can start to turn around. Always seek help and keep trying until you find help from the one you're comfortable with. Meds help as well, though it usually takes a month for them to kick in. Keep fighting the good fight. *Inlove*

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON!*Quill*

*Heart* Intuey

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Review of 68 Minutes  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Heartg* Theme/Subject Matter: Heart-breaking bullying on the school bus of one little boy who is a bit different from the others and the not so obvious avoidance that accompanies his bus ride every day.

*Heartt* Originality/Creativity: I like that this was told by another child on the bus who not only recognizes the pain caused by this sort of behavior but also prays that he will quit adding to his pain and have the guts to do what is right and reach out to this hurting child.

*Heartg* Emotion/Impact: OMGosh! The emotion expressed throughout the poem is truly impactful. Tears were in my eyes. I think we can all relate to some extent to both characters in this piece. The pain by both individuals is well written and shared throughout.

Also, the fact that he did try to tell parents/teachers what was happening and no one would listen to him or take him seriously was also very emotional. How often does this happen? Everyone just ignores and hopes it goes away and before you know it you're visiting that hurt child in the hospital from a suicide attempt, or worse his funeral. *Cry* We need to start listening to our children, especially to those statements we don't want to hear and do what is right, as well as teach them ways they can reach out one small step at a time.

*Heartt* My Favorite Part:

It’s a daily ritual
when we’re at his stop.
He slowly walks back toward me
and I find that my eyes drop.

The reason this stanza is one of my favorites is that it's something we have all been guilty of doing sometime during our lives. It seems like such a benign way of dealing with what we perceive to be an uncomfortable situation. When in fact it's adding just as much pain to the one you can't even look in the eyes for fear of having to relate to him.



*Heartg* My Suggestions: Sorry, but I feel like this piece is perfect as is. I don't have any suggestions for improvement. Excellent writing. *Thumbsup*

*Heartt* Summary: If this writing helps just ONE person deal with those who are a bit different, then it will actually help many upon many people as the ripple effect takes place. I'm so glad you wrote this piece and would like to see it posted in schools all across the world. *Delight*

Thanks so much for sharing, Ken.

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Tracey

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Reading* Hey Hooves! It's nice to visit your port and touch base with you. *Heart*

WOW! I reread this poem a few times. It could have come from my own mouth. The passion is strong throughout. I felt a few different emotions -- confusion, hurt, anger, forgiveness or the want to forgive. With each read, I could feel your wheels turning trying to grasp all that's spinning around you. At least, that's what I see in what you say and don't say.

I enjoyed it! *Heart*

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

In Love and Light, Tracey


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Review of The Snowy  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Reading*This is a very pretty poem describing the plight of snow flurries covering the ordinary, making the outside extraordinary for the short time of their crystal-form life. *Smile*

I enjoyed the excitement exclaimed. The emotion came through strongly and added passion to your piece.

*Quill* The stanza below is my favorite. Strong visual lines, helping me to envision the beauty and sweetness of the surprise snow participation.


Up they piled,
Like crystal candyfloss
Gathered on naked
Branches,
Icing Sugar
Across the cricket field.

Nicely done!

*Penr* KEEP WRITING ON! *Penr*

Tracey


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Review of Whata CatOnACloud  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Awwww... love it, Whata! Didn't know anything about it -- of course, that's not saying a lot *Rolling* I'm glad you were able to get it commissioned. Here's a small donation. *Heart*

I hope life has been treating you well and not driving you too up the wall lately *Rolleyes* *Kiss* Tracey
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Review of Judgements  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Reading* Hello Sand Castles Shopgirl 739 ! I found your writing in the review mixer! Please remember this is only my opinion. Please use or discard what you like. *GreetR*


*Balloon2* Title and Description - Excellent title and description. I think both are absolutely perfect for this short little piece. The title is bold and draws the reader in, while the description says it all. Nicely done! *Cool*


*Flower1* Characters - The character is one who has suffered at the hands of verbal abuse. The piece clearly paints the sordid photograph of the absolute damage hurtful and emotional impactful words can have on ones' utmost being. *Sad*

*Balloon4* Setting - The setting is the result of verbal abuse and the very real physical damage it does to the one being abused. *Angry*


*Flower3* What I like about your piece - The imapact of this one stanza could not be any stronger. You do not sugar-coat but show exactly how bad verbal abuse is. It does absolute damage to the soul and tears one down to a figment of what they once were. *Cry*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - NONE! Perfect just as it is!

