I enjoyed this story, particularly the premise. I thought it was clever to have two people share the same imaginary friend (or maybe not so imaginary? ), and the fact that they ended up married for decades was an endearing detail.

The transition from the main scene (an eight-year-old Jason interacting with Carbo) to the epilogue (Carbo moving on to Celia, Celia and Jason meeting and getting married and spending 45 years married) seemed to be really abrupt and there wasn't much detail in that last part which spanned decades. It would have been great to have spent a little more time exploring the aftermath of Carbo leaving Jason for Celia.

Overall, I think you're off to a good start with this piece. The premise was excellent and there's a lot of potential here. Well done!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a good job with the imagery and the structure of the piece, which created an easy, flowing read. It was an emotional, effective poem. Nice job!

Some of the lines were very short and broken at odd places; if you were to revisit this piece, it might be worth playing around with the line structure to see if it can be optimized a bit.

Overall, this was a great read. Nice work!

I enjoyed the unique point of view of this story. I don't think I've ever read something told from the perspective of a dinosaur before, so the novelty level of this item was high and the entertainment value carried through the entire piece. Nice work!

For me, there was a little too much "telling," where the Tyrannosaurus is just explaining what happened passively to the reader. I would have loved to have seen a little more dynamic storytelling from the dinosaur's perspective.

Overall, I enjoyed this story and thought it was a fun read. Well done!

I enjoyed reading this piece. The relationship between the narrator and their writing interface was well depicted and engaging. I definitely felt the narrator's plight as they consider embarking on a writing effort.

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Well done!

The imagery in this poem was excellent. With the benefit of the image to go along with the description, it painted a vibrant, clear picture of what you were describing. Nice work!

I don't have any specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, this piece was an enjoyable read. Well done!

I thought you did a great job with this poem. The Villanelle form was an effective one, and I like the fact that you doubled it up to create more context and structure. Well done!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. Nice work!

I thought you did a really good job with this poem. The rhyme scheme was easy to follow, and the imagery was excellent. Nice work!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I really enjoyed the read and thought you did a very good job. Well done!

I really liked the message of this poem. Each stanza was well-written and evocative, leading to a thought-provoking piece. Well done!

It felt like some of the line breaks made the read a bit rough; I'm curious as to the intentionality of putting the breaks where they were. I found myself wondering if the piece would flow a little better if the lines were condensed to break at natural punctuation points. For example:

Don't worry about tomorrow,
for it has not yet arrived.

Don't worry about yesterday,
for it is but a past memory.

Worry only about "The Moment,"
because that's where real time exists.

Overall, I very much enjoyed the read. Nice work!

I really liked the message of this piece. Whether someone is neurodiverse or not, it's always a worthy goal to seek to improve the world around us and find ways of treating people better. The theme of this piece really resonated with me. Nice work!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I like the fact that this piece was short and to the point. You managed to fit a lot of story into a relatively short piece of flash fiction. Nice work!

I'm a little unclear about how the last line about the news media fits into the overall narrative; it almost felt like it broke the fourth wall and addressed the audience directly when the prior part of the story was more contained "in world."

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Well done!

I thought the recipe was clear and straightforward, and I've never seen a recipe for banana bread that includes yellow cake mix before. It definitely sounds delicious!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I think you did a good job in presenting this recipe clearly and concisely. Well done!

I really enjoyed this flash fiction story. I thought you did a good job telling a complete story in comparatively few words, and you made good use of the prompt (which is what I assume the bolded phrase was).

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Nice work!

I thought you did a good job with the rhythm and the cadence of these lyrics. There was a definite structure and flow to the lines and stanzas that was easy to follow along with. Well done!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I like the details of this piece. In just a few short words, you included a lot of interesting bits and pieces like gravity manipulation and other incredible powers. It was definitely intriguing and interesting, in just a few words!

I would have liked a little bit more context for the purpose of this piece. For example, whether it's a premise/prompt for a contest, or the beginnings of a story, or a contest entry, or something like that.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job of juxtaposing all of the tantalizing appeal of fast food in the first stanza against the second stanza's reminder of the hidden (and sometimes not so hidden!) dangers associated with the convenient comfort foods that many of us so often gravitate toward.

I can't think of any specific suggestions for improvement. This was a great read. Well done!

Overall, I really enjoyed your poem about fast food. Nice work!

