Hello jackptollers

Review of "Choices" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful and true telling of the cruelty behind abortion. My opinion is that people consider there is life on other planets because microorganisms are present but when the essence of life, a heartbeat in that mass of cell is still considered as no life and hence the decision of abortion. Sometimes people can find or prove whatever makes them feel comfortable and happy not that which is right. There is so much problems with just this one problem and I personally see no hope for legal stuff to change. Thank you for sharing this inspiring and thought provoking poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and intriguing enough to make people come by and read this.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~


"13 reviews WDC's 13th Birthday~CLOSED!" 

Hello A*Monaing*Faith

Review of "Reflections: A Book" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

This is a really useful article from your experience about how we can and need to comfort our friends who have been through some tough times. I like how you mention that it might be difficult to not look at them differently after they have told us, but as you mentioned here it is very essential to their well being that we treat them as normal people. Thank you for sharing this inspiring piece.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~



"13 reviews WDC's 13th Birthday~CLOSED!" 

Hello Cowgirl Cat

Review of "My First Day Of School" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A fun and true poem about the fears of going back to school. Kids do bring out all their stuff when they don't want to go but surely a mom can convince and comfort them to go. I like the last but one stanza it true that only do kids have school fever but mothers have their own fears too. The rhymes do good with the flow of the poem too. Well written.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~




"13 reviews WDC's 13th Birthday~CLOSED!" 

Hello Stephanie Grace

Review of "TBD: The Plane" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful sad story. I was hoping for a live child or a cute little boy, but not always does a story have a happy ending, but this is a perfect ending nonetheless. It was quite shocking to me to see that it was a casket. The mother's sorrow is very deep and emotional, it is seen in every single line. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~


"13 reviews WDC's 13th Birthday~CLOSED!" 

Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating

Review of "It's Springtime and I'm Feeling Antsy" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A simple and short poem about spring fever. My favourite seasons in an order as autumn, spring, winter and summer. When we have a long winter we surely want to get out of all those heavy and itchy clothing as you say and be free just like the Monarch butterfly. Well written.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~



"13 reviews WDC's 13th Birthday~CLOSED!" 

Hello Yellow Rose

Review of "YELLOW ROSES AND YOU" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

Hey, I found your poem in the Random Review page and I'm here to offer my views.

I see where you got your handle and username from. Yellow rose is not a type of rose people would usually chose for love. Reading this poem makes me like yellow roses too. The poem talks about the man who came with the yellow roses and lived together fulfilling his promises but soon he died leaving those roses and the woman behind with only the memories. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~

Review of Entry submitted to the "Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello BoyStar

Review of "Punny Emoticon Poem (with homonyms)" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A very creative poem indeed. I see you have not only used the emoticons but also used homonyms, it was a difficult to get the meaning of the poem and the lines with just one read so the English version helped a lot. There are no suggestions I can offer here. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~

Hello spidey

Review of "Bobo the Clown taught me to laugh" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

Hey, I found your story on the Random review page and I'm here to offer my views.

The first thought that came to be as soon as I finished reading this story was, "Is this how life is going to be in the far future?". That question gave me the shivers. I understand how the laugh was brought but that also spooked me, that that person did not realize that the clown was dead when he made him laugh. The setting and place imagery work well to show a desolate place after many wars and humans with little to no emotion at all. Again, a lot of questions keep popping in my head, will the price of a single laugh be the death of someone? Whether reading this made me laugh or not is another questions but it definitely made me think a lot, so thank you for that.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

FORUM

The Daily Raffle~Hiatus!  (E) Win 50% of the GPs EVERY DAY! Support WDC groups! #1941293 by Princess Zelda

"Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl!

Review of "Music of Love" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A soft and sensual poem about the music of love. The poem flows as beautiful as the love and the emotions experienced. Nice shape to it as well, like a melting candle. Well written.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.


Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

FORUM

The Daily Raffle~Hiatus!  (E) Win 50% of the GPs EVERY DAY! Support WDC groups! #1941293 by Princess Zelda

"Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello Jatog the Green

Review of "Cellblock" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

Hi, I found this poem on the random review page and I'm here to give my views.

