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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi IceSkating SugarCube

I am reviewing this item as I noticed it in your portfolio and thought I would take a look - when I did I thought "Wow what lovely designs!" I am presuming that you actually made all these items since you designed the patterns? I think that is so clever, as I could not knit or crochet one row let alone even think about how anyone created their own pattern - words are one thing, wool is another!! I particularly like the pink stripey hat and the baseball cap ear warmer because I have never seen one of those, how original.

This is a really different kind of WDC shop, never seen anything like this on the site, and the pictures of the items are very clear and impressive.

Do you also sell the finished items??

JFX
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Review of Homeless  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello ~ Sisco ~ Back!

I am reviewing this item as part of "MHWA Mental Health Challenge

I was drawn to this poem from the list because I work in housing/homelessness, so I wondered what your take would be?

Now I note that you wrote this in 2012 - and you're in the UK right? So I'm not sure if your opinions in this poem would still stand today, as obviously the "problem" has become a lot worse since 2012 and 7 years of a delightful Tory government running the show.

Technically, I think your poem is good - the layout is effective and pleasing to read, I like your chosen image. The rhyme scheme works well, although in places I think the poem could flow a little better (in terms of number of syllables in a line). The poem is very emotive, full of imagery, and to me it is really interesting to hear this perspective from a member of the public, a passer - by as it were. I imagine that most people would read this and it would make them think, perhaps make them feel even a bit guilty, maybe give some change to a homeless person next time they see one.

But I'm going to be (maybe) a little bit unpopular here - I think your images in this poem are a bit stereotypical, a little presumptious maybe? Certainly in Bath in 2019 most homeless people I have met aren't desperate for a cup of tea or a shower - - -(in fact there are an abundance of services who provide food, the night shelter provides shower and washing facilities even if you are not staying there, passers by, charities, and coffee shop owners are always donating food and drinks) - - -

No, the problem is HOUSING - Private renting is out of the question for most homeless people - even if they had the money, what private landlord is going to accept them? and these days you have to jump through so many hoops to get one of the stupidly limited amount of social housing properties available - and no amount of loose change given is going to fix that!

Anyway, sorry for rant and hope you're not offended - it's a good poem, it's just a bit of a sore subject with me!! *Shock* I do appreciate your sentiment, and the fact you care. *Heart*

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Review by Jellyfish
In affiliation with Mental Health Writers Alliance  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Simply LeJenD'

I am reviewing this poem as part of "MHWA Mental Health Challenge

A candid look at bi-polar disorder (I am presuming) with stark imagery describing how this illness takes hold of one. I am wondering if "they" are actually asking the question out loud? Only because I find with mental health "they" don't tend to be so blatant, but you can see it in their eyes, in their boredom, frustration, or exasperation. Certainly I can see it when I remove my mask.....what a mistake huh! *Shock*

My favourite verse:

"Lost in the darkness -
touching the sky -
aflame with my anger -
or wanting to die..."


I like the way you have portrayed the extreme highs and lows here, the way the anger is akin to fire...

Suggestions...

"Emotions, like winds
over a raging sea."


I suggest taking out the "A" so it reads just "Over raging sea", to me this just flows better.

I really like your poem, and although I would not say I relate to all of it - I can definitely identify with parts of this.

Love Jellyfish *Heartp*


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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Abby Nolan

Cool username btw!*Smile* I am reviewing this item as you sent me a review request.

Now I am not familiar with "The Screwtape Letters", so this did not have any relevance on me when I read your piece, and I don't know how closely it does or does not resemble this text! In fact I haven't even heard of this. I did have a little Google of it though after I read it, it looks interesting - my Mum might like it (she's a devout atheist) Anyway I don't think this necessarily matters when reading it, as the meaning behind your piece was quite clear to me nevertheless.

