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Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well told!

You almost expect the narrator to give in due to the drowning traits inherited by the father - However, he perseveres and will soldier on, doing anything to stay afloat and still be able to glance at their mirror reflection.

Well done!!

Take care.
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Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is very inspiring in it's thoughts - I identified with the narrator in the sense that the biggest oppressor we sometimes face is our own mind or conscience - whatever one wishes to refer to that inner voice within us all - it can either drive us to success or, in the case of an individual who has heard negative things most of their life hurled in their direction, or become our greatest destroyer of dreams, desire, past wants or needs - leaving us paralysed by fear and self loathing.

I wish the narrator and his / her inner voice well and know they will succeed.

Nicely done - Take care
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Review of (?)  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Tango of Torture is one title that came to mind

His detrimental muse is another

Toxic Party of one

Just a few that came to mind - not very good but there they are

Very vividly written - I had a brother who fought his own battle with heroin and in the end lost - I sort of related to the gentleman in the story in a way.

Nice one.

Take Care.
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Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,

I enjoyed this introduction - I just wanted to clarify something though....

Deerfoot is originally introduced as "She" and then he is a ...well he - or did I misread that?

Please let me know if you plan to continue this one, it is a story I, for one would definitely come back to...

Thank you for the share!
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Review of Mercy  
Review by jinks
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I want to slap the boyfriend...

I want to shake some sense into that father....

And I want to tell Emma to come and live with me!!

Short, I want more..."pouts"

Ok in all seriousness - this is an unfortunate reality that faces some girls and you have painted this girl's story very well....But please write on - I would like the opportunity to see how she copes and if she manages...

Thank you for the share!
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Review of I'm Sorry  
Review by jinks
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
I am certain that if you showed this to the four ladies for whom this is intended with the simple words - I am sorry - please read this - it says more than I can verbally express......Forgiveness will be yours.

Bridges are sure to be mended and empty spaces left by these ladies' departures will be filled again with their love, light and wisdom.

I really liked this one - Keep writing in this manner - it is honest, raw and totally you, inside and out a path to self expression - ease up on yourself though - we all make errors and say incorrect and inappropriate things - forgiveness is ours if we seek it.

Best of luck....,.if you can let me know, should you choose to show this to the ladies mentioned - how it all works out.

Take care.
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Review of The Faiths  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
A beautiful message contained herein to "keep the faith" - Not always easily done, for as we lock away faith and hide the key, so to do we lock ourselves away, our hearts and souls - to prevent them from being burnt, ripped to shreds.....

This is an elegant encouragement to your reader to keep believing, that it does get better, that life has a good side to it to.

Nicely rendered - thanks for sharing!

Take care.
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Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
To live, truly live, love and experience this short fleeting moment we humans refer to as life is all anyone can really hope for their time on this earth - Sometimes we are given that second chance to realise that we have not lived at all.....

This drives that lesson home so so very well - I enjoyed this, thanks.

Is there more to this story that you can perhaps tell?

Take care!
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Review of The Folding Lady  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Another person / woman who got on with her life and before realizing it - stopped, took a look back and came to the decision that she / he has not lived the life they set out to do.

Instead, in their opinion, they settled for the normal, safe, morally correct and mundane existence of the suburban resident.

This is fine for others, but being a dreamer - someone who thinks they are worth more - this can be soul crushing.

Well written - thanks sharing...I do not know if anything I said above makes any sense.
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Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
I liked this, and now i am going to pout until I get to read more......

In all seriousness though - You definitely have something here, I hope you are continuing this story as there are so many ways and scenarios you could veer to.

This chapter has a nice and easy reading rhythm to it which is something, I for one always appreciate in a book or story when I am reading. (And I read. Like a LOT)

Nicely started - I now await the rest of this tale with baited breath.....

Take care.
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Review of Tired  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kathy,

This is an excellent portrayal of a person's feelings when they reach the point where they feel they just cannot any longer - what I liked most about this piece was the ending:

"The reason why I just
Cannot give up yet
I haven't finished my mission
What I was put here to do
I haven't changed the world
Like I've always wanted to..."

Simple yet very profound words.

Well done and thank you for the brave write - it is always most difficult to put this type of state of mind into words without coming across as dark and depressed.

Keep writing and take care.

PS. I hope you are at that point where you find yourself able to continue to carry out your mission - whatever that may be.
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Review of question?  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jen,

Short, to the point, yet hits home with the age old conundrum of whether or not it is wise to cross the friendship boundary to explore something more.....

A tricky situation at the best of times.

Hopefully the narrator can salvage the friendship - I am holding fingers they do!

Well written and point well made.

Take Care & thanks for sharing!
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Review of What I Did  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sum1

A very funny look at something we have all faced at one time or another.

This has a pleasant easy rythm to it and by the time i reached the end - I had a good old laugh!

"head to the throne" - yep - with a detection of extreme desperation i would imagine.

Thanks for the laugh!

