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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (4.5)
great meta poem about following your muse. I recently discovered that Bing AI does a great job analyzing poems and I have been doing a lot of such analysis here's what it found about your poem
Sure, I can help you analyze this poem. Here are some of the main features of the poem:

The poem has eight stanzas, each consisting of two lines. The lines are roughly equal in length, creating a balanced and symmetrical structure.
The poem follows a regular rhyme scheme of AABBCCDD… throughout, meaning that the end words of each pair of lines rhyme with each other. For example, wonder and thunder, light and tight, anyway and say, etc. This creates a musical and harmonious effect, as well as reinforcing the main ideas and emotions of the poem.
The poem uses a mixed meter, meaning that the number and type of syllables in each line vary. However, most lines have either seven or eight syllables, and the majority of them are iambic, meaning that they have a pattern of unstressed and stressed syllables. For example, the first line can be scanned as: it IS / in THE / mind OF / poET. This creates a natural and flowing rhythm, as well as mirroring the speaker’s thoughts and feelings.
The poem uses various poetic techniques to convey its message and tone, such as:
Personification: The speaker attributes human qualities to abstract concepts, such as the mind of the poet, the rain, the night, and the breeze. This helps the speaker to express their imagination, creativity, and emotions, as well as making the poem more vivid and engaging.
Alliteration: The repetition of consonant sounds at the beginning of words, such as mind, of, and poet in the first line, rain and right in the third line, pen and here in the fifth line, etc. This creates a sound effect that draws attention to the words and enhances their meaning and impact.
Assonance: The repetition of vowel sounds within words, such as find and mind in the first line, dream and light in the third line, loved and loved in the seventh line, etc. This also creates a sound effect that adds to the musicality and harmony of the poem, as well as emphasizing the emotions and themes of the poem.
Imagery: The use of descriptive and figurative language to create pictures in the reader’s mind, such as the world of wonder, the loudest thunder, the dream of light, the softest bed, the power of life, etc. This helps the speaker to convey their vision, feelings, and hopes, as well as appealing to the reader’s senses and imagination.
Repetition: The use of the same or similar words or phrases multiple times, such as I know, I’ll, you are, and we all. This creates a sense of continuity, consistency, and emphasis, as well as reflecting the speaker’s confidence, determination, and sincerity.
I hope this analysis helps you understand the poem better. If you have any questions or feedback, please let me know


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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with Dark Dreamscapes  
Rated: E | (5.0)
very powerful short prose poem or drabble poem about an unintended consequence of nuclear war. I like how you recreated a mythical creature that takes advantage of the changed world. I would have and have written a story about a post nuclear war 2000 years in the future when the cockroaches who had become human like begin exploring human ruins wondering what had happened to humans. the roaches lived in the old cities in human buildings.


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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (4.5)

nice extented metaphors about writing as being a candle of hope. I like the second verse references to
My mellow glow with a glass of Chardonnay sparks the spirit of romance between a couple, as he reaches across the table to give her hand a gentle squeeze while the violins play Cupid’s entrancing refrain


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Review of Adrift  
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (5.0)
love the vivid images here describing writing following one's muse down dark rabbit holes of insanity before finding a gem to pluck. like the dream references too
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for entry "Form: Cinquain" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
a good cinquain poem captures the form exactly. I like the juxtaposition of parent and daddy, and the words generous and gifted. nice alliteration in lines 2 and 3 too. also like the words loving, laughing and leading


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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I liked this sarcastic wry story about a US Marine Corps recruiter dealing with anti-ROTC protestors at US Berkeley circa 2008. I can relate I never went to CAL, just Berkeley High School. My high school grades were just shy of the cut and back in 1974 the system was rigid. The top ten percent of high school GPA got into the CAL system, the next tier had to have a minimum SAT score total score, verbal x, and math x. I got the verbal score, but the math score was too low, so I failed. One of my friends went there and did Marine ROTC, joined the Marines, and retired as a colonel. regarding the story a minor editing suggestion first. You should make the typeface as large as possible, make it double-spaced, and indent the paragraphs. It is much easier to read that way. I copied it to Word and edited it so I could read it easier. I also ran a Grammarly check, and it pointed to a few minor edits regarding commas.

The story is a good one. Your character is well drawn although a bit too stereotyped. The protestors are also a bit stereotyped. and the story might be better if there were a dialogue between the characters leading to a slight change of perspective. Overall, a good story but could use a little more editing. This is my opinion and I get that criticism a lot too. Oh, I like the Naked Guy - he died a while back but since the story was written in 2008, he would have been alive then. Including him does add a lot to the depiction of Berkeley as a zany place which is it.


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for entry "Marriage?" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
fun little poem about an unexpected marriage proposal. This leaves the reader wanting to no know more about the encounter. and I wonder what would have happened if you had said yes to the proposal. I proposed to my wife three days after meeting her and we have been together now for 41 years.


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Review of Randomly Writing  
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
well done. I like the poem and I like the form you accidentally created. I too often start writing one thing which soon morphs into something else as my muse takes over and I merely channel whatever she wants = for some reason my muse is a woman. and often it goes down a dark twisted corner at the end.

I like the last lines the best


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for entry "Fernando Botero" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
hmm nicely done slightly erotic but not too graphic poem about encountering a statue of two lovers and imagining erotic thoughts that it inspires. I like the format first a few longer lines then two short staccato two-syllable lines ending with on my bed.


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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This nice acrostic poem reflects the essence of a mirror shows us as we appear to others and reflects our interior moods as well. I like the lines Me, Myself and I as it sums up the duality of what the mirror shows us.


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Review of Staremaster  
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
cool lovely thoughts expressed in this slice of true life poem. I would have added a few more details about the coffee shop, name, coffee you had, what kind of donuts you ate etc. the ending is nice.


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Review of The Pedestal  
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
great extended metaphor meta poem about love, life, one's soul, the moon and the sun and what it all means. love these lines

hining has never been enough for you
In my head, a mantra, all they’ve said
I could never compete with completeness, I am just a shattered stone
Mistaken for something more
I am only pieces and phases of myself
I still exist in all my memories
Life flies, flies by and I sit in place
Like the fool I am

like flies, flies by me works well

as did the end line like the fool I am


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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
very powerful and moving uplifting poem for these dark times we live in. Indeed we need to overcome hate, fear and dispair and not give into the constant fear mongering we hear from our so-called leaders. It is time for good people to demand an end to war, injustice and poverty.


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for entry "The Peace Symbol" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
a bit strange message the No implies that the peace symbol is a fraud and there is no peace, no nuclear disbarment and no hope. Or it implies the opposite. It portrays lots of questions, but no answers to the question of what peace is. I liked the ambiguity of the poem and the multiple meanings one can read into it.


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for entry "PUMPKIN - 56 LINES" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
nice true story told in an engaging journalistic fashion you captured the mood and spirit of pumpking carving and Halloween traditions.


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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful and heart-rending story about a favorite teacher's fake confession to an incident that may or may not have occurred. In any event, I can see why he was a favorite teacher -- he could create a fake rapport with the toughest audiences in the world - a class of high school juniors.
reminds me of when I was a foreign service officer and was addressing my high school class about foreign service. I described what we did and there was nothing. Then i started talking about the work of a counselor officer, particularly an American citizen's service officer. My story about my encounters with the Indian morgue and dead bodies got their attention!


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Review of Aura Of Authority  
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
loved this story about a young woman growing up and feeling her sense of power and authority as a life guard. I love the image of her chastising the young boys and asserting her power over them. You captured the scene perfectly. I like the image of her using her red whistle while the patrol man stands behind her reinforcing her authority.


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Review of Complex Numbers  
for entry "Morning Star" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
fascinating review of what we now know of Venus and what we thought of in the past. I would have liked to have seen a bit of a review of the past speculative fiction about Venus that you referenced but that is fine. I like this essay on Venus. I also share your concern that some are over-hyping climate change and it is not likely we will end up like Venus anytime soon. The only thing I might add is that there are some life forms here on Earth -bacteria that thrive on active volcanic eruptions that could conceivably live on Venus. but as far as sentient beings are very unlikely. I think that sometime soon we will have proof that there are alien civilizations on other planets. and that will change humanity in so many ways.


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Review of Randomly Writing  
for entry "Summer Haze" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I liked this snarky, dark take on the summer and the impact of the summer heat on our collective mental health. Oregon is not too bad - high every afternoon of about 93 to 95 F but the mornings and evenings are in the 60's to 70's range.


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for entry "Invalid Entry" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
swallowing emptiness over and over again
dark billowing infinite wastes
falling without end
breath caught by apathy

these short lines really capture the mood of the poem. I like the line "swallowing emptiness over and over again" as it captures the emptiness experienced when one is consumed with sorrow and fell like "one is falling without end"

I also like the "phrase caught by apathy"


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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
very different interpretations of the same photo prompt. I like how you make this poem from the POV of a flower just blooming in the sunshine doing its flower thing with out any thought or deeper purpose than just being there. Profound in a way.
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Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
like the contrast between life and the lessons it teaches us and love which makes life worthwhile and enjoyable. Life is indeed strange as is love. Love is a mysterious thing and something we don't fully understand. Nicely done linking the two concepts you nailed the format.


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for entry "Week 46 - Wings" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
a nicely done poem about wings of glass, the wax wings of Icarus, and Angels. I like how you went from one to the other, building to the end when you talk about the wings of angels. I would have added the wings of Eagles, and other birds. but this works nicely.
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for entry "Invalid Entry" 
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (5.0)
a cool and moving poem about marijuana and its medical and other benefits. it is now semi-legal throughout 2/3 of the states, in Canada, in Thailand and many other places. And legalization has proven to not be the end of the world, not to mention brings in lots of tax revenues. I like the flow and the message of this poem.


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Review of Insomnia  
Review by JCosmos
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
a powerful and moving poem about insomnia, something that I am quite familiar with as I have a bout of insomnia every few days. For me, O dark hundred 3 am to 5 am is the worst time. I often wake up at 2 am with a nightmare or two and then struggle to fall asleep only to give up about 5 am and wake up, and write down my nightmares and prepare for the coming day.


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