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Hello there, Angus! I saw you post this little story in the news feed so I decided to give it a look. I'm glad I did! This piece kept me entertained and interested. I LOVED the premise and the execution. I didn't read this before so I don't know what exactly was edited or changed, but this is definitely a winner. I hope Quex puts down his picket signs and gets back to work!
I found this when I clicked the "read and review" button. So here is my review
My Impression
The first thing I thought of when reading this is that the people who hate being asked for advice always get asked the most. I wonder why that is? This is a comical/cynical/interesting look into your life. A joy to read.
Suggestions
No suggestions.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I only noticed one little thing. Instead of "there too rigid," it should be "they're too rigid."
Rating Explanation
Entertaining and interesting. It's a 5 from me. I'm glad I found it.
Hello, 💙 Carly - aka Joan Watson
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.
My Impression
I like this. Christmas does tend to fill us with nostalgia (the old man) and the New year is shiny and new (the baby). As much as I love the old man and that whole time of year, I'm looking forward to a fresh start with 2020. I hope you have some awesome plans for the new year as well!
Suggestions
No suggestions.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
"Ignored (comma) the old man slumps off into the alley"
Rating Explanation
This is a 5. Great read and I wish you luck in the contest!
Hello, ridinghhood-p.boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.
My Impression
I found this poem to be utterly lovely. I liked the realness of this poem, as I find a lot of art depicts Joseph, Mary, and baby Jesus as unbelievable superhuman saints, as in the old Christmas cards where they all had halos. This is a refreshing read.
Suggestions
No suggestions. I nontraditional, yet striking Christmas poem.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a 5, for sure. I enjoyed reading it and good luck in the contest!
Hello, ♥OctOGRE tHiNg♥
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019
My Impression
I can relate to this poem. I like the metaphor of the road and crossing the center line and our choices in life. I'm a good driver, but yet I still find myself crossing the line in life quite a lot. A well thought out poem that leaves room at the end for us to get it right...Next time. Lovely!
Suggestions
No suggestions.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything.
Rating Explanation
I can't rate this, but I enjoyed this poem. Good luck in the contest!
Hello, Prosperous Snow celebrating
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review!
My Impression
Such a "creative" poem! I love the almost playful quality to this and the visual details that make it easy for me to imagine I'm there watching creation play out. I particularly like the last line, "and join my voice to the song." It adds a level of depth and ends the poem wonderfully.
Suggestions
No suggestions. Everything looks great!
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a 5 poem for sure. I love the descriptions of "floating on cold hydrogen, and walking "through clouds of condensing dust."
A lovely poem. I enjoyed reading it and I wish you good luck in the contest!
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.
My Impression
This is a lovely, sad, and well-written poem. I loved that the acrostic part was not forced or obvious. I wouldn't have known it was an acrostic if it didn't say so in the title. I tried to click on the link in your notes, as I was assuming it would have info about Tepkunset, but it's a password protected item. It doesn't really matter, as the poem speaks for itself, even to those of us that are a little bit history challenged.
Suggestions
No suggestions.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a 5 poem, for sure. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest!
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. I have chosen this poem as my bonus review for the merit badge challenge.
My Impression
What a scary situation! I have only been in a similar boat once, years ago and it was not nearly to this extreme. Being that close to a wildfire is a terrifying thing. I pray for all those in California affected by this monstrosity. I hope that you continue to be safe. I like that this poem takes on a light and playful tone, as though the fire itself is a childlike prankster. This contrasts nicely with the seriousness of the reality of the fires. I appreciated the author's note at the end and felt that it gave a much deeper insight into the poem itself. Nicely done!
Suggestions
No suggestions. It all looks good to me.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a 5 for sure. Again, stay safe and God bless!
Hello, ridinghhood-p.boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.
My Impression
I've always been a big fan of the 24 syllables contest because it's both open and restricting at the same time. It's always a joy to see what people do with it. I love this idea of us always being broken in one way or another. Brokenness also has different meanings as well. We can be broken as in downtrodden and destroyed, or we can be broken and humble, as though to a higher power. It's this last line here that has me most captivated. Nicely done!
