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Review of Just Let Go  
Review by Sandstone
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. I searched for Joseph Campbell and your piece was one of four hits. You captured a glimpse of Campbell's philosophy that I find so rewarding. Your prose is simple yet complete. From a readers point of view, well done! Yours is one of perhaps three or four five star ratings I have given in over a year.
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Review of My Rating System  
Review by Sandstone
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am a collector of rating and reviewing schemes. My fist challenge at writing.com became giving fair and accurate reviews. Reviewing forced me to seek books on structure, style, and grammar. The effort in reviewing returns two-fold in learned writing skill. The effort by others critiquing my own work continues to polish and hone my stories. I love fair, honest reviews of my work. My commitment to improve my writing is a life-long challenge.

I have a collection on items pertaining to reviewing on my port. I am thrilled to add your comments to my list.

Thank you.

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Review by Sandstone
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for designing and sharing these c-notes. I am looking forward to using them when I review ports.

Your work is awesome! I can't tell you how much Writing.Com means to me. It's your attention to detail and the addition of wonderful accessories like these c-notes and the beautiful merit badges.
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Review of Isn't It Strange  
Review by Sandstone
Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't usually read and rate poetry. However, I was hooked after the first line. Your beautiful selection of words clearly illuminated deep feelings and emotions. There is music in your rhythm, I enjoyed the sound of this piece. Although I am a complete dunce when it comes to iambic or dactylic I just like what I read.
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Review of The Candy Store  
Review by Sandstone
Rated: E | (4.5)
A delightful story! I was a bit dubious at first; I've never thought much about old fashioned candy stores. As I read on, I too fell in love with Swen and his shop. Reading the great ending, I was thinking about winning the lottery and what I would do with myself afterwards. This candy shop sounds great.

My only comment:

"He set them out in rows like tiny marching soldiers ready for battle."

I was distracted by this line. To me it detracted from the idyllic setting of the candy store. The metaphor works, but doesn't fit in with the peace and serenity I felt inside this shop.
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Review by Sandstone
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I am not confident enough to review spelling and grammar. However, being an avid reader, I appreciate your comment concerning the paragraph breaks in long text. Just last night I closed a piece that I fully intending to review because of the overwhelming amount of text.

The suggestion that reviews be acknowledged with a thank you is very important as well.

Thank you for your great suggestions.
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Review by Sandstone
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I love the story line. However, as a reader, I was confused and had to go back and search through the long paragraph looking for what he was trying to find. You might want to work on paragraph structure and run-on sentences. My only claim is that I am only a reader, not a grammatical guru, and I know what I like to read.

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Review by Sandstone
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I like your treatment of "stages". I am in my reading writing.com at work stage, or perhaps my normal late Friday afternoon stage.

In your essay you said, "Any behavior, my now clear mind saw, could be categorized into what I now am calling Hugh’s Stages."

I would have said, "My mind, now clear, saw any behavior...

But then, I am only a novice.

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