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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Raphael

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: January 21st, 2010

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. This is an uplifting piece about the importance of faith in our lives. You make many excellent points about the need for faith in our lives. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. Wow, wouldn't that be great if our Lord were to speak back to us. I have heard from some people that they do hear God speaking back to them. They tell me I must be open and to listen really hard to hear what God has to say. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

To know me, purify your heart,
Wait, and look above:
Then will you see, and hear, and learn
my wisdom and my love.”

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. Keep hiding His word in your heart. I enjoyed reading this spiritually motivating piece. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, YellowRose

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: YELLOW ROSES AND YOU

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: A loving tribute to your loved on. There is sadness, and some good memories. You paint a lovely picture of your loved one. The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Your depth of expression of loss and the love for your loved one was very well conveyed. Good depth of feeling. I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. Really pulled at my heartstrings and brought a tear to my eyes. About a woman who have lost here love. I did feel the agony and despair of this person. What a sad situation this person has to endure. I can not even begin to imagine if I were to lose my husband. Losing someone you love is never an easy thing. If this is a true story, I send you my deepest condolence and prayers. May god help you through this trying time. Very nice originality. Although this was a very sad poem, I enjoyed reading your poetic words. Very well Done!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello,Startiara

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Gentle Morning Kiss

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance,

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. This is an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. This is a poem about your beloved husband. This reminds me of a love letter which you wrote to your husband, and in essence, I believe this is what this really is. The reader can tell that you love your husband very much and that the two of you have a very special relationship. I, too, was blessed to have a special relationship with my husband and I love him with all my heart, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Lovely idea. This poem is like a waterfall of feelings. It expresses heartfelt things. You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Heart pounding, in anticipation of your first touch
A smile plays on your lips, as if you know this
Longing, wondering, do you know I need you so much?
You know, leaning forward giving me a gentle kiss.

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. This poem has touched my heart. Because it just reminds me of the love I have for my husband. You definitely belong here, you have an amazing talent. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. It makes us all think how lucky that we are to have some one who loves us so much. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Daizy

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Let Me Plan Your Splentabulous Party

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a great and funny poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I really thought by using different colors for Dr.Seuss characters and books was a very creative idea and really made your poem pop! I did get a few chuckle out of reading this poem. Thanks for given me a laugh for the day. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. Because who as a child has not read Dr. Seuss's books. Very nice originality and imagination. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this poem because it was well written and gave me some chuckles while I was reading it. Very Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Caress  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Hunters Moon

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Caress

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I thought the picture added a lot to your work.Such beautiful imagery! Good depth of feelings. Love is felt here. Subtle passion as well. You've created a very vivid piece. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. That was utterly amazing! Very nice originality and great imagination. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Awake, I find her taste, her touch, remain
to tempt me back into her realm again.

This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. You definitely belong here, you have an amazing talent. This is one of the loveliest poems I've read. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of A Robin's Song  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Obleo

This is a Rising Stars "Member to Member Review" and you are a fellow Rising Star!

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Robin's Song

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part is:

I think of you, my love, my life
and thank God for the gift of your beautiful light!”

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. I enjoyed reading your poem. Very Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of I WISH, I WISH  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Meg

This is a Rising Stars "Member to Member Review" and you are a fellow Rising Star!

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: I WISH, I WISH

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. I felt as if I were right there with you at that dinner table with all that great food. It really made me hungry for turkey. What a lovely poem about Thanksgiving. I think everyday we should give thanks for everyone and everything in our lives not just on Thanksgiving Day. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! Very nice poem and it was a pleasure to read your poetic words.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Money  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Tina R. Beshers

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Money

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. the flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a great poem you have written here about winning the lottery. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I really thought you putting your letters in green really added to you work and made your poem pop. Boy wouldn't that be Great to win the lottery. I buy tickets all the time. But no luck so far. LOL!! I like the tone and subject of you piece. I like the tone and subject of you piece. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This was a very good poem. I enjoyed reading your poetic words. Nicely Done!!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Tina R. Beshers

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Haiku, Senry and Tanka Oh, My!

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: Good imagery in all three poems, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality in all three poems. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. All three poem are very good and was a pleasure to read. Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Old Friends  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, njames

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Old Friends

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors. In stanza last line you forget to put a (.)

Word Choice: I do have a suggestion on your format,rhythm and flow of your poem. My suggestions would be to count you words when writing a poem. Read them out loud to see if the rhythm and flow are right. Example:

This is what you have:

I'm leaving old friends,
it hurts to move on,
across this old country,
driving along.

In my opinion the rhythm and flow are very choppy. Here is what I would do:

I'm leaving old friends,
It hurts to move on.
Moving across country,
While driving along.

 By doing these few things it will make your rhythm and flow much better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Speaks about leaving old friends behind and making new ones along the way. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of I love my bee.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Rusty

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: I love my bee

Impression Of Title: The uniqye is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice:

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece. Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: I just love this poem. This is a poem about your beloved wife. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. Again, this reminds me of a love letter which you wrote to your wife, and in essence, I believe this is what this really is. The reader can tell that you love your wife very much and that the two of you have a very special relationship. I, too, was blessed to have a special and wonderful relationship with my husband, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. This is an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Bees, Bees, two little Bees,
living out life as we think it should be.
One Bee a husband, one as a wife,
Two little Bees, and a wonderful life.
I LOVE YOU BEE!

