Typical cat. Grandson & Granddaughter's cats get out the tape measure so the can measure the distance between them and the walls to makes sure the are in the exact center of the hall
I saw your plug for this in Question, and had to check it out. I don't care much for Cat Scratch Fever, but I like this. Well thought out, easy to sing along with, and the meter is about right. Very good.
I'm not even sure how I got here, but I'm glad I did. This was written very well. You exuberance is obvious. I see no glaring errors. It doesn't matter what you are celebrating, we don't need to know. What I mean by that is 1) you don't waste your time explaining what you are celebrating, and 2) it makes it a generic celebration, useful at any celebration. Ver good
Very entertaining. I'm sorry I chuckled at your misery, but you wrote this in an intentionally humorous way. If I were to change anything, I think I would've checked the "use by" date on the package! Seriously, you may add that you checked that date, and it said it was still good.
As for a title, titles are one thing I have to work hard on. I think I'd go for simple yet direct" "The Face Mask from Hell" comes to mind
I just happened across this. I like the use of the color in the piece.
This was very well written. I liked the twist at the end. We really don't need to know who they are or why he took the skull. Not important. Very enjoyable.
Very well written, well thought out and a wisely if somewhat foreseen punch line. Other than the milling comma where you exhibited cannibalistic tendencies I found no glaring typos or errors. I don't give many 5* reviews (5*'s being perfect, which let's face it is difficult), but this one is close.
Not that I expect you to see this, but on the off-chance you accidentally return to this website, I just want you to know that i have enjoyed this I/O very much. Sometimes I don't know what I want to say, and other times, the post writes itself. Whatever you are doing, enjoy life.
Yup. It is exactly what it says it is, isnt it. Too bad I don't speak cattish (Cantsch?) I see no obvious errors or typos. The flow is good. The meter seems to stay even. I would probably have given it 4 1/2 stars if I could read Cattich. I really enjoyed this.
I like this very much! It started rather slowly and I wasn't sure where you were going, but I'm glad I stuck through it. I saw no glaring errors or typos. Nothing to pick apart. I hope she finds someone in Madrid who will appreciate her better than you did!
This is very good. As a straight man who has two gay cousins, I understand that coming out to your family can be extremely difficult. Gay Cousin #2 came out on Facebook by defriending all of us and telling us it was because he's gay. We all refriended him immediately. (It even led to a family reunion!).
As for the writing, I just have a few nits to pick. You should tell us who Danny is before she starts in on you about Susie. And maybe tell us your name earlier. Also, show a little trepidation when coming out to the family. I even think the kiss is unnecessary, but leave it there if you want to.
This was interesting from a minimalist point of view. I'm not a poet, but I do feel the rhythm. You have a flare for this type of poetry. Try being upbeat on the next one: angst isn't a know-all, be-all. Best of luck.
I found this when I hit the rate & review button. OK. Something about Angelina Jolie. I'm not a fan, but I'll bite. First, the good news. I see no glaring errors, no typos. It's clean, easy to read.
Now the bad news. I just don't get it. I'm completely bemused and befuddled. Maybe it's because I am not a fan, but I do b=not ynderstand why you have written this. I can't tell if you like Miss Jolie, if you dislike her, or what. Just my honest opinion. I am sorry.
This is very well written and I see no glaring errors or typos. Your characters are believable, and situation is normal. You have this rated as GC. I question this. It isn't that graphic, I see it as more like 18+. You give us no information on how Leslie and Dylan meet and became more than friends. You tease us a little at the beginning. You might consider expanding this, giving this background. If you have said all you have to say with them, it is fine as it is. Again, a good piece of writing.
You obviously spend way too much time at Wal-Mart. All kidding aside, this was well written, and very true. I found no glaring errors, nothing I would change, other than maybe make it longer, you know, marrying her and calling her the Queen of your double-wide trailer. Reminds me of the time Mom (my wife) & I were in Wal-Mart, and saw this girl wearing (I swear I'm telling the truth) Celophane. Yes, plastic wrap. Her boyfriend proudly said to her "That old man is checking you out!" I didn't mind being called old man, I am an old man. Checking her out? Hell no.
Once upon a time, a baseball umpire was calling a game behind the plate. Every day, it was balls and strikes, balls and strikes. He loved it! Some days, he'd work the bases, and occasionally there were days off. The players and the coaches thought Ernie the Umpire was fair, competent, and very knowledgeable of the game, and grudgingly liked him. One day, at the end of the season, the league polled the players and the coaches to rank the abilities of the umpires. Ernie finished in the top 5 in every category polled, and 1st in 3 categories. Because of that Ernie was very happy, and the league was very happy with Ernie. All the good umpires got pay raises. Ernie was cheered wherever he went, until finally, he chose not to retire like he was planning.
Very well written. Sounds like thousands of conversations I've had over the years. I recommend you edit it to say 2017 & 2018 self at the beginning of the year. Other than getting on the stick and actually doing what you say you are going to do, I have no other suggestions.
First of all, I hope this isn't about yourself. If you are suicidal, GET HELP NOW! IT IS AVAILABLE! GOD LOVES YOU AND WANTS WHAT IS BEST FOR YOU!
Now, if this isn't about yourself, it is very well written. You already knew that, based on my "first of all" reaction to it.
I saw no (other) glaring faults with this. This seemed to me like a great opening to a gothic love story told in flashback after the narrator's suicide, telling who she loved, why she loved, why the object of her affection never noticed, etc, etc, etc. Give it a try.
You have a very good start here. A couple thoughts. I personally don't like passive voice. The very first sentence is passive voice. I would suggest "Two silhouettes marked the dawn of a new era." Otherwise, so far so good. I like the first person narration. I would also suggest you tell, perhaps in flashback, what ruined the earth. Keep up the good work
Very very good. The emotions are obvious. The she, to me any way, appears to be a grandmother or beloved aunt. I got a great deal of enjoyment from this. You have done well. My one downer is, I don't like the term melting butter sky. It seems like you are reaching to far for something, when something simpler like gold-tinged would work just as well. it didn't keep you from 5 stars - I don't give 5 stars to even myself.
Very well done. Very well written. The character is believable, especially for a short piece, very difficult. My only complaint is the ending is weak. Don't get me wrong - I like that Mom explained things, and naming children after forebears is common. (My grandson is named after me, and a greatniece after 2 of her great-grandmas). I thinkif there were some ways to strengthen it, it would improve it. Just not sure how to do that.
I do not like giving low ratings. This get a low rating on merit. You promise one thing, and do not deliver. I'm sorry if you consider that brutal, but you say the lines will rhyme, and they do not. You call it poetry, and it is, but only in the style of e. e. cummings. If you consider that praise, it is not. I think I understand what you are trying to allude to, but for me it simply does not work. I'm sorry.
I found this by clicking on the Rate & Review button. Imagine my surprise when you popped up! What a pleasant surprise!
Anyway, on with the show!
This is very well done. I didn't know until you explained what the form was. Therefore, it is educational. It was entertaining. I'm glad I read this. Keep up the good work.
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