Take care!
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Review by jinks
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
A gripping tale with a twist. I enjoyed this and the imagery which you pain with your words - well I'll say it again - Gripping. thanks for the story and this is a well worth it read!
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Review of Denial  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Patricia,

When someone reaches the point where they feel deep within themselves that they are not worthy of being loved, or they just do not look at themselves as a person any more, this person has truly hit rock bottom. They feel nothing for who or what they are.

For an individual to get to this point where they just see misery, where everything is black - dark, they had to have been through something or a few somethings much to painful, so much so that those of us on the outside looking in will never understand.

It is so very hard to guide this person back to their former selves, so difficult to get them to see that there is more to them, more to life than what they see through their very jaded and bitter eyes.

As much as we try, as much and as deeply as we can love such a person - it is very seldom that a person like this will actually know what they are losing in all there self indulgent misery - they also do not see the hurt they cause those around them, and this is by no means them being cruel - no, they just cannot see anything beyond their hurt, their grief - that they are the cause of their own self destructive patterns.

I do not know if this made any sense - I hope it did.

But this is a very thought provoking piece - thank you for sharing.
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Review of I Have a Name  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi again H.E.,

Another thought provoking but oh so very relevant piece! Yes, we all have a name - Made that much more unique or special due to our parents picking it out for us, for whatever the reasoning or thinking is behind the name - it is the one thing in everyone's' lives that is truly, just ours!

You display this so well in this piece - especially when Matthew forgets all his other woes at that moment when a girl he bumps into acknowledges him by addressing him by his name.

I guess it is in all of us to look for our own uniqueness, something that sets us aside from the pack - marks us as a once of a kind....

I really enjoyed this and if you ever write a follow on to this piece - Please make sure you arrange to smack Jason upside the head. HARD!

Thank you for sharing, Take care
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Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cara,

I truly enjoyed this, the chance encounter that left you with that warm feeling even after the fact - you took something of that moment with you - as should we all from each and everything we experience, feel and see in our life journey.

I liked your descriptions - I could feel the warmth seeping through the narrator's cold limbs and could again feel the cold once again taking these into it's cold embrace when the narrator move along.

Very descriptive and I like the way you ended off with taking the ember being taken along and still emitting warmth even after being separated from the coals of the fire that created it.

Nicely done!
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Review of The Nut Tree  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
A beautiful picture of an ecosystem developing and living and evolving - Nature at her best!

Nothing is as awesomely powerful, beautiful, gentle yet violent as is Mother Nature herself!

Thank you for this very elegantly written painting!

I truly enjoyed this!
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Review of A Magic Trick  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
Grief is tough - it comes in so many forms - not just over death, but also loss of one's self.

I hope if this is being written due to personal loss that it has helped you to a point where you never again have to find yourself sitting with your blade in hand.

Much light to you and thank you for this beautifully written piece!
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Review of Just a Touch  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim,

This is a brilliant portrayal of how the outside world views two who are truly in love, so much so that if flows out and over all that surrounds them...

To see this will leave some envious, others will feel that they to are lucky enough to experience this kind of love, yet there will be those few who have not and will not know this kind of love or be able to share in it's truly magestic bounty when it is left to radiate outwards to be shared with the world.

I enjoyed this one, thanks.
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Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
the young worship their own chosen Sporting heroes - aspiring to some day be just like them - the dreams and hopes.

I liked this piece - the promise of fame and success - yet these heroes - some of them ant way have truly worked hard to cement their names in eternal sporting glory.

Thank you - this was different and very enjoyable.
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Review of The Circle  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.0)
The Cycle of life - triumphs and errors repeated in all generations past and present and to be repeated once again by future generations.

a very nicely rendered lesson in the telling of a fable.

Wise and enjoyable at the same time!
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Review of Rainbow World  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
Never a truer word written - regrets are all our pet little cloaks, drawn around us for most things we never did - things we did, but should not have and things said that should never have been spoken to begin with.

Well done, thought provoking and leaves your reader looking back themself saying - "you know - this person is so accurately correct it is actually scary..."

Thank you for the write and a job well done!
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Review of Oh pay, oh pay  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Chris,

Thank you, i really enjoyed this!

On the surface this is an amusing piece and makes one smile with irony, yet when you really read and take it in - It is exactly what happens!

It is a very good demonstration of the madness and materialism that strikes people when it comes to the festive season and how the rich get richer and the poor well in their bid to "keep up with the next best trend", they just get poorer.

Nice flow, (I will confess to reading this with the First Noel tune in my head, lol) and very thought provoking piece. thank you for sharing!
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Review of Falling Leaves  
Review by jinks
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again Hullabaloo,

I liked this - the breeze i felt - the tugging & pulling of the leaves I can picture and the red, brown, gold and burnished copper of autumn leaves littering the ground form a beautiful and nostalgic picture on my mind's eye.

Thank you very much and well done! I liked this one a lot!
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