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Review of A Sister Lost  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Nicki D89

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Sister Lost

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. I always like to see acrostic poems begin with the first letter in bold or a larger font, so that the words it spells out are easier for the reader to see. I just think it's more attractive that way.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. Really pulled at my heartstrings and brought a tear to my eyes. I will remember this because of my own experience with losing contact with my sisters and brother for over two years after my mother died. We got into a fight and I did not speak to them for over two years. One Christmas my sister called me up and said to come to Christmas because she loved me and they all missed me. I went and I'm so glad I did because that following February, my one and only brother died at the age of 39. I to this day regret not speaking to them for two years. I just keep thinking of all that time I lost with my brother. If this is a true story, I hope you get your sister back. No one can ever take the place of a sister, not even a friend. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. There is a lot of feeling in this piece. I can tell the difference between someone being angsty and someone writing from experience, and I could feel the pain and the loss in your heart as I read it. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. This poem really touched my heart. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, OluPero Metabel

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: I'm a girl and I like it!

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was off and the flow was choppy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. First off, some of your sentences are to long which make the rhythm off and the flow choppy. I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. By doing this it would make your flow and rhythm and flow much better. Secondly I would place , a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example:

I'm a girl and I like it !
I was created female,
Carved out and sculpted.
A brilliant work of art;
My depths and contours,
Shadowing the mystery within.
My hills and valleys a delight to behold.

 By doing these few things would make your rhythm and flow much better.

Overall: Good imagery of what it feels like to be a girl, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, njames51

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Glimpes of Heaven

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. I could just imagine in my mind how wonderful heaven is by your imagery. Great Job!! You've created a very vivid piece. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. A wonderful pocket of poetry wrapped into one space. Very Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Magoo

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Captain Banana Peel

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Overall: This is a very good and hilarious poem. Thanks for giving me my laugh for the day. You accomplished a simple and beautiful rhyme rhythm, you make it look so easy! I like the tone and subject of you piece. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I guess my favorite phrase is:

My cape is white; my suit is brown;
I zip and zap all through the town.
Don't call today. I have to say.
I hurt my pinky yesterday.

 I found this phrase very funny. This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Skirts of Rain  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, winklett

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Skirts of Rain

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, typingrhyme

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A WALK IN THE PARK

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. How wonderful. While reading this I shared your adventure in the park. Thank you for sharing this heart-warming moment with me. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This is a great concept for a poem. You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Have a little picnic.
Invite a friend or two.
Just relax in the sun.
The park is there for you.

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"

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Review of Frozen Heart  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, Friday13Girl

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Frozen Heart

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors. I did find a few spelling errors: In stanzas 3 and 4 you need to capitalize the word (I) In stanza 9 you have (frezze} should be: (freeze).

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm and flow are a little choppy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: In stanza 5 you have: I think i have a horn on the of my head. This sentence does not make any sense. My suggestion would to put it like this:

I think I have a horn on my head.

 But I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. If you read it out loud then you will be able to hear the rhythm and flow. Which would make it much better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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Review of Broken  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, Lina

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Broken

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm and flow are very choppy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also your lines in some areas are to long. But I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. By doing this in my opinion it would make your rhythm and flow better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. About a love that has gone bad. I kind of get lost because of the rhythm and flow was choppy. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!


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Review of "A Man Among Men"  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Kings

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "The WDC Angel Army" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: "A Man Among Men

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: First off I send you my deepest condolence and prayers. May God help you though this trying time. This is a poem about your beloved father, who is now deceased and in Heaven with his Creator. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. The reader can tell that you loved and respected your father very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. I, too, was blessed to have a special relationship with my father, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line.Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

I found out to late how brave Dad was.
Give respect to this man with my love.
Never expected more than what he gave.
No greater man have I known to this day.

 This is one of the loveliest poems I've read. There is such beauty in every line. It's honest and touching. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Prosperous Snow

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Prayer In The Valley Of The Shadow

Impression Of Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. Lovely idea. I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. A wonderful message. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! This is an uplifting piece about the importance of faith in our lives. You make many excellent points about the need for faith in our lives. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Test by test you give me strength to transcend
The doubts that steal from me Your love’s cheer,
Glory of the Lord, Beloved and Friend,
I strive each day your words to comprehend.

 Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! Keep hiding God's word in your heart! I enjoyed reading this spiritual piece. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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Review of Words  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Carolyn Darnton

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Words

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: What a very emotional poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Speaks of a marriage that has ended. Bitterness is found here. Unable to understand and confused. Left alone and lonely. What a sad situation that person is in. While reading this poem I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair of this person. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Although this was a very sad poem about a marriage breakup, I enjoyed reading your poetic words. Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, rachie

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: This is Where the Castle Stood

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm and flow are a little choppy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: Some of your sentence are to long which makes the rhythm and flow choppy. I would go back and shorten some of these sentence to make your rhythm and flow better. But, this is only my opinion.

Overall: This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, wworsham

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Why Throw a Funeral

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is okay. The flow is a little choppy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: My only suggestion is that some of your sentence are to long. Which makes the rhythm and flow choppy. I would suggest going back and fixing this. It would help your rhythm and flow much better if you would shorten some of your sentences.

Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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Review of Little White Lies  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, SWPoet

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Little White Lies

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem, which caught my interest.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Something like that gives a terrible scar..no one can know the feeling one has inside from that sort of abuse..one can feel shot down, broken, and wrecked. It wasn't your fault..no one has the right to hit anyone to taunt to torture taking away from them who they are. One ends up wondering why..what happened. This poem hit a emotional cord with me because my husband use to physically and mental abuse me. Under NO CIRCUMSTANCE should any man hit a woman!!! This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful! The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Thank you very much for sharing this. I think that writing difficult pieces like this one that put your causes of concern out there are something every writer should pursue at least on occasion. There are so few ways to make people more aware and more involved in putting a stop to such atrocities, and this is one of the best avenues to incite change upon. I liked this poem because it was so well written. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Raphael

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Heaven,Earth and Sky

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem, which caught my interest.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. Poem about love. How simply beautiful. I like the tone and subject of you piece. This is a great concept for a poem. You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. You've created a very vivid piece. It's honest and touching. This poem was true to the subject and carried the message well. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Then, married in love,
We knew
We wanted to fly ~
So we did,
- Heaven – Earth – Sky -
- And I.

 You wrapped that up with lovely words and made this poetry worth to read. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a
beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of The Park  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, wworsham

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Park

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: This is really a lovely poem you have written here. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. In my mind reading this poem I could just picture all four seasons changing. You did a very good job with this. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. This is a great concept for a poem. You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout.
Your poem was wonderful.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Empty Chair  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, reper66

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Empty Chair

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is okay. Form of the poem is okay, and the flow is a little choppy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example:

Hail to the empty chair,
As we sit and eat this meal.

Hail to those that have sat in it,
Those that we call 'friend.

By doing these few things would make your rhythm and flow much better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. It is about coming together as one, uniting together. You conveyed this message very well in your poem. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! . Thanks for sharing this poem.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, SWPoet

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Still, I must write

Impression Of Title: A perfect title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, that caught my interest.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I can't find any suggestions to make this poem better.

Overall: This is an enjoyable piece that I am sure many writers will be able to relate to, I know that I have written poems when I was suppose to be working. I think everyone has done that now and then. You conveyed the passion of written poems very well in this poem. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed the smooth flow and the clear imagery in this poem. You've created a very vivid piece. I usually have a favorite phrase, but I just loved the whole poem. You've obviously spent some very creative energy in the construction of this bit of verse, made this a wonderfully smooth read. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!!

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!


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Review of Author  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, everydaydude

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Author

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is choppy. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is choppy as well.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on form of poem so your rhythm and flow would be much better. Example of my suggestion:

I have the right,
To do and change.
Bring others fortune.
And bring others pain;
To bring life and death,
Allow blind to see;
With the stroke of a pen,
Or the tap of a key.

 By doing this it will make your rhythm and make your flow better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I think a lot of writer's will be able to relate to this poem. Every writer wants some reaction from their readers from their' work they do. I think you expressed this very well throughout your poem. You have some really great ideas in here. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Countrymom

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: LUCKY FOUR LEAF CLOVER

Impression Of Title: A good perfect that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here about the four leaf clover. I can really relate to this poem, seeing I'm Irish and I do believe that the four leaf clove is magical. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. This poem was true to the subject and carried the message well. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

There's a lucky four-leaf clover
in the pocket of my jeans,
and everybody knows what
the four-leaf clover means.

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!!

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!


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Review of Rain  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello,Eric Noga

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Rain

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is a little choppy. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is a little choppy.

Word Choice: Word selection is and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on your poem. I think that some of you sentences are to long which makes the rhythm and flow choppy. I would try and shorten up these sentences so the rhythm and flow are better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!


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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Princess Megan Rose

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Princess In Distress

Impression Of Title: A perfect title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: What a great poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I think adding different colors to certain words really made your poem pop. I also think the picture added a lot to your work. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. Good depth of feelings. Love is felt here. Subtle passion as well. You've created a very vivid piece. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. Very nice originality and great imagination. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I must say that I think this was a pleasure to read and wondefully written.

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of WHISPERS  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, YellowRose

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Whispers

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase is:

May your dreams be bright as the summer sunrise
May you walk this day knowing you are loved

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. I enjoyed reading this lovely poem.

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Robin

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Return to Stony Man

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I really think the picture added a lot to your work I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. How wonderful. While reading this I shared your adventure. Thank you for sharing this heart-warming moment with me. The reader can tell you have great faith in God. Which is just lovely. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this spiritually motivating piece. Very Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Robin

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Mirrored Flashes of Time

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. Really pulled at my heartstrings and brought a tear to my eye. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I do remember the day Hurricane Katrina hit. It was most devastating to a lot of people. I remember it very well from watching it on T.V. I could not believe people were just flooding in water and their's houses were destroyed. I heard all about the looting and rape of innocent children. It really made me cry and made me think of how luck I was. What a sad situation these people had to endure. I could just feel the agony and despair in this poem. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Although this was a very, very sad poem, I enjoyed reading your poetic words. Nicely Done!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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