Very intriguing. Raises many questions. Who is the boy in camo? What is his story? Is he right about the devil? If good exists there must be evil as a counterpoint. How does he know this? How involved are the other kids? What did Mr. Smith write? I like this draft very much. Makes you want to read more and see where it is going. Keep it up!
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