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Penv* Thanks for sharing your writing with us! *Delight* *Penv*

Tracey


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Review of The Suitcase  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Reading*Hello Christopher Eastman-Nagle ! I found your writing on the random read and review page. *Cool*


*Balloon2* Title and Description - The title is perfect for this piece and draws the readers attention. The description hints to us know what lies locked away in the suitcase and draws the reader in to read further.

*Flower1* Characters - The character is mainly the grandfather who we get to know through your narrative. We learn he is a hard man. Stern, somewhat unbending and unorganized,

*Balloon4* Setting - The setting is mainly the suitcase and what lies within. Even though it is just papers it is also filled with a man's life who was not easy to get along with. Now, the grandson has inherited the suitcase and feels a need to organize it for the sake of family history. Even though he would rather stay away, he feels he has no choice.

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - The emotion in your piece came across very strong. Nice writing@!

*Balloon4* Thanks so much for sharing your writing with us!

*Penv* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Penv*

Tracey





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Review of Toressa  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Reading* Hello rl ! I found your item in rewarded reviews!


*Balloon2* Title and Description - The title and description is simple and does state what the lyrics are about. You may want to consider adding a bit to your description to maybe give an idea of the inspiration behind the words or stating what the lyrics say about Toressa. Just a thought. *Rolleyes* *Smile*


*Flower3* What I like about your piece - It's a simple piece which shows the love you have for Toressa. The rhythm is over-all nice and slips off the tongue easily,

*Balloon4* Suggestions - To add some depth, maybe have a stanza or two stating why you love her so much. Or even one about getting through hard times and the love you have for her still standing strong. Also, I think it would be nice with the chorus repeating in the last stanza.


*Peace* Please keep in mind these are only my thoughts. Please use or discard them as you see fit. *Delight*


*Penv* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Penv*


Tracey


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Review of Carry on  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Reading* Hello Jay Van ! I found this piece in read and review *Delight*


*Balloon2* Title and Description - Your title "Carry On" shows what this short poem is trying to embody. No matter what happens, no matter the circumstances, one must get up, wipe the dirt from their knees and continue on! A lot easier said than done but in the end, it's what we all must do!

Your description, though short, gives the real reason behind writing these strong words. Rather a soldier for military or a soldier for our God or one just trying to deal with life doesn't matter.


*Flower3* What I like about your piece - Although short, you give encouragement to those reading and at the same time, this reader found like you were also talking to yourself. *Heart*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - This would be an awesome poem to expand on. You can do a lot with it to make it a truly inspiring piece.


*Peace* Please remember these thoughts are only my own. I appreciate you sharing your piece with me. *Delight*


*Penv* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Penv*


Tracey


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Review of Snow White Dove  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Bookstack3* Hello T.L.Finch This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum"  [ASR]


*Reading* This is truly a beautiful poem. Doves were mine and my husband's meaningful, spiritual and loving mascot during our 35 yrs. Butterflies have a lot of meaning for me also. I truly enjoyed the way you penned this piece, asking the reader to get involved with the words and actually think and meditate on them, not just scan over the words. I wrote a prose piece quite a while back called, Have you ever wondered? which this writing reminded me of. *Smile* There's nothing like seeing pure white doves fly high over-head. It's really an awe-inspiring site!

*Balloon2* Title and Description - Your title is of course what grabbed my attention. That along with the description lured me right in to read this very nice piece.

*Flower1* Characters - I absolutely adore and relish in nature and all the creatures within. You chose some magnificent creatures to add to each stanza. There was no forced lines, rhymes or flow. Each line read beautifully and smoothly, along with each stanza following the previous. Nice job!

*Books1* Setting - You painted the setting with your words. You brought the beauty you were writing about along with the emotion, to allow the reader get absorbed through your piece.

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I loved your whole poem and thought you did a nice job with its' completion. But the third stanza really stood out to me in its beauty and creativity:

Does anyone know
where elephants die,
in secret graveyards
as the east winds sigh?



*Balloon4* Suggestions - I'm sorry but I really do not have any. Enjoyed it immensely, just as it is now. *Delight*

Thank you so much for sharing your piece with us!

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Tracey

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Review of Never Giving Up  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Reading* Hello DepressedGirl ! It's so great to have you here at WDC with us! Please don't hesitate to drop me a line if you have any questions or need any help. Why not take a minute to set your portfolio and bio up. We'd love to get to know you some. *Smile*

I'm so sorry you suffer from depression. But I'm glad you are starting to find your way out. That's not easy to do, but so important! Your piece is from the heart and shows as the reader goes along with you.


