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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (4.5)
Spell check
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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (4.5)
Perfect. Loved it.
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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (2.0)
Try separating it into a few separate paragraphs to make it easier to read. Need some major work on spelling and review some grammar.
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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (4.5)
your Vocabulary use is on point
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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (4.0)
This was so cute! I love how its told from an animal's point of view instead of a humans. most people don't realize it but animals have thoughts too. I have always wondered what goes through their heads but we may never find out! Go through and check the POV and your hes and shes again and it will be perfect!
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Review of I Know A Girl  
Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
I loved how the narrator was talking about herself when I expected it to be some boy who crushes on a girl until it becomes unbearable. Hiding within oneself is a topic hard to reach but you describes it beautifully.
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Review of The Corpse Reader  
Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Your tenses and mixed up and your hes and shes are mixed too. Make sure that when referring to God as He the H is capital.
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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (3.5)
This was a gift to the world of poetry. It's a stream line from someone's conscious and I can feel what the narrator feels. I understand his pain and his struggle to let go. The layout/rhyme scheme was creative because it wasn't a constant A/B/A/B or even a A/B/C/B/A it was not perfectly rhyming. Nice Job!
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Review of Promise of Hope  
Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (3.0)
This was so inspirational. I have never had family problems like that but they sound difficult and exhausting. You struggle so much yet you still believe God has a plan and that he won't leave you. Your faith is so stron gin the Lord and I admire that.
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Review of A Fool Out Of Me  
Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderful! Loved the metaphors! Genius! I like the double "identity" guy. your vocabulary is on point. I loved it! Do a quick grammar check and it will be perfection. The character build was amazing. A true detectives mind is shown through Lisa. 5 stars.
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Review of A New Story  
Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
this story is pretty genius. I love the emotion added from her own missing son.
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Review of Tell Me  
Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
The lines sound to straight forwards.
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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem was amazing! You are such a talented writer! This was by far the best poeo I have read on this site!
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Review by Sharpe as a Tack
Rated: E | (2.0)
Try changing up your adjectives and adverbs every once in a while. Using the same word multiple times to describe something can bring down the creativity of a story.
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