I did actually like the idea that you were writing as a "demon" addressing the subjects of the bad place, or whatever you want to call it (Are you watching that show btw, "The Good Place" - it's very good *Smile*)as if in a political address, pointing out how the opposing deity is scuppering the plans to turn everyone evil. I found this quite imaginative - although having looked up about "The Screwtape Letters" I can see it is not your original idea (although to be fair, what can be considered original these days?)

I thought your writing style was excellent however, you write very eloquently and the piece has a poetic tone. Although your language is more creative than simple, I found it easy to read and to picture this character addressing his nation.

I especially like the part:

"In recent years, we have made it so the humans are unable to understand why they feel increasingly isolated despite hardly leaving their homes other than when absolutely necessary. They move through their fleeting lives forcefully attached to routine, never quite satisfied with the circumstances and company they have chosen"

A very good observation on the human condition in the 21st century.

I did have the feeling that the piece should be a part of something more, rather than a stand alone story - but I do like your style and the imagery here *Smile*

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Review of Black Water  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello ๐ŸŒ™ HuntersMoon

I am reviewing your item as part of "I Write in 2019

I really do like this poem, it's dark, with vivid imagery, and has a dreamy quality to it. The writer to me is falling, is drowning in the river, but this is a welcome ocurrence. The writer desires the black, peaceful safety of the river and wants to leave this world for another. I can picture the icy river in this poem. Alas the River is not real - the writer is only dreaming. I like the last line, I feel it concludes the poem very well.

My favourite line is

"She wraps me softly in her inky arms,
protecting me from that which calls my name,"


I love the metaphor of the "Inky arms"

I had never heard of the river Styx, so I decided to employ my friend Google to enlighten me. I will post what I found here, in case anyone is reading this review, and, like me, they are ignorant when it comes to Greek mythology:

"The River Styx is a principal river in the Greek underworld (also called Hades). The river forms a border between the underworld and the world of the living. The word means hate in Greek and is named after the goddess, Styx. She was the daughter of Oceanus and Tethys."

Now, this is actually really interesting, because now knowing what the river Styx signifies, it kind of gives a new meaning to the poem - but actually, if you thought this was just an ordinary river, like the Severn, or the Thames - the poem would work just as well *Smile*

My only negative to offer, is that I am not 100% sure your poem will qualify for the I WRITE, as it was not written in Week 2.

Otherwise, it's really good *Bigsmile*

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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ๐ŸŒ™ HuntersMoon

I am reviewing this poem as I also entered the same contest, so I thought I would check out what other people were writing and as your entry was first, yours is the one I read!

I really like this poem - rather than being all cliched and "Yay! It's New Year! Everything is going to be so wonderful and different this year", you have regarded life candidly and conveyed this through your poem (which is kind of what I did do....although I prefer your if I'm honest! *Laugh*). It's probably a bit positive for me, but I could still imagine it could just as easily be about me.

The rhyme scheme and rhythm is pretty perfect tbh, even when trying to be critical.

Fave bits...

The โ€œnewโ€ in New Year is a trope

I love that you have got this underline explaining what "trope" means. I have to admit, I didn't know the word, although made an educated guess before I figured out what the underline was.

I feel timeโ€™s just a single breath
that starts at birth and ends at death


Great metaphor *Heartp*

Had I the foresight at the start
to warn โ€œnot for the faint of heart,โ€
Iโ€™d still have journeyed to the end
enjoying every twist and bend.


(This is my favourite verse...)


Good luck with the contest! (You will probably win...)

And Happy New Year!

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Review of Dear Me 2019  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Charity Marie - I am Back! !

I am reviewing this item as part of "I Write in 2019 *Smile*

It was interesting to read your letter and find out a little more about you. That must be really tough having two additional needs children and also working full time. I do not have any children, and imagine that even one, with no additional needs must be hard!*Shock*But in my job I come across children with varying disabilities. I am not really sure what kind of house an "RV" is. I am thinking you may mean a caravan? If so the housing situation in the states (I am presuming.....) sounds as bad as here *Sad*. I'm in the UK btw.