*Balloon2* Title and Description - The title and description is what pulled me in. I love that you say 'you are never giving up!' that's fabulous! Then the description pulled me on in. Nice job! *Delight*

*Flower1* Characters Your character shined through brightly. No matter how hard the fight has been, or how hard it continues to be, you will not give up. You will grasp at any bit of light you can and bring it in to you. Beautiful.

*Balloon4* Setting - The setting through the whole piece shows the reader your fight, both emotional and physical. It puts the reader right there with you.

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I liked it all, but mainly that you will never give up As hard as it may be, you will never quit fighting!

*Balloon4* I truly enjoyed your piece and like it just as it is. Thanks so much for sharing it with us!~


*Penv* WRITE ON! *Penv*

*Heart* Tracey

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Review of "Do it for Me"  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Reading*WOW! Such powerful, raw emotions. It's sad what you had to go through, but I'm so glad you were able to write it out -- get it out the best way us, writers know how. It's therapeutic. Another way that it's therapeutic is writing it out by hand, and then setting fire to it. Watch it burn and with it all those emotions that took such a huge part of your life.

*Bookstack* My dad use to say the same thing: "Don't get in fights, but if someone starts one, you better finish it! Or I'll be finishing it a home!"

*Books2* What's strange is daddy would beat the heck out of us with a belt, but he never believed hitting in the face. That carried on to me in fighting. I didn't like hitting in the face. Of course. as I got older and on my own at such a young age, I learned to do what I had to just to stay alive. Doesn't mean I liked it though. I was a short, little badass, simply because I knew if I wasn't something bigger and badder would come after me and I was far away from my family and friends.

*Crazy* I like you, was glad when that period of my life was over. But I had learned to survive like that, so some of it hung around and completed me as who I am.

*Peace* I'll always choose peace over fighting/arguing. I'm happy to say during all my trials and errors, I have evolved. *Heart*

Thanks so much for sharing your intimate writing with us. I appreciate YOU, also! *Delight*

Tracey


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, sfttarget ! I am reviewing your piece on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"  [ASR]! We welcome you to WDC (writing.com). You have landed on much more than a writing site, but a true writing family! We are all so glad you are here. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to click on my envelope by my handle, 'intuey' it will take you straight to the email forum to write me. Please do so with any questions or help you may need! Clicking on the briefcase next to a handle will take you to that person's port (portfolio) where their writings are held. *Delight*

*Heart* I picked this piece because I am an extreme animal lover -- which stretches to all like (except maybe the huge palmetto flying roaches we have in Florida *Shock**Laugh*) They give me the creeps, can't help it.

*Reading* I remember saving bugs, like beetles, out of puddles of water and even the bathtub. I remember watching them do the same as your bumblebee, stretching and shaking its body the way it knows how. Then finally moving away and carrying on with its' original path. I always remember thinking, "I wonder if he knows a human just saved him. That we're not all bad. Will he tell the story of being saved to his family?" *Thinker*

*Baretree* I love that you shared this with your little girl. A respect and love for all life. My bet is she will remember it forever. It will be a very special, intimate memory, shared between you two, always. *Heart*

It was nice running across your port and this writing. I hope to see you more around WDC. Don't forget to contact me if you have any questions. Also, it would be great if you could take a minute and set up your biography tab! *Bigsmile*

Have a great day! *Penb* WRITE ON!~ *Penb*

*Heart* Tracey
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey Elycia! I came across your writing by clicking on the 'Read and Review' link. *Cool*

*Sick* I don't know if I would be able to handle a durian. I like the smell of pumping gas at a gas station, but to think of tasting it? Na, don't think so! *Rolling*

*Think* This was a very interesting article though. I have never heard of a durian, and if not for your article, I don't know if I ever would have. Your words paint the picture clearly, of the experience of eating one. You cover not only the physical characteristics of doing so but also the emotional experience. Nicely done! *Delight*

*NoteY* You did a great technical job with your piece. There were only a couple of minor spots I noticed:

*Bulleto* leaked gas from the kitchen and people

kitchen. and People...

*Bulleto* discussions with a durian breathe.

durian breath. (She has sweet breath) (I kept saying,
breathe, Baby.)

*Think* I have a question. You said that the durian makes you over-heated and not to drink alcohol with it. Does the fruit make you high or imapired in any way?