Suggestions
No suggestions.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
Within the restrictive confines of 24 syllables, you have nailed an interesting concept. Good luck in the contest!
Hello, Prosperous Snow celebrating
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.
My Impression
I like the interesting and unique details in this poem. For instance, the detail about your grandma playing solitaire when she couldn't sleep is a much more interesting detail than going on and on about her physical appearance or a vague hobby. This makes her relatable for all those (like me) who struggle with insomnia.
Suggestions
I have no suggestions, except it's always nice to have a cover photo...otherwise, it looks good!
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a 5. You have very fond memories of your grandmother and this poem would certainly make her proud. Good job in the contest!
Hello, 💙 Carly - aka Joan Watson
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. This is my bonus review for the merit badge challenge.
My Impression
I love this time of year because of all the spectacular creepy writings to be found around here. This poem does not disappoint, and I love that you included the prompt picture, it really adds to the creepiness of the piece.
There is an easy flow and rhythm as well as a lovely bit of rhyme that makes this a fabulous poem. Nicely done and good luck in the Dark Dreamscapes contest!
Suggestions
No suggestions from me.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a 5 for sure. I love the almost circular quality of this poem, that the specters can only be around at nighttime, but the ending of "'tis not long before they return," brings us back to the beginning. Splendid!
Hello, ridinghhood-p.boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.
My Impression
This poem had my interest with the first line. I love the imagery of "morning glory sky," This is a short poem, but loaded with meaning.
I also like "Mangrove leaves excrete salt tears..."
A lovely morning, fall poem. Well done!
Suggestions
I would suggest having a drop note with the form information included. That way people don't have to google what the form entails. Otherwise, I have no suggestions.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
I'm giving this a 5. I love the imagery and language. Happy Halloween and Happy birthday! Also, good luck in the Oriental poetry contest!
I found this poem when I clicked the Read and Review button, and I'm so glad I did! Here is my review:
My Impression
I LOVE this poem. The language is superb, and I really believed the very real need for snow, even though I live in an area that gets too much of it, and I always long for Arizona in the middle of winter.
I love the line"...for that flocculent flake that covers fields," and also "...where snow is as alien as milk on the moon." Just lovely.
Suggestions
I only have one small suggestion, and it has nothing to do with the poem itself. I would suggest not using the "other" category as a genre, as it isn't as visible in searches that way. Also, a cover image would be lovely for this.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is definitely a 5 from me. Very nicely done!!
I found this poem when I clicked on the Read and Review button...so here is my review
My Impression
This is a lovely poem with a well-defined turning point. The first half is a bit dark, almost creepy. I loved the language here. This might have only seemed creepy to me because it's that time of year. The end of the poem offers hope, and gives a wonderful message. I admit I cringed a little bit at the last line...moist kisses. ew.
Suggestions
No suggestions.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here. Looks great!
Rating Explanation
I'm giving this one a 5. I love the imagery and the lines, "Can relish the fog and blight that seeth/ into every corner where we grew and stood/ in this children's darkened neighborhood." This is one of the lines that stood out to me as a little creepy, but definitely in a good way.
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. I'm reviewing this for my bonus review to earn the merit badge.
My Impression
This looks like an interesting form. This particular poem is informative, and I like the ending...even though it's a bit morbid or sad to say that considering the tragic nature of it. I do like the idea of "he attempted to embrace moon's reflection."
Suggestions
I would suggest putting the poetry form information in your drop note, instead of just the link to the contest.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a short but interesting poem that gives the reader an informative tidbit about its subject. Knowing the particulars of the form would be helpful here, but there's enough here for me to know it's a well thought out piece. I give this a 5. Good luck in the contest!
Hello, ridinghhood-p.boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.
My Impression
Having virtually no real knowledge of the tarot, I can't speak to that aspect, or if the tarot blurb at the bottom is even relevant to the poem itself. I do get a sense of objectivity with this poem...a woman as an object, which I think most women can relate to in some way or another. I love reading these 24 syllable poems because it's amazing to me how much meaning and depth one can squeeze into such a small form. Nice job.
