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Review of Snapshots  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Quite a descriptive one. The author has beautifully written about things one by one linking each to the memories of the past. Initially, I could not write if it is something personal or about something else. Till the end, I could not relate to the main idea that the author thought of discussing in such an elaborate, descriptive manner. The keen observation of things that goes around demands an applause. You get it! Keep writing!


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Review by Kalai
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An interesting story to read to your toddler. Quite imaginative and it could be developed further. The story has a simple plot that reaches the twist in the story to reach an unexpected climax. Initially, I thought it will be a story about the animals in the zoo. When I realized that this story is about a ribbon, I could not help smiling! Enjoyed reading your story.


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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
The first two chapters of the story were written well as you have successfully built the suspense so that the reader will read more. Yet, I could feel the need for editing and proofreading to make the story a flexible read. Some of the vocabulary can be replaced with standard expressions. This is necessary as it will give the story a neat look. Otherwise it would look like a story translated from a vernacular language using the google tool. As I had gone through the same kind of problem, I wanted to share it with you. Please look into that.


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Review of Who Goes There?  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story is a good thriller. The author could create tension to the reader while reading about the wrong room that Kathy opens. Finally the story ends with a relief relieving the suspense smoothly.

The author has successfully maintained the suspense throughout the story and made the reader move to the edge of the chair while reading.


The author's simple word choice has made the reading flexible and easy. The dialogs also help to maintain the tension and also help the author feel the nervousness of Kathy.


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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story hooked me as a reader expecting to read something different from the normal. Initially as a reader I could not guess how will the story get unfold. Amadeus getting into the frozen lake and wondering at the fish looked simple events. Yet, I could understand the author wanted to imply something through these two characters. The story was quite difficult to understand in the first reading and the second reading showed some streaks of understanding.

The story could be developed further as it holds some suspense in the way Amadeus reacts to his experience in the frozen lake and the fish. Expecting to read more.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Learned a lesson. Everyone's life is full of important incidents that taught a valuable lesson.

Plot: The story has a simple plot that ends with a climax that strongly brings to one's heart an important lesson - share your food with the people who are hungry.

Style and Voice: The author has followed a simple writing style that tells about an important thing that has tons of value.

Scene/Setting: The author has chosen a simple setting to share a great lesson or truth to everyone.

Characters: The story has a few characters that smoothly adds weight to the theme of the story.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review of The Smile  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Felt good. Thanks for sharing a beautiful story that slowly unfurls like the petals of a perfumed flower. The character Mona reminded me of my friend Mona. She is lively, energetic and bubbling with life.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot and moves smoothly to take the turn and reach the twist. The story has a happy ending which as a reader I always enjoy in a love story.

Style and Voice: The author's writing style helps the story to move forward smoothly like a stream. The transition in the story is so perfect that kindles the interest in the reader to read more. The author has successfully maintained a capturing love voice throughout the story which will definitely make the reader feel happy and relaxed.

Scene/Setting: The author has chosen apt settings to tell this love story which will linger at reader's heart for some more time.

Characters: The story has a very few characters and the author has given each character the chance to perform well.

Dialog: The dialogs help the author to move the story with ease and they also help the reader to understand the characters and their role in the story.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review of The Fun House  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: I could not help feeling the shudder that I went through the spine. The author has told a horror story with ease.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot that develops faster to reach the twist and finally end the story with an unexpected, painful climax.

Style and Voice: The author's writing style flows smooth like a stream and the transition from one event to another takes place smoothly.

Scene/Setting: The story happens inside a fun house and the author makes use of the events inside the fun house to develop the story.

Characters: The story has three characters who help the author to tell this horror story without any difficulty.

Dialog: The dialogs share the tone of the story. The dialogs help the reader to move through the smooth slide of the story.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall Impression: As a reader I could feel the tough life of a monastery in the air. As an author you have successfully portrayed accurately with the appropriate choice of words, sentence structures and dialogs.

