Hi Jadearielle, I'm a seasoned poet, but I'm new to reviewing. I hope you will take my opinions as just that - one person's opinions. My aim is always to help. With that said, here is my review of "A Broken Wish".
Overall feelings: Oh my goodness! I love this piece of writing. It is so sad and so beautifully written - straight from the heart. Your honesty is refreshing. You opened yourself up and made yourself vulnerable on the page, and I wanted to cry along with you.
Corrections needed: This piece has sentence fragments ("But as I continue my journey, down this path.") and run-on sentences, that would have to be corrected in order to have a well polished composition. But so what. You were able to tug at my heart strings, and I enjoyed that most of all.
My favourite line(s): My favourite parts of this writing are the phrases "I decided it was time to break. So i broke down", and "so I grabbed the flower, and I wished you away."