I think you did a good job incorporating the prompt into your story. The use of dialogue to move the narrative along was also a good choice, enabling you to communicate a lot of story and characterization in the limited word count provided by the contest. Nice work!

I would have loved to have seen a little more conflict between Piro, on the one hand, and Bumpy and Jumpy on the other hand. It's pretty clear that Piro played a mean joke on them but they seem to laugh it off pretty quickly and it'd be great to have just a bit more tension in that part of the story before the ending.

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Well done!

I liked the twist at the end of this story. You did a great job of telling a complete, complex story in very few words, which is the hallmark of great flash fiction. Well done!

I would have loved a bit more detail about what exactly Janice got away with; the general "embezzlement" explanation was fine, but it would have been a great detail to know a little more about the details and contours of her scheme.

Overall, this was a fun read. Nice work!

I thought you did a great job with the details in this piece. From the nuances of your brother's name to details about the way you grew up, to the unfortunate estrangement that you're now experiencing, you did a great job of inviting the reader into your story and helping them get to know you a little better. Well done!

I wish I had some suggestions for improvement, but I think you did a great job with this piece. It was well written and engaging.

Overall, I'd like to thank you for sharing this personal piece of writing with us. It was an enjoyable if bittersweet read. Nice job!

I enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a particularly good job with the structure and pacing of the piece, and the imagery was excellent. Each stanza stood on its own and yet everything still worked together to form a cohesive whole. Well done!

The only thing that I was a little unclear about in the poem was the quoted passage at the very bottom beneath the details of the poem. Is that a prompt or some kind of inspiration this poem was based on? It would be great to have a little more context about how that except plays into the greater whole, and why it was included.

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. I really enjoyed the read. Nice work!

I thought you did a good job with the action description in this story. The narrative elements are clear and well-described. You did a great job of showing just how intimidating the giant robot, power armor, etc. was as it attacked the bandits. I could easily see this as a really effective "demonstration of the new technology" scene within the larger context of a short story or novel.

In the second to last paragraph, I think there might be an incorrect word usage:

         "This is a prosecution an execution. Not a fight."

I'd also suggest perhaps changing up what happened to Criticus at the end. By this point in the vignette, with every bandit essentially getting mauled or eviscerated, having the same happen to Criticus started to feel a little redundant and lost a little of its effectiveness as a result. I would consider thinking of a different way to end Criticus' story (maybe his adversary lets him escape to tell the tale, or finishes him off in a different way, showcasing a weapon system or some feature of the armor that hasn't been previously seen), in order to keep the audience interested and really end the conflict with a surprise or a twist.

Overall, this was an entertaining read. As I mentioned above, I could easily see it as part of a larger narrative, and the action was interesting and well-described. Nice work!

I thought you did a great job with the imagery in this piece. Each stanza presented a vibrant image that was well-described and captured the essence of the setting. Nice work!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. Well done!

This was a charming story full of engaging characters. The struggle of trying to make a hat was well-paced and described effectively. The idea of a "MYOH" party that also involved dating was interesting, if a little confusing.

I think the biggest issue with this story, for me, is that there were several disparate parts of the story that didn't quite seem to gel together. A "BYOB" event is where you bring your own drinks, but this "MYOH" dynamic seemed to be about crafting something that was required as a barrier to entry at the event. Similarly, I'm not quite sure that I really connected with the quality of the hat someone made as being any kind of indicator of who that person should be set up with.

Overall, the story was charming and a fun read. Assuming this was written for a contest like Writer's Cramp, I can see how word count might have been an obstacle, because this is one of those cases where I think the piece would be strengthened by just a bit more explanation in terms of how this situation is set up and supposed to work out. But I did enjoy the read. Nice work!

You managed to fit a lot of narrative into a relatively short piece of flash fiction! I like the fact that it wasn't just a conversation between Mandy and Deb, but there was also a bit of epilogue with the aftermath of that conversation. I liked the twist of Martin having a different job than the two women anticipated; it was a fun little twist.

While the twist was fun, I thought it was a little bit of a stretch to have Martin work in the "Space Division" of the toy store. If you were ever looking to revise the piece, I would recommend coming up with a sightly better setup and payoff to the bit about Martin's job.

Overall, this was a really entertaining read and I thought you did a good job as a whole. I particularly liked the last two lines, where they were both expressing their surprise and disappointment, albeit in very different ways. Great job!