*Heart* Thanks so much for sharing such an interesting piece with us. I enjoyed it. *Smile*

*Peny* WRITE ON! *Peny*

*Heart* Tracey


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Review of Slaughterhouse  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Flowerw*Hey,willwilcox! This is a review from {ritem:1984256 [E] ritem:1565040} *Flowerw*

*Reading* I don't know how you do it! You can write about absolutely anything and sweep me away in your words. How I ever got past the 'kill-line' I'll never know. I hope that's not how they really do it. Why can't they just put them all to sleep first? I don't know how I still eat meat. It doesn't make sense. I'm a huge animal lover and I think it's just cruel and inhumane how they treat animals and yet, I still eat freaking meat! *Angry* *Sick* Go figure. *Laugh* Though in all actuality, as long as I have chicken, I can probably do without all other meat. *Rolling*

Your character was done away with just in time. He was fixing to cause some real damage and I'm sure once he got started there wouldn't be any stopping him!

*Balloon2* Title and Description - Your daughter sort of attracted me and sort of repulsed me
*Laugh* But after I read the description, I knew with some trepidation, I'd be reading the story. *Crazy*

*Flower1* Characters - Your main character is very well written and quite a piece of work. His momma just set him up for that, didn't she? Shame on her! *Pthb* *Laugh*

I was able to get to know your character intimately. He definitely worked in the wrong field--too much to feed the 'insane' part of his brain!

*Balloon4* Setting - Unfortunately, your setting was well done. I was sadly able to envision each scene as I read. *Rolleyes* *Laugh*

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I liked how well you wrote your character. The reader is able to be inside of this crazy man's head with him. Well done! *Thumbsup*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - I know it's not much help, but your piece was well written. I don't have any suggestions for you. Nicely done!

Thanks so much for sharing your writing with us! I always enjoy my time in your port!

*Quill* WRITE ON! *Quill*

Tracey
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Review of The Scream  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Flowerw*Hey,willwilcox! This is a review from "Invalid Item"  and "Anniversary Reviews"  [E] *Flowerw*

*Reading* Is this what they mean by "Nice guys finish last"? Poor guy. The heart he was trying to protect so fiercely has now given up the ghost. *Sad*

I liked the twist of this story based on an old storyline. With your words, you made it your own. The ending was unsuspected and well done. I actually thought he was already dead all along. Well done! *Thumbsup*


*Balloon2* Title and Description - How can a horror genre lover not be attracted to your title? *Bigsmile* It drew me in and the description pulled me in further to want to read your piece.

*Flower1* Characters - You always do a great job penning your characters. Your character in this story is no exception. The reader is able to get to know him well and is pulled into his world. Nicely done! *Delight*

*Balloon4* Setting - Your setting is well written. I especially liked when you were describing the ghosts. Not easy to do, but you made it seem so.

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I enjoyed the twist at the end. It wasn't quite what I was expecting. I also enjoy your overall writing. Your words have a way of pulling in and hooking the reader. *Delight*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - I didn't notice any grammatical errors. Your story is great just as it is. *Smile*

Thanks so much for sharing your story with us. I enjoyed it!

*Quill* WRITE ON! *Quill*

Tracey
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Flowerw* Hey, kenzine! This is a review from "Invalid Item"  and {ritem:1565040) *Flowerw*


*Reading* Wow! What a miraculous story! How in the world could your ex-husband NOT believe that was a miracle? He was there! It's sad how some people cannot see the miracles of the good Lord, even when they're right in front of their face!

I'm so glad you called out to God in those few seconds. I'm sure it saved your lives!

I have had miracles on the road as well. One wreck I almost got in was similar. There's absolutely no way in the world I would have been able to turn my car in two opposite directions going as fast as I was (a car pulled out in front of me) on a small two-lane highway, and never leave the road. I continued on down the road as nothing ever happened. Time slowed down for me also. I remember making eye contact with the young man I should have hit head on. I still remember the look of shock and fear in his eyes--I still remember not only his eyes but his face and hair as well. My steering wheel was broken, because I pushed so hard on it, trying to avoid the inevitable. The road's name? Blue Angel *Delight*


*Balloon2* Title and Description - The title definitely caught my attention and the description pulled me right in. I knew I had to read this story and I'm so glad I did! *Angel*

*Flowerb* Characters - Even though this is a nonfiction story, you did a wonderful job writing about all of those involved. The shock, fear, and even disbelief were all well done. I felt like I was there with you. Nicely done! *Thumbsup*

*Balloon* Setting - The reader was easily able to envision each scene as it unfolded. I knew from the title and description a miracle was going to take place, but I still held my breath.

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I am so thankful for God's mercy. He is such an awesome God. The story is well written. *Thumbsup*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - I know it isn't much help, but your story is perfect just the way it is! Thanks so much for sharing this fabulous story with us!

