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Review by RiverWalker
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Very good! I really enjoyed that lesson, one we should all heed. Although, poof Josh, will he be in for an awful dinner with so many he has offended.

There should be more stories like this one, ones that teach us all what like is truly about. I like your upbeat attitude.
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Review of Not Today  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (3.5)
I truly believe that poems like this are best understood by the ones who write them, I know, I have written a few myself. When I go back and read them, I still feel the pain, but it is soon forgotten again as I become distracted and for that I am glad.

You do express the grief well and the person determination not to forget, but add alittle hope here and there and it may sound even better. Keep writing.
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Review of Anonymous  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nice, I wish I had said that.
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Review of Dying  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You write poems like I used to and they are soul cleansing. Save every one and you will see your progressive progress. Keep wtiting.
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Review of Working Title  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This kind of jumps around. I see your point of saying you are not sure what it is about, neither am I. You might stick to one character per chapter and elaborate on them. Charlie sounds like a good character, you really bring her to life. Good luck and keep writing.
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Review of My own Eulogy  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (4.5)
I glad you hae the courage to write that. My beloved dog died 12 years ago and I still cannot not write about her waiting on the hill for me - yet. One day I hoe to. Your poem is beautiful.
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Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (4.5)
What you see as a distrubance, I see as an adventure. I face every day as a test, all I must do is pass it and I will get another day of an adventure. I try to smile at everything, even through the gravity waves, they are just another e ticket ride.
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Review of Untitled  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (4.0)
No longer in your life?
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Review of Untitled  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting. It has potential. Why was she naked? Why did she have a knife? Who was the Goddess? There is much you can do with this. Keep writing.
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Review by RiverWalker
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
The only reason I rated this as a 3.5 was your lack of detail. the paragraph:
“Many-times-great grandson Phineas, is that any way to treat your elders,” the Sandman sneered, taking on his usual appearance of a man in his mid-fifties. He now wore a robe type outfit. The robe he donned was red in color with silver streaming through it like sand blowing the dessert. His salt and pepper hair was pulled back into a ponytail. His hair isn’t very long and stops at the top of his shoulders. “I should teach you a lesson, but. . .” I glared at him. “But, we don’t have time. Don’t worry, Phineas, I’ll get you eventually.”

is very good, I can visualize Alexander. But I have no idea what La, De or Da look like exept they are probably wearing pink. It sounds like a good story plot and I shall be interested to see where it is going. Keep writing, forever.
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Review of Larry's Body Shop  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I think the writing is good and your characters realistic. Although, I have been around guys in a garage and they speak alot worse than that. I was surprised that no one mentioned "If I have that girl right now, I'd ..." That is what I would expect, by maybe I have been around too many garages. Keep writing.
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Review by RiverWalker
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is beautiful, a situation we will all have to face one day. I saw no stress, only love.
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Review of Prologue  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (4.5)
You do not seem to be new to writing. Your descriptions are very good as they paint a picture to follow along. I am sure you have great plans for your human and I would be interested to read the next piece. I personally, am not good with foreign accents (like the Scottish) or complicated names. I would prefer to see nick names after the grand long names and titles, but I also read C.J. Cherryh and she is a master of odd ball names. Good luck, let me know when the next piece comes along.
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Review of Romantic  
Review by RiverWalker
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a short piece, but it says volumes, the perfect way to write. You make me invision the times and that was wonderful, thank you.
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