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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Carly - Happy New Year!
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I like this. Christmas does tend to fill us with nostalgia (the old man) and the New year is shiny and new (the baby). As much as I love the old man and that whole time of year, I'm looking forward to a fresh start with 2020. I hope you have some awesome plans for the new year as well!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
"Ignored (comma) the old man slumps off into the alley"

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5. Great read and I wish you luck in the contest!

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "December 24, 2019
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, ridinghhood--p. boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I found this poem to be utterly lovely. I liked the realness of this poem, as I find a lot of art depicts Joseph, Mary, and baby Jesus as unbelievable superhuman saints, as in the old Christmas cards where they all had halos. This is a refreshing read.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions. I nontraditional, yet striking Christmas poem.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5, for sure. I enjoyed reading it and good luck in the contest!

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Review of Over the Line  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, ♥HOOves♥
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I can relate to this poem. I like the metaphor of the road and crossing the center line and our choices in life. I'm a good driver, but yet I still find myself crossing the line in life quite a lot. A well thought out poem that leaves room at the end for us to get it right...Next time. Lovely!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I can't rate this, but I enjoyed this poem. Good luck in the contest!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Prosperous Snow
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
Such a "creative" poem! I love the almost playful quality to this and the visual details that make it easy for me to imagine I'm there watching creation play out. I particularly like the last line, "and join my voice to the song." It adds a level of depth and ends the poem wonderfully.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions. Everything looks great!

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5 poem for sure. I love the descriptions of "floating on cold hydrogen, and walking "through clouds of condensing dust."

A lovely poem. I enjoyed reading it and I wish you good luck in the contest!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a lovely, sad, and well-written poem. I loved that the acrostic part was not forced or obvious. I wouldn't have known it was an acrostic if it didn't say so in the title. I tried to click on the link in your notes, as I was assuming it would have info about Tepkunset, but it's a password protected item. It doesn't really matter, as the poem speaks for itself, even to those of us that are a little bit history challenged.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5 poem, for sure. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest!

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for entry "Unleashed
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. I have chosen this poem as my bonus review for the merit badge challenge.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
What a scary situation! I have only been in a similar boat once, years ago and it was not nearly to this extreme. Being that close to a wildfire is a terrifying thing. I pray for all those in California affected by this monstrosity. I hope that you continue to be safe. I like that this poem takes on a light and playful tone, as though the fire itself is a childlike prankster. This contrasts nicely with the seriousness of the reality of the fires. I appreciated the author's note at the end and felt that it gave a much deeper insight into the poem itself. Nicely done!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions. It all looks good to me.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5 for sure. Again, stay safe and God bless!

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "November 4, 2019
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, ridinghhood--p. boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I've always been a big fan of the 24 syllables contest because it's both open and restricting at the same time. It's always a joy to see what people do with it. I love this idea of us always being broken in one way or another. Brokenness also has different meanings as well. We can be broken as in downtrodden and destroyed, or we can be broken and humble, as though to a higher power. It's this last line here that has me most captivated. Nicely done!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
Within the restrictive confines of 24 syllables, you have nailed an interesting concept. Good luck in the contest!

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for entry "Ch. 1
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, BradJShaw ⚓
Here is the review I promised you...sorry if it's a bit late.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
Overall, this is a good first chapter. There are a few small things that could be improved, but overall it's strong writing.

First, pay attention to how many times you use the word "was." It implies passive voice and should be avoided whenever possible. For instance, in your first paragraph there are two "was's":

"Jacob Arthur Byrne, known to his friends as 'Jake', was moving all his worldly possessions into the small two-bedroom, one-bath beach house that was adorned on the exterior in baby blue with snow-white trim." This can be edited to this:

Jacob Arthur Byrne (do we need his full name here?) known to his friends as 'Jake', spent the (moring, afternoon?) moving his worldly possession into the small two-bedroom, one-bath beach house adorned on the exterior in baby blue with snow-white trim." Something like that.

The other thing I noticed here is the story does a little bit of head-hopping. We are in Jake's head for this chapter, so I think it would read better if we stay there instead of having brief glimpses into what Nadine is thinking. Yes, some people will argue that head-hopping is fine, and if you are in this camp then you can ignore this...but there's something about it that I don't like and I avoid it like the plague (but I apparently don't avoid cliches. *Smile*) That would be easy to remedy in this chapter because there are only a few instances where we get a brief view of her thoughts.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I suggest fewer spaces between paragraphs, and there's an extra "s" on "simple" on the last line.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
There are a few issues here, but nothing major and I didn't want to do a full-on line edit. It's really nothing that Grammarly couldn't help with.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 4.5. It's good. It's interesting and makes me want to read more. A strong first chapter. Nicely done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Prosperous Snow
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.


