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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Another great chapter. I love the way the characters talk. They make me laugh. I love the interactions of the characters as well. Especially Gordy and his girlfriend. If I was to do a little critiquing though, I noticed a few grammatical errors, if you're looking for critiquing. If not then disregard that part of my review. On to the next chapter. Cheers, mate.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like the way you ended this chapter. This chapter was beautifully written. I liked the dialogue between Annie and the blacksmith as well. I was saddened by how the children treated her too, which is a good thing. Good job on the chapter. I look forward to reading more.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
It cracked me up when Simon tried pulling the whole "decade" routine to try and seduce Gloria. That was great. Gloria is a great character because she knows what she wants, even if means jeopardizing their relationship. I love a strong woman. All in all, a good start to the story.
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for entry "Chapter Five
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (5.0)
This might be your most powerful chapter yet, and that has nothing to do with magical power. I am impressed with Sawyer's response to her mother accusing her of being irresponsible. I am looking forward to seeing what happens in the next chapter. Good job.


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for entry "Chapter Four
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (4.5)
Another excellent chapter! The more I read from you, the more I like it. I did notice a few grammatical errors, but, other than that, this was another well-written chapter. I really like how the characters respond to Sawyer's newfound powers, and I look forward to reading more.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was fun to read. I really like the characters. However, I noticed a lot of grammatical errors that need to be addressed. I also noticed a couple of spots that were repeated. Other than that, I think this is a really good story, and I look forward to reading more.


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Review of Death of a Clown  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I think you did pretty good for your first attempt at using a prompt. I can relate with Peterson not getting a fair chance in life, whether it's self inflicted or otherwise. Anyways, I thought this was really good. As far as critiquing goes, I don't see anything wrong with this piece. Really well written. Good job, and good luck finding a contest.


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for entry "Chapter Three
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (5.0)
I must say that I am really becoming a fan of yours, and of Sawyer's and Quinn's. With that being said, I really don't have anything to say about it as far as critiquing goes. This chapter is really well written. Great job. I can't wait to read the next chapter.


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for entry "Chapter Two
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (4.5)
I want to start out by saying that there are a few grammatical errors in this chapter. I am also confused about the sentence in the paragraph where you're talking about Brighton Oaks that says "every year..." it says "the town square and three an autumn carnival" three what? Or is it supposed to be "there". I'm a little confused on that. Other than that, I loved the chapter. I look forward to reading more.


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Review of Foresight  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This was a good read. The plot is good. I'm interested to see if the black shirts are good guys or bad guys. As far as critiquing this work, I don't really see anything wrong with this piece. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more. Good luck.
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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (5.0)
I would like to start out by saying that I LOVE your characters. I can't wait to read more. I am definitely interested in reading more about the Celts. They seem mysterious. Other than, there was one part that confused me but I can't find it now. I can't wait to read more.
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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (4.5)
The recipe you incorporated in your memory sounds really good right now. I should have my wife try to make it, with your permission, of course. With that being said, I noticed a couple of grammatical errors you may want to look at. Otherwise, this was a good read.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I loved your play on the names. That was brilliant. You also had me laughing from beginning to end. It was very well written, although I noticed a couple grammatical errors. I loved the characters. Especially Beth. My favorite was flizwix the squirrel, though. I look forward to reading more from you.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing your tips and ideas on plotting and structure. It has given me some questions to really think about. It also gave me an idea on how to begin and end my story, but, like you said, how do I get from beginning to end? That is what I have to figure out, and I appreciate you helping me see that. Thanks for the insight.


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Review of The Irish Sweater  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
That was beautiful. I could feel the warmth of the sweater, but, I also sensed a deep sadness from something from your character's past. Anyways, it was well written. I don't even have anything to critique in this work. Good job. Take care, and I look forward to reading more from you.


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Review of The Fallen Demon  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This was a fun read. I found one misspelled word. In the part where the demon burns the woman with the magi robes, you said "conjurer". It should be "conjure". Other than that, this is really well written, and I look forward to reading more. Have a good time.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a great story. I was roaring in laughter from beginning to end. My ribs hurt from laughing so hard. I loved the twist at the end when it turns out that Santa was involved in sweatshops. That was great. I really have nothing to critique about
It is really well written. Great job.


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Review of HIM  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a beautiful story so far. Other than a few grammatical errors, it is really well written.

My overall impression of this story can be summed up with one word, beautiful. It has a beautiful storyline and beautiful characters. I look forward to reading more.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello. This was a fascinating read. I was a bit confused in one part though. I got confused about the No Trespassing signs, so you might want to revise that. There's also a few grammatical errors you may want to look over also. Beyond that, I really enjoyed it. Have a pleasant day.


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Review of Martha  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very well written piece. I appreciate Martha's power and respect it. I look forward to reading more.


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Review of Break Bad  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello. I just wanted to give you a few pointers. First, there's a couple of misspelled words. Also, I'm a little confused who the "hero" is. Otherwise, this is a good start to your story.


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Review of Prologue  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a powerful whirlwind (no pun intended) of emotions. The tension of indecisiveness is really gripping and somehow, satisfying. I am glad I came across your prologue. It gives me a good feel for how a good prologue should be, as I am new to the prologue process. Very well done.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is such a fun read. A heroic dog saving more of his kind, yet has enough compassion to save one who isn't. I loved it.

I noticed a couple of grammatical errors though. Other than that, I have nothing else to point out. I look forward to reading more.


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Review of My baby  
Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: E | (5.0)
This isn't as bad as you think it is. I love it. It is definitely something to build on.


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Review by Istvan Janos
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
What a tear jerker with a feel good finish. It was a great read. Are you a singer, too like Jeremy? I really like your writing style. There are a couple of spelling errors, though. Will there be more to this? If so, I really look forward to reading it. Well done.


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