The poem is about the sadness that happens on valentine's day. For some people this is the best of the year but for some including me this would be the most dreaded day of the year. The poem is funny with the great with the rhymes, a cute cover image too.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

FORUM

The Daily Raffle~Hiatus!  (E) Win 50% of the GPs EVERY DAY! Support WDC groups! #1941293 by Princess Zelda

"Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello Alexi

Review of "Promised Land" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

Hi, I found your poem on the random review page and I'm here to let you know about my thoughts.A nice poem about searching for God and the promised land, Heaven. I agree with everything you have written and share the faith you have too. Reading this assures and strengthens me. Keep writing such inspiring and spiritual poems.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

In the third line, you wrote 'fron' instead of 'from', just a typo, no worries.
Also when you refer to God and Jesus as He or Him please use the uppercase just like I did here. So for example, from your poem, the line 'Just knock on the door of his mansion house' should be 'Just knock on the door of His mansion house' and in the next line you wrote 'wecome' i'm sure you meant 'welcome'.

These are just my friendly suggestions.

My Favourite Lines

"At last I have found him... prayer is the key
His spirit is with me my fears he has banned"

Amen, there is no fear when Jesus is here with us.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

FORUM

The Daily Raffle~Hiatus!  (E) Win 50% of the GPs EVERY DAY! Support WDC groups! #1941293 by Princess Zelda

"Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME

Review of "AND GOD SAID -" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A thought provoking poem about answering the question "are you ready yet?" by God. In this poem, God keeps asking about different situations in your life and asking if you are ready to let go but then your answer is "No". And then the dialogue changes and brings the author who is now answering or talking back to Him. The author is giving excuses that she has her family and all her ambitions to fulfill and just can't be ready yet. Then God answers to this with a "No" and then He takes her to the Home/Heaven and then now He asks her if she misses the life she had on earth to which this now enlightened person answers "No". I love the ending three stanzas, it is true that we don't know when our time is up, but if we chose to live by love as you say in this poem, no matter when our time is up, we will be sure of meeting the saviour as we are taken up Heavenward.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern of the form a,a i.e, consecutive rhymes and this helps with the flow and rhythm that goes throughout the poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and that is what made to come by and read this poem.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. These are just my friendly suggestions.

My Favourite Lines

"He gives us the time to make things right;
to know the wonder of His light."

Reminds me of the song "In His Time", all good things happen in His time and we must learn to wait patiently and know to trust Him.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

FORUM

The Daily Raffle~Hiatus!  (E) Win 50% of the GPs EVERY DAY! Support WDC groups! #1941293 by Princess Zelda

"Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello common child trusts in God

Review of "That's Why I Was Made" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A nice poem about the purpose of each of our lives. It is easy to say that our purpose is to do the will of God but finding it , understanding it and then finally doing it is the hard part. I believe that each of us have to have that yearning to find our true purpose and not just follow somebody and whatever they say. It has be an individual recognition and discovery. As you say here, the basic purpose of life is not to live a life for our own and selfish desires but to live it to bring someone else to life, happiness and peace. And surely as you say, if we find our true Will of God and do it, Heaven's gates will be open to us. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form a,b,c,b and this works well with the flow and the rhythm which is consistent with the entire poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in, spelling or grammar can be found. You could have used a little bit more of punctuation: commas and periods in your poem, however this is your poem and hence it has to be to your liking and style. These are just my friendly suggestions.

My Favourite Lines

"He will guide us, if we listen
in soul, in heart, in mind"
Surely He will, if we seek the truth with all our heart and mind. I was searching for books and poems on the topic of purpose of life and I'm glad that I found this.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

FORUM

The Daily Raffle~Hiatus!  (E) Win 50% of the GPs EVERY DAY! Support WDC groups! #1941293 by Princess Zelda

"Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

** Image ID #1729365 Unavailable **

Hello Sir Various

Review of "Unexpected Snack" 

This review is the last of your Nuclear Package
from "Invalid Item"  gifted by A E Willcox .