 You wrapped that up with lovely words. You definitely belong here, you have an amazing talent. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy it as much as I have. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Jace

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: School's Out...Not!

Impression Of Title: The perfect is good, and fitting the content of the poem, which caught my interest.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a great poem. Wow, I can totally relate to this poem. It brought back memories of when I attended Catholic school. I too got a few wacks with the ruler. Man that surely did hurt. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene because of my own experiences with Catholic schools. You did a great job setting the mood to it. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a great poem! One in which I would highly recommend. I give you a big BRAVO!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jace

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Theater, The Theater

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a great poem you have written here. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. How wonderful. While reading this I shared your adventure in my mind as though I was at that theater. You've created a very vivid piece. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase is:

Heart
and soul
fulfills your
very essence.
Live.

You've obviously spent some very creative energy in the construction of this bit of verse, made this a wonderfully smooth read. Very Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Arpita

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Yesterday, Today, Tomorrow

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a great poem you have written here about time. This is a great concept for a poem. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. I like the tone and subject of you piece. It gets the reader thinking. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! Very nice originality. My favorite phrase was:

Tomorrow and Yesterday are only shadows of Time
It is just the Present that matters the most.

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Valentine  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, FailedChoices

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Valentine

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example:

A Valentine tale,
I here do tell,
of when I found,
my ne'er do well.

Overall: This is an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. A good poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of He Threatens Me  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, FailedChoices

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: He Threatens Me

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example:

He's reaching out horrible hands,
fingernails attempting to scratch me.
I stand between him and his plans,
I know it's only he that can match me.

Overall: This is a painful and emotional poem and it feels as though it was written from the heart. I assume that it was written from first-hand experience. If that is true, I am glad that you turned to writing as an outlet for your feelings. You can say things in poetry or other forms of writing that you would never consider telling to a friend. Writing can become a friend, who will listen to anything you need to share and who will never be judgmental
Your poem is like giving expression to to all the battered woman who are physically or mental abused, you spoke for all those poor woman who are afraid to speak out. This is such a sad, heartbreaking poem of a woman who is treated very badly.This person is abusing her, mentally and physically. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. I can really relate to this poem, because my husband use to abuse me. I have felt it and I can identified with the agony and despair of this person. So I know of what you speak. No man should EVER under any circumstance mental or physically abuse a woman. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. If this is a true story, my heart and prayers go out to you. Although this was such a sad poem and really struck a cord with me, I enjoyed reading it regardless. Very Nicely Done!!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of The Messiah  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Magoo

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Messiah

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. A wonderful message. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I like the tone and subject of you piece. Keep hiding His word in your heart. I enjoyed reading this spiritually motivating piece.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Faerie Magic  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, sick with mystery illness

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Faerie Magic

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is a little choppy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example:

Faerie magic is everywhere,
Look at the ring of mushrooms,
It's made by faerie magic.

 By doing these few little things it will make your rhythm and flow much better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. In my mind I could just picture the mushroom, pretty primroses and the four leaf clover. Nice originality and great imagination. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Good poem I enjoyed reading your poetic words.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Open ears  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Missy

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for: "Invalid Item" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Open ears

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a great poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Your poem was wonderful and a pleasure to read.

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work.

Have a Wonderful Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Jaliam

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: SUFFERING

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this spiritually piece.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of To the one I love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Arpita

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: To the one I love

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: This is an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy it as much as I have.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Sucide Recovery  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, Hollyfield

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Sucide Recovery

Suggestions: I do have some suggestions. First off, I would not capitalize all your letter. It is really distracting while reading. Secondly, I did find a spelling error in you title, you have (Sucide} should be (Suicide). Thirdly, I would put this in a different format and place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Here is an example of both:

STOP;
Don't do this it's not your time,
God has chances of every kind.
Your not to say when your life ends.
And only by GOD your life begins.

By doing these few things, it will make your rhythm and flow much better.

Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. Looking forward to reading it again if you choose to rework it. If you decide to re-work this poem, I would be more than happy to re-rate this poem. All you have to to is email me with the re-worked copy, my email is:janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Shine Down  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Rusty

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Shine Down

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. This is an uplifting piece about the importance of faith in our lives. I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. This poem was true to the subject and carried the message well. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Oh star of David shine this Christmas night.
Illuminate with everlasting light.

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. This is a very good piece. I enjoy reading spiritual pieces. Thanks for sharing this! One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of JUST FOR TODAY  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, njames51

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Just For Today

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. While reading this poem I thought you were speaking about my family. I come from a family of 7 and it is amazing how time flies by. All the niece and nephews are grown and have children of their own. We too sit around and talk about this past. So I know of what you speak. You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy it as much as I have. Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Stand With Me  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, YellowRose

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Stand With Me

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem, which caught my interest.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good assonance and alliteration.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. This is an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Wonderful! You've painted lovely pictures in the reader's mind. Good depth of feelings. Love is felt here. This is a great concept for a poem. You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

With your hand in mine
The magic will come through
A special moment just to share
A loving bit of mountain dew

This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. This is one of the loveliest poems I've read. There is such beauty in every line. It's honest and touching. A pleasure to read this emotional,heartfelt poem, a winner for me. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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