I have to say, I am never tempted to enter the "Dear Me" contest. I feel like it is kind of like all this "Mindfullness" Sh*t. Not my kind of thing. Most people would say I am fairly pessimistic about life, and I suppose I am. However, despite the fact I would not normally go for all this overdone positivity stuff, reading your letter made me feel quite good. I'm glad you can say you are glorious and be so confident about yourself. And why shouldn't you?

These are my favourite lines:

You're bleeding on the page as the saying goes and that will reach people.

I like this expression, Bleeding on the page - very poetic

Just don't forget some people won't like your writing so don't let it discourage you when you don't win.

A very good attitude to have. I always remind myself, and others, that writing is subjective - winning a contest normally depends on the opinion of a few people only.

You've overcome so much to emerge like a phoenix from the flames.

Ha ha - A bit of a cliche but I do love the old "Rise Like a Phoenix" simile.

Have you seen this one:



Anyway, all my best with the contest and with your books and moving house this year *Hearty*

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Review of WDC Photo Contest  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a great idea for a contest! I know it isn't completely writing related, but you have added a writing element as well, and it is very modern and relevant to the times in which most of us walk around with a Smartphone in our pockets. I like your pinpointed rules which are easy to read and follow - and you offer good prizes too.

Hmm...now to try and take a photo of something green!

(Although - and this is not your fault, but I don't find it very easy to upload photos to WDC...)!!

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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello 3..........2.........1 - BOO!!

So, I was just looking through the entries for this contest to see if it gave me any inspiration to enter it and when I came across your poem, I really liked it! So I thought I would send you a review to tell you so. Why not? I thought your acrostic stood out from the generic poems about how great WDC is (not saying that it isn't of course!) and the equally generic, stereotypoical birthday themed imagery. Also, I find it is hard really to make an acrostic poem sound serious - it's kind of a childlike form I think, so I think you have done well to create a more developed and intellectually sounding poem in this form. I love the bit about dreams being inside spaghetti - well next time I eat the stuff I'll wonder what dreams are inside. The ending made me smile. I didn't know what scirocco meant - I would probably never have thought of a car! I certainly don't dream of those!!! *Sick*

Great poem, up my street - not sure I can compete with that.... *Rolleyes*



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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great idea for a contest - completely different to the usual theme of writing having to be new....plus I guess it means you get an eclectic mix of entries. Very generous prizes too! The only trouble for me is, I can't remember which contests I entered my poems in to! *Facepalm* *Laugh* *Pthb*
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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi ๐ŸŒ™ HuntersMoon - I am reviewing this item for ruwth 's Newsfeed challenge! *Smile*

Despite the fact it is rather out of season on this *unusually* sunny day in England, I chose this poem to review because I like a song parody and I'm a huge wine fan *Glass2* - in fact I am right now drinking a glass of Australian Malbec, in case you are interested *Bigsmile*. I didn't know that Virginia was particularly famous for wine - I don't think we get Virginian wine over here.

Anyway I really like your parody *Smile* Not being a big, traditional Christmas fan, a Merlot Christmas and a champagne New Year sound like my kind of thing - in fact I am pretty sure last Christmas I actually drank Merlot and champagne....*Laugh*

Your lyrics fit really well together and go with the original tune of the song. I didn't notice any lines which did not fit when I sang it through to myself. I especially like "Good tastings we bring to you and your kin" and "A glass of wine and we will all be chums โ€ฆ" - It's so true!

I look forwards to a Merlot Christmas and Champagne New Year 2018 *Crazy*

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Review of The Coin  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello CJ

Welcome to WDC! *Heart*

I am reviewing this item for "April Review Raid Super Party. I found your poem highlighted on the Newsfeed by Lilli

I thought your poem told a great story - it's dark, but it is a story of suspense - the reader wants to know what the point of the story is and what the significance of the coin is. The ending was really unexpected, and I think, creative. It is simply written, but because it tells the story, this doesn't matter so much.

I particularly like the repetition of "flat on the ground" used in those two separate verses.

