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Review of zanzibar  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (3.0)
Very interesting poem, for someone reasons it reminded my of a song by coldplay called "viva la vida" it had a line "Sweep the streets I used to own" i don't know why but that song popped into my head when i was reading this. You are a good writer and i think you should keep writing,
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Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (3.0)
I live in michigan and we get a lot of odd weather so the change in seasons is something we know a lot about. I really liked this poem, it was very well written and had some great rhyming. You should keep writing because i think you are rather talented at it.
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Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
This reminds me of a character from the show heros where the cheer leader could not die no matter what happened to her. I like this story and it was very interested and it's odd what kids will do when they get some kind of super powers. This is written very well and i liked it a lot!
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Review of Time in a Bottle  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: ASR | (2.0)
Interesting story, a little bit of a downer but well written and had some good imagery in it as well. I have never been a fan of anything that ends sadly, there are a couple exceptions but for the most part i like happy endings.

you are a good writer!
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Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (3.0)
I liked this poem, it had a fun rhyming scheme and was funny too! i like poems that have three parts, like in most thing the rule of threes is a good thing in my book. I think it's funny and witty! I wonder what it is truly about because what people see is not always what the artist intends.
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Review of Regretful Rita  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (2.0)
I like this poem, it had a good rhyming scheme and i think it got a lot of good imagery across. It was a little sad in the end and i am not a fan of sad endings unless they are done really well but thats just personal preference. Keep writing because you are rather good!
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Review of Unpredicted love  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
These are interesting stories and i think are written rather well, it's so stupid how little girls drool over boy bands. The girls in the first story sounds so much like a real person. It's really realistic in how you put in what she is thinking and the random trains of thought.
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Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (2.0)
I really liked this, it flowed rather well and i think it got some good feelings across. This was also kind of sad, it make me feel bad for the painter. I did not see any real spelling or grammar issues. I am not a fan of things that end on a sad note, maybe it's just me.
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Review of the plan  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (3.0)
This story was so funny! i loved it and i think it was very clever. I liked the cat more than the dog, love the way the cat talked and acted. I feel really bad for the dog but it's exactly how i would expect a cat to act. I feel like it could have been a little bit longer.
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Review of Mercy  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a very well written short story or part of a story, i was surprised at the end because i thought it was a dog the whole time. This was written very well and i loved the imagery you used. I found it very entertaining and it even made me laugh a little here and there.
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Review of Cities of Chaos  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (1.0)
This is a bit thick, i am not much for political pondering so i had a hard time getting into this. From a paper standpoint its fine and well sources and seems to follow the three part structure that most papers need to follow. Writing style does not show through very well with papers, i always got in trouble in college for trying to be too clever with my wording.
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Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (3.0)
This story was more than a little sad, my grandmother spent the last few months in a Hospice so this brought up a lot of memories for me. I think it was well written and it shines a light on a lot of things. Its something i would never wish on anyone, watching a love one pass away so slowly is hard,
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Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
This reminds me of when i need to go to the secretary of state honestly lol I have not spent a lot of time in a doctors office so i can't totally sympathise but i really like the wording and the imagery you used in this. It's well written and flows really well!
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Review of Pale Woman  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (2.0)
This reads like an old religious book, i wonder if this is from something because it sure feels like it. The words a very beautiful and well written, the imagery is great and you really give a feel for how powerful and perfect these beings truly are.
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Review of Untitled  
Review by Ben Crawford
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really like where this is going, you have a good start and you develop a good environment and your story has a great flow to it, It's clear when someone is a good or at least half decent writer because they can write clearly and not started with too much word over use.

You paint a very clear picture and i really want to know more!
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