|Saw the title and ran here to read this. Silence is a poets best friend isn't it? That's when it comes to you, when everyone else is watching tv, on their phones or driving angry. Agree about the punctuation. My rule about punctuation, grammar, sentence structure all of it is simply this... There are no rules, only guidelines.
I absolutely loved this work. I felt it and that's what poems are meant to do. So as a fellow poet who knows the reasons why you wrote it and, I hope, what you are trying to express, I'm going to rate the poem itself. Not the other stuff that's just guidelines that someone else thinks applies to our expression. So I'm giving you a 5, cause it's a great expression, and it hits the mark.
That being said there's a few recommendations I can make of some new "guidelines" to consider adding to your toolbox that I use in my work. Completely optional and you can exercise your line item veto power as you see fit.
First let me tell you these are just opinions and I'm giving them because I loved your poem. I'm no expert, in fact I'm green as grass. I've read more than I've written so I'm reviewing as a fan not a writer. Feel free to like what I say or tell me to F off. I'm ok with either, cause an opinion is just an opinion.
I count syllables when I write to create rhythm as well as rhyme to make the syntax flow better and give it a sort of song quality to it. My OCD serves me well at last.
Changes in syntax can come by changing words, variations of words (can't is 1 count, cannot is 2) etc. Patience, meditation and our good friend silence help.
Specific to your poem.
Consider putting the stanzas starting with "Have you listened..." together.
Then put "I've listened..." together.
Then "I listen..." together.
Then "Silence can...".
Finally "So listen..."
See if the poem looks, feels and flows to your liking. change it around. Maybe you like I/I've/Have or I've/I/Have etc. see which you like best.
Definitely leave your last stanza there it's right where it belongs.
Stanza by stanza.
S1 L4 seems to need another count
S2 baby/they change tense on one or the other recommend baby to babies
S3 check syntax count
S4 is "last" needed?
S5 I instead of I've? "alone" in L2,4 cry to death? cry in hell? cry what?
S6 joyous people get joyful news. Reconsider "changes you point"
S7 "they" ! more than one ! You rock star ! Ponder L3,4 some more
S10 rethink "smothered" recommend a word referencing sound. I have a recommendation in my head but I'm hesitant to say it on here. This is your expression of your soul so if you don't want it no sweat. If you do email me.
S11 L2 rethink/condense L3 the wording feels awkward to me
S12 I/I've If "as one" is taken out the syntax is spot on.
S13 Perfect ending! Leave last! "each word" vs "just what" let them fight in your mind a while, see which wins.
This is a great piece and you are a Great Poet ! Please jump into my portfolio and see what I've created. Feel free to review it, I would love to hear your opinions.
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