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Review of Winds of Europa  
Review by Sum1
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hey
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 11th WDC Anniversary!

         I really enjoyed this story, both versions! I think it's up to a reader as to which one is better, I found that both were fine as written. Maybe I enjoyed omniscient narrator version a little more. Either way, both were excellent.

         The one thing I really enjoyed about your story is something I've thought about for a long time. IF we were to find alien intelligence, would we recognize it? We seem to expect alien life to exhibit the same properties we possess, which I think is so untrue it's laughable. All we have to go on concerning intelligence is our own. To expect other life forms to possess the same qualities we do is preposterous. Personal opinion? Alien life is already here on Earth. We just don't recognize it, the same way Teron, Berit, and Dmitri failed to realize that the vortex's were Europa's 'version' of intelligence. That's what I mean by saying if we do encounter an alien intelligence, will we recognize it, and be able to communicate with it?

         It is easy to see why this was published in one way or another. I think it would make a good short movie, or could be lengthened some and made a full length movie. Maybe their stay on Europa is longer, maybe long enough for the next expedition to start on its way, but arriving too late to help them. And maybe Mission Control and the leaders of the agency know, but don't tell them of the dangers because of some hidden agenda. Who knows? I hope you pursue this in some fashion, it's a possibility. But we both know what the chances are of that happening.

         An excellent Sci-Fi story that any Sci-Fi aficionado would love. Thank you for sharing!



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Review of Ailurophobia  
Review by Sum1
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hey Foreverdreamer,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 4th WDC Anniversary!

         Your story is very interesting, containing a lot of myths I've heard about cats throughout the years. When I was a child at home, we always had cats. As an adult raising his own children, we had cats then too. I can confess that all my children survived these 'murderous' beasts. As did my brothers and sister. *Smile*

         The flow of story was very good. It wasn't rushed, though it did jump a bit time-wise. What I mean is, there were times where some amount of time had to have passed, yet it wasn't mentioned at all. Read my second comment below and you'll understand. Also, there is at least one place where Sierra is thinking, but you use double quotation marks to highlight them. You are correct for doing that, but I think the common practice is to use only one quotation mark. I could be wrong, and I'm not sure that using two is incorrect, but using two quotation marks when a person is thinking makes it hard to determine what is oral speech, and what is thinking. Another thing that could be done is to use italics when a person is thinking. That, or use both. My specific comments are below.

1.  “How are you? He asked. It’s good to see you”. You need closing quotation marks after the question mark after you, and opening quotation marks before It's.

2.  “He’s back there”. He pointed to the booth in the very back corner. “What’s with him today?”, he asked. “I’ve never seen him like this. He's white as a sheet. He never breaks his two-beer limit. He's on his fourth one today”. This is one of those time things I mentioned above. It must have taken a while for Sierra to get a rideshare to the pub, but that's more implied that stated. Also, Daniel would have to guzzle those beers for him to be on his fourth by the time Sierra arrived.

         The ending seemed to be a little rushed. One moment Sierra and Daniel are in the pub talking, then at the house where Cheri soothes him, then they're planning a wedding. The next thing you know, Daniel is dead. I'm not sure how you might fix this, should you decide to edit this, but it's something to consider.

         This is a vefry interesting story that can keep your attention, and make you wonder. Thank you for sharing!



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for entry "Invalid Entry" 
Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey Sox!
         I posted immediately after you in "I Write: Enter the Second Decade" , and thus have the honor of reviewing your poem.

         I am thrilled you provided the picture prompt for this. Without that prompt, I was wondering what message your poem was really trying to convey. To be honest, I was lost, and didn't understand your poem at all. Then I saw the prompt, and the world was lit with light!

         I know the prompt provided guidance in the writing of this, but I felt that the word 'darkness' was overused. Maybe instead of using it in three consecutive lines twice, you could have use one line. Example, "Darkness seeping, thrilling, tightening' I'm not sure it would have given the same feeling though. As I read this, I tried to use my inner Vincent Price voice, with the same pace he used in reciting 'The Raven'. It worked well for me, but the usage of Darkness that many times did make good ol' Vincent pause. I realize you got each ending rhyme with Darkness in the second usage to rhyme with the end rhyme in the first usage. I loved that!

