These are my impressions, and other people may see this differently. this doesn't mean I'm right, they're wrong or vice versa.
My first thought is, there is no punctuation. Granted, punctuation can be a pain in the ass. But it is necessary. I didn't know when to stop until I was partway into the new thought. Just chang
ing a line doesn't di
smiss the need for punctua
tion. (I made the line changes on purpose, as an example),. However, when I followed you, it was very well written. You convey your thoughts well. I could see what your were showing us. This the most important thing. Remember. 3 is average. I gave you a 4. Write on. Smiles. Dad
This is really very good. I must admist, I was puzzled at first by the seeming inconsequential inclusion of Sean's sexuality. I was going to leap on that. Oops. One must always be careful to read all the way through, mustn't one? I really enjoyed this and encourage you to write more prose. Good luck. Smiles, Dad
I laughed! I cried! I kissed 100 gp's good-bye. This is well-done, well-thought-out, and well written. You coulda gone with F/U, but then, I suppose, somone may've thought you were trying to drop an F-Bomb on us. No winning, I guess. I really did laugh. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Write on. Smiles, Dad
Unfortunately, I realized I have never reviewed F/U . Fortunately, I realized I still could . Unfortunately, I couldn't find a superlative super enough to describe the fun I have at F/U. Fortunately, I knew that Dee would understand if I told him this I/O is the most fun you can have with your clothes on . Unfortunately, dee told me that Steve always posts in the nude
. Fortunately, Steve does not have a webcam .
All kidding aside, thoroughly enjoy this. Write on. Smiles, Dad
I find that writing "Linericks" / makes me come up with linguistic tricks / I have lotsa fun / working in a pun / while making fun of good ol' Steve ~ Frix!
Do I like this? How many ways are there to say yes? Is it acceptible to says that I wouldn't keep coming back if I didn't like it? Does Steve do a good job moderating this I/O? Is it possible to hyperbolize too much?
I guess I've never taken the time to tell you what I think of Four-Word March. I'm sorry. I should have. I hope it's obvious that I enjoy this because I keep coming back. It makes me think how to best add what I want to add, and sometimes that is difficult. sometimes impossible. Keep up the good work. Write on. Smiles, Dad
I've been playing for over a year, maybe twop, and just realized I've never given you an R&R. Ithoroughly enjoy this I/O. I find it mentally stimulating and gobs of perverse fun. You're 13+ rating keeps this dirty old man from saying the first thing that pops into his head, which is a good thing. I post 3 & 4 times straight top say what I want, but I limit myself to no more than four posts to make myself be concise. I really enjoy this. thank you for having this fun spot. I visit daily. Write on. Smiles, Dad.
Very inspired. Welll written. I really like this. I wish my brother and I had had sharp words. I'm 50. He's 48. I live about 1000 miles from him, and another 200 from my sister. I rarely see them. It makes me sad. I love my siblings, but because of the distance between us, I may as well be missing. I'm very glad you and your brother get along well now. You are a good brother. Good luck to you. Write on. Smiles, Dad.
First off, 100 or fewer words is intensely difficult. To draw a picture with words without using any is ... I can barely introduce myself in 100 words. Yet you have done admirably. I can watch her dance. I can see the glint of light off her skin. I can feel his lust. Yet, alas, I cannot hold my review of your honest, concise story to less than four times the number of characters you used!
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