Plot: The story starts with an interesting incident, Garrett visiting the chapel to have a glimpse of his dead father. The plot of the story unwinds slowly and reaches the twist that reveals the past life of Garrett. The story ends with a suspense and it can be developed further. Expecting to read more.

Style and Voice: The author follows a writing style that is tight and it suits the story line. The author could make the reader understand the character traits of the people who live in monasteries and lead a tough life that is different from normal life that everyone lives. The author has used standard vocabulary to strengthen this story and make it as a serious reading piece.

Scene/Setting: The author is quite descriptive in writing about the monastery, the garden and the place where novices live. As a reader I could feel the stiff air in the monastery that does not allow loose talk and easy going life.

Characters: The author has portrayed well the tough characters in a monastery and how the tough life transforms them into tougher individuals with high discipline.

Dialog: The dialogs in this story helps the author to reveal the main theme of the story around which the plot lies. The dialogs at the end of this piece shows the reader the link between the past and the present events and also gives the clue about what will happen in the future.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care. Yet, please run the spell checker to fix spelling errors. But there are words that can escape from the spell checker. While reading through I found two words that are not spelled correctly. Please fix it.
"Princess!", cam the abrupt shout. - It should be 'came'
The very thought of war, and soldiers on this Island, game me a chill. - It should be 'gave me a chill'

Thanks for sharing this wonderful story.

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Review of Greater Good  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: An interesting read. The author has portrayed the after life as an interesting experience and the death as a token to experience it.

Plot: The story starts with a suspense and it helps the author to make the story line interesting.

Style and Voice: The author has followed a simple writing style that flows like a stream and the rhythm of words could be felt while reading through the story.

Scene/Setting: The author has used the bath room as the introductory scene and slowly moves the story to the wide blue sky. Expecting to read more as the change of settings merges with the story.

Characters: The main character focus on an interesting experience and the perception is different and encouraging to know more about life after death.

Dialog: Minimum dialogs but they help the author the take the story forward. The story ends with a conversation that builds the suspense in the story and make the reader willing to read more of this story.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care of.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Wow!! that is the impression I got after reading the story. I have not read more fantasies. But this story is interesting to read for it hooked me as a reader and made me read more.

Plot: The story has started with a complex plot that can still become more complex once it reaches the twist. The story line has more space to be developed further with interesting incidents and turning points.

Style and Voice: This tough fantasy is told in the appropriate writing style by the author. The standard writing style with standard vocabulary shows the matured writing style of the author.

Scene/Setting: The author has portrayed the different settings and situations in the story impressively.

Characters: The tough characters who live in tough situations of life always bring a shiver down a spine. The toughest lives of men can make them lead a life without mercy for anything.

Dialog: The dialogs will help the reader to get a real picture of the settings and the people who live in that location. The grimness of the setting and the situation are well expressed through dialogs. The dialogs also help the reader to feel the hard life the people were into.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care of.
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Review of In the Moonlight  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Made me feel romantic and happy. The author has created the beautiful picture of romance with ease.

Plot: A simple plot that tells only about love.

Style and Voice: The author's choice of words has helped to show the strong bond of love between the two characters.

Scene/Setting: The author has chosen an appropriate setting to show what is romance. This brief scene tells in detail what is romance.

Characters: The author uses the characters to tell what is romance.

Dialog: The dialogs help the author to portray the romantic feeling with its true color. The dialogs help the reader to understand the love between the two characters and also the charm of love.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story kicks starts with a good beginning that can hook a reader to read further. Science fiction always make me wonder how can one go ahead with imagination that can touch the extreme level.

As a reader I have to read the story again and again to understand the story. When I understood what the story was, I wanted to read more. I have read about time machines, but have not read many stories based on time machines. The story has space to include all the elements of a science fiction.

Expecting to read more.

Thanks for sharing.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Thanks for refreshing my knowledge on the use of commas and punctuations. Awkward sentences can creep into our writing while writing down our raw thoughts. But a second reading must help us to change or rewrite those awkward sentences into elegant sentences. I remember Prof. Ananthan talking about elegant sentences and awkward sentences in writing. People like me who is not a native speaker of English always end in expressions that is not elegant to English language. The main reason is exposure to language. Writing process is something everyone must remember. Proof reading helps every writer to fix grammar, punctuation and spelling errors.

