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What I liked
Right off the riff, I liked the name Boogie. Both, character names and story titles can add a lot to a story. I love good titles and good character names.
I like that you give insight into the character immediately by stating:
I dont have nos tories with daddy playing ball with me and momma calling me for supper all i got is real live shit that happen everyday
This shows dimension in your character. He's living a hard life, but he still has a heart otherwise it wouldn't be important for him to state he never had a mother or a father. He still has a longing for these things that he missed, even if only slightly.
Putting your reader in conflict, making them like or feel sympathy for someone they shouldn't makes for good, interesting reading. You do this by what I explained above and also by showing a "soft" side when he speaks of Yasmin who is like a sister to me.
Also, although he is a bad boy, the reader can see that he is not a lost cause, and has some sense of ambition and purpose because he gradutated high school. The character you're describing, more often than not, does not graduate from high school. Therefore, your character is made more special and interesting.
There are severeal punctuation, spelling errors. Paying attention to this stuff can be a drag, but you're a good writer/story teller and this will make your talent shine more. I only picked out a few:
stunting --> stunning
veiwing --> viewing
nos tories --> no stories
It was only yesterday i saw Boogie, he was... ("I should be capital; comma should be period; "he" should be capitalized as beginning of new sentence.
e:thumbsdown} What I Didn't Like:
The bitches, ho's and nigga's are not something I enjoy reading; however, if this is your niche and you're serious about writing, it does sell
Hope to see you around...Keep Writing!