|Dear Stars Above,
Hello! I loved this piece and cannot wait to see the second chapter. I was a little confused at first, after all Orion is the name of the constellation, which is named after the Greek Hero Orion. I was expecting something a little bit different. However, I am not disappointed, I cannot wait to see how you work in Calliope and what part she has to play. Will she be a bear, or a human? Only time will tell. I would say that I wouldn't say things so obviously sometimes. Though some things need to be explained, explain them through the dialogue or some other way. Like when you describe his home country. We don't need to learn everything right now, we can learn some more stuff later throughout the book. You want to keep the reader involved so they'll want to keep reading. All in all, a great piece, with a good foundation for a good novel. Hope you keep writing!
Yours in ink,