*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I like the interesting and unique details in this poem. For instance, the detail about your grandma playing solitaire when she couldn't sleep is a much more interesting detail than going on and on about her physical appearance or a vague hobby. This makes her relatable for all those (like me) who struggle with insomnia.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I have no suggestions, except it's always nice to have a cover photo...otherwise, it looks good!

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5. You have very fond memories of your grandmother and this poem would certainly make her proud. Good job in the contest!

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for entry "Specters Rise
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Carly - Happy New Year!
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. This is my bonus review for the merit badge challenge.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I love this time of year because of all the spectacular creepy writings to be found around here. This poem does not disappoint, and I love that you included the prompt picture, it really adds to the creepiness of the piece.

There is an easy flow and rhythm as well as a lovely bit of rhyme that makes this a fabulous poem. Nicely done and good luck in the Dark Dreamscapes contest!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions from me.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5 for sure. I love the almost circular quality of this poem, that the specters can only be around at nighttime, but the ending of "'tis not long before they return," brings us back to the beginning. Splendid!

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "October 16, 2019
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, ridinghhood--p. boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This poem had my interest with the first line. I love the imagery of "morning glory sky," This is a short poem, but loaded with meaning.

I also like "Mangrove leaves excrete salt tears..."

A lovely morning, fall poem. Well done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I would suggest having a drop note with the form information included. That way people don't have to google what the form entails. Otherwise, I have no suggestions.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 5. I love the imagery and language. Happy Halloween and Happy birthday! Also, good luck in the Oriental poetry contest!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Don Two

I found this poem when I clicked the Read and Review button, and I'm so glad I did! Here is my review:

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I LOVE this poem. The language is superb, and I really believed the very real need for snow, even though I live in an area that gets too much of it, and I always long for Arizona in the middle of winter. *Laugh*

I love the line"...for that flocculent flake that covers fields," and also "...where snow is as alien as milk on the moon." Just lovely.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I only have one small suggestion, and it has nothing to do with the poem itself. I would suggest not using the "other" category as a genre, as it isn't as visible in searches that way. Also, a cover image would be lovely for this.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is definitely a 5 from me. Very nicely done!!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tim Chiu

I found this poem when I clicked on the Read and Review button...so here is my review *Smile*

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a lovely poem with a well-defined turning point. The first half is a bit dark, almost creepy. I loved the language here. This might have only seemed creepy to me because it's that time of year. The end of the poem offers hope, and gives a wonderful message. I admit I cringed a little bit at the last line...moist kisses. ew.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here. Looks great!

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this one a 5. I love the imagery and the lines, "Can relish the fog and blight that seeth/ into every corner where we grew and stood/ in this children's darkened neighborhood." This is one of the lines that stood out to me as a little creepy, but definitely in a good way.

Nicely done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. I'm reviewing this for my bonus review to earn the merit badge.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This looks like an interesting form. This particular poem is informative, and I like the ending...even though it's a bit morbid or sad to say that considering the tragic nature of it. I do like the idea of "he attempted to embrace moon's reflection."

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I would suggest putting the poetry form information in your drop note, instead of just the link to the contest.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a short but interesting poem that gives the reader an informative tidbit about its subject. Knowing the particulars of the form would be helpful here, but there's enough here for me to know it's a well thought out piece. I give this a 5. Good luck in the contest!

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "September 16, 2019
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, ridinghhood--p. boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
Having virtually no real knowledge of the tarot, I can't speak to that aspect, or if the tarot blurb at the bottom is even relevant to the poem itself. I do get a sense of objectivity with this poem...a woman as an object, which I think most women can relate to in some way or another. I love reading these 24 syllable poems because it's amazing to me how much meaning and depth one can squeeze into such a small form. Nice job.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
Is there a link to the painting referenced at the bottom? It might be good to include it if so.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a meaningful little poem. It's a 5 from me. Nicely done!

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Review of Autumn  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Zehzeh
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. I'm finally getting around to judging. I apologize that it has taken me so long. This is the first entry for this round, so this is the first one I've read so far.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is just lovely. The imagery here is stunning. "A leaf turns cartwheels" is a great way to tell me that's it's windy without just saying "it's windy." I also love the "fungal parasoles." Although, Grammarly is telling me there's not supposed to be an e at the end...


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I would suggest a pretty fall-themed cover photo for this.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
Other than the e at the end of parasoles, (and I'm not positive that's wrong...) I don't see anything.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5 from me. A spectacular poem. Thank you for entering into my contest! Best of luck!

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Review of Lavender Lady  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, ridinghhood--p. boutilier
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. This is my second review to be eligible for the special merit badge at the end of the year. I chose this poem.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I'm not 100% sure I understand what's being said here, but I like the line "lavender in my pocket." It's a reference I can understand. Almost makes me think of those little sachets people use to make their clothes smell nice.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I've never heard of a mgur poem before. A little author's note explaining the form would be helpful. Also, the blurb at the bottom...I'm not sure I understand it. What is HerbCrafter's Tarot? I'm assuming "this luxury" is in bold because it has something to do with the Writer's Cramp prompt?

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a subtle poem with nice imagery, playing on the sense of smell. Good luck in the contest!

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Review of Whispering Tears  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, ~Alexi~

I found this poem by clicking the Read & Review button, so here's my review!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I like how the poem begins and ends with "whisper it all," the beginning is a happy memory and the end a sad one. A poignant piece of love and loss. Well done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
Just one small suggestion, but the poem totally works either way. I think it might look a little better to get rid of the ellipses and start a new line instead. I like the cover photo you've chosen for this and the use of the purple font, it matches the sunset in the picture...some good symbolism there.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this lovely piece a 5. I'm glad I stumbled upon it *Smile*

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Review of I rise  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, freespirit , and welcome to writing.com!


I found this poem when I clicked on the Read & Review button. So, here's my review*Smile*

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I like the hopeful quality of this poem. We rise, not healed, but changed. Our pain recreates us. It's a poem that speaks of sadness but is itself bold and ready to take charge of its own life.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I have no suggestions for the poem itself, but your lovely poem might get more views if you use all three genre slots available for this. A cover image would be a lovely addition as well.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a deep and honest poem. It's simple, yet elegant. Very nicely done. I hope you are finding your way around the site and figuring everything out, but if you need some help or have any questions you can feel free to ask. I'm glad I stumbled upon your poem!

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Review of Sidewalk Tarot  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, ridinghhood--p. boutilier
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Thank you for entering August Week 4!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I love that the small details of this story make this an engaging read. The present tense is used really well here as well. I was my mother's caretaker until she died almost a year ago, so I could relate well to this, except my mother had cancer, not dementia. I like the details about not using "mum" and opting for her real name...it added a tad of sadness and meaning to the story.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
There are a few formatting issues with this story, although none of it made it difficult to read. Just some instances where a new line is started in mid-sentence. Nothing major.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 5. A very well written story. Thank you for your continued support of my contest!

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Review of Averageman  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Beholden
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Thank you for entering August Round 4!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I like the thought of a super hero named "Averageman." In fact, I'd pay money to see it. Your poem had a nice flow to it, and I found it an interesting and engaging read. Nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I really like your cover image, as Shazam, aka the first Captain Marvel, is an average kid. I also like that you increased the font size for those of us with less than perfect eyesight. I really have no suggestions, which might be misleading, since I wrote this under "suggestions."

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything wrong here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I appreciated this little ode to the average man. Thank you for your continued support of my contest!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Dave
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Thank you for your entry for August Week 4.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
The first thing I noticed was that the repetition in this poem didn't hinder the piece at all. I have a hard time writing form poetry that requires a lot of repeats, as it's hard to do it just right. This, in conjunction with the author's note explaining the poem really make this poem a powerful piece. Nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions. You've chosen a very nice cover image for this, and I like what you've done with the font size and color.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 5. A very well-written piece! Thank you for continuing to support my contest!

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "August 19, 2019
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, ridinghood
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review of your poem.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a very short, simple poem but the language is quite lovely. I know nothing at all about mangroves so I didn't know about the salt.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I would suggest a dropnote for the author's note, as well as some clarification on the form itself. I don't know what 4 above, 3 below means? Also, is Mangrove Salt just the title, or is it the first line. I like it as the first line, but I wasn't sure. I also didn't know what the last line about the tarot was about. Is it relevant to the poem itself?

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything there.

This was an interesting little poem. Good luck in your contest!

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for entry "Write!
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Dave
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a very inspirational poem, encouraging the reader to look at the small things in life and not to let them pass us by. We so often become blind to the mundane. It's a much-needed reminder. I like the imagery of the rainbow in the spray from the garden hose and the line, "little things plain as the palm of your hand." I also like the "do it right," at the end. It really is the only way to really get it right, by paying attention to details and conveying them to our audience. Nicely done!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I have no suggestions for this.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 5. Thank you for your entry and continued support of my contest. Good luck!

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Review of Rain!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Nani - Blessed Indeed
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
Rain is such a refreshing and beautiful topic for any poem. Here, I like that the first half of the poem focuses on the darkness of rain, the clouds, the storm...and then the last half is about the miracles of rain--Nourishing farmer's fields and providing essential water for earth.

You have done well with this poem. Nicely done!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I suggest using all three genre slots for this so it shows up better in searches. A lovely rain-themed cover image would also be nice.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 5. I enjoyed your well-written poem and I wish you luck in the contest!

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