         Overall, well done with this. Thank you for sharing!



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Review by Sum1
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hey ruwth,
         I see you are the writer who posted right before I did, so I have the honor of reviewing your writing.

         I have to admit that I'm not familiar with this WDC Birthday activity, so I will be freelancing this.

         I did read the rules in the forum, and am not sure you met the intent of the forum. Don't get me wrong, your essay is very good, well written, One can almost see your personality shine in it. I did enjoy the flashback to 2020 though, but I didn't follow the links to the items you referenced.

         I admit that the line, "The last thing I remember that cat and I were going to go explore something." It just seemed that this jumped around some line to line. Why do I say that? The next line says, And where is Adrian when I need him. For one who is not familiar with this activity, it's a bit hard to follow.

         I love the cast of characters in this activity, you meeting up with them would be fun most likely. Sadly, that meeting would be a virtual one most likely. Still, it seems it would have to be a fun meeting.

         What I was hoping to see in this, was you mentioning a suspect, and why you consider them to be a suspect. Or is it too soon for that to be mentioned? Of course I'd want to learn why you consider them a suspect too. That seemed to be the theme of this WDC Birthday activity, perhaps you named a suspect in the forum? I did read/see other posts in the forum and see that the are marked with a *StarR* to show they are a conversation started by a suspect or special party guest. Now I understand more about this, and after reading a couple of posts, I can see they are far different from yours. Yes, you do need to stick to the party rules (in my humble opinion), and show us you know your stuff (I'm sure you do).

         This is an interesting post, and an excellent WDC Birthday Activity. Thank you for sharing!



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Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hey Ruth,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 9th WDC Anniversary!

         First, I love to cook and love to bake even more. So my question is, Is this an actual recipe? I'd love try my hand at baking this.

         Second, this is well written. The dialog between the sisters really carries this. This is a conversation I would have had with my siblings, except mine are not with us anymore here on Earth.

         There are a couple of things you might want to consider, should you decide to edit this.

1. Use a larger font. Highlight the entire story, then on the tool bar above, click the 'size' icon (with the three S's) and select about a font size 4. This will make the font for the entire story larger, like this part of my review is. (I chose Font 5 just to highlight the size difference).

2. A personal preference of mine is to indent the first line of every paragraph. I realize you don't need to with the double spacing, but I like doing it. In case you don't know how, use the {indent} command exactly as you see it here before the first word of each paragraph. You can also click to the left of each word, then click the icon on the toolbar that is 2 icons to the right of the size icon. It has an arrow pointing right, with lines drawn to simulate text.


         Well done with this, I enjoyed the read, and could almost smell that cake/pie! If you're a choco-holic, I have a killer recipe for chocolate that I'd be willing to share. *Smile* Thank you for sharing this!



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Review of Bare Hand  
Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hey Winnie
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 13th WDC Anniversary!

         Y'know, I've often thought the same thing about the future. Suppose that sometime in the future, people think it's normal to always wear a mask, maybe even gloves as you've written here. I wonder if a woman might see her husband's face before the marry?

         This is pretty well written, but I'd have love to know more about the back-story. How did the man end up in the art gallery at the same time? Was he there admiring his own work? Why? After all, it had been there for some time most likely. How or why did people end up wearing gloves everywhere they went? That was never something required in our COVID protocols. Was it a law that was passed, or just something people started doing. I thought about this yesterday in the grocery store. There's a nice container of sanitary wipes at the entrance so you can ensure your cart handle is sanitized, then you go through the store and handle things on shelves. Who else has touched those objects? What germs might have been left behind? I'm not a germophobe by any means, but this thought just ran through my head.

         Interesting story, thank you for sharing!


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Review of Illegal Alien  
Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hey
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 6th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a pretty cute story. The dialog really carries it well. If I were to guess at this, and stereotype anyone, my guess would be that this Earthling is from America. Or maybe you wrote it that way since you're from the great USA. What matters most though, is that this story is well written, the flow is excellent. I especially liked the words you created for the various entities on the planet. Xunx-Xinx is one, another is Cyfas the Cyflicator. The whole idea of this is terrific, and while it would seem the Earthling is innocent since his ship did appear to have crashed, it just brings up the idea that we need to be very careful when start exploring distant areas of the Universe. Of course, we think we're the greatest thing since sliced bread, superior to every other life form. Boy, are we in for a surprise! *Laugh*

         A very good story, thank you for sharing!


