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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
I'm good at...
Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
Favorite Genres
I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
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Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Emberly Gray Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I liked the structure and the imagery in this poem. I thought it was well written, evocative, and really did a great job of capturing the reader's imagination. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable, well-written poem. Nice work!


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Review of Writing for Joy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi The Uplifting Essayist Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives
I like the message of this piece. It's always important to remember that feedback can have a dramatic effect on someone, and that - as a reviewer - you have to find the style of review that works for you, rather than trying to emulate someone else. I like the fact that this item contained a strong moral lesson in a narrative of so few words. Nicely done!


Suggestions
No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this piece. Good work!


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Review of Final Target  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)


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I enjoyed all of the action and excitement in this story. You did a great job with the pacing and keeping the narrative unpredictable with a lot of twists and turns.

Where I strugged a bit was with the characterization and the narrative tension. The mob offers Frank a job, offering to pay him money but also threatening him, and going back and forth. It seemed a little weird that, if they had leverage on him, they wouldn't just compel him to do it and save the money. It was a bit of a convoluted plot to set him up and fix his life completely only to ruin it for him again, when they could have just ruined his life from the beginning. *Laugh*

Overall, I enjoyed the read. I think there's some room for improvement if you ever revisit this story with an eye to rewrite, but it was a quick, entertaining read as it is. Nice work!

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for entry "CheatingOpen in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)


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This was a fun flash fiction story. I always enjoy a good twist at the end and a play on expectations, which you did well in this story. I was hoping for a bit more detail to explain why he's not supposed to have coffee, and I would have loved a little more specific innuendo at the beginning to really play with the audience's expectations. But this was otherwise a very entertaining read. Nice work!

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for entry "Eggs Gone MissingOpen in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)


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I enjoyed reeading this story. I noticed it was for OctoPrep so I'm assuming this is a vignette that's part of a larger story, and so I'll hold off on commenting about the narrative structure. Other than that, I thought the characters and the mythology were both interesting and this piece ultimately achieved its goal of making me want to read more of the story. Nice work!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


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This was a great take on the prompt! There were so many aspects of the prompt to include, and you worked all of them into a framework that really made the most of all the different elements. Nice work!

The detail and description in the story was excellent, as was the relationship between Jon and Amy. You could feel Jon's excitement, and Amy's desire for him to be happy, even if she had misgivings about the event from the start.

I also really liked the twist ending, and how things resolved. You did a great job of establishing a ton of possibilities for what was going to happen, and still managed to surprise me with how it actually turned out. This was a great story!

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Rated: E | (4.0)


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I really liked this take on a Jane Austen story. My favorite part were the two epilogues, one set twenty-five years into the future, and one set 250 years later, which gave great resonance to the events that had come before. Overall, this was an entertaining read and an excellent adaptation/reimagining of Austen's work. Well done!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


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I like the idea of expanding on the characters and circumstances in a short story. Pride and Prejudice was a great choice, as it's immediately recognizable and has established characters, which allowed you to get right into the expanded story. This was an entertaining and well-written story. Nice work!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)


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I really enjoyed this story. You did a good job telling a compelling story, with characters that the reader cares about. Daniel tracking down his Myra was believable and realistic, and I thought you did a good job with the exchange between all three of the characters once he arrives at Trent's house.

For me, the ending felt just a little anticlimactic. You did such a great job of setting up the danger of this scenario Myra (and Daniel) find themselves in, but then they escape when Trent just wanders inside and stays there long enough for Daniel and Myra to escape. I was really hoping for a little more tension and conflict at the end of this compelling story.

Overall, though, this was an engaging, well-written story. Nice work!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)


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I enjoyed the worldbuilding in this story. There's a ton of potential for where this narrative can go, especially with all of the details you've built around the dragon mythology in this piece.

That said, it was missing that definitive beginning, middle, and end that defines a short story. As it is, this feels more like a vignette or a snippet of a larger narrative rather than a standalone story. I was hoping for a little bit more in terms of defined narrative to follow along with.

Overall, though, this was an easy, entertaining read. Nice work!

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for entry "The GiftOpen in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)


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One hundred words is a very short length to tell a narrative, and I thought you did a good job attempting to tell a complete story in that time, including a sense of setting, character, and larger narrative beyond the scope of the story.

My only small quibble was that the decision to surprise someone in an obstetrician's office felt a little unusual. It was such a private moment between the parents, but set in the clinical setting of a doctor's office, with the doctor presumably there (or involved in the surprise). I think there's a more dynamic and engaging setting that could have been selected as a bookend for the narrative.