*Quill* WRITE ON! *Quill*

Tracey
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Flowerw* Hey, Kenzie This is a review from "Invalid Item"  *Flowerw*


*Reading*Wow! What a miraculous story! How in the world could your ex-husband NOT believe that was a miracle? He was there! It's sad how some people cannot see the miracles of the good Lord, even when they're right in front of their face!

I'm so glad you called out to God in those few seconds. I'm sure it saved your lives!

I have had miracles on the road as well. One wreck I almost got in was similar. There's absolutely no way in the world I would have been able to turn my car in two opposite directions going as fast as I was (a car pulled out in front of me) on a small two-lane highway, and never leave the road. I continued on down the road as nothing ever happened. Time slowed down for me also. I remember making eye contact with the young man I should have hit head on. I still remember the look of shock and fear in his eyes--I still remember not only his eyes but his face and hair as well. My steering wheel was broken, because I pushed so hard on it, trying to avoid the inevitable. The road's name? Blue Angel *Delight*


*Balloon2* Title and Description - The title definitely caught my attention and the description pulled me right in. I knew I had to read this story and I'm so glad I did! *Angel*

*Flower1* Characters - Even though this is a nonfiction story, you did a wonderful job writing about all of those involved. The shock, fear, and even disbelief were all well done. I felt like I was there with you. Nicely done! *Thumbsup*

*Balloon4* Setting - The reader was easily able to envision each scene as it unfolded. I knew from the title and description a miracle was going to take place, but I still held my breath.

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I am so thankful for God's mercy. He is such an awesome God. The story is well written. *Thumbsup*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - I know it isn't much help, but your story is perfect just the way it is! Thanks so much for sharing this fabulous story with us!

*Quill* WRITE ON! *Quill*

Tracey


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Review of The Scream  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Flowerw* Hey there, willwilcox! This is a review from "Invalid Item"  *Flowerw*


*Reading* Is this what they mean by "Nice guys finish last"? Poor guy. The heart he was trying to protect so fiercely has now given up the ghost. *Sad*

I liked the twist of this story based on an old storyline. With your words, you made it your own. The ending was unsuspected and well done. I actually thought he was already dead all along. Well done! *Thumbsup*


*Balloon2* Title and Description - How can a horror genre lover not be attracted to your title? *Bigsmile* It drew me in and the description pulled me in further to want to read your piece.

*Flower1* Characters - You always do a great job penning your characters. Your character in this story is no exception. The reader is able to get to know him well and is pulled into his world. Nicely done! *Delight*

*Balloon4* Setting - Your setting is well written. I especially liked when you were describing the ghosts. Not easy to do, but you made it seem so.

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I enjoyed the twist at the end. It wasn't quite what I was expecting. I also enjoy your overall writing. Your words have a way of pulling in and hooking the reader. *Delight*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - I didn't notice any grammatical errors. Your story is great just as it is. *Smile*

Thanks so much for sharing your story with us. I enjoyed it!

*Quill* WRITE ON! *Quill*

Tracey


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Review of Slaughterhouse  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Flowerw* Hey willwilcox This is a review from "Invalid Item"  *Flowerw*


*Reading* I don't know how you do it! You can write about absolutely anything and sweep me away in your words. How I ever got past the 'kill-line' I'll never know. I hope that's not how they really do it. Why can't they just put them all to sleep first? I don't know how I still eat meat. It doesn't make sense. I'm a huge animal lover and I think it's just cruel and inhumane how they treat animals and yet, I still eat freaking meat! *Angry* *Sick* Go figure. *Laugh* Though in all actuality, as long as I have chicken, I can probably do without all other meat. *Rolling*

Your character was done away with just in time. He was fixing to cause some real damage and I'm sure once he got started there wouldn't be any stopping him!

*Balloon2* Title and Description - Your daughter sort of attracted me and sort of repulsed me *Laugh* But after I read the description, I knew with some trepidation, I'd be reading the story. *Crazy*

*Flower1* Characters - Your main character is very well written and quite a piece of work. His momma just set him up for that, didn't she? Shame on her! *Pthb* *Laugh*

I was able to get to know your character intimately. He definitely worked in the wrong field--too much to feed the 'insane' part of his brain!

*Balloon4* Setting - Unfortunately, your setting was well done. I was sadly able to envision each scene as I read. *Rolleyes* *Laugh*

*Flower3* What I like about your piece - I liked how well you wrote your character. The reader is able to be inside of this crazy man's head with him. Well done! *Thumbsup*

*Balloon4* Suggestions - I know it's not much help, but your piece was well written. I don't have any suggestions for you. Nicely done!

Thanks so much for sharing your writing with us! I always enjoy my time in your port!

*Quill* WRITE ON! *Quill*

Tracey


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