Thanks for reminding all important points that will definitely help every writer to become a elegant writer who can impress readers.
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Review of 15 Editing Steps  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very good refresher course to remember once again the most important points while writing. At present, I am pushed into an humiliating situation when people point out to me the mistakes that occur in my writings. Even though I do a second reading, I miss to fix something glaring that spoils the beauty of writing. Thanks for reminding me what I must take care and come out perfect in the first copy itself.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Pity. As a reader I could not overcome the feeling of pity. A big question within me - why some men are made to face the darker side of life only.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot, develops further to reach the twist. The story has a climax that left my heart heavy with pain and thoughts for the people who suffer silently.

Style and Voice: The author's style of writing suits this story. The flexible style moves the story smoothly.

Scene/Setting: The streets of London sadly reflects the painful life of the people who really suffer and struggle to make their ends meet.

Characters: The story has a mix of characters. Marcus enters bringing a twist in the story.

Dialog: The dialogs portrays every character in the story in their true light. The characteristics of the different characters can be clearly understood through their dialogs.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Interesting to read. The author can make this story very interesting if the thrill of adventure is maintained throughout the story.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot. The author has more space to develop the story into an interesting one. The story shows the use of higher level of imagination and shows the creative skills of the author.

Style and Voice: The author uses a standard style of writing that reflects the author's in depth knowledge about many things in past and in the present.

Scene/Setting: The setting suits the story perfectly well. The prologue gives an interesting introduction to the story as it evolves.

Characters: With Thylacine as the main character, the author has more to tell. The characters in the story plays their roles well and help to move the story forward.

Dialog: The story with minimum dialogs is quite descriptive in the beginning. The description gives a clear picture of the story and what the reader can expect in the coming chapters.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review of Four Way Stop  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Thrilled and felt quite adventurous. How it will be to have an adventure like this after spending so many days without any break and leading a mechanical and boring life? The reader will definitely visualize the thrill and the shock as the girl experiences in this story.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot and moves through smoothly to arrive at the twist in the story. The story has an unexpected climax that shows how the sword helps the girl to save her life from the intruder.

Style and Voice: The author's writing style suits this story. The author with his writing style has successfully maintained the serious tone throughout the story. The end brings in a sigh of relief and as a reader I could feel the impact of a night mare after disturbed sleep.

Scene/Setting: The author has chosen a scene that would otherwise be calm. The author has portrayed the atmosphere at a shop during late night hours and that setting also becomes a part of the story and acts as a character.

Characters: The author tells the thrilling experiences of a girl with two men.

Dialog: With minimum dialogs, the author tells the story quite descriptively.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review of Bowls of Memories  
Review by Kalai
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Emotional. As a reader, I could not help my tears. The author has portrayed the love between grandchildren and grandparents impressively.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot that takes the sudden twist with the death of the grand-mother and has a climax that shows the bond between the grand-daughter and the grand-father.

Style and Voice: The author's simple writing style tells the story with the rhythm and beauty of love.

Scene/Setting: The author has used the simple setting inside a home to tell the bliss of love and its eternity.

Characters: The characters in the story helps the author to tell the story with love.

Dialog: The dialogs help the author to show the emotional bond between the grand-daughter and the grand-mother.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.

Thanks for sharing with us.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Amazing. The story helped me to learn more about vampires, werewolves and slayers. This type of story is new to me and still not familiar with the special features of this type of stories.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot and develops fast to reach the climax. The story ends with an unexpected climax and I feel there is still room for the story to develop.

Style and Voice: The author's writing style helps the story to flow smoothly and the author is at ease while telling the story.

Scene/Setting: The author chooses appropriate scenes and settings that suit the different characters in the story.