The rhymes of the poem work well, although I don't think it flows quite as well as it might. I read it through a few times, and although I think the contest is great, the flow is a bit stilted when I read it. It could be just different accents.

However, it is very creative and definitely has a unique edge to it *Smile*. I enjoyed reading it.

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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello T.L.Finch

I am reviewing this item as part of "April Review Raid Super Party I found your poem looking for feedback on the Shameless Plug Page.

This poem tells an interesting story - if tragic. The end of the poem seems genuinely heartfelt, I wondered if this was something you actually remembered? But looking at your bio I can see you were born after this time, so I guess it was a tale your Mother told you.

The poem rhymes perfectly with its A/B C/B rhyming scheme. For the most part it flows well, although there are some verses where it doesn't - such as here:

"Making up for twenty minutes
time is money on the line,
doing seventy miles an hour;
held grim fates for twenty nine.


The 2nd and 4th lines seem to have too many syllables...

and here:

"as the" Flyer" ran it through."

(I would take out the word "The")

But this is just being picky really, as I think the imagery and the story are what make your poem, because I found it engaging and interesting to read.

This is my favourite line:

"departing souls were in the air
to haunt her nightly dreams."


Great line, the kind I wish I had written *Crazy* *Smile*

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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Bruce.

I am reviewing this item as part of "April Review Raid Super Party. I found your poem for review on the shameless plug page.

I thought your poem was a bit silly to be honest....but....it did make me laugh *Laugh* so I thought I would give you a quick review!

We poets have, I am sure, had a word we needed a rhyme for and gone through every letter of the alphabet trying to find an appropriate one *Smirk* - the title of your poem reminded me of this! *Crazy*

Your rhymes are perfect - I can't say anything else!!

It's funny, and I liked the naughty implications, without being crass, and the ending.

(I think it was probably blue....)

*Pthb*

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Review of Awakening  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello M.P Nichols

I am reviewing this item as part of "April Review Raid Super Party. I found your poem on the Shameless Plug Page where you were looking for feedback.

As you have asked for answers to specific questions, I will attempt to answer them - in my subjective opinion *Smile*

I am trying to capture an image of realisation and a moving on. Is this clear?

I would not say this is clear to me. I don't really get the metaphor and I wouldn't have thought of this at all reading the poem - I would have taken it at face value, as a nature poem depicting the moment described - The still lake....the wind causing the ripples and (I am assuming) the raindrops falling on the lake, then the Carp rising to the surface. Even with you telling me that is what you are trying to say, I still don't quite get it *Rolleyes* - but that is not to say the poem is not effective in itself -and also, don't forget, everyone interprets poetry differently - such is the beauty of poetry *Smile*.

Also - am I writing in poetic verse?

I definitely think this sounds poetic. Your poem is free form - but your use of alliteration, structure and imagery definitely makes it read like a poem, rather than just a piece of writing. In fact I think your imagery is pretty good here *Smile*.

Does this poem make sense?

As I mentioned earlier, I'm reading the poem and taking it at face value - so yes, it makes sense in terms of the images depicting a scene and telling a story. As for whether any deeper meanings make sense, I cannot really say.

But sometimes, I think poems have to contain their own secrets. That is, in a way, what poetry is about *Smile*

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Review of Sixties Scoop  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello Elizabeth Ridgeway

I am reviewing this item as part of "April Review Raid Super Party. I discovered your poem whilst judging entries for "Project Write World".

I have to say, that I had to read your poem a couple of times before I really got it - I think that is because of the colloquial language/dialect you use in the poem. But I think this is an important part of the poem so I don't think you should change it - I hope people take the time to read the poem through again if they don't immediately connect with it.

I say this because once I had done so, I actually realised I really like this poem. Your footnotes really help with this, and are actually interesting too - I am a little familiar with this topic (of native Canadians) as I have been to Canada and have Canadian friends but it isn't something I know much about. It's a sad story you tell here *Sad* - but it is well told, and I think it works telling it in the voice of the child, he/she is candid and matter of fact but also frightened and desperate.

