|Hi! I'm Jade Amber and I'm giving you a review!
Now this is a good story about a girl who goes out on a date with someone she just met online and gets the biggest slap in the face by the world.
This could be a true story, stuff like this has happened many times, and you did a good job telling it in a story.
Though, the rating is a bit off.
This story, in my opinion, should be rated 13+ or 18+ at the highest, mainly because of the language and sexual abuse.
All in all, the only problems I see are problems that I sometimes have.
In the sentence "Finally after two looooooong hours I went to POP's bar.", shorten the 'looooooong' to 'long' and put a comma after 'Finally' and 'hours'.
In some sentences, you need to capitalize your sentences.
Also, in the fourth line in between the two sentences, you put a long line of periods.
Ditch the dots and put a comma in between the two sentences to make it look nicer.
In another sentence "So of course I clicked ok and like 10 minutes later I got a message from him.", again, comma after 'So', 'course' and 'after', change the 'after' to 'later', and write 10 like ten.
Same when you mention the old man's age, change it to fifty instead of it being 50.
It's just neat when you do that.
But again, good job with this piece!
Oh, and by the way: