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Review by C. Powell
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
When I think of the seasons, I think of baseball and how it mirrors the seasons (and former commissioner Giammatti's thoughts on the subject) and how the seasons, like baseball, give you hope and break your heart, and worse, when you need them most, it's all gone. Your piece captures that kind of imagery well, the seasons changing over the course of the year, but then the quick and sometimes dramatic change also. (Especially true here in Texas at times) I also liked how you rhymed but did not stick to a particular format, giving it a free verse feel, but with some sense of rhyme. In all, well done.

Cheers,
Chris
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Review of Dying for freedom  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
My goodness, this was not what I thought it would be about, but you make some great assertions and I have to agree. Where does life begin? What is the right thing to do? Who's rights are more important? These are the questions I see in this. Personally, I used to be for a woman's right to choose. It's their body, right? Well, what about the body they are carrying? What about it's right to live? I'm not so sure people take these considerations in account all too often. In the end, people will do what they feel is right, often at the expense of others, the tragedy in the darkness of this world. A very well written and moving article. Thanks for writing it.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of Lost and Loved  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
A very touching piece, and something not touched on in most circles, the Pakistani/Indian conflict that has really raged since their separation. You capture a soldier's longing for home well, though the reporting of the fight seems a little more objective than I might of thought. Then there is a shift in emotions to the end... I think that if there is not such a dramatic emotional shift it would make a good piece even better. I also like how you capture the tactical situation and the terminology. Well done in that regard. In all, I found the story well written, but I think more could be done in the center of the piece to convey more of what is going on internally as well as without.

Regards,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
I dont think we can have darkness without light. I always feel I am riding the line between the two, chasing shadows, so to speak. You get a great sense of conflict and emotion in this, and I like the fact you strive for the light but recognise that darkness is inevitable. Still, the last lines are not so much naive as wistful I think, perhaps even imploring. In the end, well written and well done.

Cheers,
Chris
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Review of Hope  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well, I will say that hope is a fine thing, perhaps even the best of things. The world needs a litte more each day, and so do we. I like the emotions in this, at first tenuous, then there is the possible, then the hopeful, and finally, the expectant... a step beyond the hope, almost knowing it to be. In the end, it's the best we can do, but then we cant let it consume us either... the dark side of hope, I suspect. In all, well done, and well deserved award.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of John  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A very internal piece it seems of one trying to seek but not able to find. We certainly all have our demons and confronting them can be trying, and sometimes impossible. And there are times when you do have to run to find what you need. Very interesting in flow... a little choppy but does not distract at all, in fact I think enhances it. In all, well done.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of The Window  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
Sometimes hope is all we have and that can never be a bad thing. I would rather hope than the alternative. I am not so sure that this poem is as simplistic as you claim. In structure, possibly, but the heart of the matter is more complex than most admit, realise, or are sometimes capable of understanding. Another well done poem.

Regards,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
When I get the chance, I will read the essay on Boswell; however, wanted to comment on this first. It is pretty clear Shakespeare had to use a wealth of sources for a majority of his dramas and historical works. I am not as up on King Lear as I am on the histories or Hamlet, but followed a great deal because I recognise the sources that you cite in this. I take it you study Medieval literature, for some of the references go back quite a bit. I am not as up on my literary sources for the time period as my focus is history, though I admit much of the historical works of the 14th century have a literary feel to it (Most of Chaucer's work was intertwined as a mesh of fiction and non-fiction), but the medieval mind found it perfectly acceptable to mix a little fiction in with non-fiction. Makes my work frustrating, especially Jean de Froissart's Chronicles Siding with the English, he inflates casualty numbers for battles during the Hundred Years War to make himself look better in the eyes of the English.

That brings me to a point about Shakespeare in that many of his historical plays had to be modified to fit the prevailing mood of the time period, which was pro-Tudor and anti-Stuart/Lancaster/Plantaganet. Hence, when most people think of Richard III, they think of Shakespeare's characterization (or Sir Ian McKellen in the fine modern adaptation of the play), which was a little further from the truth. This is, of course, something not really applicable to King Lear, but indicitave though of the political realities in which Shakespeare worked. He had to make the play still look good for the government or it would be the last play he would write.

In all, I thought the essay was exceptionally well thought out and brought some interesting information on where and how Shakespeare might have gotten his sources for this play, and others.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of Pieces Of You  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very touching and romantic poem, quite nicely constructed and I do like the lines as quick little images that lightly touch on a larger scene. You also have a great command of description and the words feel like they have been thought out well for the right effect, which can be difficult at times. Oh, do like the nod to Emerson in the introduction. In all, excellent work.

Regards,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A very nifty conceit for the poem, and well crafted. Great from a visual perspective, but just as important, the poem reads well (and strange opinion here, I think poetry is better served being read aloud, but I know this medium makes it impossible) and is very touching. I think, as a nation, we have done better in honoring the soldier who must make sacrifices for our freedom. During Vietnam, the nation kind of lost its way. People certainly had the right to protest the war, but the way soldiers were treated then was unconscianable. Thankfully, we have moved beyond that and honor our troops regardless of the country's policy on war. Well done.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of Cinquain  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the fact you add the way the poem is constructed in this 'Poetry Styles' section. Informative and good. Reminds me of a haiku in some ways, probably the shortness. I like to see different styles but usually get bogged down and trying to make it fit. Still, I wind up with a structure most of the time, like my subconscious tells me how it needs to be done. Great work, as ever and proof that the quality of words can conquer a lack of quantity :)

Cheers,
Chris
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Review of Simply Rain  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nicely done and excellent imagery considering the poem was composed of two word lines and great job getting the rhyme down (something I confess to not being great at :) Just really liked the melodious flow to the piece. You capture nature well in this.

Regards,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great imagery of the wonder that is our galaxy. Creates a sense of longing to explore that wonderful void and see what lay within. It felt a little short, but only because I wanted to hear more. Wonderful poem.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of Nobody's Perfect  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I like the epitath... very Tombstone-ish and the interesting epitaths you see on the graves there (and in the movie) I like the quick short lines for the very long verse, but it gives a feel of the Old West shootout and that sense of urgency about those who are about to meet their end, and the ending was quite ironinc. Well done.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of Zorak 12  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very interesting story, and nice concept. I thought it was executed nicely as well. You gave out just enough information about the background of the societies and what was going on with Earth, the Berlixeauians, and the Johalimar to aid the reader, but not overwhelm them with detail (though I find background date neat, but some readers might feel it bogs them down). Also, using ADHD as the epidemic was a very clever conceit, not many would use it. (and it really is endemic amongst children, alas). The story moves well, and the plot is great, not feeling contrived in the slightest. In all, really well written story.

Regards,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good use of the storm/rain metaphor in this. I like the parallel of changing from narrator to the storm and back to the narrator. Excellent imagery and it helps the flow and tone of the piece, complementing it well. Well constructed and great work.

Regards,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
In a way, reads somewhat prosey, but the difference between poetic prose and prosey poetry is a fine line, so I dont quibble usually. (been accused of crossing such lines myself). The world is such an interesting, wonderful and terrible place all at once, and this piece seems to try and reach those emotions. It would be nice if we could resolve our differences, but the world never sees fit to agree with us. At any rate, nice work.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of Bad Kisser  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (5.0)
Did not quite expect how the poem would end, and great twist I think. The wording of the last verse was quite good indeed. The poem had some excellent imagery and flowed wonderfully. Great work, and well crafted, as the poem seemed to be wistfully romatic then kind of pulls the rug out from beneath you.

Regards,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well done, and I do know about this style, experimented with it on a couple of occassions (nothing online), very visual style, making the choice of words almost as important as what is being communicated. To me, poetry is always best when being read to someone, but this style is great in a medium like this when you have to read the words and not listen. Great work.

Cheers,
Chris
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Review of Witch Hunt  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Really good for a work and progress and you capture the fear and prejudice of the time well. Thankfully, the trials were finally vanquished before an American Inquisition could be set up. That would have but a crimp in the Revolution, had the witch hunters been allowed to propagate. The dialogue is a little contemporary, but then it is difficult to get the time period right.. heck, look at movies, they just dump Americanized language into the 14th century. :) Great work so far, and look forward to reading the rest.

Cheers,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
How true at times in describing the vagaries of professional sports. An interesting form of social commentary using a lunatic who charges the field while under the influence of legal drugs. As a bonafide sports junkie, I think we do pay too much attention to pro sports and athletes. On the other hand, if they werent there, then we would have some other form of violent entertainment to add to our lives. Of course, sport in America could be worse. We're not burning down soccer stadiums or murdering fullbacks for scoring on their own team (as happened in Colombia when one of their defenders scored off a deflection into their own goal, giving the USA one of the wierdest wins in World Cup history)... yet. We do have the occassional football riots (and I might have rioted the way the Cows stunk up the game yesterday), but sport here is still timid compared to Europe and other parts of the world. Great read, and funny throughout.

Cheers,
Chris
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Review by C. Powell
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I see how this can be prose, but could almost be poetry as well with the word usage. Still, does not quite have the rythmn necessary for a 'true' poem (but what then is a true poem? I'll leave that for the philosophers and English majors :)

I found this quite disturbing and chilling. The words had a haunting edge to them that captured the spirit of the woman finally free of her tired, empty life. Interesting viewpoint of her life being the sacrifice for her spouse's material gain. More telling than you know. What we do to enrich our own lives at the expense of others is one of the great tragedies of our existence.

An excellent work that makes one wonder what we do to others, or conversely, what others will do to us, sometimes without thinking. And it is especially cruel because we do this to the ones we love most. Exceptionally excecuted and a piece that makes one think.

Cheers,
Chris
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Review of Do Unto Others  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nicely constructed and appropo for the holidays, though it needs to be applied during the whole year. I guess this time of year reminds us of what is important and perhaps what needs to be worked on the next year, maybe that is how it is rationalised. Nice rythmn to this piece and gets the point across clearly and concisely. Excellent work.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of One Last Chance  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Very moving and the yearning of the narrator is intense and the voice carries the poem. It is a very well crafted plea and I imagine this during a raging storm whil lifting up arms to the Great Spirit (or whomever we hold the Creator to be :) The poem touched a chord deeply, partly since I am 1/3 Cherokee, the other just a sense of connection to a collective spirit. We all have the moments where we have nothing left but to call out for help. Whether anyone answers is one of those questions that have befuddled philosphers for all time. Great work.

Regards,
Chris
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Review of Fifteen Horses  
Review by C. Powell
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Very nice poem and one could feel the hoofbeats of the horses while reading it. Nice way to tell the story, using verse. I think it enhances the imagery nicely. The horse motif reminds me of a heavy cavalry charge from medieval times. Excellent work.

Regards,
Chris
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