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Review by Sum1
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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         I saw your post in the Newsfeed and thought I'd give it a read and review it as part of our Raid Weekend! I am very glad I did too. *Smile* While I really enjoyed the story, there are some things I didn't enjoy so much. The enjoyment far outweighs any not so much enjoyment. But here are my specific comments.

1. As a Royal Marine, he overcame overwhelming odds on many occasions. MHO here, but I (it's not my story obviously) would replace overcame with a synonym. I won't suggest one since I feel that would be telling you how to word your lines.

2. I hate the ending. Surely there's a better way to end this. The options are limited though, and try as I might, I can't think of a scenario that would work. He would have to know the owner of the Jewelry store, which seems unlikely. Having the Jewelry store loan him the ring doesn't fit either since they have no trust he would bring it back once Mabel passed. Unless of course, the jeweler knows who Sid is, maybe from reading about him, or seeing him on the telly or something. Or, they do loan it on occasion, except the loaner ring is fake....

         Suggestion to consider. The jeweler loans Sid the ring to present to Mabel. All the while his staff of jewelers are manufacturing a duplicate, with Sid and the jeweler developing a way to complete the swap a couple of days later. (I have no idea how long it would take to do this, but it seems to me that the jeweler might have one already on hand, or close to being ready. The fake one is used for 'emergency's' just like this, but for some reason, it's not available.... already out on loan? Returned damaged? The jeweler accompanies Sid to the hospital and remains out of sight while Sid presents the ring to Mabel. She chastises him for getting something so expensive, but she obviously loves it. Of course, Mabel has to pass, and does shortly after the ring is placed on her finger. The jeweler sees what happens, has the fake ring in his pocket by now, and when Sid brings the real ring to him, he completes the swap. Or does he? (Leave it up to the reader to decide there.) Either way, Mabel is buried with the ring on her finger.

         {Yes, I realize that once it is discovered that the ring is fake, an insurance investigation would begin. That's another story, not part of this story (In my thoughts, the ring was not swapped as it was supposed to have been long ago, with the jeweler ultimately selling it on the black market and depositing the money in an overseas account). The important thing is, this is your story, you edit if you choose, in the manner you choose! Excellent story, thank you for sharing!


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Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hey Jimminycritic,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         I must be getting old, heck I AM old. I find I love touching stories about family connections, family love, and Santa. This is very good, I just wish there was more to read. I write about Santa off and on, and have come to believe that he is real, in a sense. He's as real as we'll let him be, in our hearts. We are Santa, we bring him to life. But we must first believe.

         Your main character (unnamed) broke a window sometime in the past while playing with his little brother. I liked it when his father sensed his older son nearby, torn by his love for the family, all the while knowing he wasn't getting the bike he so desperately wanted. I really enjoyed the part where things changed for him while he was standing in the background. This could have been a bit stronger if his father had motioned him to his side, and given him a big hug or something. Anything to bring more emotion to the scene. Yes, there was emotion there, but it didn't involve your main character. Receiving a hug from his father might have done that.

         This is a nice story, one that is a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing!



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Review of To Robin Williams  
Review by Sum1
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hey Webbie,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 15th WDC Anniversary!

         Robin Williams was a one of kind person. Some would say a great man, some might not call him quite that. For me, he was special in many ways, a man with a gift that a lot of us would love to have. Sadly, many gifted people are plagued by demons of some type, as it would seem Robin was. Even worse, few seemed to be aware of it. Those close to him either didn't see it, or didn't know what to do. The general public is the loser as a result.

         I love your poem, it is short, to the point, and very beautiful. You are correct of course in saying we'll all be there someday. Hopefully not too soon in our time, but soon in the timeframe of Earth's existence. Again, beautiful. Thank you for sharing!




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Review of Tetris-ctys  
Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey Jeff,
         I posted in "In My Heart"  after you so I get the honor of reviewing your entry.