Overall though, I enjoyed reading this story. Nice work!

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Review of The Red Rocks  Open in new Window.
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hi Sophurky Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

You did a great job with this poem. I've tried a Ghazal before and they're not easy to do well, but I thought the imagery and the structure in this piece was excellent. It was a quick, evocative read.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. Well done!


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Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Hi Rhyssa Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I thought you did a great job with the prompt. The poem was clear, fully explored the prompt, was well-structured, and engaging to read. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this was an entertaining read that flowed really nicely. Well done!


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Review of How Did You Know?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hi thereBdragons Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I like the twist at the end of this story. It was a perfect structure of a flash fiction tale, with a concise setup and payoff and a good use of what I assume from the bolded text was the prompt for the story.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi D.L. Robinson Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I really liked the structure and the imagery in this piece. The language was elegant and sophisticated, and you did a great job of making the content accessible to the reader.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Review of Halloween Chant  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)

Hi thereBdragons Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

The premise of two witches answering the door for trick or treaters on Halloween was a great idea. I thought both Carvelle and Marvelle were interesting characters and their duel was fun to follow along with.


Suggestions

The ending felt just the slightest bit abrupt, without a lot of detail or information about how the duel was resolved. It would have been great to have some additional context for what happened.


Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable story. Nice work!


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Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Eravathi Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

The structure and imagery of this poem were excellent. I thought you did a good job writing a piece that was engaging, and interesting. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this poem. It was a quick, compelling read.


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Rated: E | (3.0)

Hi Quatae Turnage Author Icon

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Positives

I like the fact that you attempted so many different types of imagery to compare clouds to. The wide variety of visuals essentially ensures that any reader will understand the reference in at least one case.


Suggestions

Some of those references didn't quite connect for me. I'm not entirely sure how to visualize a cloud "moving like a dinosaur" (other than both being large), but I got lost again at the word "fiery." Similarly, a cloud "standing tall and stomping its rain [like Bigfoot]" was just a little too far afield of my experience to really connect the dots.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the brevity and the details in this piece. Good effort!


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Review of Master  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

Hi Kristi Love Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I thought you did a great job with this poem. The image adds a lot of nuance and additional impact but even without it, the poem was well-structured, evocative, and easy to read. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. Nice work!


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Review of Time's Come  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Vanishing Vapor Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I really enjoyed this poem. 24 syllables is not a lot of space to compose a compelling poem, but you did a great job and made it seem easy. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this piece was short, to the point, and effective. Nice work!


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Review of Pot-Stickers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)

Hi Jacky Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I enjoyed this story, particularly the premise. I thought it was clever to have two people share the same imaginary friend (or maybe not so imaginary? *Think*), and the fact that they ended up married for decades was an endearing detail.


Suggestions

The transition from the main scene (an eight-year-old Jason interacting with Carbo) to the epilogue (Carbo moving on to Celia, Celia and Jason meeting and getting married and spending 45 years married) seemed to be really abrupt and there wasn't much detail in that last part which spanned decades. It would have been great to have spent a little more time exploring the aftermath of Carbo leaving Jason for Celia.


Overall

Overall, I think you're off to a good start with this piece. The premise was excellent and there's a lot of potential here. Well done!


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Review of About Girls  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Hi zoegrace20

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a good job with the imagery and the structure of the piece, which created an easy, flowing read. It was an emotional, effective poem. Nice job!


Suggestions

Some of the lines were very short and broken at odd places; if you were to revisit this piece, it might be worth playing around with the line structure to see if it can be optimized a bit.


Overall

Overall, this was a great read. Nice work!


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Review of The Tyrannosaurus  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

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I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I enjoyed the unique point of view of this story. I don't think I've ever read something told from the perspective of a dinosaur before, so the novelty level of this item was high and the entertainment value carried through the entire piece. Nice work!


Suggestions

For me, there was a little too much "telling," where the Tyrannosaurus is just explaining what happened passively to the reader. I would have loved to have seen a little more dynamic storytelling from the dinosaur's perspective.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed this story and thought it was a fun read. Well done!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Hi Amare Jane Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I enjoyed reading this piece. The relationship between the narrator and their writing interface was well depicted and engaging. I definitely felt the narrator's plight as they consider embarking on a writing effort.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Well done!


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Review of An Old Red Barn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Beholden Author Icon

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

The imagery in this poem was excellent. With the benefit of the image to go along with the description, it painted a vibrant, clear picture of what you were describing. Nice work!


Suggestions

I don't have any specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, this piece was an enjoyable read. Well done!


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