I love the... dark positivity in this piece. Poetry can be an easy thing to write, just throw some words together until it works, but good poetry is more difficut. With good poetry one must evoke emotions and images, and you have succeded at that. I would like to see more poetry from you in the future.
Fantastic. It is truly hard to find good writing for free these days, and this is a gold-mine. The piece was fantasticly written and told a good story in a fair amount of time. It didn't feel rushed or amature as I have come to expect in recent years and I was truly impressed with the style. Thanks for writing, and keep it up!
This is a clever use of rhyming and meaning. It is truly beautiful. Most people lose the meaning of the poetry by trying to make it rhyme or loose the interest and flow by tossing the rhyme scheme to the wind and they lose the power of the words. This poem is a perfect ballence of Rhyme and Soul. Congratulations on a true work of art.
This is by far the best poem i have read here. The meaning is deep, the passion appearant, and the message clear. The structure is there and it speaks to the soul. Keep writing!
The rhyme scheem is off, i see this a lot. So, it's not so bad. The poem is touching and I can feel the dismissed pain in the words. My only recomendation is doing some poetic research, this poem could go from good to ... wow!, depending on the structure.
This IS good, but it has more of a rap feel to it. I could see this poem going with a beat and being slung into a mic, This is only because of the non-traditional rhym scheem. Still great poetry.
lol, fun! I think that this is a cool quiz with a lot of fun in it. Im reading The Dark Tower series now. Im just finishing book 2. Have a great time out there fellow gunslinger. I hope you have a good time on WDC and enjoy the site. You need to keep it up.
Nice poem, I really like it. I usually prefer ryming poetry, but this had a nice little flow and the content was nice. I think that this poem could be interperted many different ways. I think that you would enjoy some of my work. Check out my profile and leave me some feedback.
This is an awesome piece. I really liked it, though it seemed to be aimed at a younger audience the way you worded it. I really liked it. I appreaciate people who can make sence of something in nature and make it into a good work of fiction. All I can say is good work.
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