Characters: The author distinctly shows the difference between each character in the story. The character sketch really helped me to know more about vampires, werewoves, and slayers.

Dialog: The dialogs in the story will help the reader to know more about the characters in the story.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.

Thanks for sharing with us. The story can be developed further.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: Enjoyed reading the story as I am new to this type of stories. The story helped me to understand werewolves.

Plot: The story starts with a simple plot and moves forward to develop into an interesting story. Must wait to read the rest.

Style and Voice: The author's writing style suits this story. The author could successfully maintain the voice of adventure from the beginning and help the reader to expect more from the author.

Scene/Setting: The author has selected an apt and suitable setting that will give more weight to this type of story.

Characters: The characters are quite creative and portray the extreme layers of imagination.

Dialog: As the story is quite descriptive, there were only minimum dialogs.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Overall Impression: The author has portrayed the growing conflict within a women if she will select career or go for a baby. This is a conflict that affects women all over the world. Here in India where I live, the educated girls who are married face this crucial situation and they have to struggle hard to take the appropriate decision for in India, a married women without children could not get the appropriate respect from the society and also within the family.

Plot: A simple plot that develops faster to take the twist and end with an unexpected climax. It is painful to note how women miss one bliss for the sake of another.

Style and Voice: The author follows a writing style that is packed with emotions and matured outlook toward life. The author maintains a stern voice throughout the story.

Scene/Setting: The setting in the story is used to show the conflict within Jessica.

Characters: With a few characters, this short story is written with a heavy theme that tells about the pain the present day women go through.

Dialog: With minimum dialogs, the author tells the story with ease. The transition is smooth and the incident unfold one after another carrying along with it the suspense of the story.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.

Thanks for sharing the story.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Overall Impression: Quite an imagination. The muse before the author. As an author I have also enjoyed the presence and absence of the muse many times. As the author puts across, the presence of muse is hundred percent true.

Plot: A simple plot that tells a simple, beautiful story with the help of the muse.

Style and Voice: The author has followed a simple writing style to tell the power of muse. From the beginning anxiety exists throughout the story, with the expectation for the arrival of the muse at the right time.

Scene/Setting: A simple setting that allows the muse to open the back door and enter. In a way it is true. Even if the authors are preoccupied with mundane jobs, the muse can enter their heads through the back door.

Characters: The author and the muse team up well to tell this story. The dialogs bring out the true nature of the author and the muse.

Dialog: Dialogs move the story to the next event. The dialogs help for a smooth transition and the author has relied on the dialogs to tell this special story.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Overall Impression: As a reader I felt so giddy after finishing reading. I could not get over the feeling loss at heart.

Plot: The story begins with a simple plot that develops fast to get into the twist. The story ends with an unexpected climax.

Style and Voice: The author's simple writing style helps to maintain the suspense throughout the story and help the reader to move on with further reading.

Scene/Setting: A simple scene or setting is used by the author to tell a story with an unbelievable theme and unexpected twist.

Characters: So many characters in the story to fill the story with unending suspense.

Dialog: There is little place for dialogs as the story is quite descriptive.

Grammar and Mechanics: The author has taken care.
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Review by Kalai
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Overall Impression: Emotional. The story brought tears to my eyes. A heart-breaking collation of events that happened to a little child. A young heart that gets hurt so young will take many years to heal.

Plot: A simple plot that emotionally tells about the terrible moments faced by people during holocaust. The simple plot has its own twist and climax that made my eyes tear filled.

Style and Voice: The author has a simple writing style that suits the story. The emotionally disturbed voice of the people could be heard throughout the story as the author moves on to tell the story with his descriptions about the travel inside wooden boxes and the life at the camp.

Scene/Setting: The setting of the story painfully portrays the ill fate of those people who were destined to die in large numbers.

Characters: The innocent child's description of the events adds heaviness to the theme of the story.

Dialog: The dialogs will help the reader to feel the pain the people suffered silently.

Grammar and Mechanics: Please run the spell checker to fix the grammar errors. Fix the following: use - used, was shouting - were shouting
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