Suggestions
Is there a link to the painting referenced at the bottom? It might be good to include it if so.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a meaningful little poem. It's a 5 from me. Nicely done!
I found this poem by clicking the Read & Review button, so here's my review!
My Impression
I like how the poem begins and ends with "whisper it all," the beginning is a happy memory and the end a sad one. A poignant piece of love and loss. Well done!
Suggestions
Just one small suggestion, but the poem totally works either way. I think it might look a little better to get rid of the ellipses and start a new line instead. I like the cover photo you've chosen for this and the use of the purple font, it matches the sunset in the picture...some good symbolism there.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything.
Rating Explanation
I'm giving this lovely piece a 5. I'm glad I stumbled upon it
I found this poem when I clicked on the Read & Review button. So, here's my review
My Impression
I like the hopeful quality of this poem. We rise, not healed, but changed. Our pain recreates us. It's a poem that speaks of sadness but is itself bold and ready to take charge of its own life.
Suggestions
I have no suggestions for the poem itself, but your lovely poem might get more views if you use all three genre slots available for this. A cover image would be a lovely addition as well.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is a deep and honest poem. It's simple, yet elegant. Very nicely done. I hope you are finding your way around the site and figuring everything out, but if you need some help or have any questions you can feel free to ask. I'm glad I stumbled upon your poem!
Hello, ridinghhood-p.boutilier
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Thank you for entering August Week 4!
My Impression
I love that the small details of this story make this an engaging read. The present tense is used really well here as well. I was my mother's caretaker until she died almost a year ago, so I could relate well to this, except my mother had cancer, not dementia. I like the details about not using "mum" and opting for her real name...it added a tad of sadness and meaning to the story.
Suggestions
There are a few formatting issues with this story, although none of it made it difficult to read. Just some instances where a new line is started in mid-sentence. Nothing major.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
I'm giving this a 5. A very well written story. Thank you for your continued support of my contest!
Hello, ridinghood
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review of your poem.
My Impression
This is a very short, simple poem but the language is quite lovely. I know nothing at all about mangroves so I didn't know about the salt.
Suggestions
I would suggest a dropnote for the author's note, as well as some clarification on the form itself. I don't know what 4 above, 3 below means? Also, is Mangrove Salt just the title, or is it the first line. I like it as the first line, but I wasn't sure. I also didn't know what the last line about the tarot was about. Is it relevant to the poem itself?
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything there.
This was an interesting little poem. Good luck in your contest!
Hello, Gravedigger Dave
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest.
My Impression
This is a very inspirational poem, encouraging the reader to look at the small things in life and not to let them pass us by. We so often become blind to the mundane. It's a much-needed reminder. I like the imagery of the rainbow in the spray from the garden hose and the line, "little things plain as the palm of your hand." I also like the "do it right," at the end. It really is the only way to really get it right, by paying attention to details and conveying them to our audience. Nicely done!
Suggestions
I have no suggestions for this.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
I'm giving this a 5. Thank you for your entry and continued support of my contest. Good luck!
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019 AND the Super Power Review Raid.
My Impression
This is just wonderful! You have mastered the iambic form, making this piece flow really well. Plus, I learned that "rispetto" means respect and that these poems were typically written to show respect to someone. Thanks for including that bit of information! I am participating in the Ultimate Poetry Challenge and we just had to write one of these poems.
Suggestions
No suggestions here.
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything out of place in this department.
Rating Explanation
This is a 5 from me. This is a lovely poem about your granddaughter. Nicely done!
I found this lovely poem by clicking the Read & Review button, so here's my review
My Impression
This is just fantastic! I love the line, "the bird of poetry rises reborn out of the flames of ego." Brilliant. I also like the idea of the phoenix being the poet's familiar. It's very fitting. Nicely written!
Suggestions
No suggestions for this poem, though a nice cover image would be lovely
Grammar/Punctuation/Usage
I didn't notice anything here.
Rating Explanation
This is definitely 5 material. Worthy of the pretty ribbon, for sure. Well done!
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