I am not familiar with this form, but it flows well.

Your poem was my favourite of the PWW entries this month. Good luck in the contest *Smile*.

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Review of Raindrops  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Robert Hayes

I am reviewing this item as part of "April Review Raid Super Party. I came across your poem posted on the Newsfeed highlighted by Gabriella .

On reading your poem, I have to admit, I had mixed feelings. Not because of the quality of your poem, as in fact I think it is pretty well written, it flows (for the most part) and rhymes well and your imagery paints a picture of this day in the life of a childhood memory - I can picture this child waking up, listening to the pitter patter of the raindrops on the window, then grabbing his wellies to go and jump in some puddles and chuck mud at his Mum *Laugh* *Smirk*.

But the ideas behind the poem make me shudder with distaste - you see, I hate the rain....I really hate it...unfortunate really because I live in a rainy City, in a rainy country, but there you go. If you are curious, you could read this - it's only short "Ombrophobia.

But after reading it, and walking away from my computer, my thoughts came back to your poem - because despite the fact that I couldn't relate to it at all, it made me see that we don't all look at things from the same point of view, and a thorn in one persons side can be a rose in someones else's garden.

And in a way, isn't that what poetry is all about? *Heart* *Smile*

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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Fyndorian - I found this item on the "Read and Review" link

I don't know much about Greek or Roman mythology to be honest! It is something I think I should know about, but tending to prefer modern day novels, I never get around to reading about it. Anyway, I thought I had better Google "Neptune" having read your poem, so it has encouraged me to learn something! *Smirk*

However, I do not think you necessarily need to know about Roman mythology to appreciate or enjoy your poem, and I like the imagery you use - I love the ocean and therefore your references to the waves, the surf, the shells etc. The imagery is very vivid and I can picture those mythical horses riding over the waves! The tone is very fantastical and I think the style of writing you have used fits the theme of the poem.

Beautifully written, and I enjoyed reading it *Smile*

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Review of Evie  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jeff

I am reviewing this short story as part of "I Write in 2018

This is a cute little story about a kitten you once rescued. Your description is very precise in the story - especially setting the scene in the car park and of the kitten herself, it allowed me to picture the scene of a place I have never been to.

The story did not necessarily have a lot of suspense or emotion or a particularly striking plot, but nevertheless I found it both well written and easy to read and also - I love cats and so I found it very charming how yourself and your co-worker went out of your way to help this little kitten! I am glad she had a happy ending *Smile*.

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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a fantastic idea - I love the fact this activity is so community driven and offers "a prize every time" if you like! It's super generous of you and it encourages members to write something new, just like that, without having to create an item for it in their port. Now I have to come up with something cool!! *Bigsmile* *Heart*


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Review of Yan Can Cook?  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
Hello W.D.Wilcox

I am reviewing this poem as part of "Queen of Comedy Challenge

I thought that this was a great nonsense - spam poem *Laugh*

At least - I HOPE it was written as a SPAM poem or I will feel really bad about the one star rating! *Shock* *Blush*

The way you have written it, I can actually imagine the character talking in the broken English/Chinese accent. Okay perhaps it IS a bit non PC but....it is still funny *Laugh*. I was a little thrown at the pussy part, but was pleased to find he had just found her cat *Smirk*.

The ending is really funny - mainly because it's nuts!

HA ha!

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Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Donkey Hoetay

I am reviewing this poem as part of "Queen of Comedy Challenge

I do like this poem - I think it is both funny and clever and it did make me laugh genuinely. *Laugh*

When I saw the title, I thought it was going to be a poem about some woman moaning about the misdemeanors of their husband (as this is what married women seem wont to do *Laugh* *Facepalm*) so I was quite surprised (pleasantly) to find that it wasn't!

The poem told by the view point of the letter Q is very clever - of course, U almost always comes after Q - whoever would have thought that Q wanted to go it alone! *Laugh* A letter should be a hard thing to personify but I think you have done so well here. Q sounds perfectly disgruntled with the whole situation.

