javachille's (javachille) Reviews

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#3793582

Review of mad for death

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

I like the idea behind it, but some words are misspelled and some are used the wrong way (ie- their when it was supposed to be they're) but otherwise, it's a powerful meaning and has a dark, gothic like under tone that I really like.

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#3793575

Review of Sanctum

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (4.0)

I like this, it has a very powerful meaning behind such an -almost vague- writing. I don't like that there was no capitalization at the begining of some lines but the over all meaning was really indepth and well thought out.

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#3793554

Review of Meditation Room

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Rated: E | (3.5)

This is very good, funny twist ending and has good vocabulary and details.

I just want to know what strange object fell into the water that caused an odd stench. I don't quite understand that part.

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#3773336

Review of There's that feeling again...

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (4.0)

This is really good but I feel like it could've been a lot better had you not made it rhyme. Poetry doesn't have to rhyme. It was still good though, don't stress over it on my account.

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#3773331

Review of His Final Words

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Rated: E | (4.5)

This is the second sad poem I've read in a row and you guys are making me cry!! This is so good! TT_TT I really liked the ending! (The only thing that bothered me was that it rhymed. I mean, I realize a lot of poetry does but you don't HAVE to. I felt this could've been reeeeeally awesome had it been free verse. But that's just my opinion. Don't change it on my account.)

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#3773317

Review of A Dogs Best Friend

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (5.0)

This is so freaking sad!! Oh my god but I love it! I actually started to cry! This is the best freaking poem ever in the world! Don't change a single freaking thing!

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#3773311

Review of I've been stripped down

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (4.5)

This is beautiful! The meaning behind it is amazing! I have actually have had that feeling of having that one place/or person that you can just open up to. I really like how you say you've been stripped down but it's not sexual.

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#3764157

Review of Writing a poem

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (5.0)

This was really cute and really good! Everyone can relate to that time of sitting in front of a screen or paper wanting to finish a poem but the words won't come to mind then when they finally do it's like, "holy crap I'm amazing!!!"

This is awesome! Good job~

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#3761065

Review of Rag Doll

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (4.5)

That was a really good, though short, poem. I feel like it would have been a lot better had it been longer but the message is still there. It's so depressing but really makes you think. "what if our stuffed animals and imaginary friends really did have emotions and all they can think about is waiting for us to return and make them think what we want them to?" It puts a somber perspective on the thought of not playing with a stuffed animal for a long time.

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#3761058

Review of pale eyes

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (4.0)

The idea behind it is very morbid but the way the poem is written is amazing. It's so depressing and makes you think for a minute, "would you really know if someone who always seems happy was really dying on the inside?"

The third stanza though is slightly confusing and is hard to read but the rest is really good. I loved the incorporation of the last line of the poem. (I thought it would've been better had it been broken into two though but it's fine how it is.)

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#3761053

Review of Tennis Janitor

Review by javachille

Rated: E | (3.5)

I liked the idea and what it told but I felt like the actual flow of the poem was choppy. Some lines, I feel like, should have been extended or had a few extra words to make the flow better. I like the thought though, it was original and not something easily related too,but that someone knows what the janitor is feeling when they think back. Because everyone, at one point or another, has just run past a janitor offering no help at all.