A lovely entry for the contest! This brings such poignant imagery of war and heartache. Good luck to you in the contest. I have such a hard time with the unique words chosen for the prompt each day. I always have to google what they mean. Good job to you!
Wow, you did a great job with this prompt! I found this week's prompt to be pretty tough. I love the mood of this, and even though this could very well take place in any time period, I get an old-timey sort of vibe from it. Good luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll need it. Nicely done.
Cleverly written! I loved the ending to this. I noticed a couple little things, such as "only sounds he could he hear" and there's a reference to "tribesman" in the plural sense. Should it be "tribesmen?" I'm not entirely sure, to be honest. Anyway, those are just tiny details. The overall story is a winner, for sure!
A very nice poem! I was just about to recommend the lighthouse poetry contest before seeing it referenced at the bottom. This is a very sincere, honest and lovely piece. Thank you for sharing it. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Have a nice day,
Lol, a funny, engaging story. Do you ever submit to the daily flash fiction contest? It's a lot of fun over there. Anyway, I loved this piece. Thank you for sharing it. I'm just curious if this is a true story or fiction? Anyway, have a nice day.
A lovely poem. It's interesting that the form is named after an instrument because it has a very strong, musical quality. Very rhythmic and mellow, yet melancholy and sad. Just wonderful. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Very useful advice on reviewing! Thank you for writing this! One technical thing I noticed is that you use the phrase "in my case" twice in the last paragraph. Otherwise, a very nice piece. Thank you for sharing it.I have noticed that reviewing does get easier. Have a nice night,
Thank you for this informative poem. Yes, many today deny the severity of that horrible time, and some even go so far as to say it never happened at all! Good job for speaking out, and spreading some knowledge. It's important that we never forget the past.
A cute, clever poem. Santa sounds like a fun guy to hang out with! Nicely done. Thanks for the author's note at the bottom. The extra explanation was helpful to those non-military types like me. Thanks for sharing this fun, festive poem.
A lovely poem about teachers. As the wife of a teacher, I appreciate all the hard work they put in each and every day. This is a very nice acrostic poem with great sentiment. Thank you for writing and sharing. Have a nice evening.
Thank you for this informative piece. I liked where you talk about the different types of scenes and their purposes. I still struggle some with fiction writing, so it's nice to have information like this handy. Thanks for the good read.
I love the opening and closing lines of this poem. Very nicely written. If I could make one suggestion, it would be that the use of the word "barraged" in the second line is past tense, when the rest of the poem seems to be in present tense. Maybe use "barrage" instead? A good, enjoyable read.
Dark and moody. A nicely written piece. I would recommend adding some question marks in the beginning. There are three questions with no question marks. I can't tell if this was piece was written as part of a larger piece, or if it's a stand-alone bit of stream of consciousness writing, but either way. I like the darkness of it.
I'm curious how to join this group? The intro said there was a survey somewhere? Anyway, I am interested in joining the gang. Just let me know what to do. Thanks!
A very concise, and informative write up about an important topic. I agree with your subject and feel that a registry for many medical procedures and devices is long overdue. Your technical writing skills are excellent. I'm not sure who this is written for, maybe a college assignment, or if you write this sort of thing for a living, but I found it informative and educated.
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