My favourite verses are 3 and six - the bit about renaming the marina a quay is inspired. The ending is great with Q running off to Qatar. I like the fact that you have used the text speak of "U disgust me", "I am letting U know" etc - only, it isn't text speak in the context of the poem *Smirk*

The verse I am not as keen on is verse 4. Personally I think you could have left this out as I don't think it adds to the poem especially. I am not sure what is meant by the line "My Grammar offered to pay my sin tax," although this could just be me! *Confused*. I think where you say "intacts" maybe you mean "intact"? However, I didn't know what Quixotic meant and had to look it up which is good because it's always a good thing to learn new words *Bigsmile*.

This is probably my favourite of the comedy poems I have read whilst doing this challenge *Bigsmile*. I will never look at Q the same again......*Devilish*

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Review of Blood Money  
Review by Jellyfish
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Lady Elf

I am reviewing this poem as part of "Love Your Pet/Animal Awareness Raid.

I thought this was a very powerfully emotive poem which carries an important message. You have managed also to fit a lot of detail in to your poem about these "puppy farms" so the poem is also informative.

Personally I don't really agree with the breeding of "pedigree" cats and dogs which people pay hundreds or thousands of pounds for, when there are so many animals in shelters desperate for homes. And as for these kind of places, well, as you can imagine, they horrify me.

I think you have done a really good job with bringing awareness for this subject and your imagery, although not necessarily nice or pleasant is very effective in getting your meaning and opinion across.

In terms of the mechanics of the poem itself, the AABB rhyming scheme works well throughout For the most part it also flows well and easily as a poem although there are a few lines which seem to have too many syllables for the verse for example here:

"Imprisoned in boxes where loneliness controls."

or here

"Of poor unwanted puppies filling our streets."

I'm also not sure why the word "blood" is in red but am assuming it was a prompt line or something? I would take out the extra line break in between the verses.

This is a really well written poem with powerful imagery. Hopefully these places will eventually be shut down! *Worry*

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Review of As she waits  
Review by Jellyfish
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello kindredkitty

I am reviewing this poem as part of "Love Your Pet/Animal Awareness Raid.

What I liked about this poem is how the ending was unexpected. As I was reading through it, I thought it was going to be a sentimental piece about man and dog being best friends with some sickly sweet ending so I was surprised this wasn't the case - even though the ending is sad, I think this gives it more depth.

The poem rhymes well although in places, I feel that the flow is a bit stilted due to some of the lines having too many syllables. The first verse and last verses work the best for me.

The second verse, although the imagery is effective, I do not really feel flows very easily so reads more like a piece of text rather than a poem (to me). Although I wouldn't want to tell you to change your text because that's what is important to you, if you changed the lines a little just so the syllable count was different, I think it would flow better.

For example:

"She is covered up by sadness
No one to feel her plight
Her master's been away too long
This just does not feel right"


Or words to that effect! *Smile*

Apart from that, I think you have some good imagery here and the poem deals with a topical subject in a way that I think would touch a readers heart at the end *Heart*

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Review of My African Gray  
Review by Jellyfish
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lisa Noe Kittyluv um Puppyluv

I am reviewing this poem as part of "Love Your Pet/Animal Awareness Raid

I thought this was a cute poem about your pet parrot. You paint a heart warming picture of Katie in the poem and she comes across as a fun pet. I've never had a parrot, only seen them in zoos and so on but as I am a fan of all creatures I am sure I would like them *Bigsmile*.

I'm not sure that the poem is comical in particular (to me). More endearing or sweet I would say. I think the poem would appeal to children, as the language and imagery are quite simple and the tone has a childlike quality to it. Plus, kids like poem about pets *Smile*.

The rhyming scheme throughout the poem works well and I didn't find any glitches here. My favourite line is the bit about her drinking coffee from a spoon! Who would have thought parrots like coffee? *Laugh*

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