Okay, I admit it - the bread pudding pulled me in. I checked out your profile and I'm glad I did because this item is inspirational. I am impressed by what you have accomplished and you should be proud of yourself. The homeless issue continues to be a major concern everywhere. I understand that Denver has tried a different approach. They built clean, comfortable apartments for the homeless. It is a financial, as well as humanitarian, decision. They realized it costs more to treat the homeless when they are on the streets than if they had reasonable accommodations. I don't know how the program is going, but I wish them success.
You're either a cat person or you're not. The first step is to realize that they are not at all like dogs. Once you accept them for what they are, you can get along fine with them.
Thoroughly enjoyable.
I always make it a point to read items from the portfolio of whoever reads and reviews my stuff. And I always try to find something to review in return. I am always hoping to be able to return a 5-star rating. You made it easy with this one. If this is truly non-fiction, then it is truly inspirational. Great story and I'm glad things worked out for you. (I hate peas - always pick them out from soup and potpies.)
Very nice - good rhythm and rhyme (AABB can be difficult to maintain), and very good story. (One suggestion - first stanza - "pass on" instead of "pass in".)
Clever and fun to read. I enjoyed this.
One comment - you may have a typo where you say They'll surely be a raid. You may want There'll instead of They'll.
I liked this. Very enjoyable - and a lesson worth following. Good rhyming scheme. Regarding the rhythm, I would make one suggestion. Instead of It's actually something very grand, try It actually is something very grand.. It flows a little easier.
Or just ignore me. I hate it when someone gives me advice like this and I'll bet you do too. I really did like your poem.
We've had two wonderful dogs and we still miss them after many years. After they passed, the worst time was when we came in the door and they were not there to greet us. Nice sentiments and well done,
Janina, You certainly present a good image of someone snuggling up inside a warm house on a wintry day, just watching the snow fall and lost in thought. Very enjoyable. And I noted that you use the rhyming pattern ABAB, which can be tricky.
I have one poem about sledding and one about skiing:
Sledding!
Downhill Racer
Keep writing,
Jim
To my understanding, there are three basic elements to writing rhymes: the rhyming pattern, the rhythm and the story itself. You have nailed all three in this delightful poem. (I have read numerous poems of yours and they are all excellent.) I like the rhyming pattern, the rhythm is consistent, and the story is very amusing. Nicely done.
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