Great piece of writing. I could almost sense her horror at the thought of the big man sitting next to her to add to the serious discomfort she was presently feeling. Love the little twist at the end. The only thing I would say is that I think it should be a full stop after triumphantly, not a comma. Other than that, well done.
Amusing little poem with a good rhythm and rhyme. It made me chuckle over the content as it was nicely written without being rude or too graphic. If I have one little point to make, the first verse does not quite flow as smoothly as the other verses do. It's only a slight variation to the others. I think it is the last line that doesn't sound quite right. Other than that, I really enjoyed it and I'm not a poetry person.
I really enjoyed your poem, it had a good rhythm and flowed really well. The humour was a nice touch and gave me quite a chuckle as I read it through. I know very little about poetry but your poem did seem to move along and keep to a similar number of syllables to each line as well as words rhyming.
A simple but honest poem that I feel reflects many of the writers on WDC, myself included. I know very little about poetry so I am unable to say what type of poem it is or if it follows a certain format. However, it is a poem that does strike a chord with a reader as we all suffer from demons within our head.
A really nice piece of writing although it felt a little rushed at the end - maybe due to trying to stay within a word limit. I enjoyed how you described the changes the returning soldier experienced and how meeting Christy enabled him to settle in to his new life. I think, if you wanted, you could flesh out this piece into a longer piece without it losing anything.
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