         I had to look up what a Tetractys is before I could review this. After all, if I don't know what it is, how can I review this? *Smile*

         Your short poem took me back many years to the days we played Tetris on Nintendo. We had the original version too, in a gold case if I'm not mistaken. Long gone now. Your poem described playing Tetris perfectly though. I think the key to doing well in that game is to not panic! Easier said than done, that's for sure.

         You chose to write a double Tetractys and did well overall, with one minor thing you might want to correct, should you choose to edit this. I looked at Shadowpoetry.com to learn what a Tetractys is, and see that it should have a syllable count of 1,2,3,4,10, and a double Tetractys should have 1,2,3,4,10,10,4,3,2,1. In looking at your poem, the 10 syllable line in the first verse only has 9 syllables, unless I can't count anymore. *Smile* Quite possible really.

         An interesting poem that describes playing Tetris. Well done! Thank you for sharing!



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Review of Yea Plunge  
Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hey Dan,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 18th WDC Anniversary!

         Eighteen huh! Wow,,, when you joined, babies were born that day or month. Now, they are graduating from high school and becoming adults. To them it's been a lifetime, for you, a 'mere' 18 years. Congratulations on your WDC Anniversary!

         This is a very interesting poem; it caused me to look at your port some, and into Multivalence. I really enjoyed the poem, and my investigation into Multivalence. Your flow was very good, in the poem, and in the river. *Laugh* It has an almost sing-song quality to it. I especially liked the thought of the muse causing you to write it (of course), and that it was how each reader perceives it makes it and receives their own lesson in the process. I love that thought! Your three sections to 'Bottle In The River' is excellent, I hope I can remember to return and read more from this collection.

         An excellent concept and premise, thank you for sharing!



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Review by Sum1
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey RidingHood,
         I posted my story right after yours in "I Write: Enter the Second Decade" , and now have the honor to review your story.

         I have to admit, you've left me hanging here. I see this is a contest entry and you may be under a word limit, but I have no idea what a 'Norn' is. The text of a different color highlights the contest requirements which is good, but I saw or read a couple of things that made me pause.

1. I know little to nothing about knitting, but it doesn't seem she could have knitted a blanket in that short of a time period. That's a complete guess and assumption on my part.

2. I asked Alexa to play Phillip Glass and Verdandi and I sat listening to the music as her hands continued their magickal work. Is the misspelling of magical intentional or a simple type?

3. I realize you are most likely on a word limit and couldn't extend this, butr it needs that extension. The story seems incomplete. We 'jumped into' the story in the middle it seems. You've hosted a party and all guests but one (who is unnamed) have left. She sits with you and ends up knitting a blanket. Her response to your offer of payment is very interesting, and made me wonder what was meant with that statement. I loved your last line though, I too am wondering about the ancient bones, and how to uncover them.



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Review of Life On Mars?  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hey Alex,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 4th WDC Anniversary!

         I had a feeling that you were going in that direction with your story. It reminds me of the deep sea fish that has its own personal lure in the form of a seemingly small fish, when in reality it's a trap.

         This is a good story, and I realize there's about a 20 minute delay between the Earth and Mars, but where's the communication with NASA, or some other space organization? If Jack and Norman are exploring Mars, I'm sure they wouldn't be there alone. Someone would be coordinating their efforts. I also doubt that either Jack or Norman would do something that would endanger them. They would be better trained than that. Still, if they were careful, it would make for a boring story, wouldn't it. *Smile*


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "May 22, 2022" 
Review by Sum1
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hey Ridinghhood,

         This might be a tough one to review, but here goes.

         I looked this card up because I've never looked at a Tarot Card deck, other than having my fortune told once about 18 years ago. But the lady who told my fortune is the one who saw the deck really. I don't recall much about it at all.

         Your blog entry is interesting, and caused me to look things up. After all, how can I possibly comment if I have no idea what you're looking at. I agree with your comment completely, the world is definitely topsy-turvy right now, and I don't see it getting better in the near future. In my humble opinion, we have given the general populace a tool (internet access) that has been corrupted by those who look to make money at someone elses expense, and others who want to do nothing more than cause mayhem and grief for people they'll never meet, and those who just want to be noticed. It was never intended for that kind of use, it was meant to be something you could use to learn, and communicate. We (mankind) have turned it on it's side and upside down to satisfy ourselves, our own self interests. Yes, I agree that you have to turn yourself upside down and topsy turvy at times to adjust, but man....

         I love your prayer, it's to the point, it's beautiful, and it puts things in perspective. Thank you for sharing everything! I have to confess that I don't understand your statement at the end though. Maybe you can enlighten me?

         Again, thank you for sharing, I love reading someone's blog entries.



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Hey Whiskers,
         Well, I posted after you in "I Write: Enter the Second Decade" , and thus have the obligation honor to review your entry. *Smile*

         This is well written, the flow is perfect with just enough back-story/details to involve the reader. My biggest comment about this though, is where's the Eulogy? Your description tells us that Hiccup has to offer an Eulogy, yet the story ends before he speaks at the funeral. Actually, it ends before the man passes. The buildup is good, the dialog between Hiccup and his father is excellent. I just expected an actual eulogy at the end is all. The end right now is good in a way, Hiccup is looking to his father for advice on where to begin. The next paragraph should be more dialog between him and his father about the eulogy, and what he might want to say about Stilton. Since it seems Hiccup doesn't know Stilton well, getting information from his father is a good idea. In fact, he might to ask other villagers about Stilton.

         Once he has the information needed (there's no need to provide details at this point, just the fact that he speaks with others about Stilton). You should briefly describe their interaction, but leave details out. That's for the eulogy.

         Once he's spoken with everyone he needs to, shift to the graveside service. I don't believe there's a need to post or have a reader read the entire eulogy, but at least show us how Hiccup starts it off. Maybe a short paragraph at most. We would then be shown that Hiccup not only did his 'homework' in learning all he can about Stilton, he is also able to speak in front of others.

         This is a good story, a pleasure to read. I just thought you ended it too soon. Just an opinion, we all know what those are worth. Thank you for sharing!



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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hey Jody,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 6th WDC Anniversary! Actually, being the Featured Author this month, how could I not know it's your Anniversary?

         To be honest, I was going to review two other stories, but found I reviewed them in past years. Edgar would be me, except being an instructor now, I'm not afraid of interviews. However, I can still relate well to this. There was a time in my life where I was a wallflower in every way.

         While this is pretty short, it does tell a bit of a tale. I love contests of almost any kind, and wonder why I don't enter more. Maybe it's being preoccupied with various tasks that causes me to not enter. I like that you made the font bold for each key word, and despite this being so short, it is a good story. And the requirement to keep it short didn't stop you from 'showing' us scenes, and not just 'telling'. Well done there!

         I really enjoyed this short read, thank you for sharing!



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Hey Annette,
         You know I can't let May pass without dropping in for a review! So here I am, honoring this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         What a cool story. I love the idea of finding something like this, but I have to be honest, I don't have much that would qualify as a Time Capsule type of thing. Maybe my niece has it in my mother's cedar chest in Albuquerque. I will check when I'm there in October.

         I really enjoyed this story, I wonder if you have something like this too. I did see one thing you might want to look at, should you decide to edit this.

         It was easier said then done, but two weeks later, Candice was able to go pick up her photos from the last photo store in town that had held on to the old machines needed for this type of work. I'm sure you already know that 'then', should be 'than'.

         I just think this kind of idea, finding something from 20 years ago that you didn't know you had. I'm not so sure I want certain things from my past found though. *Smile* It might get me in trouble, more trouble than it's worth.

         Nicely done though, thank you for sharing!



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Review by Sum1
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hey Neva,
         I'm here to send you a review for participation in "I Write: Enter the Second Decade" 

         I love learning where people have lived their lives, it's fun to learn about your past, as well as learn where you've lived. Blackwell Oklahoma is the ubject of your nostalgic memory huh! I've never been there as you might imagine, but I've driven past it along I-44 several times.

         You are correct in your statement about children having such strange ideas about things, and how those ideas can change as you mature. I know you didn't mention that in your entry, but it was implied. The idea that a child's memory can become a legend, and eventually a myth is an excellent analogy of what we remember. In my youth, we lived in five locations, so my youth was much like yours. If I'd written about my hometown, it wold have been about Albuquerque, NM, the city I still call home.

         As far as the blogentryt goes, if you choose to edit this, look at the last paragraph area. It seems you lost focus a little, and allowed a couple of minor typos to sneak in. Nothing major, but they are there just the same. I loved learning about your past, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Just One Chance  
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Hey Cloud9
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 20th (WOW!) WDC Anniversary!

         I love stories like this! I was never handicapped like young Todd was, but I was never an athlete either. I always root for the underdog, and did so here too. I knew where your story was going. I just wasn't sure how you would get me there. The only question in my mind about the whole things is, if Todd knew (or perhaps saw) Sammy was playing that day, why wouldn't he ask him first? I'm thinking that being such close friends, it makes sense. But, having him go to the opposing team first (because they were coming in to bat) does lengthen the story a bit, and makes a little sense. I guess I'm just thinking on my terms. If that had been me, I'd have gone to the team my best friend was on, no matter what. This is a very good story though, thank you for sharing!



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Hey Maryann,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 20th (WOW!) WDC Anniversary!

         This is a good story, one I would term a story for juveniles. It's good, don't get me wrong, but it seems a young teen would love to read this. It's well paced, the flow and dialog carry it along nicely. If I were to make any recommendations at all, it would be to enlarge the font. I must be getting old, I had to increase the zoom on my web-browser to read it easily. Still, it's a nice read. I thought for sure you were going with an Alien from space type of story at one point. I liked it when Margaret remembered the Hansel & Gretel story, and acted as she did. I do have to comment on that too. It seemed that this is set in Medieval times since Miles was dueling his father, but Hansel and Gretel was published in the 1800's. Not sure what you might want do about that, other than establishing a year this takes place. Thank you for sharing your talent with us!




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Review of Beyond Boundaries  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hey Jaya,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary! Actually I didn't see your suitcase at all, as the Featured Author for April, there's no way I could pass up the chance to visit your port!

         I only have one comment really, and it's very minor. Not an issue, nothing wrong, just a personal preference. I think this would look much better centered on the page!

         I love the references to the Ganga and Utopia. I know a little about the Ganga, mainly your description as a reference. I've read extensively on a wide variety of subjects, so I knew it is India's most important river. I don't think this would reflect your love of your country without this reference. After all, your poem is about love, this had to be included! For one whose English is a second language, this is very well written. Yes, I realize (or think) that English is taught in you schools, I'm just not sure it's a mandatory course, or one your can volunteer to attend. If I were to bet, I'd say it's mandatory.

         A very good poem, thank you for sharing!


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Hey Sharon,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 15th WDC Anniversary!

         This is pretty good, but based on your description, I was thinking some kind of 'hanky-panky' might have been enjoyed on the bike. True, a naked bike ride (I'd love to do that, but at my age? I doubt it, besides, I'm in Illinois, not Oregon) can kind of make you cringe, but a little anti-bacterial soap should do the trick. And since you don't really know if he used your bike, it's all the better. But yep, anti-bacterial soap just to be safe.

         You made Johnny seem quite the character. I know what you mean when you tell us that he's been living on borrowed time. The thing is, I feel that everyone is living on borrowed time. No one can live forever, when we're young, we feel invincible. As we age, we start to understand (and perhaps embrace) our mortality. No, I don't look forward to leaving God's Green Earth, but I know I have to.

         While I didn't find myself laughing at this, I smiled, and enjoyed the complete read. Thank you for sharing!







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Review of BURN ME TO ASHES  
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Hey Nightflower,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         Your description is spot on, this is a very dark poem. I've never been in a spot quite like this, so it's hard for me to relate. This is pretty good, but it could be so much stronger. Why do I say that? Because of a couple of repeat lines like 'Burn me to ashes', and the repeated use of a word on 2-3 lines, like 'burn', and 'alone'. It's obvious your heart is broken, you are devastated, but you relay this in your poem a bit vaguely. Show us why you are in this moment. Show us how your heart came to be broken, how you seemed to lose everything. In other words, pull your reader into the poem, make it our world for the few moments spent reading it. Leave us in tears, shaking our heads. Like I said, it's a pretty good poem, it just lacks a bit of depth. Thank you for sharing!


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