General Comments and Emotional Impact

This is the first time I've read an entire story just in dialogue. It like closing your eyes to a movie script, like you're blind and have to figure out what happens, it was really nice how you brought out the visual elements without actually showing or saying about anything or anyone. The title is just perfect for the story, what an unexpected snack that was.
Ok, so the story is about two detectives and how they are in a crime scene and one of them has been with the other one's wife and when he find out, well, its obvious that he kills them both. There is good suspense as from the beginning there are just pieces of a puzzle that are left asking questions that are finally answered and the story comes to a great end too.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

Review of Entry submitted to the "Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello ⭐️Jellyfish⭐️

Review of "Bad Day at Work" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A nice emoticon poem about a really bad day at work. Well, that's what happens when you're up at night. You have put in a lot of thought in coupling the emoticons with words and bringing them to life. Fun, creative and great imagination. You also managed to bring in rhyming lines that added pep to the poem as a whole, taking it to the whole next level. I noticed that you used a lot of emoticons in colour blue, interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"and hope I won't get d!"

well, I seriously hope this doesn't happen for real.

Overall

I loved it, enjoyed it and I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

FORUM

The Daily Raffle~Hiatus!  (E) Win 50% of the GPs EVERY DAY! Support WDC groups! #1941293 by Princess Zelda

"Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello Richard Briley Jr

Review of "In my Father's House." 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful true story about how your Dad and how His heart was changed. Reading this made me think, we should continue to pray for the people we want to be saved, even if we don't believe that God can works in miraculous ways. I liked the way you narrated the whole story. It felt very calm, reassuring and peaceful to read it. It is true that a hero is a erson who takes courage to go ahead and do what he believe is true, I see that your Dad is a true hero in that he not only proclaimed that God is true but also was baptized as a testimony of his commitment to Him.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

Hello Joey's Spring has Sprung

Review of "A Question of Hearing" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A great story/incident that gives insight into how our friends and family treat us when they know we are studying for becoming a doctor. And reading this shows how caught up we can be in our world of studies that we tend to relate everything to it and end up being completely misunderstood and confused. I have had some similar experiences too. I love the title, very thought provoking. It is so true that most of the times we see and hear things through a filter and when we find out what it actually meant it is a slap in the face.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

Review of Entry submitted to the "Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest" 

Hello Yellow Rose

Review of "Encouragement for Writing" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The poem is about encouragement for writing. It is true that though we are all writers we need constant encouragement to keep writing. As you suggest, we have to open our minds to look out into the world for the inspiration and it will come to us, though it may seem like the words are hiding, it will finally come. I like the way you ended the poem, by speaking directly to the reader to say that their words and thoughts are unique and special. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form a,a. And there is also consistent rhythm with each line and this is good cause it makes the poem easily readable.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. I would have wanted to see more emoticons used, just my thought.

My Favourite Lines

"A will come that warms your "

A nice selection of emoticons in this line and also I like the way the mind and heart get connected here.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

Hello Serenity

Review of "What does it mean to be me" 

A nice poem pondering about the question "who am I?", "what it is that I have meant to do with my life?", "What's my destiny?", "My purpose?". I have been doing this same thing, trying to find the meaning in my life. Don't change it, I like that way it is and really a poem is just the way the poet meant to be.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

Hello Iva Lilly Durham

Review of "Weighed in the Balance" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A sad and true poem. It talks about trying to impress and satisfy someone who cannot be satisfied because we can't find anything that seems to please them. I have come across such people who won't give us a clue as to what it is they want from us,but seem to squeeze us from the very life we have as if that would satisfy them finally. I can feel the pain,sadness and the emotional torture one undergoes when this happens to them.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming patternis a,b,c,b and this goes well with the rhythm count you have is perfect for the flow and the theme.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.


Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

This is review is part of "Invalid Item" 

Hello Elle - on hiatus

Review of "Two Ordinary Men" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

Once again,I found the two men and the treasure they were hiding.

This is one beautiful true story. To write all about their history and lives into a short story that takes effort and I see that the effort was paid off as you received the third prize for this. Dick and Stan lived far apart and lived in different ways and did service to their country. They stuck up when it was most needed and were always in take charge. Sometimes life does bring us the right people at the right time and then we realize how our lives are inter woven, the same way as Stand and Dick met because of their children's marriage. They found great friendship one that is so rare to find in these times and went on to do everything they could until death.
Reading this saddens me because there is a very rare case of this to be happening somewhere in the world not as well as gives me hope that there still might be some extraordinary left in the ordinary people we see and meet everyday.


Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and it is about how these ordinary men became extraordinary.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

This is review is part of "Invalid Item" 

Hello Jack-check out 7YS

Review of "Hope?" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The poem is about uncertainty, hope and holding on. From the previous poems I read at your port and this, I see that confusion and indecision seems to the highlight or the theme. Traumatic experiences do lead to a place where we want to get out but feel completely lost. When in such situations as you have said here, people if they see us going through that, would say keep trying and keep hitting your head against the wall and your solution will come. I've learnt from my own experience, when I was in a traumatic place, and there was no one to say go on and try to live. I knew there was a solution in me, I tried my best to calm myself and when my mind became clear, after listening to everything it had to say, I knew exactly what had to be done to get out of it, I just had to give up and get out, it didn't depend on what others would think or say, but it all was because it is my life and I want to live it the way I want to.
Your poem here brings out the feeling of loneliness, like some one abandoned and left there to die. It shows how one's belief and trust once broken can be very hard to get back. Seeing the title, I was hoping for a happy or inspiring poem, but then there is a question mark there and now I understand the title too.
Well,I hope to see more inspiring poems from you.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"Crashed and burned,
Worn out,
My belief punctured by the thorns,"

Sad, painful yet true words from the aching heart.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

Hello Kengi

Review of "Hope in Yourself" 

A lovely poem about hoping. The word choice is good and there are no mistakes in spelling, grammar and punctuation. The poems mainly talks about what all to hope for and about. It is inspiring and thought provoking indeed.

Thanks for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

This is review is part of "Invalid Item" 

Hello Maryann - House Martell

Review of "Adventure for Love" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A lovely story about a woman who has to prove that she is worthy to be married to the man she loves. Usually, I mean at least in all the stories I've read or heard it is the man who has to prove himself to be worthy for the woman, reading this story makes me think. I'm not married yet, so all these years after reading much fairy tales, romance novels and stuff, I would always expect the man to prove himself, but after reading this, I began thinking, am I going to be worthy of the man I would in future be married to. Well, thought provoking story indeed, I have to admit, it was a bit to long for a short story, according to me.

So, there she is the woman Pooca and her love Pelo. You bring them into the story very gently, and then also tell us a little about the past of both of them and how they came into the relationship they now are in. As I started reading this, I thought this is similar to Pocahontas story, but it was not, this is what happens when we read to much I guess, I compare to much. The story was long and very descriptive especially at the market places and in explaining all the medical supplies she was buying for the village. I was expecting a sudden twist or some heart racing event that would being thrill and then she would escape from it, but the story went on to give the positive outcome alone. The scenes and settings lead us back to the late 18th century and San Francisco and it felt like I was watching a movie. I also like how you ended the story without saying that she went on to be married but by giving the readers that hope and letting the imagination play its own role for us.

Title and description

The title fits the content, but I would definitely change it from "Adventure for a Love" to "Adventure for Love" and the description below is interesting, but again I would think of adding some intriguing detail from the story to make more passersby to come in and read the entire story.

My Favourite Part

The introduction of Patrick, I like how you described him. He was not only a good looking lad but also a boy with a good heart, who will grow up to be a great man with impeccable character.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

This is review is part of "Invalid Item" 

Hello Maryann - House Martell

Review of "Courage and Sunflower Seeds" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A fun, lovely and scary story modified from the Original version of Hansel and Gretel story. At first I had no clue that this story would be similar to their story, so that was a bit of a surprise. Nice twist of the alien woman and her blue spaceship. Since you wrote this story a long time ago, you might be looking to see what to edit, I would suggest changing some saying words to showing words, there was imagery in the story, but the scenes where Margaret pushes the woman into the room until they leave that alien spaceship where a little bit slow for me, I wanted more of the excited and scary feeling there.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is the same as the topic, so I would suggest changing that to something more captivating, and precise.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.
In the first paragraph, I would suggest changing this line "spending quality times..." to "spending quality time...", I don't know, but the latter reads better to me.
And "countinghouse" should be "counting house", just a space typo there, I guess.
These are just my friendly suggestions.

My Favourite Part

I like how after being through an adventurous and scary experience, it helps them to become stronger as individuals and also creates a bond that is strengthen with trust and appreciation.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda