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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
I'm good at...
Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
Favorite Genres
I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
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Hi SomeKindaWords

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I liked the mixed structure of the stanzas. Each one had a clear structure and style to it, but each was just slightly different from the others, which made it an intriguing read. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I think you did a good job with this item. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Terry Wylis

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Positives

This item was definitely interesting to me; I hope that the proofreadnig job for the think tank study went well!


Suggestions

For these kinds of updates that seem more oriented toward the community, I'd recommend alternatively (or perhaps additionally) posting on your newsfeed, in a blog item, etc. Updates are more likely to be seen and interacted with in higher-traffic areas of the site. *Smile*


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed hearing about your proofreading job. Maybe when you get back you can share more about the experience!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hi MoonChilde

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Positives

I thought the visuals for this poem were great. With just a few short lines, you created a really evocative image in the reader's mind. Nice job!


Suggestions

From a narrative perspective, I was a little confused at the line "without barriers to hold them" and it being juxtaposed against the idea of a shepherd following behind the flock and leading them to slaughter. Was the intention to imply that barriers/guardrails would protect them from a malicious actor in the person of the shepherd? Overall, it was a little unclear what the intent of the piece is from a messaging perspective.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi writer

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Positives

I thought you did a great job with this piece. It was clear and concise and you got your point across effectively with descriptive language. Nice job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, it was a pleasure to read this. Great work!


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi M.L. Clifton

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Positives

I think it's great that you're motivated to better develop your characters! One of the best pieces of advice that I have for character development (other than reading books on the topic, of which there are many), is to pay attention to people in real life and make note of the qualities that stick out to you. Whether it's a particular mannerism, or a fashion style, or a speech pattern, jot down those things and make lists of qualities that you can then go back to and pull from when you're writing, mixing and matching in ways that intrigue you.


Suggestions

In addition to posting this question in a static item in your port, you might want to consider positing it on the newsfeed and/or a message forum and/or a blog in order to draw more attention to the question and hopefully get more of a response. *Smile*


Overall

I wish you the best of luck with your character development process!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi BoyBaggins

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Positives

I thought you did a great job outlining the setting in this piece. It's detailed, has a lot of information, and yet is still presented in a way that's clear and easily digestible. Nice job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvememt.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Reese D.

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Positives

I enjoyed reading this poem. I thought you did a great job with the structure (although I'm not an expert on poetry so I can't say for sure whether all the nuances of a complicated form like a sonnet were followed to a "t"). It was easy to read and engaging.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Present Tense

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Positives

I really enjoyed reading this piece. I thought you did a great job with the dialogue in particular; the dialect and speech patterns were unique and made the story engaging to read. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I think you did a good job defining "authentic leadership" and providing a lot of ancillary information to give the reader a clear idea of what the concept is and what it entails. The piece was well organized and well presented.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I enjoyed reading this piece. I thought you did a good job moving the story along primarily through dialogue and each of the characters felt distinctive. Overall, it was an entertaining read. Thanks for sharing your work… Keep up the good work and keep writing!


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Positives

I thought the detail and description in this piece was great. The imagery is excellent and you manage to paint a very vivid picture for the reader in comparatively few words. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi MERORDLE

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Positives

I really liked the progression of this piece, as you worked through the months of the year. Each one relayed clear, vivid imagery which kept the writing engaging and moving along at a brisk pace. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

I really enjoyed reading this piece. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Kodah

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Positives

I really love this poetic form and I think you did a great job with it. You picked good visuals that were easy to reverse in the second half, and the whole thing worked really well.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Positives

I really appreciated the additional context that was provided. It's really fun to see something inspired by a contest prompt even if it wasn't exactly what the contest organizer had in mind in their call for entries. *Smile*

I thought the structure of this piece was particularly strong, with the repetition and the imagery really standing out as the reader moved through the piece.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

I thought you did a great job with this poem. Well done!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello Amethyst Angel 💐

Thank you for taking the time to enter the February 2025 round of the "Quotation Inspiration: Official ContestOpen in new Window..

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Positives

I thought this story was well-written, and the decision to tell the story from the point of view of a horse led to an interesting perspective on the narrative.


Suggestions

The quote prompt felt a little shoe-horned in. The challenge was to use it as inspiration for your entry, and the story didn't feel so much "inspired by" as "dropped in to technically meet the minimum requirements of the contest." If that line of dialogue were removed from your entry, it wouldn't make any tangible difference to the story you were telling, and I was looking for the prompt to be a little better incorporated.


Overall

Overall, the characterization and the story were solid, and it was a polished read. As a standalone story, I think it works fine; but as a contest entry responding to a specific prompt, I found it a little lacking on that front. But good job overall!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Sumojo

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Positives

I liked the progression of this story. You included a lot of details that ended up being relevant later in the story, which is a great use of the prompt.


Suggestions

TYPO: ‘Just give me a hint, Sav. Remember, I don’t want a boozy night. I [don't?] want a hangover for the wedding.’

The scene at the bar was really confusing. Even knowing that Savannah was apparently trying to wreck Tara's relationship with Greg, the story read as a little confusing that Tara specifically said she doesn't want a boozy night, but then shows up to a mixology class and just goes along with it. I think the choice of a "new white dress" also brings up some confusion about whether she's wearing her wedding dress in this scene. I'm assuming she's not, but you might be able to clarify by using a light color that's not white (pale yellow, baby blue, etc.) just to create more of a distinction.

I also think Savannah texting the photo to Greg at the end is a bit of a telegraph; up until now everything Savannah has done can be explained an innocent mistakes, or simple misunderstandings... but this is the point where she makes a conscious choice to antagonize her best friend's relationship, which spoils th ending a bit. It might be more effective if you played that moment as more lighthearted, where the reader will think she's just trying to be funny, rather than actually tearing her best friend down.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed this story and thought you did a great job with the prompt. Well done!


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Joseph

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Positives

I enjoyed the premise of this story. Having a character debating over story generation with a chatbot is a clever idea, and I liked the way you clearly delineated the characters using both color and italics which made for a very easy read.


Suggestions

The story started to feel a bit repetitive toward the end, with the narrative and the conflict not really changing throughout. It's just the protagonist stubbornly arguing with a chatbot and having no real change or resolution until the very end. I would have loved to have seen a little more character and narrative development, where the stakes of the story or the tension increases in their interaction over time.


Overall

Overall, I thought this was a creative take on the prompt, and a good start to what has the potential to be a very compelling and timely piece of fiction!


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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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Hello Weirdone-Back in the games

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Positives

I'll admit, I definitely didn't see this take on the prompt coming. *Laugh* I really love the originality of the premise; it was a clever use of the prompt and definitely one that stands out.


Suggestions

The piece read less like a story and more like a comedic bit or one-note joke. I would have loved to have seen a little more narrative and character development overlaid into the basic structure of the setup and punchline.


Overall

Overall, this was a fast, fun read that I really enjoyed and found quite memorable. Nicely done!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Damon Nomad

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Positives

I really enjoyed this story. I thought you did a great job weaving historical details into the narrative and telling a big, important story while still managing to focus on those small character choices that made it feel relatable and engaging. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I think you did a great job with this story. Well done!


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hello LightinMind

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Positives

I thought you did a good job with this story. The worldbuilding and the character development was solid, and it was well-written and the plot moved along at a brisk pace. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading your entry. Great job!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello StephBee

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Positives

I really liked your worldbuilding. The character development and setting were clear and unique, and I thought you had a solid take on the prompt.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading this story. You have a solid contest entry here. *Smile*


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

I enjoyed the structure of this piece. I thought you did a great job outlining a compelling narrative with characters that engage the reader. Nice job!


Suggestions

I think some additional detail and description would really help this piece stand out. It felt like more of a synopsis or a summary, largely to do parts where the narrative is generalized (like, "Malik faced numerous challenges. Along the way, he encountered mythical creatures and wise elders who tested his courage and determination." I would have loved to see those scenes play out rather than just having them summarized after the fact.


Overall

Overall, I think you have a great foundation for a compelling story. The execution needs to be fleshed out a bit, but you're off to a great start! *Smile*


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Positives

This was a thought-provoking piece. In only a few sentences you were able to articulate a difference (as well as similarities) between computers and humans with a surprisingly deep philosophical response. Nice job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement, although I would love to read a piece that expands on your thoughts here a bit and fleshes it out a little more.


Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable read. Nicely done!


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Hi Day_y1D

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Positives

I thought you did a great job with the imagery in this piece. In just a few short lines, you communicated a lot of visuals and created a compelling narrative, which is not easy to do. Nice job!


Suggestions

I was a little confused by the "my life lights sky pistons by control" line. For me, I had a difficult time conceptualizing that as an image.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading your poem. Well done!


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Hi Novice Mage

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Positives

I really liked the structure and the pacing of this piece. The imagery was also excellent, which created a feeling of a solid, well-rounded poem.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. It was well written, easy to read, and memorable. Well done!


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